Dreams of the Fire chapter 3

Post » Thu May 03, 2012 8:39 am

If you don't like it, I can remove it, but I wanted Maximillian to get away from the bad guy and be more of this meddling third party...
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Darlene Delk
 
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 1:11 pm

Nice, except for one thing. Faire is dead, and has been for probably 10 or so years. The part before hand was between Charon and Adna . Adna is a Reincarnation of Faire and is only about 9 or 10. Kiva would be the one to heal him. Healing is second nature to her.
I meant Kiva sorry, will be edited
Maximillian speaks to Raize at the same time that your character first sees Raize and Charon, but doesn't notice him...
Well then, can we delay Maximillion till my character is healed... as I find it neccessary that Drake meets Maximillion.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 1:33 pm

How about:

Maximillian looked at the collapsed imperial on the ground for a moment after nudging him with is foot, Friend of yours?
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 8:41 am

How about:

Maximillian looked at the collapsed imperial on the ground for a moment after nudging him with is foot, Friend of yours?

That works. I'm trying to make him like the Illusive Man, because of my recent obsession with Mass Effect...
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 6:10 am

How about:

Maximillian looked at the collapsed imperial on the ground for a moment after nudging him with is foot, Friend of yours?
Could work, but I meant a more face to face meeting that could possibly cause a betrayal or joining with him.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 6:45 am

because of my recent obsession with Mass Effect...
I suppose you enjoy the whole indoctrination reference I made in my Positives and Negatives post.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 11:11 am

Max could stick around long enough in conversation for them to meet. Its an easy fix really.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 9:09 pm

I suppose you enjoy the whole indoctrination referance I made in my Positives and Negatives post.

Indeed.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 7:54 am

Max could stick around long enough in conversation for them to meet. Its an easy fix really.
Perhaps he could have a revelation of who he is and teleport him and himself to his base of operations, but have it somewhere in the Imperial City as his prison was kind of ummm... turned into a black hole last thread.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 11:00 am

Perhaps he could have a revelation of who he is and teleport him and himself to his base of operations, but have it somewhere in the Imperial City as his prison was kind of ummm... turned into a black hole last thread.

You obviously don't understand Max, he is essentially neither a mortal, nor an Aedra, nor a Daedra, he is something new and dangerous. His base of operations could be anything he wants. The only reason he even messes with mortals and gods are for strange reasons that can only be understood by reaching the same level as him, which is almost impossible...
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 10:50 am

hmmmm, could work. Max could in a since "test" him to see what side he's on. Max would know many things of the events to come i would think. Possibly even have a hand in it.

Not that Max would "care" but he would see it as a....... whim of curiosity on this new creature.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 8:16 am

You obviously don't understand Max, he is essentially neither a mortal, nor an Aedra, nor a Daedra, he is something new and dangerous. His base of operations could be anything he wants. The only reason he even messes with mortals and gods are for strange reasons that can only be understood by reaching the same level as him, which is almost impossible...
Hiding in plain sight is unexpected and efficient, but in a writer's POV I need to have a way for him to escape if he is not going to side with him.
hmmmm, could work. Max could in a since "test" him to see what side he's on. Max would know many things of the events to come i would think. Possibly even have a hand in it.
That's what I was thinking. :tongue:
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 6:48 am

Im going to add to the CS that my character is power hungry...
Done and Done...
Im scared, it says you guys are reading, but there is only silence, and it's making me deaf... LOL XD
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 7:03 am

I tend to have a lot of tabs open at once, and never actually shut them down, thus it seems like I'm on this forum way longer than I actually am...

One question I want to ask is, how will the interaction between Max and your character go, I have become very defence of him, because after the last thread, I have begun to feel that only I can really do him justice, because it is all too easy to protray him as a really stupid all powerful villain instead of a clever, coniving, but prideful demigod.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 11:08 am

I tend to have a lot of tabs open at once, and never actually shut them down, thus it seems like I'm on this forum way longer than I actually am...

One question I want to ask is, how will the interaction between Max and your character go, I have become very defence of him, because after the last thread, I have begun to feel that only I can really do him justice, because it is all too easy to protray him as a really stupid all powerful villain instead of a clever, coniving, but prideful demigod.
Then you could write up his dialog and I can respond to it.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 4:21 pm

Then you could write up his dialog and I can respond to it.

