The Waters of Oblivion begin to swell

Opening a portal to living Hell.

The adventurer enters the fiery red gate

Unbeknownst that his will decides his fate.

Before his eyes lay a desolate scape

The death and demons of the Deadlands making him gape.

A Daedroth charged lashing its clawed fist out

Causing the adventurer to writhe and shout.

The Daedroth attempted another attack but failed

This time finding itself, by a sword, impaled.

The adventurer continued, strengthened but worried

Behind him irritated, dangerous Scamps scurried.

Rushing into a dark ancient spire

Greeting him is a blazing column of fire.

A Dremora swung his blade

Fortunately it was a swing he was able to evade.

Soon his sword and its flesh met

Quickly neutralizing the enemy threat.

The adventurer continued up the tower

At the top a Xivilai stared at him with a glower.

The Xivilai charged using its sword like a spear

He shouldered him into the inferno and its skin began to sear.

The Xivilai burst into flames and blazed

Leaving the adventurer blinded and dazed.

The adventurer peered at the black pulsating stone

Only then did he realize that he was alone.

As he grabbed it the Spire began to fall apart

From the damned place he was to depart.

The Waters of Oblivion fell

Closing a portal to living Hell.

I liked the ryming scheme however it seemed a tad bit forced. In other words the rymes where good and seemed forced if that makes sense.

I like the rhyming.

However...one is only allowed one active writing thread (or RP thread) at a time. I suggest you PM a mod telling them which thread you want closed before they decide for you.

I don't know anything about the rules of having an active writing thread .. but I really liked this poem. You made the Oblivion gate hell seem more bearable and make sense .. if that's possible. I personally just poke around in Oblivion. I don't attempt the main quest after my one and only experience of falling into lava and not being able to get up. I had to restart another game and just enjoy Cyrodiil minus the gate experience. But maybe I will get my courage again up after reading your poem.

Thanks, sometimes I just couldn't find words that didn't flow well, but still rhymed. And if you mean forced as in every other line rhymed, it was supposed to be that way. (AA. BB. AA. BB. and so on). I think I had some odd sentence structure that made the sentence come off weird.


Thanks. I hadn't realized. I will make sure to get them closed and just make a "journal topic".


Thanks for compliment.