Across the Barrier

Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 6:12 am

When the bombs dropped, the British Isles were caught in the middle. As thousands of nuclear devices failed, Britain suffered more and more. It was also attacked by all sides for its neutrality. Thousands perished under the lack of Vaults. The only survivors were those lucky enough to build their own shelters, or find the underground fallout bunkers. While the fallout shelters were run by the government, the quality was no way near good enough to prevent serious exposure.

That was 200 years ago. Now the world was upside down. And I lived in it.
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Elisabete Gaspar
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 8:13 pm

Is this a prologue? Albeit a short one.
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Keeley Stevens
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 8:41 am

Is this a prologue? Albeit a short one.

Yep, just tryin the idea. I wasn't sure it was a good idea, but I felt a bit annoyed at Europe's seeming disappearance.
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 9:05 pm

My name is Zack. My grandfather survived the blast when he was a child. He met my grandmother at the age of 16. They had my Father, who met my mother while searching the town of Glasgow. They had me. And now, here I am. A lone wolf, making his name in a shattered world. For 3 years now, I have been wandering the Wasteland, forever searching. The entire South coast is littered with old ship hulks, waiting to be salvaged. I do just that, selling scrap metal and boat sections to various traers and towns. I have a few Brahmin, and my clothes. I carry a variety of industrial tools, and I also have an outdated SA-80 Rifle. That is all.

I ran past the short buildings, almost completely hidden by Radvine. This particular irradiated species of creeper was rumoured to grow mouths and arms. I am running from a Nae Gar, or a badger as they used to be called. The Nae Gar are sveral feet long, and they have grown to the size of Black Bears. I fired over my shoulder with the rifle, and I heard the wet smacks as my bullets made impact.Slowing down to a jog, I glanced behind me, and watched the creature limp into a small ptach of undergrowth.

I returned to the camp 25 minutes later. I had a few pieces of Grade A steel , and a few sheets of copper. The copper was useful for repairs, and the steel could be sold for close to 100 corks. The cork had been the only hard currency for nearly a century, as no-one who survived knew how to use the currency production lines. I climbed into my tent, made of Brahmin and Radfox skins. I ate a small squirrel stick, from my mothers recipe, then slumped onto my bed. I am pretty sure that I will not be seen, as I made the camp inside a small garage in Portsmouth. Despite my happy meal, my dreams are troubled.
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Marnesia Steele
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 3:14 pm

Opinions? Comments? Criticism?
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Jessica Phoenix
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 7:14 am

I like it, and I'm happy I'm not reading about the same old Capitol wasteland with the same old raiders and radscorpions./
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Gemma Archer
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 9:37 pm

I like it, and I'm happy I'm not reading about the same old Capitol wasteland with the same old raiders and radscorpions./

Thanks. I just got fed up of America having all the death... hold on.
Anyway, Thanks for the compliment. It means alot coming from a talented writer.
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 7:52 am

Could be good, but I don''t like the way it was written.

Could just be preference.

Also corks? Just seemed strange to me.

Also not everything has to be mutated, Radfox, Radvine, ect.
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Nauty
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 7:05 am

i wouldnt have the character directly describe that the nae gar was a direct descendent of a badger because he probably wouldnt know what a badger is
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 6:45 pm

Thanks for the tips. Its a work in progress. Anyway, America had Botlecaps, so England has corks, which are much more rare.
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Terry
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 5:23 pm

Unfortunately, I will have to cancel this FF as my account keeps locking it. It isn't too good anyway.
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 7:05 pm

shame really .... woulda made a good ff. maybe someone will come along and make an rp inEngland, that should be interesting.
Good concept, good Descrption. nuff said really.
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 3:03 pm

shame really .... woulda made a good ff. maybe someone will come along and make an rp inEngland, that should be interesting.
Good concept, good Descrption. nuff said really.

Why is it locking?
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 9:23 pm

Why is it locking?

No idea. Just a glitch. If anyone wants the idea, or even the plot, I wouldn't mind if they used it.
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Francesca
 
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 12:35 pm

Are you kidding me? This is great. I'd love to see more. I love how you used the idea of corks, but I could imagine it would be harder to carry around than bottle caps. I'd really like to see how this turns out, especially with new creatures in a new country. Now, if only we had a FF in Canada...

By the way, you mentioned stuff about Vaults in England, but it is unknown if Vault-Tec went international and placed Vaults in other countries. According to storyline, the Enclave owned Vault-Tec and 'refused to give information about the private Vaults or if there were overseas Vaults'.
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 9:28 pm

Hold on. Guys, I may be able to continue. The glitch was caused by my CPU, which keeps overheating. Getting a new fan tomorrow.
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Post » Thu Nov 26, 2009 10:30 pm

Yay
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