Buffy the Bowgirl III

Post » Sat May 28, 2011 6:00 pm

Nicely done once more. :) The opening paragraph describing the butterfly was a gentle contrast to the violence of the previous two chapters. It was also good to see old acquaintances once more, in the form of Boderi and Delmar.

What really struck a chord with me was Buffy not being able to find the staff in her bag. I am sure every woman reading this will be able to relate. I have trouble finding things in my purse on a regular basis, and I do not cart around a suitcase full of stuff in there like some women do.



Ditto the above, and I am sure you got that from a certain Koala searching through her own purse, lol !!!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 2:53 pm

Cleverly, you give your readers a chance to regroup following the events at Wellspring, just as Buffy does the same. The opening scene was lyrical and the insight into the relativity of time for the long-lived adds a hint of melancholy which I think may be revisited at some point in regards to a certain captain of Kvatch...

As one of the original "packrats" when it comes to my Oblivion and Morrowind characters, I identify with Buffy's search through all the stuff that she "just has to have." As a husband, I refuse to look for anything in Mrs. Treydog's purse- I will bring the whole thing to her and let her sort it out.

Note to aspiring writers- look carefully at how the opening scene and the "pack drill" add to this beautiful story. Those are the kinds of detail that make the story and the character come alive.

One spelling note- "enchanting altar," I believe.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 9:15 pm

Again I am impressed. Really it is just hard not to be with the way you start out with a description of a butterfly and close with your standard, "Woman with a big purse." gag. I love it. You take the time to add details that I believe nobody else on these forums does, and that is part of what makes your story so amazing. You keep doing what your doing I will continue to support you. :D

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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 6:39 am

The start was a delight, the ending magnificent.

I really enjoyed the merging of the flower observation with the 'you're up early this moring little butterfly.' By the nine that worked well!!! :goodjob:

The last part showed your tremendous ability as a writer. The revealing of Buffy's pack took part over quite a few sentences, yet flowed as smoothly as the wind tossed clouds reflected on Niben Bay.

And the screen shot had Buffy's items on the ground. Wow!!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 1:04 pm

Acadian,

This last chapter of Buffy is precious! I loved the opening contemplative scene, but I won't bother to echo everyone else. I know that it is important to go from a frenetic pace to something a little slower and calmer, just to give characters a breather, as well as the reader.

And the description of Buffy's pack left me shaking my head and laughing along with Acadian. Maybe it's not Acadian laughing that Buffy heard, but me! I certainly was laughing loud enough to be heard all the way over in Tamriel!

The little bit of philosophy is vital, too, about the relativity of time. There is also the truth that time moves slower for the young than it does for the aged. I'm not quite aged yet (I hope!) but I feel like time is moving faster for me now than it used to. You did a good job putting that in, only from the perspective of a much longer lived Dunmer. :clap:
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 8:32 pm

I neeeeeeeeeeed a magic bag like Buffy has! After doing lots of killing in the last couple stories, then being too ditzy to find something in her purse (pack?) in this one? Buffy gets a new nickname: Lethally Blonde!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 6:16 pm

I neeeeeeeeeeed a magic bag like Buffy has! After doing lots of killing in the last couple stories, then being too ditzy to find something in her purse (pack?) in this one? Buffy gets a new nickname: Lethally Blonde!



I agree with you, I have always wanted a purse large enough to lose a 6' staff in!!!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 12:52 pm

I have always wanted a purse large enough to lose a 6' staff in!!!


...must...not...comment...must...control...oneself...


**takes mallet and bonks self on head**
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 1:11 pm

I have always wanted a purse large enough to lose a 6' staff in!!!


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**takes mallet and bonks self on head**




ROFL!!! I could tell some stories!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 6:07 am

As the first day of Morning Star, let me wish everyone across Tamriel a very happy New Life Festival! Free ale! :foodndrink:

Chapter 50 revealed Buffy's frustration with the ten day delay Raminus Polus said that he would need to try and get the Council of Mages to assign assistance towards the defense of Kvatch. The mage's staff Buffy had promised to deliver to the father of a dead guild mate, was also turned in to the Chironasium for enchanting.

