Tom backed into a destoryed grocer. The Legion had attacked, and the NCR would win. "Yes, of course..." his voice trailed away as the pain in his leg increased. He had twisted his ankle, had several nasty cuts on his body, and lost a finger. He fell onto the ground, the pain was unbearable, but as if his troubles were not bad enough, he began to hear gunshots from outside. They were getting closer. He crawled upstairs and threw his backpack down, and pulled out a paper. He took a pen from his pocket, and noticed his rifle was broken. "[censored]..." he muttered. He would die here, there was no way out. He began scribbling a message.

'To whoever finds this, I am dead. I am Seargent Tom Harrison, and this is probably the last thing I will ever write. Please, whoever reads this, make sure I am not forgot -' but the door downstairs had been smashed. The Legion had to be searching all the buildings. He crawled towards the corner of the room, and pulled out his nine millimetre pistol. He sat huddled in the corner, waiting for his impending doom. But, to his surprise, it was a fellow NCR soldier. "Hey! Are you alright?! Come on, we gott -" a bullet had shot through his skull. A Ceasar's Legion soldier emerged from behind the wall. he raised his gun, but it was jammed. "[censored]." The Legion soldier raised his rifle and shot him, leaving him to die. No one ever found his not, because the Legion had burned the town, leaving no trace of his existance. His name was never recorded, or written on a memorial, just as he had feared.

Nice story.. Depressing, But still good.

A great story, must I say? Sad ending though.

It's pretty grim and depressing but in the wasteland that's life for you. Playing as the courier or the LW, you are never actually around to see just how much people are suffering. And personally, I hate the NCR with every part of me. But I don't like the Legion, either. And in this story I don't think the character deserved death. But it was something new. Good work.

Kind of short. It's hard to really care about a character when you've spent do little time with him, nd have no idea what makes him tick.

It's not about the character. It's about what's going on with him and what happened before he died. It isn't focused on that one person, but a little of an overview of how it is for other NCR soldiers.

If we cared more for the character or what he was for, then we might feel more emotion for what happened, how it was just part of the Mojave Wasteland, how it showed what the NCR had to face. No matter what message you want to get a cross, your going to need a little depth for the character, or the group, to truly feel the message. Maybe this is just me, but when I turn on the news and see the a massacre of 800,000 people, I go wow and move on. Maybe I would spare more thought, feel more attached if I knew one of the 800,000 or what they were about.

So either way more depth would be nice, also you have some pretty bad grammar mistakes that make reading it a slight pain, I would recommend some kind of spell check.