Just a Little Story Type of Thing I Created (Fallout)

Post » Tue Apr 28, 2009 1:30 am

WARNING: THERE ARE SOME WORDS THAT ARE OFFENSIVE TO SOME PEOPLE, BUT THEY ARE USED IN THE FALLOUT UNIVERSE, THE WORDS DO NOT GO AGAINST THE RULES, FOR THEY ARE USED TO EXPRESS SERIOUS FEELINGS TOWARDS TOPICS. ALL CAPS IS NEEDED TO WARN PEOPLE.
Listen to this while reading, for epic effect.




The story of SurviveMe (Robert McCann is RP name)
Robert has light brown, hair, blue eyes, has medium muscularity and has tan skin. You will uncover his personality in the story.






October 23 2077- 10:00 AM- Sacramento, CA
Vault 14 opens to public.
Under the sprawling metropolis of Bakersfield, lies the technological magnificence of Vault 14. Built with every amenity in mind for the prospective Vault Dweller, Vault 14 was given the "Pressed Vault Suit" award for attention to preparedness. Buried far underground, the protection that Vault Dwellers will receive will be unprecedented. Much like all other Vaults, Vault 14 has been fitted with the newest in Vault Water Purification Systems. Able to take even the waste located in the sewers of Bakersfield, this system is able to deliver over 15,000 gallons of pure, refreshing drinking water every day. This is where we begin.
Robert was walking to the valley where the entrance of the vault, when a drunk and rude security personnel came up to him.
"What the hell are you doing?" Said the security.
"I am going into this vault, sir." I said impatiently.
"No you're not! You look like a piece of shit!" He then covered his nose like an adolescent four year old.
I know that I smelled foul, for I have not showered in weeks.
"Now, go back to the slums, you pig!"
I became angry, so I put my left hand in my pocket, whipped out my switchblade, came towards his stomach, and stabbed him, without thinking of what would happen next.
This later will save my life.
"NO!!!" Another security guard comes running to me, and pulls me away and into the vault's storage unit. The solid steel door shuts and locks behind him. He pulls out his pistol, and is about to pull the trigger, when the overseer comes in.
"Officer Kulp! That's not a way to treat a criminal!" Said the Overseer. The officer puts away his gun.
"What should I do, sir?" Said officer Kulp, exaggerating on the "sir" part.
"Beat him. Make him in feel the pain that officer Adcock felt." The overseer then leaves, shutting the door, and locking it.
The officer then pulls out his baton, and beats me for an hour. After the beating, he spits on me and leaves. Little does he know, I took his 10mm pistol and ammo. I am ready for this. Revenge.
I pull the trigger.
I knew that other security redirected the citizens to another entrance after 30 minutes of the beating. I then realized that the door is solid steel, I drag the body away from it and look for the lock or handle. Nothing. The door opens from the outside, so I bang on it for people to hear me. I can hear people coming into the vault's main door, but they cannot hear me banging.
October 23 2077– The Great Hour-Sacramento, CA
Vault 14’s door mechanics are not working properly.
By now, everyone can hear and some can see the bombs. I am in this storage unit, covering my ears, believing everything will end now. I came here to find safety, and security. I end up stabbing and shooting security personnel, and the bombs finally fell. I take out my great grandfathers book, and begin to read. The roof is now cracking like a young gazelle on thin ice, I look up, and a piece of stone falls on my head.
October 24 2077– 9PM -Sacramento, CA
Robert comes back from coma.
My mind is throbbing, and my lips are a little numb. I struggle to stand up...
"Hello?" I ask, for I can hear moaning outside of the door.
BANG! BANG! BANG!
I hear a shotgun being fired outside. I go to the dead guard and take whatever is on him, his clothing, vest, helmet, and even his notebook. I then put on the protective parts on my body. I go and grab my duffel bag when I hear the door unlocking. I aim the pistol strait at the door. The door slowly opens, and a shadowy figure appears.
"Who are you?" Said the man.
