Eden's Pawn

Post » Fri May 27, 2011 6:09 pm

I
Objective: Search and Detain.
In 2276, when nuclear war was on the very edge of happening, President Eden announced over the newly created Enclave Radio Station that he had plans for the nation if, in fact, it happened. He called it " Plan Fallout Reconstruction." It was supposed to cleanse the waters that were irradiated, and let the Enclave rebuild the nation.

But what he didn't tell them that he planned to do the exact opposite. For Eden had created a program, supposedly to wipe out the country's population using his own knowledge and radiation. Enclave scientists started conducting experiments, and were striving to find out where the President's program was. THey could come up with nothing relating to his words, but they had heard that a secret project was conducting down at the south end of the wasteland.

Eden's most trusted advisor, Augustus Autumn striked feear into the hearts of the Enclave, and under him, the government had become stronger. But.... Eden had plans for another young soldier.
When Fallout came in 2277, everything America had known about itself was destroyed. Experiments gone wrong, humans changed to mutants, new creatures were created ? and vaults were opened?

I was flying in a Vertibird, heading from Raven Rock to the D.C. Metropolis ruins, a place called the Jefferson Memorial. We had heard, and learned that this was where Project Purity was taking place, which had gone against everything we had believed in. My parents had run off while I was still young, and the Enclave saved me from the harshness of the Wasteland.

I owe my entire life to the government. We have very harsh training, and most of us died. But I am 17, and still healthy. I was just assigned a mission, though I wasn't leading it. I stared at the other troops. They looked very confident for men just coming out of training.

I looked down and loaded my laser rifle's energy cells. Hmm only given 90, 3 clips; hopefully I wouldn't need more. I'm lucky I got even that much. You would think being Autumn's nephew would be a breeze in the Enclave. Well you thought [censored] wrong. He hates me with all his heart. His only goal was to use the Enclave to gain in his own personal benefit.

As the plane passed over Fort Independence, the damned Outcasts tried to shoot us down, some of the shots hit, while other didn't. One of the turbines exploded after being hit and the plane started to nose dive. Two of the five soldiers jumped out too early. I glanced out the window and saw their bodies hit the hard concrete. Well, no need to describe, they died, painfully. The others did nothing so when the timing was right, I plummeted into the Potomac.

The plane hit the water with a loud splash as I clambered to shore. The pilot was dead, no doubt about it, but the officer and the three highly ranked soldiers made it out. We turned around and we saw the Jefferson Memorial about a mile off. As we made our way, we saw the other Vertibird land outside the facility. We quickly sprinted and joined up with them.
My fabled uncle was with, and said,

" Heard the explosion." As he said this he glared at me,
"These doctors are the biggest [censored] you'll ever meet so we wont have any trouble at all.
So help me if you die on me I will give you the worst possible honor of bravery, so don't [censored] die! Move out!"
Yeah, told you he's an ass.

As we ran to the Gift Shop Entrance, I thought I could see movement in one of the pipes? We quickly dashed in, and made sure that no mutants were on patrol. As I opened the door to the Rotunda, a dark, haired women in a lab coat rushed by me, saying, " Get out get out get out!" I pushed her aside and went to secure the control room. A man was inside, and he was talking into an intercom. " Stay there! The Enclave have infiltrated the building."

As soon as he saw me he ran to the controls. I ran up the steps along with another soldier. He grunted in pain, and then I turned around and saw two scientists with pistols in their hands. I went to pull the trigger on my laser rifle, but they shot it out of my hands. As they advanced, two shot rang, and they dropped. Autumn was there along with a hostage scientist and another soldier.

The man's name was James, and apparently he wanted to purify the waters of the Capitol Wasteland, the exact opposite of President Eden's plan. Our order was to secure the Purifier and destroy it. " So you realize this is everything our government's worked for, and you are trying to take it down," said Autumn, " Give me the code or you're under arrest!" James still refused. At this point, two things happened.

First, the dark haired woman started looking in the window, and now a new figure had appeared beside her, and was watching with interest at James. Then, Autumns pulled out his 10mm and shot the hostage down, as a threat. "All right, no more violence, I'll type the code in," came the reply from James.

Everything went so fast I had no time to see the code. There was an explosion and I felt really weak. James must have typed in the code to radiate the airlock. He must have wanted to keep the Enclave from getting the Purifier, so he killed himself, to destroy Autumns, the only one who knows the secrets of Project Purity besides President Eden; I fell to the ground, along with my comrades.

