Lol, well she has to have some romance for realism, being a 19 year old. Thanks SubRosa!

I wanted everyone to see Maxical's makeover, here is a link to her pic:


http://c1.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/45/l_abf073647af542d2a6b7c87620fa18e8.jpg

mALX, you have done a wonderful job. She's beautiful!

(For those not familiar with Maxical's earlier look, it can be seen in mALX's siggy links.)

Hey, that's not fair!! Men play computer games for the blood and gore. :toughninja:



Wow.....
That is an amazing look.
My mental image of Maxical is the one from Maxical's myspace.
You might want to update that home page.

Pretty kitty
I enjoyed the last chapter.
Especially Manheim's "excuse" :rofl:

To Everyone: Maxical's glitched game is being played on the 360, which is why there have not been any screenshots of her. I am going to continue the game on the 360 because I doubt I would be able to replicate this glitch in a lifetime of playing - but have finally learned how to take screenshots and download Mods. (although I am still having some issues with the Mods - like her new underwear is nowhere to be found).

I plan to use the PC game just to take shots of her for her story, and will update the Myspace as soon as I can make some shots that won't get my Myspace shut down, lol. Right now she is nvde still, lol.

I got her a posing mod, but can't figure out how to work it to save my life, lol.

Here is the only (decent) pic I have made of her so far:


http://c1.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/45/l_abf073647af542d2a6b7c87620fa18e8.jpg


@ Acadian, Winter Wolf, and RemkoNL - Thanks so much! I will make some screenshots and update her Myspace page A.S.A.P. !!!! -

Whoa, she looks completely different! She does not have the cat face anymore, but a regular mer one (with ears and whiskers). I really like how her eyes look. What mod(s) are you using to create her?

Were your old pics of Maxical also from the PC?

no, those were just pics of Khajiit I found on the internet.

She makes facial expressions too, if you watch her ears in the pics on her Myspace - they flip around depending on what she is feeling - plus tears will well up in her eyes. The mod is called something like: Kawa-Khajiit, it comes with a better body (!) and some mild posing - and a female voice! I added another posing mod but can't figure out how it works - Also I downloaded a nvde mod so I could get rid of those darn generic underwear - plus I wanted to see if Manheim would be nvde in my game like in Leydenne's - but no such luck. My nvde mod only covers my character I guess. (however, if you go to Maxical's Myspace - Maxical went into Fathis Aren's room and Fathis's clothes disappeared, he said, "Why don't you join me?" - but then he just lay down and went to sleep, lol. (Is that an indication of how the marriage would go? ROFL!) - I took screenshots of it and posted them, lol.

Also, the guards seem to like Maxical a lot. One guard in Bravil in particular. - in order to get into Castle Bravil Royal Quarters I had to pick the lock, in front of guards, they did nothing to stop me. One guard inside the Royal Quarters followed me, watched me break into Fathis' room, and then stared at us the whole time I was trying to get Fathis attention, lol.

If you want to check out Maxical's Myspace and see the pics of her, the link is in my signature.

Oh, its one of those porm mods! I tried one of those new body mods when I first started playing Oblivion, but I like the underwear myself. Well, maybe not the exact underwear they have in vanilla, as is kind of plain. It would be nice to have a mod that lets you change underwear (hmmm, have to look for one...). I do like how the faces look, and the color schemes for the bodies, especially the Kawa and the Shiro. Now I see where you got one of your old Maxical pics as well. Very neat.

I got one, but can't find the underwear. There must have been instructions like: They are in a box at _____ - but I can't find the 'read me' or remember. I guess I have to go back on the Nexus and look again - and they are much cuter than the vanilla ones.

Chapter 36: Within The Mind Of Fathis


Fathis began searching the Eastern sectors of the Imperial City at the prison and worked his way down toward the Temple District. He had searched as far as the Palace District and was heading toward the next sector when he caught a glimpse of sunlight glinting off a mass of red braids. It was her!

Fathis couldn't believe his eyes! There she was, looking just like she had?no, there were differences. Her face looked older than the last time he had seen her, her eyes were not bright and filled with mischief as he remembered. Her expression was intense, and she moved with purpose, she was going somewhere fast.

Fathis started to hail her, but would have had to shout the length of the quad, she was moving so rapidly. He hurried after her, almost losing her several times due to her speed. She was going somewhere specific, that was certain.

Maxical entered the Talos Plaza and cut in a bee-line to the Tiber Septim Hotel. She was going into the hotel by the time Fathis reached the circle. When Fathis saw her enter the hotel at such a pace a terrible suspicion crossed his mind.

Casting a chameleon spell, he scurried to the hotel and entered. Maxical was talking to the Innkeeper for a brief period, and then seemed to be angry as she stomped to a stairwell in the very back of the lobby. Fathis crept after her. He had come in too late to catch the conversation with the Innkeeper.

