This is my first Fan-Fic so take it easy please. Constructive criticism is appreciated and so is suggestions for what should happen.

I would like to dedicate this story to E-Thugs all over the world. lol.

Prolouge

I don't want to set the world on fire?Life in the Wastelands is harsh?I just want to start?Unforgiving?A flame in your heart?And mean?In my heart I have but one desire?Its kill or be kill?And that is you?Especially for a Merc?No other will do?But all I need is caps?I've lost all ambition for worldly acclaim?A gun?I just want to be the one you love?Some ammo?And with your admission that you feel the same?And my girl?I'll have reached the goal I'm dreaming of?So I'll go onna singing?
?Believe me!

I don't want to set the world on fire

I just want to start

A flame in your heart?

And cause I love you all (and want to capture your attention) here is teh chapter 1.

Chapter 1- Greens sons of-?

"Eddie! Eddie wake up!" someone yelled at me.
"Five more minutes?" I groaned as someone pulled the blanket of me.
"Nuh-uh. Not falling for that one. You have to get to your security training, NOW!" the annoying voice yelled at me. I sighed in defeat and opened my eyes to stare the annoying girl in the face.
"I swear if you weren't my sister and a girl I would shoot you right now, and don't call me Eddie, it's Edward."
"Good luck, you don't even have a gun yet!" my sister teased as she darted away before I could grab her, "and Eddie is so much easier to say".
This was a charade we had practiced many times before. Even though it seemed as though we hated each other we both loved one another, although neither would admit it. Emily was the best sister
I grabbed my standard issue Vault-Tec Vault Security Armor and yelled goodbye to my sister. I grabbed a bite to eat at the cafeteria and headed down to the armory.
Ever since the Generalized Occupational Aptitude Test assigned me to the Vaults Security Detail I've been training for the day I become a full-fledged member of the security team, that day is today. I've been training for 3 years, making me one of the youngest people to ever become a officer, most train for four years but I excelled in my training because of my violent upbringing running with my gang the 'Vault Dwellers'. My earlier dreams of escaping Vault 27 were being replaced with aspirations of becoming the lead officer of the Vaults Security, and I was starting to accept my hand in life, and it wasn't the adventures of the heroes from the Vaults cinema which I had seen thousands of times.
I walked down to the Security HQ and met my trainer, Senior Officer Chambers who was styling the biggest grin I've ever seen him with. It was well known he was extremely proud of me and often proclaimed that I was one of the most promising officers to ever grace the Vault.
"Your very happy today Sir" I proclaimed.
"It's not everyday I have the privilege of passing someone as promising as you" he praised, "I have your gun and badge inside, C'mon in".
I stepped into his office and he presented me with the standard 10mm pistol, baton and security badge.
"I know I'm not supposed to show you my report but I decided to bend the rules a bit just for you" he stated nervously. Because he was an officer he vary rarely broke (or in this case bended as he said) the rules and something like breaking security protocol was the equivalent of murder in his books.
He handed me a holopad which I uploaded to my trusty Pip-Boy 3000 and began to read.
//Security Offcer: Edward O'Brien//
History: Edward's parents died when he was at the age of six, leading to a very troubled childhood. At the age of 12 he fell in with a gang that called themselves the 'Vault Dwellers' and grew very accustomed to violence. Edward was a constant thorn in the side of previous Security Officers and the other children of the vault made many complaints about him. He eventually matured and with the help of his sister reformed his ways.
Combat Capability: In the unlikely event of serious combat in the Vault all Security officers are trained in extensive armed combat. Edward has excelled at this and can efficiently fight with the following weapons:
-Pistols
-Rifles
-Shotguns
Training with Assault Rifles has been met with heavy resistance by Edward because it was the weapon used to kill his parents.
Edward is cool and composed during battle training and simulations. I believe he will stay very level headed in most combat unless something reminds him of his parents which enrages him and in simulations he goes into a killing frenzy which may endanger Vault Citizens, although this occurs rarely.
Weaknesses: Mental stability is doubtful, resistance to all Assault Rifle's limits his arsenal.
Capabilty: 10/10
-Senior Officer Chambers
//END TAPE//

I was relatively pleased with the report apart from the mental instability. I told Officer Chambers I was finished reading and he continued.
"Your first patrols start tomorrow and you have the rest of the day of to celebrate. Congratulations Eddie, your one of us-" Officer Chambers was cut off by a loud shreak from the Vaults Speakers.
An automated message started playing on the speakers, "ALL CITIZENS OF VAULT 27 REPORT TO YOUR RESPECTIVE ROOMS FOR LOCKDOWN. THIS IS NOT A DRILL. SECURITY DETAIL ARE TO HEAD TO SECTOR 1A, MAIN ENTRANCE. THIS IS NOT A DRILL".
One look at Senior Officer Chambers face told me something was wrong as he received reports from his Pip-Boy. I switched mine on and was greeted by a loud screaming and the sounds of guns firing. Suddenly the noise stopped and a voice came online.
"This is Junior Officer Patterson. We need backup at the gate! There is a breach at the main gate! [censored] get up here there-theres some huge [censored] green sons of-..." the line went dead and the room was engulfed in a sudden silence.
We did what we were trained to do. We ran up there.
As soon as the elevator doors opened we regretted it. A huge green thing was talking to another one. We froze in terror.
"Stupid HUMANS!" one said to the other.
"Mabe we find more good goo NOW!"
"The human probby hab heeeeeeeepss"
"They r to stuped to used et!"
"HAHAHAHAHAH!!! You r rite"
What were these things? Then I noticed the broken down gear shaped door which had been crippled by an explosion of some sort. They were from the outside world. The place I had once dreamed of going was starting to seem very foreign.
One of the green things turned around and spotted us. He was injured from some of the security teams 10mm rounds although they probably didn't do anything. I did the only reasonable thing I could do and pressed the elevator button to go down before he could perforate the elevator with his massive Minigun he held in one hand. Just as it closed I heard the noidse I was dreading, the rotating of the barrel as it prepared to fire. The elevator just moved down before he could shoot but the bullets still served to do something. They cut the power lines above the elevator and it jolted to a sudden holt.
This was a predicament.
We, the only remaining security to protect the citizens were stuck in a elevator. Above us were two, huge, hulking, Minigun-wielding killers, and they would destroy the entire Vault if we couldn't get out.
Even if we could get out could we stop them? My thoughts suddenly flashed to my sister being torn apart by those massive hands and I knew I had to find out.