I have about 4 chapters reeady. If anyone wants the rest you can just send a reply
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 9:47 pm

HUge wall of text. i'll try to fixit later

finsished
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:32 pm

I guess it was written fairly well, but you seriously need to take a trip to the ol' Vault and get your lore straight. http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Fallout_Wiki
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 1:27 am

Thanx will do some research I got the game but didn't resort much to it when writing
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 4:36 am

Thanx will do some research I got the game but didn't resort much to it when writing


Well, see, the problem is, I don't think John Henry Eden even EXISTED back then. Nor the Enclave radio. Because, frankly, I don't think even the ENCLAVE existed back then. Well, they didn't show up until way later anyway. (They didn't even exist in FO1).
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 2:22 am

My good friend Nolan boy told me that Eden was a robot long before 2077, and three dog made some references to Eden not bein fullof sh*t after all so I dunno kinda fixed the beginning spell check and the part about the FEV
meant 2277 SORRY
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 12:30 am

do you mind showing me the proof from wiki so i can change it?
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 8:23 pm

sorry bout the time mess up got 2077 and 2277 mixed up
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:46 pm

I'll add chp2 when i get more comments critiscim
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 8:01 pm

Eh...a quadrupal post? O_o have you EVER been on a forum?
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 2:52 am

no quote from your other story im new so i have to wait till i get another reply thank you for that
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 9:04 pm

no quote from your other story im new so i have to wait till i get another reply thank you for that


Uh...what?
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 1:00 am

I quoted in the life of a "waistlander" that I was new but thank you for being my first critic. Seriously N0lanB0ys out of town so yor prob the only one to give me tips
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:23 pm

Whoa!!! the great wall of text!(kidding :P )
I like it,keep up the good work :goodjob: (but you need to do some research on the lore though) oh and I didn't mean to "attack" you last time, sorry for the "off-track" allright?
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 2:38 am

I guess it was written fairly well, but you seriously need to take a trip to the ol' Vault and get your lore straight. http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Fallout_Wiki

I'm just gonna put this down over here http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline#1942
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 3:28 am

I'm just gonna put this down over here http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline#1942

WHAT??! NOOOOO!!!
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 3:37 am

I'm just gonna put this down over here http://fallout.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline#1942



thats cool but some people say its not rite
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 12:29 am

Whoa!!! the great wall of text!(kidding :P )
I like it,keep up the good work :goodjob: (but you need to do some research on the lore though) oh and I didn't mean to "attack" you last time, sorry for the "off-track" allright?



yea thanx kinda new at forums and writing
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 11:48 pm

II
Objective: Rivet City Escape
"Wake, we don't have any [censored] time!" Thanks, Autumns, nice awakening. What else could I expect? He thrusted a Radaway into my hands, saying "Take it and leave, this is a highly radiated chamber. Meidics came in and saved our sorry hides, but if you don't get going that'll all be for nothing. There is a Vertibird waiting, meet me there in three minutes or we're leaving!"

with that, herushed out. My body felt weak all over, but I took the Radaway anyway,. For a brief minute, I felt better, and I rushed out of the Rotunda. The Gift Shop was covered in bodies of the Enclave. Who could have done this, I asked myself. The door to the outside was stuck and I presumed I didn't have much time left.

It hurt but I slammed my shoulder against the door, and it broke free. I struggled to get to the Vertibird because of the fact that I was still
seriously radiated. Autumns was screaming, "We're leaving!" The propellers started spinning and they had left me on the ground. Shots ran their deadly path through my leg, and I crumpled to the ground. I turned to the east to find, Brotherhood! I knew I was going to die; the Brotherhood kills all Enclave soldiers they see.

As I strained my neck to see the Vertibird taking off, a Mini Nuke launched its way into the vehicle. The explosion was so bright; I was blinded for a second. Bodies came flying out of the plane, and I thought: Autumn's dead, the Enclave is ruined, we have failed. Fortunately, the Brotherhood was stupid enough to shoot a Fat Man that close to their own bodies, so they perished into the fiery explosion too. I gathered myself up and headed towards the giant ship in the distance.

