I'm back, I was gone for a while. I'm going to post the last three Chapters. I'm going to start the Fan Fic over again.

Chapter 1

When I woke up I sat up on the bed and turned my head and lookout out of the Porthole Window. I seen a Figure stand in the Distance, What was it. "Welcome To Point Lookout!" Tobar The Ferryman said to me.
"What happened here?" I asked Tobar.
"Same thing that happened to the rest of the Wasteland, Blown up". I stood up,
"So whats that?" I asked as I pointed at the figure through the window.
"Mole Rat" He replied,
I walked up to him. "Thanks" I said. I walked out of the cabin and up the stairs and walked to the Bench. I reached out and grabbed My 10mm Submachine Gun and my Chinese Assault Rifle, After that I walked off the boat back the way I came.
"Be careful" Tobar told me as I left. I turned my head and nodded. It was about 11 at night, I lit up my Pip-Boy there was a Brawler holding an Axe, He swung at me but I ducked, then I pulled out my Sub Machine gun and fired a full round into it stomach.

It was my first Day in Point Lookout I'm 18, my names Austin. Every time I felt tired I'd go back to the Dutchess Gambit and sleep. On my second day I was walking around and I came across a Destroyed Protectron. I turned I saw 3 Feral Ghouls munching away on a Still alive Vendor, giving her tourcher.
"Time to go back to the Swamp!"
I took the Axe off the bench and approached them. I raised the Axe and swung down It got the scrapper in the shoulder and severed off his arm, The Scrapper died. I tossed it at another and got it in the abdomen, It fell back I then pulled out my submachine gun and shoot the one still alive. The vendor was slowly dying and screaming and crying in pain so I lifted her up, and put her on my shoulders. I walked back to the boat and laid her on the bed.
"TOBAR!" I yelled. "A womans dying in her!".
Tobar ran in. He was out of Meds. "AH DAMN IT" He said with out any care.
"Go get me fresh Punga Fruit".
"From where?" I asked him.
"BEHIND THE DAMN MANSION" He pointed behind him at the mansion. "GO!" he yelled.
"Uhhh...Im nearly out of ammo" I said, he chucked me a Double Barrel Shotgun and gave me some Shells.

After I got there...

Once I got there I went behind the mansion, I crouched down and went behind the Corner. There were two Tribals theres. I shot them both and reloaded, There blood splattered on the side of the Mansion. I walked forward, There where about 5 Fresh Punga Fruits, I got them all but from the Top floor of the Mansion, A Ghoul came flying out the Window, He hit the ground and died, I turned to see two Scrappers, I shot them both and reloaded. There were about 5 Tribals running towards the Mansion or Running away, FROM WHAT? I wondered. I shot at them anyway, One got hit in the gut and Exploded. One got shot in the back (From what they were running from). I was shocked while one got shot in the head Bye the time I reloaded a man had shot the other 3. He was Built, Grey Hair, White Skin, Camo Shirt, Grey Army Pants and black boots, He had a Red and White Hunting Rifle, that was scoped. I stood up and walked over to him.
"Freeze" He said to me, I then stopped.
He walked up to me "You're Not a Tribal" he said.
"Sgt. Mack Johnson" Sarge said.
"Thanks for the help" I said.
"Help? I don't help, If I had seen you there I would of left you to your fate"
He raised his gun at me, before he could shoot me I blew his brains out the top of his head. I grabbed the Hunting Rifle and went back to the Dutchess Gambit. The cabins door was closed, Whats going on I wondered. I walked over to the Port Hole and peered through the window, Tobar was eating the dying Vendor. I didn't believe it, I turned my head and Vomited. The window smashed and he looked out and seen me, I turned and seen blood dripping down his face.
Thats Sick!" I exclaimed. I stood up and went to fire at him.
"If you kill me you wont be able to get back to The Wasteland" he told me. I put my Shotgun down.
"Your sick" I said.
"No I'm pretty Healthy" He joked.
I raised eyebrow and said "In Point Lookout I need to 'Lookout' for myself"

Chapter 2: Rise Of The Lackins

I turned around and seen it was near dark. I looked at Tobar.
"I don't really like the fact your a Cannibal, so I'm not gonna sleep here" I told him.
"Id think that'd be best" He said.
I walked off the Dutchess Gambit and to where I killed the Three Scrappers. There was a Mattress there I feel asleep there, I woke the next morning My Pip Boy was screaming out in Static I looked at the Tuner It was set to a different setting, The Static was giving me Headaches.
"Odd" I wondered to myself.
I walked back to the Dutchess Gambit and asked Tobar what it was.
"They know your here" he told me.
"Who?"
"He and they"
"WHO?!"
"There A Group Of Brawlers And Scrappers, The Lackins There just as Powerful as Brawlers and The Brute Mutants in The Capitol Wasteland" (Capital is Spelled Capitol In The Game)
"Where are they?"
"You know were Harley's Hardware is? Yeah. Well South-West of there"
I nodded and walked onto Pilgrims Landing. It was only my Third day, and Ive raised more hell then blowing up the White House in Point Lookout it seemed.

