- the camp asks the player to be their "representative" after saving the camp from outcast bandit attackers
Sounds like a good introduction.
- Now that they have no reason to fear attack they ask that player that they get the Zannib tribe to recgonise them as an offical camp.
I think the Zainab would probably laugh and take a bit of a haughty position at this point. Perhaps you should include a period of growth for the Massahanud camp prior to any contact with the Zainab, then have a Zainab "emissary" make demands to the Massahanud tribe. "Protection" money, as it were.
- the Zannib tribe are willing to declare the camp offical and an ally but only if the camp can sustain a financial income. They dont want to be responsible for the camps day to day process and running and in order to gain respect and honour the camp needs to become self sustained..
- Task the player to clear a nearby cave of blighted shalk
Having a quest to make the tribe self-sustained is good, but the..."character" of the Zainab makes it seem unlikely that they would approach a new "upstart" tribe like this in such a kind way. If the quest is offered on the initiative of the tribe in response to the Zainab demands instead, I think it would make more sense.
I still say a Kwama mine would make more sense, but shalks are fine too, I guess.
- Task the player to obtain newborn shalk form a shalk trader
Wouldn't eggs or something make more sense?
- Task the player to offer the Zannib a tribute of shalk armor to show they are self-sustaining ( When the player returns the camp has grown by 2 yurts)
Offering the armour as part of the tribute, along with some other products such as guar hides and whatnot would probably be a good idea at this point, yes.
- With the Zanib tribe as allies and atesting to their independence the player is now tasked to help establish a larger tribe. The player must travel to Erabenimsun Camp where the wise womans brother risks becoming an outcast and so offers him the chance to join their camp. ( once done a new yurt is added to the camp)
"With the Zainab tribe no longer a threat" would probably be a better thing to say. The quest idea itself sounds good though.
- With the camp now a fair size, recgonised by at least one major camp, sustaining an income from a shalk mine the camp now needs to establish trade links with the other two tribes. With Zannib already an ally and Erabenimsun relations on a low due to the annoance of taking in the wise womans brother the player is task to establish the links with the reamin camps. (This in turn allows a trader to set up in the camp)
We seriously need a new name for the "shalk mine". Egg mines are referred to as such because they "mine" eggs...This is just a cave used to breed/keep/raise shalks in.
Anyway, Urshilaku is a bit far away for it to be a good trading partner. Ahemussa and Vos would probably be good choices though. (Though the latter should probably involve a speechcraft/personality/mercantile based stat-roll for it to succeed...And it should be optional. If the player has the right stats, he/she would then be able to establish mercantile relations with Vos, a nearby farming/fishing settlement, and could probably be given some sort of extra reward if he/she was successful, since this would be pretty beneficial.)
- On establishing the links the camp is well on its way to becoming an independant tribe but theres one thing missing. Each of the 4 major camps have been around for years and established histroy and prestige. If Massahanud is to gain the status of major camp it must restore its honour. Yahaz Ashurnasaddas tasks the player to obtain his fathers spear - The spear of Ashurnas, it was stolen from his family after an outcast ashlander raided their home and killed his father.
Will we be allowed to use it, or will it be kept in the camp? If the former, will you get/make an unique mesh for it?
- With the spear returned the camp has one last yurt to build. The players yurt. As a token of their appreication the player is given a permenant residence within their camp.
Neat. Will there also be some sort of monthly trade-based income?
Sounds good to me. Even if you decide not to include any of my suggestions, it seems like it would be fun to play through.