I was lucky I didn't encounter any hostiles on my way, because my right leg was crippled and I would not be able to fight for long. When I got to the top of the entrance high-rise of the big boat, I took off my armor and helmet, along with my rifle and threw them into the Potomac. I called the intercom, and a bridged extended. As I limped across, drawing blood on the bridge, the security chief, came out and said, " This man is seriously wounded, take him to the medic!" I heard shouts of "Medic!" "Medic!" and then I passed out again.


Not all of chp2 but im posting it anyway

Cant fix the huge wall soooo try and figure something out

Fixed it
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 10:56 pm

Put some space between paragraphs, that will do(well some people on the forum say so).
Oh yeah, there is also some "lore screw up" too, like the part with August. Well, it's your story so I guess it's okay.
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 3:39 am

@Pwnzar6464 There is a button under your posts marked "Edit". Please use it to edit your post rather than making unnecessary consecutive posts. Thanks.
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 6:39 pm

about the radiation chamber. yea i just made that up. and the part bout the helicopter HE doesn't die youll c him later
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 6:21 pm

about the radiation chamber. yea i just made that up. and the part bout the helicopter HE doesn't die youll c him later

I know, I know. but in the "actual" story Augustus was UNCONSCIOUS and then a group of Enclave paramedics came in(or maybe rushed in???) and took every survivor to (presumably) Enclave field hospital or maybe Raven Rock. But like what I said, it's okay.
However I do believe that everyone in that room survived
Spoiler
even your dad.
Why? well, the "victim" of Augustus' pistol survived(hell she even pledge alliance to the Enclave), so why not?
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 12:08 am

good reasons buthow did u figure out all that stuff i just played the game and wen i saw in in vault watever is was ticked
off he lived
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Post » Sat May 28, 2011 1:04 am

AAAAnd heres the rest of chp 2 hopefully there are no "lore" errors and I "fixed" the "errors" in the first Chp2 post


"Don't know where he came from, but he was in some kind of war. Brotherhood, maybe?" I was lying on a cot in a doctor's office listening to the conversation between the doctor, and the Police chief. " You forgot Enclave too, or a Raider, you never know, but be aware, his feelings might not change just cause we saved his life."

" He has no weapon, Harkenss?" Ah, so his name is Harkenss? " You can ease up, let him recoup, and we'll find out soon enough. Harkenss walked out, and the doctor told me to wake up, for I was pretending to be asleep. " Now, have a look around Rivet City, but don't come close to death again. Or it'll cost you caps." Ass, I thought, you just saved my [censored] life, don't talk about money right now. Getting up was easier now. I walked out, not saying anything to him back, and I headed to the Stairwell, down to the Midship, and into the Common room.

" Whoaa duuuddeee waats the rush? We should chill sometime duuuude" came the voice I heard. A stoner-looking guy was standing next to the door. "[Censored] off, I want some sleep." "Ooooookay duuuuude seee youuu laaaaater." [censored], he's going to die of his drugs one day.
Later, at about 6:00, I headed down to the marketplace. Now don't even joke, because almost every person down here was an ass, and I don't really know why.

Even so, I was able to haggle each person into giving me: An assault rifle (5 clips) 7 grenades, a wasteland settler outfit, 10 stinpaks, 5 Rad-xs and Radaways, and booze. I was just about to beat the [censored] out of Shrapnel, but I held my fists. After getting my entire ordinance, I went back to my cot in the Commonplace.

I don't know why, but I found myself heading up to the Bridge Tower at 10:00. On my way up the stairwell, I heard to people talking. I silently walked up one flight so I could hear them without being seen. In a hushed voice, These Rivet City members were plotting a murder against me. " How can you be sure?" came the first. Then the reply, " I found Enclave Power Armor and Helmet in the river after they dragged him to the infirmary. We have to kill him before he does us," Acting stupidly, I ran up to their floor and shot them both. After taking what I needed from them, I ran through the door to the Bridge Tower.

I shot many more guards before making it to the outside balcony. One lone guard stood up here, pointing a 10mm SMG at me. " We know you are Enclave, and we want to keep this City as far away from trouble as possible." So, even if I let you go free, you'll tell your Enclave friends, and they'll come here to kill us." All the time she was [censored]ing, I looked around for an escape. An open railing stood at the right from me, but I didn't know if it led straight to water. I still had my assault rifle drawn so I shot her right hand and she dropped the gun. I dashed to the opening and jumped.

Chp 3 will be here tommorow and the next day!
fixing paragraphs on ALL my posts.
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