Alpha Team

Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:45 pm

A ghostly figure darts across a factory window in the white desert of anchorage,
Alaska.
Private First Class Tommy Sinclair sat in the window looking into the scope of his M107 to get a peek of a Chinese generals order documents laying on a nightstand next to the sleeping generals bed. The only thing he could make out was?

The teams are in place we have successfully completed the construction of three(3) 胜利 class artillery pieces first barrage begins at 0430 Sunday morning?

When Tommy saw the document his heart started beating faster and his mind overloaded with stress and he forgot his training and stood up, then a shot rang out and Tommy fell backwards off a safety rail, he fell to the first floor a pool of blood started forming immediately around him, Tommy didn't care he knew he had to rely his Intel to General Chase. He got up ran almost ten steps and tripped over his Massive M107 .50 Caliber rifle he struggled to get it up and took off and burst out the factories double loading doors.

Tommy stopped in his tracks, a wall of Chinese soldiers stood before him almost bible like the formation split and a holy figure walked between them.
He recognized this man instantly as General jingwei, the Chinese leader in Anchorage.
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Gavin Roberts
 
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 10:35 pm

Not bad... You need to work on your punctuation a little bit, and there were some grammar mistakes. Other than that, it seemed pretty good. Look forward to reading it! :)
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Big Homie
 
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 5:33 am

Thanks i plan on expanding alot more
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 7:47 am

i like it hurry with the next chapter
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 4:47 am

Tommy looked into the Generals gray shadowy eyes, trillions of different thoughts flowed through his mind until he came to a conclusion.
"What could you possibly want to keep me alive this long", Said Tommy to the General.

"We want you to spy on your superiors for us and if you don't we assure you, your death will be impossibly painful", the general said slyly.

"[censored] YOU!!!" Yelled Tommy and he landed a perfect uppercut to the general's chin.
The General flew into the air and landed on heavily onto the snow pack, he wiped the blood from his face.

"KILL Him!" Shrieked Jingwei in Chinese.

Tommy sprinted to the factory doors and leaped over one of the half-manufactured chimera ice drills, he just kept running all the while 5.56mm bullets impacted all around him he busted through the back doors and noticed a squad of Chinese spec ops guarding the door he leapt of the ledge and tackled one of the soldiers ripped his 10mm out he shot the commy in the eye, blood shot everywhere, the other two tried to shoot him, but to no avail he quickly got up and pistol whipped the first and using the unconscious man as a meat shield he unload on the alive one. Tommy dropped the unconscious soldier and ran towards the trenches by his base camp.

[Aprox. 5mins later] "Light up that commy bastard" yelled a US army soldier manning a Browning M2 .50cal heavy machine gun.
All around the trenches there was commotion due to the increase in Chinese breaches into the trenches, Tommy flew into the base and ran to his tent as a squadron of vb-02a1 fighter variant vertibirds dispatched to take out Chinese bombers the were pounding the base from above.
"General Chase, I have vital news, the reds have ? Tommy was interrupted by a explosion that threw everyone in the room into the air.
"Everyone take cover!!!" yelled lieutenant Morgan.
Two more explosions rang out then utter silence?
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This was the most action filled one yet i will keep working on this until school starts than the input of stories may decrease :fallout:
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