RemkoNL- I do try and portray her as a good character, and she is quick to befriend or even love. It is precisely her devotion to friends, and perceived threats to them, that often triggers her dark side, rage, and willingness to seek vengeance, even towards cruelty. I believe, in fact, the very next story demonstrates some her nurturing nature, and how naturally that flows towards protective action for Buffy. I'm glad the butterfly scene worked and that you agree a bit of a gentle break was in order. Thanks for catching that typo! :goodjob:

SubRosa- Thank you. The butterfly served a purpose, but was also an exercise in trying to write descriptions better. I'm glad her disorganized pack struck a chord! Buffy is a bit. . . scattered - another flaw I suppose. :embarrass:

mALX- I'm pleased that you enjoyed the possible correlation between Buffy's pack and the purses of some women. I have made a conscious choice in BF (Buffy Fiction - thank you SubRosa ;) ), that she can carry a large item like a spare bow inside her magic bag. Thanks for the kind words!

treydog- Thank you so much for being one who appreciates details. Buffy sees Cyrodiil in such living, breathing color and detail, it amazes me to travel with her. She sees things I would never notice. My hope regarding the elven aging process was to instill a vague sense of melancholy just as you mention. Although not directly related to Savlian Matius, thoughts of immortals outliving their loves (Highlander) hopefully sprang to mind. Buffy cannot help but think that if her parents were still alive, she would certainly, by now, be seeing the distinct aging differences between her Bosmer mother and Breton father. Thank you also for catching my typo - so I could alter my altar!

Digz- Thank you again for never failing to provide your insight in terms of what stood out for you. Your observations nailed what I was trying for, so Buffy and I are happy! ^_^

Wolf- Yay! I'm glad you thought the butterfly 'fit' and merged into the next scene. I'm even more glad the details of her pack flowed and worked for you. I truly enjoyed writing that scene, and Buffy and I both had a blast setting up her photo shoot for the screenie! :dance:

hauteecole rider- OMG, thank you! Precious. Change of pace. Laughter. Relativity of time - particularly for elves. . . Wow! Thank you for the delicious words and for enjoying so much of what I wanted you to! :twirl:

Koala- Lethally Blonde! :lol: I shall have to remember that, and add it to the poor girl's monickers.


51 Harm's Folly

Careful to control the flames of my torch, I knocked on the wooden door and took a pace back. Although the house was built of stone, the roof was straw.

"Hello? Who are you? What do you want?" The old Breton who appeared in the doorway was understandably surprised to have a caller to his isolated farm, particularly at night.

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"My name is Buffy, and I'm from the Mage's Guild. Are you Corrick Northwode?

"Why yes, I'm Corrick." The Breton's face turned grim. "What has happened to Arnaud? For the Guild to pay a call out here must be bad news. Is he hurt? Did he get himself into trouble?"

I took a deep breath and said as gently as I could, "Corrick, I'm afraid Arnaud was killed while on an important mission for the Guild. I. . . I'm sorry."

Corrick winced, but did not break. He closed his eyes. After a few moments, he opened them again. The weather-beaten farmer's face appeared to be no stranger to pain. "How?" he asked quietly.

"He died bravely, during an attack on one of the University's facilities." I then added vaguely, "none of his assailants survived."

"I. . . forgive my manners, young woman. You must be exhausted and hungry after your trip. Welcome to Harm's Folly." He motioned towards a reflection of moonlight on the surface of water in a nearby trough. "Please, tend to your horse, then come in. I will warm some stew."

* * *

"Thank you for the meal Corrick. It was delicious," I said truthfully to the Breton seated across the table.

"Kayleen's recipe," he said sadly. "My late wife. Thank you for bringing me Arnaud's last letter." He looked again at the gnarled length of enchanted wood I had placed upon the table. "I'm sure that staff would have meant a great deal to Arnaud. He always dreamed of being a mage. Thank you for ensuring it was completed and bringing it to me." Despite his obvious grief, he then managed a smile, albeit a rather flat one. "Do you know how to make it work?"

