In Holy Matramony : Fallout Series Discussion

» Sat May 28, 2011 7:54 am

This is great! Certainly better then mine...

Thanks

I'll be sure to read yours

» Sat May 28, 2011 1:48 am

One small, but unimportant detail, it's Li, not Lee. Also, some words are misspelled, but all in all. It's pretty good.

Ah Ok

I'll keep that in mind!

» Sat May 28, 2011 11:01 am

Working on my last update for a few days, be up soon. Going on holiday tomorrow for to weeks so Laptop time will be rare

» Sat May 28, 2011 5:54 am

Chapter Eight
A 'Mega' Alliance

It stood, on the horizon. A huge metal obscurity, caved in like an elongated pyramid.
"Megaton." Michael sighed. "Im old friends with the Sherrif there, good guy. He's bound to help us."
As we approached the area from the east, we were forced to go around the outskirts of the town, at the enterance in the north. On arrival we were greated by a robot.
"Welcome to Megaton." Just then, two plane wings slid diagonally across each other sliding up, revealing an enterance into the Town. We stepped inside, and opened the gate.

"My, my! Michael! Your back." A man came walking towards us, sorta looked like Calamity Jane. I held back the laughter.
"Good to see you Sherrif." Michael shook hands with the man. " This is Aaron, he's from New York and leader of New Rivet."
"New Rivet? What the hell happened to Rivet City?" The man's tone sharply rose.
"It was attacked, by the Enclave!" I came in, "We're living at Evergreen Mills now, but we need some people for our security team. We're being hunted by the Enclave."
"Ahh Sh*t!" the sherrif shouted, "If you want the truth, we welcomed a visit from the Enclave too, but we only encountered a small patrol. Luckily we managed to hold them off. What do you think they're up to?"
"They're after me." Michael's words were regretful. "After I started the purifier, they've been out to get me. They know something. They know how to controll the water supply. And they want nothing in their way to do so..."

The sherrif, Lucas, I think new that Megaton were no longer safe.
"Okay, he muttered. "We must make for Evergreen Mills immediately. They knwo you've been here, there's an eyebot patrolls just around the corner. I'll round up the town, address them and then we'll meet you up there. I'll bring weapons too!"
"Thanks, it means alot." Michael finnished the sentance as we walked out the gat and back into the Wasteland.

Why had Michael hid the fact that they had controll over the purified water? Was it because he was frightened people would resent him. Look upon him as a corruption? Or that they would no longer see him as a hero? I didn't care. Michael was my friend, and I had to help him in any way we could. We had to regain controll over the purifier. I thought of all this as we headed back to Evergreen Mills. On arrival, I was greated by Mac. I hadnt given him much attention lately, nor my wife. Her bump was getting bigger. She housed my child.

Late that evening the Megaton'ers arrived. Aquianting themselves with the New Rivet folk I addressed the whole town.
"The Enclave activity within the DC area has risen, but we are safe here. For now. We will be holding a sign up session for the security tomorrow morning at 0900 hours. All those willing to join please do. We need to keep the town safe. In the long term, we must look towards defeating the Enclave. Which means... Assassinating the President of the United States of America."
Gasps arose from the crowd as I walked down from the small rocky ledge where I had given my speach.

Assassinate the President, maybe not the best idea I have ever had. But I know it will work. It must work. For Michael, for New Rivet. For my family.

Aaron out -

» Fri May 27, 2011 10:23 pm

This is very good! I knew that LW would eventually show up.

So far, a very good job, I'm definitely going to keep reading. On a different note, however, there are quite a few spelling mistakes. Re-reading your content before posting it will help you get rid of most of them. Other than that, fantastic job! Keep it coming.

» Sat May 28, 2011 8:49 am

great job man, its becoming a great story. try to watch for spelling errors though

» Fri May 27, 2011 11:10 pm

Thanks guys

I'll be sure to chop out any spelling errors. Remember this is my 1st FF so I do appreciate constructive critisism.

» Sat May 28, 2011 6:24 am

Chapter Nine
Tightening our Screws

The morning after, Michael and I were down at the old bench in the Bazaar taking up registration forms for those who felt that they could offer sucurity to New Rivet. I was supprised at the outcome which brought up some unlikely characters. The ex-chem addict Leo Stahl and his brother Andy. An ex-raider by the name of Jehrico also popped up and maybe the most strange, a beer swigging, Irish mad man who would do anything for caps called Colin Moriarty.
"We better watch that one, he's a con. He'll do anything for a profit." Michael Muttered as we scaled the steps back up to address the security team

"Okay then. We are about to allocate you positions in the area, listen and attend your role. You can collect your caps at the end of the week from either me or Michael." I announced. "Andy and Leo, you will be stationed on the bridge on the courtyard enterance. Jehrico and Shrapnel will be at the Bazaar enterance and Colin alongside Ted and Garza. Patrol the caverns.

Everybody went off to their respected positions. Michael began clearing all of the hust alongside Lucas Simms. Appoaching the last hut I stepped inside followed by the other two, some 44. Magnum rounds and a Were inside. The remains of Raiders up against the wall, displayed the huge devastation we had caused to these unexpecting folk. I heard footsteps outside.

"Ahh dont worry, it'll be Andy and Leo going to their Station." Lucas added. We heard a clunk and with that, the door bolted shut.