When Fathis reached the top of the stairs he saw Maxical entering a hotel room with an ugly troll looking fellow. The man was positively leering at Maxical! A rage filled Fathis, and he quickly sped over to the door and pressed his ear to it.

The sounds of a scuffle against the door came to his ears. Were they mating against the door? Steam began to rise off Fathis. He pressed closer to the door when suddenly it jolted against him. The door had not been shut tightly, someone just shut it - or did their bodies throw against it in their passion? He could barely contain his rage, and thought to enter and kill the leering little slimy?but upon trying the door found it to be locked. Fathis pinned his ear to the door again.

Aha! Fathis heard a man laughing! So, she tickled his fancy, did she? Well Fathis would see that wouldn't happen again!

Suddenly what sounded like a fight broke out. Crashing and thudding, it sounded like they were breaking up the furniture! Was it a fight, or was their passion just causing them to destroy the room in their heat, like animals?

Well it seems Maxical is not the sweet quiet little girl everyone thinks! Fathis drew his sword. This would be the last tryst she would have with that little Bosmer scum! He would kill that randy swine before this day was out!

Fathis was seething when he heard the doorknob turning. Maxical exited smiling and calling "Thank you" sweetly in to that gross little worm! Fathis quickly hid. He'd wait till the man emerged and do him in.

The man never emerged, but Maxical was doing some odd contortions and trying all the other doors in the corridor.

So, she had not had enough with her disgusting troll, she was looking for more, and must hold herself while she seeks them! Fathis would see to that! Putting his sword away quietly he started after her. She paused at the top of the steps, but was already on the move before Fathis could reach the landing.

Fathis started to run and reached out to grab her before she could go any farther, but he slipped in something wet in the carpet and tumbled down the steps, almost crashing into her as she hopped off the bottom step.

By the time he pulled himself up she had left the hotel. Running, Fathis got out in time to see her leaving through the City Gate. He ran and followed her.

Maxical cut down the hill to the water and cast a spell, crossing the water by walking on it. Fathis cast one and followed. It looked like she was going home. Good, the perfect spot for a confrontation. Alix had already given his permission, that was all he needed. He may even take her right there, with S'Jirra screaming in the background!

She passed her home! Fathis was dumbfounded but continued to follow her. She turned in at the next Inn and entered.

That must be what her argument with her other lover was about, she is having a tryst with someone here!

Fathis crept around the Inn trying to peer into the windows. At the back of the Inn he could hear a man's deep voice, but could not make out the words. Fathis pressed his ear to the wall and strained to catch the words.

Suddenly a bucket of sudsy water was thrown out of an upper story window, dousing him. Fathis stumbled to get out of the way, someone was emptying a bath.

"Snap!"

The sound reached his ears a second before the pain. Someone had set traps to catch game, and Fathis leg was caught! He began to heal and try to pry it off. The jaws of the trap held terrible tension, and no spells Fathis tried seemed to work on it to open the jaws.

As he struggled the sound of an argument erupted inside, Maxical's voice and a man. Could she not get along with any of her lovers? Fathis was torn between struggling with the trap on his leg and listening.

Someone was coming out. Fathis didn't know how he would explain what he was doing soaking wet in a trap behind the Inn, so he lay still. It was Maxical and three men! Owyn, that snake! Some other man, and Manheim! Owyn and the other man were hugging her and kissing her cheek! While Manheim, that cretin, stood waiting for his turn! Well!

So! She loosed all those rodents to help Owyn escape! Fathis was ready to boil.

Fathis tried to drag himself toward the front so he could hear, but the trap was pegged into the ground too deeply.

"Thank you, Manheim." Maxical said, standing on her tiptoes and kissing the man on the jaw.

Three men and she plays them each as if the other weren't there!

His rage gave him the strength to open the jaws of the trap and he healed quickly before sneaking quietly up and leaning against the door. Where was Manheim?

"Umph!" The door swung open with some force and knocked him down.

Fathis was pulling himself up. Manheim! That worm! Fathis almost spat the words but managed to only think them.

Manheim handed a plain jar filled with a clear yellow fluid to Owyn. What was that, some kind of urine sample? Why did Owyn need Manheim's urine? Maybe it was Maxical's! What kind of perverted men are these!

While Fathis tried to picture scenarios that something of this nature might be used he noticed that Maxical was leaving with Owyn and the other man. He quickly put away his conjecture and followed.

Maxical, Owyn, and that other man were walking down the road heading back to the Imperial City. Fathis followed, trying to close in to hear their words.

When they got to the Imperial City they split directions. Owyn went toward the Arena district and the other man walked with Maxical a ways thanking her.