"Well, not exactly." I felt slightly embarrassed, but tried to respond cheerfully. "I've never used a staff, and I'm afraid I didn't pay much attention during those classes. I know how they're supposed to work. I'll see if I can figure it out and teach you - without setting your roof ablaze." My smile faded as I remembered why I had delivered the staff. "Corrick, it's horrible what happened to Arnaud, especially after losing your wife. How did Kayleen die, if I may ask?"

Corrick's face turned hard. "Goblins. Damn things have a clan or tribe or whatever they call themselves in nearby Exhausted Mine. We've always been able to fight them off when they would send a scout or two snooping around. One day about a year ago, Arnaud and I returned from selling our crops to find a war party had attacked the farm and. . . killed my Kayleen." The Breton finally allowed a tear to slide down his leathery cheek.

"Corrick," I got up, and walked over next to the seated man who was so clearly full of pain. "I don't know if I can help with your kind of wounds, but let me try." I had learned that restoration magic came from my heart, not my head. I had to feel the power coming from within me; I could not will it to come from my mind like other magic.

I felt the energy grow inside me as it traveled up through my shoulders and out along my arms. When it reached my hands, they began to glow with a white aura. I placed one on each side of Corrick's face, closing my eyes. As the healing magic passed from me to him, I could feel some of his pain being transferred to me. Overwhelming sadness and loss swept over me for several moments. Finally I could take no more, and let go of him. Exhausted, and in tears myself, I looked at him hopefully.

"Buffy, I do feel better, somehow." Corrick tentatively touched his cheek with his hand. "Whatever you did, I thank you."

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Suddenly I heard the neighing cry of Superian, and my blood ran cold.

Corrick shouted, "Goblins!" and jumped to his feet. Plucking the mace from his belt he ran for the door.

Grabbing Slayer, I was on Corrick's heels as we burst out of the farm house.

Under the light of both moons, I could see Superian rearing and flashing her powerful front hooves at a single goblin.

As Corrick charged and swung his mace, the goblin easily turned the weapon aside with a leather shield. He then answered with a swing of his own mace that knocked Corrick to the ground.

Before the goblin could raise his weapon again, I launched an emerald sphere of magic towards him. Upon impact, the spell burst into a cloud, engulfing the entire area in a brief flash of greenish light. Corrick, now struggling to regain his feet was not affected by the illusion. Superian and the goblin however, both stopped their hostilities and stood, passively awaiting my command.

Sidestepping quickly to offset myself from Superian and Corrick, I nocked an arrow to Slayer's bowstring and loosed it. From a range of less than three paces, the impact drove the goblin to the ground and caused him to wail in pain. He died instantly as my second arrow slammed into him.

I returned the bow to my back and helped the farmer to his feet. "Corrick, are you all right?"

"I - I think so," he replied unsteadily.

I quickly reached into one of the quick access pouches on the outside of my pack and produced a potion. "Here, drink this - all of it."

Lighting my torch with a spell, I held it out to Corrick. "Hold this with your free hand please." I examined Superian. Her front left leg was clearly sensitive and had, no doubt, been struck by the goblin's mace. Gently running my hands over the bruised area, I channeled healing magic through my fingers, slowly enough to control the rate and amount of pain that I received in return.

Physically and emotionally drained, and low on mystical power, I turned my attention to the Breton again. I had absorbed a fair amount of pain for one evening, and hoped the healing potion was all he needed to recover. "Are you feeling better?"

"I am. Thank you Buffy, that potion was amazing. I can still feel it working." Staring at me, he added, "I couldn't help but notice the pain on your face as you took some of my sadness away. I saw it again as you healed your mare. Does it hurt when you heal us?"