[i]So when I got there, I went Inside Haley's Hardware and asked him for a few Stimpacks and a Chinese Assault Rifle and 200 Assault Rifle Rounds.
"Sure thing" Harley said, Handing me my Items.
"He do you have any Custom Kits? You know to Modify a Chinese Assault Rifle..."
He nodded.
"I'll have a Red Dot Sight, and a Silencer for the Assault Rifle"
he gave me the Modifications, After I Modified my Gun I exited the store and walked South West, There were about 2 Scrappers in the distance. I Crouched down and sighted in on on of their backs.
I fired the a couple of shots before killing the first one. I wasted the rest of the Ammo on the other. I stood and walked forward I seen a Demolished old camp, There were 3 Captives and about 4 Dead body's hand from the a Floor/Ceiling of a A Sniper Tower.
"Psycho's" I said under my breath.
I snuck into the camp and Untied the Alive Captives and gave them guns. I told them to come with me, we went further into the Camp. There was a Broken Road, On the left side there were Destroyed Barracks and on the Right side there was 3 Barracks still standing and 2 Destroyed and at the End of the Road there was a Concrete Stairway with a Concrete Throne on the top. We hid behind the Barracks and waited. About 9pm that night Lackins started to gather around the Pyramid and a 7'5" Half Brawler and Half Mirelurk.
"My Demented Children, We are a Quit and Civilized People. But People think were freaks because the Nuclear Waste Mutated us. Were still Human but they think they can shoot us because we look scary..."
One of the Captives Interrupted him
"Your Not Scary Just Ugly!"
I went down on my gut and rolled under one of the Barracks, They all did except for the one that Interrupted him, He got crushed. They walked out into the Swamp. But I looked back and there was Hope on the Thrown. A Fat Man, I came from under the Barracks and ran at it. I grabbed it and looked for a Nuke I found one and lifted it up and put it into the Fat Man. I shot the nuke The Half Brawler Half Mirelurk shrunk down, They didn't die.
"WHOA?" I said.
It turned around.
It roared and ran at me
"Holy F***!" I said, I ran as Screamed. I ran to the Detention Camp and past the Ghouls and Bots, I ran to Haley's Hardware.
I heard it Scream
"Its The Rise Of The LACKINS!"
back to Vendor's Store, I hit the Mattress put I hid it. I covered it with Locker but Just a hole big enough to get out of...

Chapter 3

Now that I got away, I wondered did the others. Did they die? Did they escape? It made me wonder When I woke up I had a plan, To take out the Lackins. It took a Special weapon, So when I woke up I walked back to Tobar.
"Hey Tobar"
He nodded.
"Hey listen, The Radio Station that came over my Pip-Boy the other day I found were It came from"
"Oh yeah?"
"An old War Camp, Blown to hell"
Tobar chuckled.
"There leader is like, Hugh as in tall, and get this Its Half Mirelurk and Half Brawler, They worshiped him they called it a Mirbur"
"A Mirbur eh?"
"Yeah"
"Well then"
"I shot with a Fatman, It took notice but It didn't get effected"
Tobars jaw dropped, so I smirked and Nodded.
"Well theres A Weapon underneath the Calvert Mansion "The Gravity Launcher" Ive seen It only once When you fire it it starts a Circle in the shape of the Target and theres a Switch on it, once the circle turns Red flick the switch and it blows the target to pieces"
"WOW, sounds dangerous" I chuckled as I talked.
"Yeah Its under the Calvert Mansion, In a cellar door behind it near the Punga Fruits"
"I seen it, I was gonna go in but since she was dying so I didn't and when I got back you were eating her"
Tobars expression with Anger.
"Well I'm going to find The Gravity Launcher, Bye the way I'm out of ammo."
Tobar gave me 300 5.56mm rounds and walked off the Boat after I got off the Pier named Pilgrims Landing, there was a Dark Shadow it was skinny as I got closer I seen it, it was a Scrapper. I shot at it Most of my bullets hit it. I switched to the Hunting rifle I picked up earlier and fired it at The Scrapper it hit its arm, The impact tore the Scrappers arm off.
"Scrap that" I chuckled.
I heard running steps down the Pier, I turned there was a Scrapper running of the sand down the other side. The Rifle had a Sniper Scope attached I focused in on the Scrappers head, I took three seconds of Concentration and fired. The impact tore off the head and sent the body hurdling back in One or Two back flips I turned walked forward towards the Mansion.