//End Chapter 1//

Peace out my Homie-G E-Thugs.

not bad

problems:
-there are no assault rifles of any kind inside the vaults.
-nor are there elevators
-if there was an emergency as serious as a Breach, the overseer wouldn't broadcast it so the whole vault knew. they would tell everyone to go to their rooms and alert the security team through their pip-boys.

just things to consider

1-Where did you get this from? I'm pretty sure they had them, just they weren't usually used. Vaults probably had armories just in case, no where on the wiki does it say there wasn't Assault Rifles in Vaults.
2-Vaults don't all have the same design. Besides I'm pretty sure they would have to have elevators because there was multiple floors and alot of equipment in most Vaults. The Vaults we see in F3 are not the whole Vaults.
3- Your right for this one, will fix it up. Thankyou!

Thx for the advice.

Yes, I know I just released the first chapter, but that was pretty short, so I am releasing the second. And no, you do not have permission to judge me :nono:

Chapter 2- Nice to meet you Mr. Mutie

How could I get out to save my sister? There had to be a way. There just had to. I wouldn't accept the possibility that she was going to die, and thats were I found hope.
What did they do in the movies? Maybe my misspent youth watching those cinemas and dreaming of my own adventures would help me yet again. They would? open the hatch and climb the cable! That's it!
I looked up for a hatch and spotted one.
"Sir I'm going to try and climb up the cables so I can get to the door way. I don't think your arms are strong enough so you'll have to wait here"
The Senior Officer seemed removed and just nodded. I shoved the hatch out of the way and began to climb through. When I got up I found one of the worst things that could happen in this situation. One of the cables had been hit by a bullet?
?and it was going to snap.
Before I could even say anything to my trainer, best friend and father figure the cable gave out and the elevator beneath my feet was gone, and I was left hanging from the still intact piece of cable. The last thing I heard before I went into a rage was his scream. It was as if my parents were dying again and it pushed me over the edge.
And then I blacked out.
When I came around I was so surprised by the gore and carnage around me I nearly puked. There was so much blood. It was everywhere. Had I done this? I re-imagined Emily being ripped to shreds except this time instead of the huge green monster doing the ripping it was a small human monster doing it?me. I remembered Officer Chambers words? he goes into a killing frenzy which may endanger Vault Citizens? Oh God what had I done? I looked down at my feet in shame and noticed something. There wasn't any human blood on me! All I could see was strange mutant blood, it must have been them that did this. That still didn't do much to appease me.
Emily.
That was all I could think. She would be at our room, it was her day off from her maintenance training. I cautiously made my way to our level and decided I needed to find out. The door was broken down and there was even more blood than before. Her body wasn't in there but from the amount of blood on the ground and walls I could tell she was definetly dead.
I was hit by such a sudden wave of despair that I collapsed and passed out. I slept in my sisters blood for two days.
* * *
I had to leave. I didn't want to but I had to. I couldn't stay here anymore, my friends and my sister were all I thought about when I was here. I was tempted by the reprove of suicide but I couldn't do that to my sister, she would have hated me to do that.
I decided that I have to go out into the wastelands and leave this all behind me. I gathered whatever I could that might help me out there. I got a few bags and packed them with things like: Stimpacks, Food, Money, Rad-X, Rad-Away, My Security Armor (which I planned to exchange away ASAP), A LOT of ammo, a 10mm pistol, a Shotgun and a Rifle. I also brought some books about first aid and repair. I walked up the stairs because the elevator was gone and walked to the broken down Vault Door. It opened to a cave with a small door at the end and I took one last look around.
"Goodbye Emily"
And with that I walked out the door and into the glaring sunlight of the outside world. And was greeted by a horrible sight. Another mutant was waiting outside.
"Uh [censored]? Hello Mr. Mutie?"
BANG
Blackness?

//End Chapter//

Also, comments=win, so if you leave won that means you=win. Do you understand the implications of this? If you don't leave a comment you are going to get AIDS because that is the only logical outcome.

Just to back up the elevator thing, practically ALL the Vaults in Fallout 2 had elevators. Just remember, this is the FALLOUT RP section, not just FALLOUT 3.

Good so far. Enjoyable. Keep it up.

This is awesome! I can believe this is your first FanFic its really good.

Can't wait to see more, btw you Scottish accent needs some improvement!

Keep writing M'heree!

Thankyou Labyrinth and Ribbotson, looks like you guys aren't getting AIDS! :huh:

Wait what?

Yey? :mellow:

It's all good. I brought some AidAway from a merchant. Looks just like RadAway with Rad crossed--

FREAKING MERCHANT SCUM!

Lmao!

ROFL

nice fanfic looking forward to more

Very interesting, but you need to fix up your grammar a bit.