"Um, yes. . . some. At the University, they told me I was an empathic healer; the Priests of Mara, in my home town of Bravil, have said the same. A very close friend, who is a paladin, calls it 'laying on of hands'." I shrugged and continued, "I'm just different I guess. I can heal a lot more pain than I receive, but sometimes I have to be careful. If my patient can drink a potion, it makes things easier for me." A little self-conscious about my healing, I changed the subject. "Let's get back inside." We stowed my torch, and returned to the warmth of the farm house.

Corrick and I sat in front of his fire. "Is that the Great Oak of Chorrol?" I pointed to a large painting above the stone fireplace.

"Yes." He rose to his feet slowly, and somewhat stiffly. As he extinguished the several burning candles inside his one-room home, he remarked apologetically, "I've got plenty of wood to burn for the fireplace, but these candles don't grow on trees." The Breton returned to his chair, and continued, "it was many years ago that Kayleen and I came here from Chorrol to start this farm. We cleared some of the rich land and built this house, stone by stone. It was our dream. Arnaud was conceived and born here."

The Breton retrieved a dried tobacco leaf from atop the nearby chest of drawers and tore it into two pieces. Wadding up one portion, he stuck it in his mouth, offering me the other half.

I wrinkled my nose and shook my head. "Um, no thanks."

"I figured as much." Corrick smiled faintly. "Kayleen hated the stuff too."

The flickering fireplace now provided the only light as the two of us sat quietly together. Orange reflections danced softly upon the walls around us, making the small home feel warm and alive. "Thank you for trying to defend my mare," I said reflectively, taking a sip of cheap wine from the cup Corrick had filled for me.

"Horses are important out here, Buffy. Besides I probably owe you my own life. Listen, it's entirely too late for you to try and return to the big city tonight. I'd be pleased if you waited till morning to leave." Corrick added quickly, "as you can see, I have two beds. You're welcome to use Arnaud's. I. . . I mean please don't think-"

"Thank you," I interrupted, trying to ease the Breton's awkwardness. "I will stay the night. I don't question your intentions Corrick. Besides," I teased, "if you couldn't impose your will on that one goblin, I think I'll be safe."

The Breton replied sheepishly, "I guess you can see now why I haven't been able to get rid of those goblins. I've never been much of a fighter, and now with a few years on me, well," he sighed, "they're just too much for this old farmer." He leaned over and spat some tobacco juice into a metal urn on the floor by his feet.

I looked at Corrick seriously. "What will you do? About the goblins, I mean."

"Probably die here." He shook his head sadly. "With Kayleen and Arnaud gone, I don't have much to live for. Besides, I guess I've had a good life; not every man can claim to have loved a fine woman, tilled his own land, and raised a good son. I can't live here with those goblins, yet I can't leave either - not with Kayleen buried next to the home we built together."

Corrick added a piece of wood to the fire, causing the small blaze to spark and flare a little brighter. I got up, refilled our stone cups and returned to my seat next to him.

"Farmers don't make a lot of gold Buffy. For a long time, I scrimped and saved, hoping I could hire the Fighter's Guild to clear Exhausted Mine." The Breton's eyes were moist as he continued, "life has choices though. I don't regret it, but all my savings went towards getting Arnaud into the University. I'm sure some day, those goblins will kill me; I'll then join Kayleen and Arnaud. Perhaps that is for the best."

We sat, silently watching the flames dancing before us for several minutes.

Finally, I said quietly, "I will clear this Exhausted Mine that threatens your farm Corrick."
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 1:17 pm

Acadian...that was a very good and smooth entry into the 'mine clearing' quest. And also in that logical tying up of ends, you have managed to further the characterization of Buffy AND - a surprise - even the 'bit player' Farmer Corrick as well!

Superbly done, Acadian. Let me salute you.

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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 9:41 am

Buff---Acadian, the job you did describing that farmer's despair was... I can't even word it. I felt right there listening to him talk and watching them fight the goblins. :goodjob:
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 10:32 am

I liked how you portrayed Corrick. His sense of loss for his family, and his stubborn refusal to abandon the home where his wife is buried. It all struck a chord in me as being very realistic.