Thanking her for what! I'll bet I know! Fathis was fuming under his breath.

Maxical then went into the Market District, the other man parted company there. Fathis crept up to hear their goodbyes, but was not quick enough. Then Maxical went down to the Best Defense shop and entered.

So, she is after the armor then! Fathis cast dispel on himself, allowing himself to be seen. He charged into the shop behind her.


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I was so glad to have restored Owyn and that guard to their rightful lives, it really bothered me to think what they endured because of my disappearance. Foxy had paid me well, and I was going after my armor. As much as I hated dealing with Maro and Varnado I was glad it would just be this once and I would never have to deal with them again. Manheim and S'Jirra had both confirmed that Fathis once again loved me, had forgiven me. I was going to have that armor when I found Fathis.

When I stepped into the shop I thought the two men's eyes would start from their heads the way they stared at me.

I guess it must be because no one knew I was still alive, they must think they are seeing a ghost.

"I am here for my armor please, I have the funds now." I said, stepping up to the counter.

A sound behind me caused me to swing around, and there stood Fathis!

"Fathis! Oh Fathis!" I cried, running toward him, a huge smile and my arms out to throw myself in his arms.

The expression on his face was not one of love, but of rage! What had I done now? He looked like he may kill me!

I stopped. "Fathis? It is I, Maxical. Manheim told me that you were looking for me. Fathis I have missed you more than I can say! Are you mad at me? What have I done?"

Fathis none too gently grabbed my chin and raised it, staring down into my face. The anger coming from him was palpable. He spoke to me in Khajiit then.

"I understand that I should change the M on that armor for an S." He spat out all the 'S's' as he spoke, his face close to mine.

"I do not understand what you mean. Fathis please, how can you be mad at me, have you not missed me as I have missed you? I thought you had forgiven me!"

"I have evidence that your name is no longer Ma'Thjizzrini Qa; rather it should be S'Thjizzrini Qa! You cannot deny it, I have seen it with my own eyes!" He was still spitting the 'S' sounds.

"What do you mean? What do you mean by calling me S'Thjizzrini Qa? I have taken no husband!" I did not get the implication yet.

"No husband, no. But a lover, and not one but many!" Fathis sniffed the air. "Perfumed up like a doxy too!"

His voice sounded like he hated me. His words stung the joy out of having bathed in scents for the first time in my life. I started to cry.

"It's not true Fathis! That's not true! What are you saying? Who? Who?"

He just looked at me with a knowing leer. "You know who I am talking about!"

"Manheim?" I breathed, "Fathis you have it wrong, there has been no such thing!" Even as I said it I thought of Manheim's kiss and my face flamed red.

"You are lying, even had I not seen you with my own eyes, your face has verified what I say is true!"

I didn't know what he had seen, so felt it best to cover all bases. Surely he would not be this mad over a kiss, so he must know of Manheim seeing me naked.

"There was nothing to that Fathis, you must believe me! I was only disrobed because I was so ill, Manheim was a perfect gentleman, Fathis, I swear this to you!"

Before I could explain about the incident today where I just disrobed long enough to show Manheim it was me Fathis face became infused in purple and steam began to rise off of him. I realized my mistake then, Fathis had not known Manheim had seen me disrobed.

"Fathis, disrobing means nothing! It is done all the time in the presence of others in the Bloodworks! You must believe me there was nothing to it!"

Instead of this news calming him down it seemed to make things worse. There was no calming him at this point, rage had taken over. I pleaded with my eyes that he just hear me, but he took this the wrong way as well.

"You think to plead me into accepting all these other men? It will never happen! Oh, I knew where that blue flag of yours would lead you! First that blue Orc, then that man in the Tiber Septim Hotel, then Manheim, Owyn, who knows how many others!"

My hand flew up to cover my blue flag. I wished I could faint, but the blessed darkness would not come. I would not bite my tongue and hinder my speech though, not this time.

"Agronak? Do you accuse me of being in love with Agronak? When you are the only one I have ever loved? Agronak was my friend! And Foxy is the man I work for! What do you mean by spying on me?" I was getting angry, Fathis didn't read the signs right.

"Friend, is that what they call it now, and I may be the only one you have loved, but it appears I am the only one that hasn't tasted of your love. Have you been selling your favors? Is that how you can afford to buy the golden armor at a price only the very wealthy can afford? Why would you not have come to me first, I would have bought you the armor gladly. I was going to marry you! You could have had all my money to buy all the armor you wanted. At least then you wouldn't have sunk yourself to this trail of men! I don't even know if I could stand the thought after finding out what I have about you!" Fathis shouted. It felt like the rafters shook from it.

I did something I never thought I ever would, I struck the man I have loved since I was a child. I struck him hard across the face, wishing to see him spin from the impact of it. And then I walked out of the Best Defense with my head held high. I was in a rage.