"Easy, this was just an accident." I said nervously, as I thought this was an insane killer, but he sounded like he was a man in a FEV containment suit. He then stepped forward. The man was tall, 6FT 7' estimated. He had a yellow hazmat suit with blood all over it. Along with that, he was wearing a gas mask. He was also holding a shotgun- 12 gauge. He then took his mask off.
"Why, hello there Robert." He said with a smile.
"JD? Did you.. Kill people?" I said with worry. We had known each other since high school, and we went into the military together back in 2066 in Alaska.
"Hell no, Rob! These here are goddamn zombies!" Replied JD.
I look at the bodies... The skin is dry in patches, in other places of the dead "zombie" are very moist, and pvssy. The face and body of the thing is caved in, and it looks like it had starved for weeks.
"What the hell happened?!" I said.
"Bombs fell, here- take these." So to the point. He threw me a hazmat suit and another mask.
"So why did you come get me?" I asked, pondering about his reasons.
"Because I had no one else in the world, no homo." He said and smirked.
We then both laughed like kids again.
"So how did you get here?" I asked.
"Well, the landing of ARCHIES III was earlier than planned. We saw the bombs fall, and we decided that we should too." He replied.
"How did you survive that?" I remember that he had become a space engineer in 70'.
"We landed in the Northern pacific ocean, well, that and we were grinding upon the land." He replied. I started getting dressed, taking off my jeans and T-shirt and putting on a clean Vault 14 jumpsuit on, then a bulletproof vest, and on top of that a Hazmat suit, then the gasmask. I have the police baton in one hand, and the 10mm pistol in the other. JD has his shotgun, and a machete tied to his left leg.
"Is the world filled with these... Things?" I asked.
"Only this vault and a few other places I've been." Replied JD.
"Gaugh!" A zombie came in running, wearing only a piece of cloth on his or hers hips.
Thwack! I hit it with the baton. The zombies ribs caved in, letting out a disgusting odor.
"We should move, now." Said JD briefly. He then led the way out of the vault. He led me through 5 stories of zombies, dead bodies, and ruins. We had used up all of our ammo by the third floor, and started cutting and beating down the zombies until we got to the armory.
"Holy shit, man!" JD said with excitement. The room was full of grenade launchers, smgs, assault rifles, and more than enough to equip an army. We decide to stock up. We pull out some duffel bags from the corner of the room, and we clean the place out. At the end of the room, there was a holotape, so we played it.
>>> OVERSEER <<<
Dear sir or madam in the overseer's position,
We are pleased to announce that you have been chosen to lead this vault. This vault is a special one! Every member shall have one gun, and 1 bullet/shell! That's not it! The door will be open when the bombs fall! Don't worry, you'll make it! You all will!
-VaultTec
>>>END TRANSMISSION, LOCKING HOLOTAPE<<<
"He never read this..." JD said.
"Why is there so much ammo in here if there is to be only one bullet per gun?" I asked with confusion.
"Maybe this was a vault made for killers, you are here."
"I did get form in the mail.... And it did say that past crimes are pardoned.. And others here were very hostile."
"Weird... I have heard of these social experiments that were going to occur in the vaults back in 65'." said JD. *Clink* *Clink* The sound of metal falling startles us, and then we hear someone say in a raspy, dry voice- almost like a dying man.
"..Please... Don't shoot me..."
"Who are you? What the hell-" I see his face. A dry, hairless head- pealing skin off of his cheeks, and an odor like no other. I raise my gun.
"Step back, now!" I ordered. He stepped back into the shadows. He wasn't like the other zombies, he had meat on his bones, almost human in a way.
"Why can you speak, and no other zombie can?" JD demanded.
"..I don't know... I am.. A zombie?" I recognized his suit- this is the overseer.
"Well, we don't know what the hell you REALLY are..." I said, I almost started to shed a tear of sympathy for him.
"Do... You need... Help? Like... Help.... Out?" Said the overseer.
"No, we can handle this." JD rose his gun up.
"Wait! He may know a better way out..." I lowered JD's gun, and my own.