Perhaps after the mine business Buffy might think to have Arnaud's remains taken to Harm's Folly so that he can be buried their alongside his mother?


Edited to Add:

Of course if you really want to add a twist, Corrick takes the staff and joins the necromancers so he can reanimate his wife and son... :evil:
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 7:32 am

Quality work yet again my friend. You have a way of bringing everyone in your story to life, you make the scenes seem so real, and your skill with words continues to impress. I always feel like I am there experiencing this adventure alongside Buffy. I love the way you handled restoration magic it worked well, and was unique. Keep up the great work and as always I will be here to support you.

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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 11:00 am

This is simply a gem. You bring Corrick to vivid life and give great insight into a "minor" character. But the thing is, no one is a minor character in their own life....

And as Buffy moves through the ES world, she sees and is affected by those other people.

Immersion- total. Narrative- brilliant. Desire for more- infinite.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 12:13 pm

ARGH! You never even told me you posted a chapter! This is up in the top favorites - awesome write!!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 5:38 am

The best thing about the world that Beth created was the little, hidden gems that are tucked away in the wilderness. Stories that had no connection to anything else but very important in their own right.

It is fitting that we find Buffy out there, changing the world for the better in the way that only she can.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 7:05 pm

I really, really adored how you pulled the poor farmer Corrick from harm's folly into your story. I felt sorry for the poor man.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 7:47 am

Just got back from working the past two days.

Excellent character development here.

That's my favorite part of Oblivion - all the untold stories these "minor" characters have to tell. That is what makes Buffy the Bowgirl such a compelling read - seeing how others see those same characters as I do - sometimes in the same way as I, sometimes quite differently.

Can you tell I love character driven fiction? :wub:
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 10:32 am

Corrick's pathos hung in the air around me as I read this chapter. 8uffy's declaration of war was never in doubt.

I can only repeat what everyone else is saying that it is these secondary characters that make your writing so vivid and memorable.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 7:21 am

Jeeze! This story...is amazing. I just finished reading The Buffy Chronicles Parts I & II. Wow. I am simply amazed at your writing skill! I have finished reading the latest chapter in part III. Can't wait for more! :clap:
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 10:02 am

Allow me to wish you a belated Happy New Year, Acadian. :celebrate:

I see that I return to a bounty of fresh Buffy stories! :read:

I have always been impressed with the quality of everything you write. But it seems like your writing has undergone a subtle change since Buffy's Leyawiin expedition. Description, characterization, symbolism all perfectly woven into these tight narratives that engage us from first sentence to last. Perhaps the Paladin has evolved with the character, eh? I won't continue to echo all the well-deserved praise that has already been heaped upon you, but I agree with every word of it. :bowdown:
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 8:18 am

See, Buffy realised Corrick wasn't trying any funny stuff when he asked her to spend the night. Blokes who are trying to hit on you usually don't start by stuffing tobacco in their mouth and then offering you some. Yucko! Ok, ok, I felt sorry for him too. I mean he did try to fight that goblin attacking Buffy's horse, which leads me to wonder... I'm surprised Buffy didn't instantly decide to kill every goblin within three counties after one of them tried to hurt Superian. Seriously now, I really did feel like I was sitting right there with them as the two of them pvssyd by the fireplace. The build up was so perfect, we didn't need Buffy to tell us how she felt about it. I just loved how you dropped her decision on us, then stopped the story.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 7:45 pm

In Chapter 51, Buffy made good her promise to deliver Arnaud Northwode's staff to his father, Corrick, at Harm's Folly. Corrick was beset by goblins that had killed his wife. Realizing the old farmer lacked the skill to deal with them, Buffy decided she would clear the goblins' lair at nearby Exhausted Mine.

Foxy- Thank you so much for the kind words. It was necessary to develop Corrick as somewhat endearing, frail and a poor fighter. Otherwise, Buffy would have left him to the goblins for lacking the courage to defend his own home. She does not suffer able bodied men who expect a fragile she-elf to save them. So very long ago, she stormed out on Jauffre because of that.

