Guard log #45 - Mattias Austus

Post » Wed Feb 02, 2011 10:17 am

Bravil Guard Log #45 - Mattias Austus

The Captain thought it was a good idea to keep Bravil's actions under check, so he issued us these little pocket books for the guards to write down everything that happened during the day. I think he's just a bit paranoid after that Bosmer got killed, right in the middle of the town square. As for today's watch, nothing unusual happened.

Captain says I've got to write a more detailed report of what's happening. He says "Anything could be something." Although I daily think he grows more paranoid, I can't deny the man, if the Dark Brotherhood really was behind the murder, than any one of us could be next. Besides, it's not like I can deny the Captain. As for today's watch, there were two travelling merchants entering town, both Bosmer, carrying clothing and the like. We had one traveller coming through town, a Dunmer, he says he's travelling and just stopping for a few days rest. Oddly, he seems to spend his time pacing about town, muttering something to himself. He looks tense.

Surprise, Captain says I've got to report my location, and where I was if anything major happens and how I became involved, if I ever did. I'm starting to think he's just as paranoid as the Maglir fellow, the one who was thrown in jail because of some mental illness. Today I was on guard duty outside the North Gate across the wooden bridge. Both travelling merchants left today, and I saw nothing of the elf traveller.

Something happened, today one of those Bosmer merchants came running breathless to the gate, where I was on guard duty. He was muddy and had a minor burn on his right shoulder, part of his hair was singed. He said an Oblivion gate had opened up right on the road towards the Imperial city. He then went on babbling about his friend being killed and these horrible demonic creatures pouring out of the gate breathing fire. I was trying to calm him when he said they were chasing him, naturally, I sped him to the chapel healer and called the Captain and explained the situation, he sent me and a few other guards to defend the bridge with some archer support of the walls. We sat there for hours yet nothing came. I think I'm starting to see why the Captain's so paranoid.

Today the Divine Crusader -as he is called- came to town today. I've heard so much about his heroic acts and such, but I never really thought he was real until I saw him. What was more unbelievable was that he was an Argonian, and Argonian knight, I could hardly believe it when that deep red tail slipped through the North Gate. But that's not the point, when the Dunmer traveller saw him, he stopped his usual muttering and started conjuring something. In a flash odd ceremonial armor appeared all over his body, and a Daedric mace in his weapon hand. Instead of running from his charging opponent, the Argonian drew out his massive Claymore, errant sparks of electricity wound their way up to the razor sharp point of the enormous weapon. Before I could intervene to stop the fight the traveller swung his heavy mace towards the Argonian's head, but the Argonian blocked and kicked the assassin away. Before the assassin could react the Argonian charged. The assassin brought up his mace to defend but the Argonian swung so hard he knocked the ugly mace right out of his hands. With expert precision the Argonian followed through and brought his heavy claymore into the assassins side. Next thing I knew the assassin went flying, he was hit so hard that when he hit the wall of a house the wooden boards snapped and bent before the assassin fell a full ten feet to the ground. After the battle I ran up to the corpse and found the armor had disappeared, and that one side of the Dunmer's chest had collapsed under the heavy blow. I made the mistake of getting to close and another errant spark arched towards me, zapping me across the arm. I went to question the Argonian but he had disappeared.
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Post » Wed Feb 02, 2011 4:54 pm

Tips and feedback=a very happy author

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Post » Wed Feb 02, 2011 10:18 pm

When you write in huge blocks of text it makes reading the stories harder. It's breaks up the usually steady pace some like to maintain to keep the visual imagination flowing. You should read your sentences, cheching for places where comma's are or aren't needed. For example:

"I think he's just a bit paranoid after the Bosmer got killed, right in the middle of the town square."

The comma here puts an uneccessary break in the sentence.
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Post » Wed Feb 02, 2011 3:38 pm

Can d, thanks for the tip.
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