"This is *Cough* *Cough* true... I am not attacked by those monsters, or 'zombies' out there.. I could find the safest rout, or you could give me a weapon to help you men fight your way out.. Maybe we could find other 'survivors' like myself..." JD and I turned to eachother, and silently agreed to have the overseer come with us.
"Ok, and if you slow us down, we are leaving you, understand? And what may we call you?" Asked JD, handing over the overseer a 10mm pistol and a combat knife.
"Call me... I forget.." Replied the overseer in confusion.
"Ok, Leroy. Was my dogs name, lived to be 18- looked like you when he was hit by a car." JD said. JD is very sick, but I was there when it happened, so it is kind of true.
"Oh, ok." Said the confused overseer.
"Wait! I remember, it is Brian! Brian O'Dello." Exclaimed the overseer.
"Ok, whatever, lets just leave- show us the way ugly." Said JD.
"Damn, I'm helping you, you shouldn't be-" JD shot him in the arm- severing it from Brian's body.
"Ok, lets just go, he was to much to control." JD said, looking at me for assurance.
I quietly nod.
We start to continue through the next two floors, when we came to the vault door.
"Damn, you really did some fvcking damage Rob!" JD said.
"Hell, you barely used your gun, that machete must be dulled up by now!" I replied.
"Gaugh!" Three zombies run towards us, coming from behind JD.
JD was being ripped apart in front of my own eyes.
"NO!!!!!" I yelled fiercely, I grabbed his 12 gauge and started unloading round after round on the zombies. By then, JD had lost two arms, and half of his face.
"..Kill...Me.." JD said. He spit out blood on his left side.
"Do it.. With my machete... Leave it.. With me.." JD requested. JD, my best friend, now lies in my arms.. dying... I have to do what he requests, it's his dying wish... I set him down, and pull out his machete.. Then I stab him in the heart.. And pray for about 20 minutes for him, for even though I am atheist, he is Christian, and I will substitute for a priest.
October 25 2077– 12:35:10 AM -Sacramento, CA
The first night alone.
I know that this is the first night, because I took JD's watch.
I grab all of the guns, and throw my duffel bag over my shoulder, and I hide in a nearby pocket in the mountain where the vault is. I can see over the valley that I walked to get here, cars in the distance, no lights. Nothing. But then, I see out of the corner of my my eye, fire. There are five or so people, and many others joining up with them. I don't want to yell, for those things may hear me. So I just watch.
I pull out a scoped .44 magnum, and zoom in on what they are doing. There are 3 women, and two men. People are running up to them. The original five people have combat armor on. I might go see what they are up to. I start to put all of the guns in the duffel bag, when all of a sudden, I hear gunshots. I look over the ledge, and the original five people killed half a dozen of other people.
The original five are Chinese soldiers. I then pull out a silent 10mm pistol, and start to move down the mountain to the Communist enemies. I now hide behind a nearby rock, I can hear their footsteps. I swiftly turn around and shoot them all, one by one. I then reload, and wait to hear for more people.
About thirty minutes go by, and I stand up and turn around to face the other side of the rock. Nothing. I search the bodies for anything that I may need, may it be water, food, or anything useful. I find alot of ammo, and also a holotape, and it reads:
>>>GENERAL HSU<<<
Hello there general, the plan is active as of Oct 22, 2:25 PM. The Chinese army will be most very proud of this assignment to destroy the United State's iconic Hoover Dam. You will be rewarded the medal of Xian, and 2 million Yen for this task.
Make us proud.
- Embassy
>>>END TRANSMITION<<<
Commies. We have been fighting the communists for many years now, and now this is the aftermath. I begin to look around, and I can only see fire in the distance, as well as towns, glowing with-
Radiation.