Zalphon- Such a pleasure to have you reading our story! I'm so pleased you found Buffy's descriptions effectively immersive.

SubRosa- Thank you. I had to develop Corrick carefully, or else Buffy would not have felt obliged to help him - she really wants to get home to Bravil for a short break. Thank you also for thinking about Arnaud's final resting place. ;) This occurred to Buffy a couple stories ago. She was quite inspired by the peaceful beauty of Wellspring Grove, sans necromancers of course, and discussed arrangements behind the scenes with Raminus Polus. More on that in the very next story. . . I hope you like her solution.

Digz- I'm so pleased you found this story immersive. I'm also delighted that you like how healing magic works for Buffy. She heals very differently than her guild mates. For her, it is an intimate, and not entirely risk-free, endeavor. There is a nurturing aspect within Buffy's nature, and this style of healing seems to suit her. :)

treydog- Wow! Such high praise from the top dog, whose own wonderful work inspires me to say "That is how I want to write when I grow up."

mALX- Thank you mALX. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I'm sure I told you I was going to post it, but perhaps I forgot to send along your morning cup of coffee, replete with half&half and sugar, to help you recover from New Years Eve. Forgive me. :P

Wolf- Hidden gems in the wilderness, yes. I'm afraid Buffy is beginning to leave a wake of developed minor characters everywhere she goes. See, I may think I have a plot, but Buffy doesn't know from plot, has a short attention span and is easily side tracked. That is probably exactly why she finds those hidden gems. :lol:

RemkoNL- I'm so glad you enjoyed Corrick. As I said above, it was important to develop him to the point where helping him would make sense for Buffy. The fact that you said 'I felt sorry for the poor man', means a lot because that is what I was hoping for.

hauteecole rider- Well, we certainly can't have silly things like work get in the way of our reading now can we? :lmao:
(BTW, I was quite fascinated as I researched the dressage associated with your name.)
Thank you so much for the kind words. As you can see, I stay fairly close to the game of Oblivion. I certainly took license by creating Arnaud, and by making Corrick old and frail. My intent though, includes much of what you say - seeing the comfortable quests, characters and sights of Cyrodiil, but through the eyes of another character - hopefully in a familiar, but different manner.
Yes! I also adore character driven fiction!

bobg- I have had the honor of breathing a sustaining love into Angel and Sarrah. You however, are responsible for inspiring the very creation of Buffy. It is indeed a thrill to have you rejoin us!
My whole intent with the interaction between Buffy and Corrick was to lead up to what you said was never in doubt - her 'declaration of war.' Thank you for confirming I was on target. :)

CrazyCocoK- Wow! Congratulations on reading through over 80k words! :ooo: I am so honored that you have joined us!

Destri- Welcome back from out of town, and Happy New Year to you! I believe I am improving as a writer. I have experience writing manuals, official correspondence and other boring text, but Buffy is my first attempt at fiction. So. . . when I started, I produced grammatically correct dry stories. The great folks here at fanfic could somehow see the truckload of passion I had for my character and have helped me try and bring her alive with their advice and examples. I continue to learn from the wonderfully supportive writers here - such as yourself.

Koala- Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. My hope was that the tobacco was part of those irrelevant background details helping to make things memorable. I'm glad it stuck with you (not on you of course). :lol:


52 Training


I stood in amazement, my mouth open. Displayed before me, in the first streaks of morning light was all of Cyrodiil itself. I could clearly see the Imperial City, with its White Gold Tower reaching into the clouds. There was that horrible prison, where I had watched Emperor Uriel Septim die. Behind the city, I could see the Arcane University. Looking beyond the Imperial City, I wishfully imagined that I could even see Bravil, and sighed.

"Now you understand why Kayleen and I chose this spot." Corrick Northwode stood beside me at the front gate of Harm's Folly. "Not a day goes by that I don't work this land and marvel at that view."

