ok, so here it is

my character, a nord, has been living in bruma with his father since he was born, his father has payed the countess to make sure he doesent leave the town beacause his mother was killed by a pack of wolves.

his father dies and leaves the house to him, he then gets a visit from somebody from the castle, he agrees to go. the countess offers to let him leave the town if he finds an amulet for her, upon returning, the countess introduces him to his father's best freind, Baurus, he then takes him to the strange temple on top of the hill where the grandmaster offers for him to join, he willingly accepts knowing that he will finaly have the freedom to travel wherever he wants.

not too sure on backstory^^ but, so far i like it, am open to suggestions

You have done some good work here. The only thing I could come up with for you right now is a backstory. I also see you have noted that already.......

Are you playing on PC,PS3 or Xbox 360? Just wanna know...... So you maybe can use mods (if on Pc) for the backstory.

i am on xbox so no mods

Expand and embrace. Look outside for ideas to write your backstory. Its not your character really unless you write your backstory. I would suggest starting a little lower down his history such as when he was a child, prehaps his father introduced him to Baurus when he was younger? Prehaps they stopped off at Cloud Ruler Temple for a few days while they were traveling to Bruma from Skyrim? Your character will develop even more as you write it and will become the character that you want them to be.

Look towards other peoples backstorys to give you ideas aswell. A name will help you loads, do you want something Nordic or do you want something Imperial? Where was he born? Those are the sort of questions I ask myself when I write a backstory and when I Roleplay anything. Don't expect to be able to sit down at a computer screen and write 5000 words out straight away. I know I can (and I do quite often) but I've been roleplaying in several ways for the last 10 years.

Don't be upset that you can't use mods because you are on Xbox. Remember your brain is the biggest mod of all. It changes everything everytime you play.