I begin my way back up to the vault door, scared for radiation pockets to emerge. I bring my bag and the holotape, stumbling every step or so. I eventually make it to the door, and shoot the damn lock that prevented the vault from safety, I then bang on the controls to close the door, hoping that it is not too late to save my genetic structure. I reach to pull off my mask, but realized that that is stupid of me. I then think of safe places to hide from potential zombism. The overseer's room! I begin to run towards the overseer's main control room, jumping over and avoiding corpses along the way. The room is on the second floor, if I am correct. I then head to it- and I see the overseer in there.
"Why, hello there mister Robert, Robert McCann." He was holding a folder, a folder with all of my information on it.
"How the hell did you survive Brian?" I asked, puzzled that there is a Mister Handy in there, tending to the empty socket.
"Zombie powers, haha!" He chuckled. Then he waved in some more zombies- the intelligent ones. They all had either a blade, or a pistol. Brian then said "I found others like me. And I have told them about the 'incident' that I had with you and JD. Speaking of the devil, where is he?"
"He has passed on." I said, and then pulled out two assault rifles that I took from those commies.
"This door is thick steel, and the glass is bullet proof. You won't be able to come in here and kill us." Said Brian.
"So you have read all of my profile, right?" I asked.
"Yes, you are a very prestigious man, too bad you committed three or four accounts of murder. Even though we all know it was a setup." Brian was referring to the McCann Murders, I was framed by government agents that I had killed two children, and their parents.
"Yes.. Also, I have worked at General Atomics International for three years.." I then look at the model number of the Mister Handy robot.
"X23-C14, terminate life in radius.." I look at my Pip-Boy that I had found on a dead body, and guessed the coordinates."X223 Y13 Z-234 to X445 Y13 Z-224." Then the robot stops its current task, and starts up its blade and flamethrower. I watch in amusemant as the hideous creatures die. When the carnage is over, I say
"X23-C14, open this door." The robot does what I ask.
October 25 2077– 7:35:10 AM -Sacramento, CA
Security, and safety. Almost.
I walk inside of the overseers office, disgusted at the mess on the floor. I then tell the robot to clean it up, and move the bodies out of the room. I take off my hazmat suit, and the mask before I come up to a chamber that was sealed off from the rest of the vault, for I didn't want to bring in radiation that was on my suit into that room. I then open the door by hacking the terminal next to it. The door then unlocks, it is beautiful to see all of the gears function properly. I then step in, shutting the door behind me. I had told X23-C14 to make sure no one comes in. but if someone were to try, call me over the intercom and notify me about it. The room is beautiful, with food, a bed, and some plants to the side.The room is perfect, a bed, a shower in the right corner, and a room for plants and trees to the left. I also can hear roaring water.. Puzzled for I do not know the source of it. I go to the right of the room, and see a metal panel, and a yellow controller, mounted on the wall. The controller has a red and green light, the red one is on, but the green is not. There is also a knob, like a knob on a stove. I then turn it to the word 'open'. The metal cover then rolls up, revealing roaring water going to the processing plant. I see this through a thick glass, and then I look at the shower. I start to do a little dance while I also throw my duffel bag on the bed, and all of my other items on my body. I turn on the shower to feel warm water, and then jump in. I knew that there won't be many luxuries like this on the outside of the vault door. I am washing my hair, when I see something in the room.
A person. I then reach for one of my pistols that I put above the shower, and open the door, aiming the crosshairs at a girl.
"Who are you?!" I demanded.
"..Jenny.. I am.. Was the overseer's daughter..." She said, scared for what might happen next. I then loosen my grip on the pistol, and put on a towel, still alarmed at her presence. She is a pretty girl, blond hair, and with a Vault 14 jumpsuit on.
"Sorry, I am just very tense.. My name is Robert. Robert McCann." She looks as if she had been crying for hours.
"..Is he still out there" She whispers.
"Who?" I ask.
"My father." She said, while taking a step back in the room with the plants.
"I am sorry.. But.. He has... Been killed." I say, trying to let her know as easily as possible.
"Thank you!" She exclaimed, running over to me and hugging me. I am very confused, I had just killed her father, and she is hugging me?
"They were very sick, all of them were." She said.
"That is why I did not let them in, they scared me too much." She added.