Closing my mouth and silently nodding, I removed the enchanted staff from my back. I looked to see that Superian was safely behind the farm house. "Ok, whatever we do Corrick, let's not point this thing at the straw roof of your home." Extending a finger to the northwest, I added, "in fact, let's aim for that large stone down the hill there."

Directing the end of the staff towards my target, I thought about a fireball. My hands began to glow and I stopped. No Buffy, it's not supposed to take magicka; the staff should have its own power. Oh I wished I had paid more attention at school. I concentrated on the staff and imagined fire flying from it. An orange spark or two began to sizzle, then stopped. Trying again, with better focus this time, I was rewarded when the four gnarled tips at the end of the staff began to flicker in unison. A fireball quickly formed and flew towards my target. I missed the intended boulder of course, but almost squealed with excitement nonetheless.

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Within a few more tries, I could successfully shoot magical fire from the enchanted length of wood, and even hit the target, sometimes. Handing the staff to Corrick, I tried to explain what I had learned.

Corrick progressed rather quickly. I guessed part of that was his Breton natural affinity for magic. Before another hour had passed, he too was displaying some accuracy.

"Well done Corrick! Especially," I giggled, "given the poor credentials of your teacher. Ok, now I'll have you try it on a target that's alive - well, sort of."

Forming a sphere of magicka in my hand I tossed it in front of us. As a skeleton materialized, I said, "get ready, but don't fire yet." I cast another spell that infused the bones of the summon with a lavender glow. "Now Corrick, blast away!"

The Breton obediently launched a fireball. As the skeleton dissipated, Azura's Star captured its energy with a reassuring 'whoosh'. I took the staff from Corrick and partially charged it.

We repeated this exercise several more times, resulting in a fully charged staff, and a farmer proficient in its use.

I pointed towards the Imperial City, "Can you see the Arcane University?"

"Yes, just behind the city," Corrick replied. "Why?"

"Well, two reasons. When your staff runs low on power, they can recharge it for you if you explain that your son was a student there." I continued gently, "just to the left of the Imperial City, is a small piece of land rising from Lake Rumare. It is the site of Wellspring Grove, and now includes the University's new cemetery for mages."

I touched the old Breton's arm, causing him to look into my eyes. "Corrick, the Grove is one of the most beautiful spots in Cyrodiil. Arnaud is buried there." I turned again towards the city and pointed. "You can see the island from here. If you visit the University, I'm sure they would escort you out there to see him."

Corrick looked towards the island, then at me. "Buffy, you have done much for me - and Arnaud." He strapped the long weapon to his back. "I seem to be a little better with this staff than I am with my mace. I will come with you to Exhausted Mine. You have given me hope and confidence. Between the two of us, I believe we can eliminate those goblins once and for all."

"No Corrick." I shook my head. "I'm at my best when fighting alone. Don't worry though, I'll stay safely in the shadows. Besides," I smiled, "I need you to ensure no harm comes to Superian while I'm gone."

* * *

Two life forces began to glow, at the edge of my twin rings' ability to detect them. This range coincided pretty closely to how far I could effectively shoot a bow. Taking out my map, I figured I was halfway down the slope from Harm's Folly towards Exhausted Mine. The glows were likely goblin sentries. I crouched and quietly moved among the bushes and boulders until I had an unobstructed long-range view from a hidden perch. The pinkish signs of life were near a rocky outcropping that could be the mine entrance.

I slid Slayer from my back, poisoned an arrow and nocked it. As I concentrated on the distant glows, they snapped into sharp focus. Two goblins all right. One had a short sword and shield; the other, a bow with no backup weapon. Normally, I would eliminate the ranged attacker first, but not today. After carefully aiming, I loosed my arrow at the sword-wielding goblin. The missile found its mark. His body jerked and turned a deeper shade of green. With my enhanced focus, I could see his mouth fly open, but at this range it was a silent cry. Within a few seconds, he collapsed.

His archer companion launched into a frenzy of activity, searching for me. Confident in my stealthy perch, I calmly watched and waited for him to give up. I used the time to reflect on my limited knowledge of goblins.