"What the hell?" Michael Shouted. "Were locked in!" As we all tried to heave the door open, it wasn't budging though.
"Move, I know what to do." I exclaimed. I grabbed the Baseball bat, hidden in the corner by a Raider corpse and smashed a hole in the side of the tin hut. We darted out catching a glimpse of a man running back into the Bazaar, cloaked and sporting a dark hood.

They were one of us.

I must play Detective now as I track down the perpatrator in this crime.

Aaron out -

(OOC* I know this one was shorter than the rest, Im currently on holiday so dont have much tome to work on this though. I'll update in the next few weeks and will be able to resume fully in a fortnight)

» Sat May 28, 2011 9:11 am

dun dun dun! Looks like we got a mystery on our hands, awesome story man

» Fri May 27, 2011 6:29 pm

great story!

» Sat May 28, 2011 7:37 am

Cheers guys! :goodjob:

» Sat May 28, 2011 2:14 am

Chapter Four
DC, The Depths of Hell

There it stood. Rubble, dust, agony and destruction. We had just reached the ruins of DC. It stood, laughing at us. Somehow it new that we were no match for the terrors that awaited us inside. Daunting. But I will protect my family.

It was 11AM , in summer the sun would be ready to take pole position in the merky sky. It was snowing. My wife, Holly, rapped up in her fur blanket from yesterday's ordeal with a Yao Guai said to me:
"Is this the only way to Rivet City?"
"As far as I know." I replied. Our map led us along the river, past the Jefferson Memorialand the once great bulidings of DC. Where rich men and women dwelled as their days passed on our god for saken planet. The wind channeled through the are where the river stood making for a bitter trip. Mac's paw prints left a trail through the snow. You could always tell where he went.

And then it hit me, like a blow to the head. I fell, unconscious...

Waking up inside a room, lying in a double bed I wondered what had happened.
"Are you okay?" A man walked into the room.
"Um, yeah.." I replied
"You almost gave your wife a heart attack back there." The strange man said. "The name's Michael!"
"Aaron." We shook hands as I clambered out of the bed. "How did you find us?"
"Luckily I was passing in the area, Ive been grabbing some sewage samples for my friend Doctor Lee at Rivet City. Where you headed?"
"We're actually on our way there now, seeking refuge."
"Stick with me and you'll be fine." He winked.

We walked out of the bedroom and downstairs. I was me with a huge hug from Lucy and the wagging tail of the dog.
"What happened?" I asked.
"Your cut on your leg, It was infected. Your blood stream became toxified and you passed out. Michael explained. "My father used to be a doctor."
"Well thank you very much." Holly came in

"Who lives here." I asked?
"Used to be a guy named Dukov, Before the Enclave murdered him... They've been clearing out he DC ruins the past year. The Super Mutant threat is almost over." Michael seemed toknow what he was talking about. I had no idea what a Super Mutant was, but it sounded bad.

Sitting round a fire, we told Michael our story. He too had lost his parents. His father James, a scientist and Doctor. And his mother Catherine, who was also a scientist, died in childbirth. The last few years, he had, like us, come out of a vault. But it was obvious he had a dapted quickly. This was a man woth experience. Also like me, he was young. 19 to be exact, but he seemed mature. He told us that we would move out tomorrow, reaching Rivet City in the afternoon. I was glad we had forund Michael, we bonded really well. Like brothers. He was a nice guy.

And he had saved my life...

Aaron out -

A little error. You said Lucy, and isn't your wife's name Holly? Or did I miss something.

And I am reading as well my friend XD

» Sat May 28, 2011 6:58 am

:foodndrink: THis is a great fan fic cant wate for the next instalment :foodndrink:

» Sat May 28, 2011 8:48 am

Chapter Ten
An Irish Charm

"I want to know why!" I walked into the Bazaar all guns blazing. "Moriarty, here now!" Colin walked up to me grin on his face.
"Why?!" I shouted.
"You have no idea..." Was the reply.

I heard the story, caps. Caps fuelled Moriarty's lust to turn us into the Enclave.
"You silly Irish idiot!" I screamed at him. He just sat there, looking at us. Staring, smiling.
"You're all gonna die!" He spoke out. "You have no chance."

Angered, I left the room, thinking. I was so angry at him. Why would he do this to his town. I knew hes cap fuelled lust for weath. But I didnt know he'd take it this far. Stupid man. He will pay.
And then, it hit me. Lure them out.

I returned back to the Bazaar. Full of confidence.
"Get out Colin." I exclaimed.
He began his retreat, tail in between his legs. He left, I turned to the community, and began my speech.

"Colin will go to the Enclave, we know that. But when he does, we'll lure them in. Tomorrow I will travel to the citadel with Michael, request assistance from the Brotherhood of Steel. We will hit them hard, gear up. Prepare for battle." My insparational speech had given life to New Rivet, they were beginning to arm theirselves. My town were fortified. Thanks to me.

"We better leave now," Michael came up to me. "Travel over night."
"Yea, I agree." I said, "Get your kit. "Were leaving." I left the Bazaar, saying goodbye to Holly, Mac deciding he would come. We left Evergreen Mills, back out into the wasteland.

Aaron out -

(OOC* Yet another small update, still on holiday but back home in a week. Updates will return to normal then

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