"How did you survive?" She asked.
"I'll tell you in a minute, please look away for a few moments please, so that I may get dressed." I answered.
After I get dressed, I inform her on the new world, and how they became sick. I find out that their official names are 'ghouls', and that they are just people exposed to high amounts of radiation. I also find out that she was a scientist, but left her job to go live in the vault.
October 24 -10:53:13 AM-
Safely assured.
"I need to rest, it has been about three days since I have had sleep." I say.
"Well, there is only one bed... I am tired as well.. Could i join you?" She asks. I say yes, but I am not here to look for a relationship. Although, she is nice, I cannot. I have promises that I will keep that I made back home.
October 25 2077-6:24:10 AM-
A new hope.
"Morning Robert, I made eggs that were in the private storage." She said, offering me two eggs. We then eat breakfast, talking about the old world, and me describing the new world.
"How long do you think until we may go to the surface? And how long were you up there?" She asked, pondering about my survival.
"I was up there for three minutes, tops. I wore a hazmat suit, but my skin felt like it was burning. I left the suit outside of the metal door, and it is drenched in rads. I can estimate about... 10-20 years before it is safe to go to the surface. She looked disappointed.
"Wait! I know my father had a device that could completely freeze us for a long time, and slow down our aging!" She exclaimed, but then I wondered: How come she has not used this device yet?
"Like the one Robert house designed for himself? Where could this 'Cyro-Stasis' machine be?" I asked.
"Here, help me move the bed. We then move the bed to the left of the room, blocking off the green room and the storage beyond that. There is a manhole with a cover on it when we move the bed. There is also a keypad on the cover too, showing that to aquire access, you would need the key. I then go to a buzzer, and ask the robot in the overseer's quarters what the combination is. X23-C14 then answers me politely the four digits. I type in the code, and the cover to the hole elevates. I grab the cover, and slug it to the right side of my body.
"I can see the bottom, it is not far down." I say, looking up to Jenny.
"Are we going down, then?" She asked excitedly.
"Yes, I think we are." I answered. I then gave her a 10mm pistol. I equip myself with an assault rifle from one of the commies, a police baton, and a .357 magnum.
"Lets go, I lead, and you follow." I say. We then start going down the manhole, and at the bottom, there are two pods for two people. One named 'OVERSEER' and the other 'GUEST'
"One for me, one for you." She said.
"I know how to operate this machinery, I worked for a company that made these.. Hop into one." She said. She then messed with the command terminal, while I put on a different jumpsuit, a gray one that is cold, and tight.
"Ok, it is all set up, I just need you to step in." I do as she says, but before I do, I put my duffel bag and other guns under a floorboard near the right side of the room. She then closes the door, and says 'See you on the other side'... Or I think she did.. The glass then cracks, and freezes, and for a split second, I feel shivers, then nothing.
?? ?? ??-??:??:?? -
Rude awakening
The door lifts over my body, and I fall out. I am weak, I can feel where my muscles were, but now they are 1/2 of the mass. I cannot get up, until someone picks me up and sits me down at a table. I open my eyes, hoping to see Jenny. I don't.
"Why hello there! How was your nap? And what is your name?" A black man in a fedora and a blue weathered suit on greets me, and gives me food.
"...What day-" He cuts me off, telling me to rest up. I then fall unconscious.

I wake up to the sounds of scientists moving around in the room, then I see my guns under the crack in a panel where I hid them. I begin to stand up, when a balding old man comes up to me.
"Whoa sonny! You cannot be going willy nilly out there! We need to test you for any deterioration in your body!" I was startled, how long was I in the stasis module?
"Sir.. What year is it?" My Pip-Boy was garbage, so I just slip it off and then threw it to the side.
"Why, don't do that! Here, have a new, temporary Pip-Boy, we will repair the other one. The date is..." he looks at his watch.
"January 2089, 10:23:16 AM. Here, you should get dressed." I put on the Vault 14 jumpsuit on, but none of my guns are with me, only my switchblade. He then looks at me and examines my eyes, and does other tests.
