Fallout: Patriotic Psychotic

Post » Sun Sep 06, 2009 5:08 pm

Led Along doing sadistic deeds for Colonel Autumn and his so called government.

(This is just a taster. I'll write more if you like it.)


There he stood, clutching the photograph of a woman. Fixated into her dark brown eyes. She was happy in the picture. Unlike the man who's eyes were glued down to the photograph. Suddenly the man who before seemed drained of any emotion now rose up in anger. He gripped the paper tightly and ripped it up, throwing the pieces which scattered on the floor. "You wouldn't co-operate with the Enclaves ways!" he muttered in an angry but controlled tone. "That's why I had to?" His muttering fell short when he heard a message on the intercom. "Bando, please report to Colonel Autumn's office for your daily briefing." His anger seemed to fade while hearing this and calmly walked through the electronic doors. He walked through a narrow corridor into a door which had a sign above it saying 'Raven Rock Command Centre'. He entered the room. Many computers were crammed into this not so very large room and people in white lab coats were looking busy. All of a sudden they stopped what they were doing and their eyes followed the man through another door. The man entered another office now much smaller. "Bando, I've been expecting you." Said a croaky voice. "Yes sir, what on today's agenda?" The man named Bando said without a thought. "The brotherhood's boy scouts have sent some infantry over to the derelict town of Minefield. With you being the best in the sigma squad, you alone shall go and terminate their small squad of soldiers so we can set up another base in that area, understood?" Bando gave a brief nod and said "I am always willing to serve the real America sir." Colonel autumn sniggered and said in a quiet tone "Good, now be dismissed." Bando now walked to the armory where he was greeted by a robot guard. "Please pick your weapons and armor, have a nice day." "Have a nice day, yes that'll be the day." Bando laughed to himself. He picked up a Tesla cannon, some enclave recon armor and his very own unique scope sighted plasma sniper. After equipping these wasteland essentials he followed a spiral staircase down, exited Raven Rock and ventured on to minefield.
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Becky Palmer
 
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Post » Sun Sep 06, 2009 4:32 am

Quite good, but a bit hard to read without any structure.
Maybe put the text into smaller paragraphs?

Many computers were crammed into this not so very large room and people in white lab coats were looking busy.

not so very large, that's just regular large isn't it?
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