That works, but I'm not always here, I have bursts I on, and then I disappear into the magical realm of waaaay too much homework...
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 9:11 am

That works, but I'm not always here, I have bursts I on, and then I disappear into the magical realm of waaaay too much homework...
No no, I mean that simply for tonights post, as in the whole teleportation thing and then the meeting (I was thinking it could be similar to Shivering Isles with the assistant at the beginning)
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 5:56 pm

I tend to have a lot of tabs open at once, and never actually shut them down, thus it seems like I'm on this forum way longer than I actually am...

One question I want to ask is, how will the interaction between Max and your character go, I have become very defence of him, because after the last thread, I have begun to feel that only I can really do him justice, because it is all too easy to protray him as a really stupid all powerful villain instead of a clever, coniving, but prideful demigod.

precisely why i only take control of characters i understand. Raize i get, Faire i get, Kiva i get, Max? I have no freaking clue.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 5:18 am

precisely why i only take control of characters i understand. Raize i get, Faire i get, Kiva i get, Max? I have no freaking clue.
I personally try to avoid it as much as possible, as it goes against my previous RP experience where it was completely outlawed.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 11:30 am

its not exactly outlawed on this thread, just dont do anything major with another character or anything out of character (my plans with some of gaius' characters though will require them acting out of character, but it wont really be them.).
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 7:29 am

its not exactly outlawed on this thread, just dont do anything major with another character or anything out of character (my plans with some of gaius' characters though will require them acting out of character, but it wont really be them.).
Not what I meant, I meant in my previous experience in another thread, Valton: The New Hold, we were told to avoid it as much as possible or not at all.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 2:49 pm

That works, but I'm not always here, I have bursts I on, and then I disappear into the magical realm of waaaay too much homework...
hmmmm, could work. Max could in a since "test" him to see what side he's on. Max would know many things of the events to come i would think. Possibly even have a hand in it.

Not that Max would "care" but he would see it as a....... whim of curiosity on this new creature.


I have a simple idea of how the meeting would go down, Maximillion would try to see if he knows that he has Daedra blood, he would try multiple ways of confusing him, eventually Drake would have a vision showing him stabbing Mephala and absorbing her power, and Maximillion would propose for Drake to join him.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 12:26 pm

Oh here's a pick of Veronica I did.

http://s1022.photobucket.com/albums/af341/charon711/?action=view¤t=ScreenShot9.jpg

As soon as I can make Charon look the way I imagine him ill post it too.
Did you ever get around to Charon...?
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 6:48 am

I wrote literally one line of Max's dialogue (Gauis dont kill me) :bolt: but it should work to get things rolling, it's edited in the old post, so go take a look at it.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 8:12 am

I'm the most indecisive person in the world, I edited the CS to show that his blade is elven (not too powerful, but not too weak) and a few minor changes below, particularly the major flaw and personality.
so here it is
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Name: Drake Cassamir - Speaks in Dark Slate Grey
Gender: Male
Race: Imperial although he has Daedra Blood
Height: 5ft 8in
Age: appears to be in late twenties - very early thirties
Moral Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Class: Demigod
Skills: Knows how to use both armor types but prefers heavy armor, he is an excellent swordsman, knows how to fire a crossbow with excellent precision, and he prefers to dodge his attacks rather than block.
Unique Trait: he has been given the "gift" of being able to see fate itself (he recieves visions) while in this state all of the veins in his body begin turning red and buldging throughout his skin and his eyes turn as red as a Dunmer's.
Appearance: Long wavy dirty blonde hair, small scars on his chin and one small scar near his cheek.

Clothing: Wears a darkened steel plate armor that increases his power, but makes him unable to disobey Mephala, without removing the armor.
Equipment:
Primary: Deciet: An Elven Blade that morphs from shortsword to Longsword at the wielders will.
Secondary: A Dwarven crossbow made to puncture through armor.

Miscellaneous Items: Arrows, throwing knives, and other small weapons.

Personality: Has immense bloodlust (most likely due to his daedric blood), tries his best to assist others, cares about his Friends, loyal to Mephala to a point.
Major Flaw: Incredibly power-hungry, he would do anything to become an Aedra or Daedra (perhaps even try to kill one :devil: )
Background:
Drake unknowingly was the child of Mephala. He was placed on the realm of mortals where he would be quickly trained by her worshippers in secret so that she could hopefully attack and kill the other Daedra. After his training he had received a vision from Mephala which showed men named Charon and Raize’s accomplishments and he was simply told “find them!” With that he was granted his equipment and would begin his search, and Mephala would finally attempt to accomplish her ulterior goal.

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