"Wow! You are now fifty-two years old! Unbelievable, you have a body of a twenty-two year old gymnast!" I then told him about how that when I was in the army, West Tek was creating the Limit 115, and the army had an alteration of it- one that could alter the humans DNA in such a way, to create a new species. I am one of the few who did not become mutants. It was a top secret project, but hey- who cares now, it's the apocalypse?
"Oh, I see." The man looks at the other scientists, notifying them that I am healthy and safe- but not traumatized. I look around the room as the scientists come over to me, there I see the man in the blue suit receive money from what appears to be the director here, a man in a power armor suit, but not like the ones in Alaska. He then walks over to me, pulling out a plasma pistol. I start to panic, see that the scientists are trying to grab my limbs. I pull out my switchblade from one on my sleeves, and slit the old man's throat. There are five scientists surrounding me, and the soldier in the power armor is walking from the left side towards me.
I then throw my knife at a scientists, hitting them in the right eye, then I slide to the panel where my guns are hidden, rip off the panel, and get out two 10mm pistols, and open fire on the scientists. I have ran out of bullets in both guns, and the soldier is coming close to me. I look in the duffel bag for something that could pierce his armor- and then I find a grenade launcher, and two grenades in the chamber. I look up at the soldier, and he punches me in the face, knocking me to the side.
"Mister Robert A. McCann- you are here by property of the Enclave- surrender now, or suffer massive pain. I whip around my left arm, pulling the trigger of the grenade launcher, and then, after the blinding flash, I look around, and his body is on the other side of the room. My ears are ringing, and I am a little shaken. I struggle to stand up, and walk slowly to the dead man. His helmet has been ripped to shreds, and his face is caved in. I take his plasma pistol, and take other items from the scientists, some food, and stimpaks, something that helps me feel better, but is not a drug. I then find that my duffel bag is too heavy for me, so I have to lighten the load. I am now carrying 2 10mm pistols, 1 10mm SMG, 1 Chinese Assault rifle, 1 police baton, 4 grenades, 1 plasma pistol, and alot of ammo.
When I get up to the overseer's room, something is in the green room. I get out the plasma pistol, aiming for what I believe is a ghoul in a jumpsuit.
"Oh my god! You're alive!" Jenny popped out. I shove her away.
"Why were you not down there?! And how did you avoid those men and women?" I was furious. Jenny had looked as she had only aged a few weeks, but then I remember that she too worked at West Tek.
"..I woke a year before you.. The robot had told me that intruders were coming.. And I had used some of your guns.." She looked very upset, she was alone for a year, and only killing too.
"I.. I am sorry.." I say, second guessing on what would have happened if I had told her to leave me be.
"No, I would do the same thing. We need to go, I know of a town that we could go to, it has recently been risen, but it is safe- for the most part." She said, grabbing me with one arm, and holding my magnum in the other. She takes me to the vault door, and shows me the lights of fire in the distance. Then she gets out a map. The world looks so different now.. Sunlight is dim, water is tinted green, and the whole world seems covered in ash and soot...
"That place is Morning Star, I only know that recent travelers have come by, and talked to me about how safe it is, although there are about 3 ghouls there.. But there are about 25 humans, and many animals and food."
I think about this, I mean, if 25 humans can live with 3 ghouls.. Why did I kill so many? I guess that they were not as evil as I believed.
"Ok, we should go at dawn, night is falling and we need to clean up my mess in the overseer's hideout."

January 29 2089– 10:23:09 PM-Overseer's Office
Preparing for the journey ahead
We have moved all of the bodies to the front door of the vault, to ward off any wanderers. I had hid my guns all throughout the vault's rooms. I only have a select few on me, and Jenny has some, too. When we were done, we had eaten some plants, and we packed some food for the journey, and she brought up something at the table.
"Would you think people will remember Robert, the killer?" She asked.
"No, I will probably change my name, pseudonymous man- Gregory Falcor." I answered, wondering about the future, and what it holds.
