Hey guys my last RP on oblivion inspired me to write this story, if it svcks plz say so as this is my first try as a story ty for all your comments in advance
PS: there might be some spoilers so watch out

First seed, 28
Well, I never thought I'd get out of that damned cell. Fifty-six horrible years listening to that fetchering swit of a bosmer who wouldn't shut up no matter what. I am suprised I am still sane, the pompus fool of an emperor passed through my cell yesterday and started talking Fetchering things about destiny and following the gods and more idiocracy. Well, now I'm out and my own man again. I've had fifty-six long years to think about what I've done and I have come to one solution, THE MAGES GUILD MUST DIE! In my old province were I was the most prominent necromancer ever, the blasted guild of good mages came and captured me! FEGH! good mages, there nothing but a bunch of stuck up pigs with fancy robes. My dread zombies showed them though, At least five of them died before they even got to me! But enough of the past, that doesn't matter. The blasted mages have some how stunted my magicka. The emperor may his soul burn in oblivion said something about being born under the atronarch symbol but that is just old wives talk. The mages guild also managed to drug me and erase almost all of my necrotic knowledge! But it is not absolute, I to summon lesser skeletons wihch are of no good, after a couple hours of being free and cast fireballs (even if they are weak). I am writing this on skinned goblin flesh in a cave, I found some goblins wich I dispatched of, there was even a skeleton in there but for some reason the bones would not answer when I called to them. But that is of no matter, the drug must wear off eventually I bet they put it in my water every day. I must find the necromancers, join them, and plot my revenge. But for now, day is breaking and I must rest.

So is this a journal or what?

Journel, sry should have said that yet again my inexperience shows :facepalm:

I could use more length, since it's a journal the wa to do this is to expand more onto your characters thoughts.

The story has promise. You give hint to enough details that the plot looks intruguing.

First seed 29
Damned necromancers. I hate them! They should bow to me! But that is besides the point, and will come later. After the sun went down yesterday I got up and headed north along the road. I came into some inn which name escapes me at the moment. Anyway, I went inside and tried to talk to the proprieter about a room because I did not fancy another night using goblins as pillows ( a quite uncomfortable experience, Their ribs are quite sharp). The old woman started talking about how the forest wasn't safe anymore and undead were roaming the hills at night, when I finally got her to stop rambling I got her to say what she wanted and she told me to go kill a necromancer and be rewarded! I tried to rent a room but I had no coins, the innkeeper said if I "disposed" of the necromancer I could stay here whenever I like! It sounded good but I didn't plan on killing the necromancer because she might be powerful and be able to reverse the mages guilds stunting. So like a fool I set out up to the cave. I walked right up to her and said "hello" she nearly jumped out her skin. I must say it was quite amusing. She asked me if I had a death wish and I tried to explain to her that I wanted to join their ranks here in cyrodil. She said the king of worms was not allowing any new recruits seeing as the mages guild put a ban on necromancery and I might be a spy. A ban? A BAN! I was furious, I completely exploded and started talking about my past, THEN, in the middle of my tyraid the fetcher tried to kill me! ME! Who was once the most feared necromancer in all of the land. So I did what must be done and I slew her. Her minions did not respond well to that and tried to kill me. I ran and barricaded the old wooden door to the necromancers private chambers. The pounding on the door has stopped for a while at least but I am still to tired to go outside. The only brightside to this is now with this necromancers robe I might be able to diseave the necromancers into thinking I'm one of them. With out their help I don't have any Idea on how to kill the mages guild off. I could approach them but I'd rather not. The pounding has started again and Blast! I just saw an axe in the door, no time to

Ty for all the coments so far, I really appreaciate them.