Not surprisingly, the Mystic Archives of the University had little information on goblins. I had fought them before, but not in large numbers. I had even, on more than one occasion, used them to improve my ability to block and effectively use my armor. What I knew about them was from limited first-hand experience, and a conversation I now recalled with a Bosmer goblin hunter named Parwen.

I first met the archer in Skingrad. As two she-elves with bows, we noticed each other in the West Weald Inn, and struck up a conversation. While breaking bread and enjoying a bottle of Tamika's together, I learned Parwen was a member of the Fighters Guild. She seemed quite familiar with hunting and killing local goblins - even to the point of sport.

Based, in part, on what she told me, I found goblins rather fascinating. They had a tribal system led by warlords, and territorial disputes were common. Known for coordinating their efforts and a cooperative social structure, they even farmed rats for food. Some of them, called shaman, could cast spells. Clearly, they had some of the characteristics of men and mer. They also, in many ways, had the nature of beasts - much of their behavior seemed instinctive. Likening them to extremely clever packs of wolves, I believed they lacked the free will of men and mer.

I might confess satisfaction - or even enjoyment - in killing evil beings that possessed a free will to choose their own path, such as necromancers or bandits. I took no more pleasure, however, in dispatching goblins than I did wolves or lions. Sometimes killing them was simply necessary. I had determined that, on behalf of Corrick Northwode, this was one of those times.

First though, I would ask the remaining single sentry in front of the mine to provide me with some training. After rummaging in my pack for a few moments, I stripped off my clothes and tugged on my black leathers. Poisoning the Blade of Woe, I grabbed my Leyawiin shield.

After shrouding myself with invisibility, I quickly scrambled down the hill to a location about thirty paces in front of the cave entrance.

Once in position, I launched a spell at the goblin, sacrificing the cover of invisibility. My new ally promptly sprinted to a position just in front of me and waited for my command. Making a small incision in the goblin's arm, I allowed the vile liquid on my blade to seep into his body. The poison would permanently reduce the goblin's strength, and therefore his ability to hurt me. I sheathed the dagger and quickly gulped down two shield potions. As my illusionary control faded, he raised his arms and shrieked a challenge.

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At this range, the goblin ignored his bow and began pummeling my shield with his fists. I practiced keeping my elbow flexed and tried to deflect his blows, as Mazoga had taught me. Once satisfied, another burst of magicka rendered the skirmisher docile. Dropping the shield, I grabbed Slayer.

My arrow knocked him to the ground where he remained, writhing in pain. I quickly stopped his suffering with a second arrow. I did not hate goblins; rather, I respected them as creatures of nature, and worthy opponents. Besides, they had pointed ears just like me.

The training session helped my blocking. I had fought the goblin with my Blade of Woe sheathed. Not that I knew how to use a dagger of course, but I lamented the fact that I needed my hand empty to cast spells. I knew battlemages could loose devastating magic, even with a weapon in their hand, but I could not - yet.

There was so much more for me to master. That's why I sparred with goblins and lived with the bruises. It was the same reason I practiced with my bow, and cleared chapel undercrofts until the calluses on my bow fingers bled. Almost every night before I went to bed, I practiced spells, stopping only when my hands were magicka-burned.

Enough idle thinking Buffy. I turned my attention to the mine in front of me now.

The entrance was marked by the skulls of men and mer on stakes; I had learned this was a common totem used by goblins. Nearby, grew green stain cup, which was useful for poisons that could damage speed, or even kill. I also found summer bolete - a key ingredient for my shield potions. I gathered several samples of each.

After checking and repairing my equipment, I entered Exhausted Mine.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 4:11 pm

I love it when Buffy's thoughts trail off from the main story. The insight is priceless. As far as learning about her feeling toward goblins, and her thoughts on using them for training, I feel like she may be on to something. (Sounds like a fun way to RP a character) I must state again that Buffy continues to live on in my mind as a real person in the TES universe do to your skills as a writer/storyteller. Fantastic work my friend!

~Digz~

P.S. Love the screenshots!
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