This is a story between me and josh

Manhattan once a proud settlement now just ruins only 5 men made it out of there the dreadful day and made it to the capital wasteland to start there new life's but one man didn't want that to happen

Jonny crusade went to megaton to live and start his new life, he got a house and became the local mystery man and kept to himself ever since he moved. No one disturbs him wile he is in his house and when he does go out off his house its when everyone's asleep the day his friend josh died in Manhattan he became a stone cold man and doesn't like any one in his way

Mark "target" never one of the survivors of the Manhattan war was a assassin that killed josh. Jonny thought that he died in Manhattan but he escaped by making his way on the vertibird jonny was on. When never got to DC he became a merc again gaining many caps and hiding from the other survivors of the Manhattan war

Two years after Jonny and never escaped never has gotten a house in megaton and doesn't know jonny is there...

Uhh, and what am I suppose to take away from this 'story'...??

Well this occurs two years after the nukes fell in manhattan and its just a story between the survivers of the nukes

Well, I don't intent on sounding rude at all, but I don't know what's goin on... It's far too short to even unfold a plot. There are 10 pages(sometimes 11) per thread. You hardly used one page to explain the story. Your spelling and grammar are off by a few notches. I respect your effort dearly. But perhaps you should consult Half-Tooths Guide or go to TES fanfiction forum and give Illusionary Nothing's pinned topic, "So You Think You Can Rp" a peek. There are quite a few fundamentals you should take in mind whilst writing young friend.

Good luck!

dReN

Its kinda half rp half fan fic its a joint story were josh, Comedian and obsiden are riting with me and if you want more back story just look at the manhattan war 2 or 3

Righhhtt.
Well, you stay motivated ringman. If you ever need another helping hand with your literature, just let me know.

I agree with Lord Dren, You need to have some good levels of backstory, even if it is a Role-Play there still has to be something to draw our attention even if it is a continuation, you have to have more information, you cant expect someone to go back and read all of your former work, my suggestion is have the key points of yoru other stories. also, write this in Microsoft word do a Spell-Check and then make posts please, its almost unbearable trying to read some of your "Riting."

Another thing is you have to take some sort of a stand about the whole Fanfic/Rp thing youve got, a Fanfic is usually for the enjoyment of the readers and an RP is for the enjoyment of the players, so you have to choose one or the other to help make this whole thing alot simpler.

~DeadlySin

Don't be afraid to ask for help. If no one will give you some tips you can always contact me via PM. I'd be glad to help you with the fundamentals. Remember, a writers worst enemy is the fear to wanna ask for help.

Umm Ringman we did not plan this? It was supposed to be A Crusade Through Never and well it was supposed to be Jonny Crusade and Mark Nevers story The Comedian and grandobsidian have nothing to do with it they are just side characters. And there will be alot more story this is just to give yall a hint.

Then isnt this a spam thread if it serves no purpose...

Technically, no. But it should be closed so as to end all the confusion.

Ringman, you need to brush up on your grammar, I know you always say you will but you don't. Use Office or Word.