"Ok, what about Gregor Mendel? Like the great monk who introduced us to the new world of genetics?" She said. I had agreed, Gregor Mendel shall be my new name.
January 30 2089– 5:43:19 AM-Overseer's Office
Packing up, and leaving for a new future
"Should we bring X23? He could be of use to us." I asked, hoping that she would say yes, for I had given him some ammo to hold, and other valuables like my old Atlanta Braves baseball cap.
"Sure, he is very loyal to me, and you." I smiled.
"X23-C14, you can come with us!" I yelled towards the green room, and he popped out and rejoiced by lifting his robotic arms in the air.
"You shall go by Echo, ok?" I knew he would say yes, I stayed up all night to re-program him to obey me. All three of us, Jenny, Echo, and I were heading towards civilization. Or what is a new hope...
We are walking towards the ruins of what I remember was Morning Star, it still is Morning Star, but different in a whole new universe. We walk up to the main gate, when a white man with a shaved head, jumps out of a corner, wearing an orange jumpsuit with light padding on, and has a trench gun in his hands.
"Give me all ya' money! Or else de lady getsit!" The man is obviously very stupid, so I reach around my duffel bag to get out my rifle, when a man in a grey trench coat comes towards us.
"Jack! No! That is no way to treat new comers!" The man in the grey trench coat is now next to the man in the orange jumpsuit, and takes the gun away from him.
"My apologies, he is suppose to be guarding the town- raiders came in 'bout a week ago and now everyone is scared to walk five feet from the gate. I am Travis Conway, the mayor of this here town." He extends his hand, and I shake it while saying,
"Hello there, Travis, I am Gregor, this is Echo, and this is Jenny- we are the only survivors of Vault 14." Jenny smiles at the mayor.
"Well then, let us go inside the gates, and discuss some rules of this fine town." He says while escorting us inside the gates. Travis is a white man, wearing a white T-shirt, jeans, an old grey trench coat with a small metal badge on it, a desperado cowboy hat, and chrome shades. As we walk into town, I see some familiar places, like a barber shop where I would get my haircut, or the church down the street, but everything else has been blown away, or the materials have been used to make some of these shacks that the residents live in. As I walk through the town with Travis, he is telling me about the jobs available- if I wish to stay, then I would have to work. I am starting to think about going back to Vault 14, for this new world is quite scary. We reach a small, wooden shack, with a sign above it saying 'Guest House', a welcoming sign. I set my duffel bag down, and start to lie down on a cot, so does Jenny. Echo just watches over us, guarding us. I can see through the door way people looking at us, scared of us, I believe.
"Don't mind them, they are not use to friendly people coming over here." Travis says. He then explains the rules of the town, and warns us again about the raiders. He then asks if I would like to help to do night watch tonight, and I agree. He tells me to meet up on top of one of the towers in the town in 30 minutes.
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Post » Mon Apr 27, 2009 7:20 pm

The bombs fell in 2077. If your character was 22 when the bombs fell, by now he should be 34. And your guy lives in a slum, but has the body of an athelete? Tone it down a bit, this is a time when there were food shortages, and the world has enough Aryan RP characters already. Please make him more believable.
And somehow the scientist is surprised Robert hasn't aged in a stasis pod. Hes a scientist, I think if he managed to become part of what seems to be a stasis pod recovery team, then he would expect that.
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brenden casey
 
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Post » Mon Apr 27, 2009 12:45 pm


He does not live in the slums, he had just not showered the past few days, he was experimented on when he was a soldier fighting in Alaska, the scientist was part of the enclave, and the enclave sent the team, a soldier, and some hired mercs on a mission to retrieve the water chip from Vault 14( The soldier was going to kill the mercs later on, as they were just baggage.), when they came across a stasis pod, they had to open it, to see if the subject was important, or could be used as a weapon in war. I know he is like a 'god' type of figure, but all main characters are. It is hard to make him weak, and have a good storyline with it, but I could try to tone down his 'powers' a little bit, thank you for the feedback- I really appreciate it. :)
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