When I got there...

I pulled on the cellar door but it wouldn't budge. I remembered the Ghoul I walked down to him and searched his body, I found a Combat Shotgun and a few shells I also found the Cellar Door's key, Once I opened it there were about Seven Dead Bodies and lots of blood. I sighed, This gun better be worth it. So after about 10 minutes of searching around I couldn't find it but then there was a Door, I wasn't just a Single door with a chuck of it gone no It was full wooden Knobs weren't broken I didn't believe it, an actually fully standing door. Once I had opened the door, Tribals charged me with Axes but I had guns I had switched to the Shotgun bye the time the reached me I shot one and he flew back into another I then shot the one that got knocked down there was another after I reloaded I shot him. So I searched through the room I found it in a Cabinet, Yellow with Silver and that Red Flick Switch.

When I got back to the boat...

I was still wondering if the Captives got away but I didn't worry about that...atleast not for now, at the moment I want to leave this Hell forsaken place But I Dont have the caps for a Ticket to the Wasteland so I guess I'll stay.
"Tobar!"
"Did you find it?"
"Yeah it was in a Cab..."
Tobar cut me off "Cabinet? In a room with Three Tribals through a Perfectly fine door"
"Yeah how did you kn..."
He cut me off again "I was the one that constructed and hid the weapon, I knew there'd be a..."
I cut him off "A?" I chuckled
He got that Angry expression on his face "A Warrior, A Fighter, A Survivor!"
"There my Three Middle Names" I chuckled again.
I felt the boat rock me and Tobar spun, Scrappers and Brawlers were on the boat and some still running.
"Wanna kill some Swamp Lovers?"
Tobar nodded as we started to fire. After they were gone or atleast dead I went back to my Bed, Once I got there and fell asleep I had a dream of Tobar and Lackins, and Mirbur smashing the Gambit and killing Tobar.

The Next Day...

When I woke up I was still thinking about the Captives, It had came across my mind, have they been Mutated but I didn't wont worry about that... yet. I walked back to the Pier and the boat nowhere to be seen I walked out on the Pier and Tobar was On his Knees crawling. My dream, It came to life am I Psychic?
"A-A-Austin?" He was losing breath.
"Tobar?"
"Y-Yes?"
"How am I going to get back"
He pointed down to the sand with his Strength "Theres a Motor Boat, Before you go Avenge my death" He then died bye breath loss
"Okay"
I let go of his body and stood up. I nodded.
"Lets go!"

To be Continued...

Chapter 4: Now its Personal

Chapter 4

I put a strap around My Shotgun and flung it over my Shoulder, I done the same with my Assault Rifle. I had the Launcher armed, I tested it out. I flicked the Red Switch, then pulled the Trigger there was a Red flash the Beam hit the side of the Building and blew it up. I put the Launcher over my shoulder.
"He should be around here!" I heard a Scrapper as I reach for my Rifle.

"I'm right here!" I yelled, firing a Barrage of Bullets at the charging Lackins. Killing them all.

I searched through them, I found Four Different C4's and a Note, which read: "In case of Emergency, Blow up Barracks using C4 Bombs and Mirbur will detonate"
Obviously, Mirbur had the Detonator, but I found a Replica I could Sneak in and replace Mirbur's for the fake, I thought to myself. I got the Camp and went underneath the Tower, I hid underneath the same Barracks and tossed Grenade. The explosion made the Lackins and Mirbur reveal themselves, Best of all Mirbur was in front of me and I got to replace the Detonator. I was hiding directly underneath Mirbur's Private Quarters. I waited until they went back inside, I planted the C4's and ran from the Camp. I crouched down behind the Fence and some collapsed Tree's. I flicked open a Hatch on the Detonator and pressed the Button. There was an Explosion and the Lackins came flying into the air and hitting the Ground all dead, except Mirbur he did not die. I reached for my Gravity Launcher and flicked the Switch.

"Puny Human returns?" Mirbur exclaimed.

"Thats right, I'm avenging Tobar!" I yelled.

"Tobar?" He asked.

I pulled the Trigger, Just as the Beam was about to Touch Mirbur, He jumped into the air. I flicked the switch again and Fired as he landed. This time he was hit, Then there was the explosion. This didn't kill him, I thought it did...

To Be Extended.

So you decided to revise this its alot of diologe and slow down with the chapters man

Not much description, pace is WAY too fast, not enough filler between dialogue, and sentences run together. Otherwise it was fine. I think it'll be more enjoyable if you fix those errors.