When I stepped out of the shop a crowd had gathered, I guess the shouting had drawn them. They stared at me like I was a ghost or a freak, I wanted to use my 'eye of Khajiit' on them and frighten them like I did when I was a child, but I didn't.

There was a Khajiit in the crowd, they would have understood what humiliating things Fathis said to me, I just prayed they were not from the Black Horse Courier.

I got as far as the Waterfront District before I realized what I had done. I cried then, cried so hard that I couldn't stand. I crawled into the abandoned shack and cried till I made myself ill from it.

At over 2500 words, this is a long one. It is well written and you cover a lot of ground though. I didn't really see a good break point or anything you would have wanted to leave out though. No worries because it works. It flows nicely and makes for a brisk read. Again, your writing is very good. Overall, I think this is a great story!

Fathis?. I used to think he was the smart one. Comparatively, however, Manheim is a genius.

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Given the length of this story, it is wonderfully free of errors. You may want to peek at the bolded words in the following passages, just to verify they are what you want, or perhaps consider minor changes:

'Fathis withdrew his sword.'

'Someone had lay traps to catch game, and Fathis leg was caught!'

'His rage gave him the strength to loose the jaws of the trap and he healed quickly before sneaking quietly up and leaning against the door.'

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Things seem to be tying together very nicely. Many pieces fitting together. But then, as I have said, no one can weave a plot like you can! Wonderful job mALX! :trophy:

Thanks Acadian, I fixed those three places! You are greatly appreciated!!

Well done mALX. :foodndrink:
Male jealousy is like that - it just builds and builds. Like a bottle that is about to explode.
Great to see that you had Fathis move through the city as the pressure continued to rise.
That is the way it does happen.


lol.
Brilliant!!

The first part of the story, I was howling like a loon and going "YEAH -woo-hoo -giggleshort-yukyukyuk!!!"

Even though you outlined it to me beforehand, it was still fricking HILARIOUS from the BEGINNING TO THE END!!!

The next part .. careful, MalX. It's getting close to a parodied cliche of a bodice-ropper chick lit story, with dramatic denunciations and surging emotions and explosive confronatations all around! But the fact that you made Fathis have the sense to denounce her in Khajit, and the scene where she tries to depart with as much dignity as she could, rescue this part from the danger of the melodramatic standard bodice ripper romance story that we see only too often on Amazon and Barnes and Noble and...oh yes...Avon, Mills and Boon, and Harlequin.

(Yes, I read them too. So what!)

Now I see I will have a lot to write to prepare for what you told me about....


OH BY THE WAY....WHAT HAPPENED TO THE (IN) FAMOUS CAT PEE STINK THAT FATHIS WAS SUPPOSED TO BE REEKING OF?? HOW COME NO ONE NOTICED IT???

You are absolutely right, I didn't have anyone notice it - but there is always the tie in, where Fathis has to leave the shop. There really wasn't room for it on this chapter. Harlequin, huh? Lol. Some day you may be asked to explain what a bodice ripper is - not on the thread though, sounds like it may get the thread closed because you may punctuate it with emoticons, etc. - (Just Kiddnig! ROFL). Oh, and yes please - I didn't know if you had not deleted that and was going to send you another copy, lol. - Thanks Foxy, You ROCK !!!!



@ Winter Wolf - I took what you and Treydog said on that one! Of course, it is Fathis so it had to be funny too, lol. Thank you so much!

Fathis finally lost it then? :rofl:

It never occurred to me... Maxical is a little princess right? Her pee doesn't stink, does it? :lmao:

You should have put a NSFW-warning on top!
Not that it kept me from reading it, though :read: It's hard to keep a straight face while reading so that no one gets suspicious

I am so glad you didn't get upset with me for teasing about that - I wrote in Fathis thinking it was Pee as an apology to everyone for my teasing last chapter. Thank you so much for reading and forgiving my teasing about that, lol. !!


@ RemkoNL - I almost choked myself to death the last Foxy chapter because I knew Fathis was stalking her, so Foxy and I were thinking up things she could do that he would see and get mad - I have to give Foxy credit for the idea of the pee on the floor - but then as soon as I write it and after I post it he says "Cat Pee stinks!" - ROFL - Collaborating with Foxy on this story is a ton of fun! Thank you so much for reading, I appreciate you!


@ Acadian - That is exactly what I was going to tell Foxy, but was really afraid he would come back with a bad zinger, lol.

My apologies for not commenting sooner on your most recent update. I find myself simultaneously pleased and saddened- I cannot find it in me to like Fathis... so I am pleased to see him make a fool of himself and show his "true colors" to Maxical. On the other hand (paw?), I am sorry that our cat-girl is hurt and confused.

But then, love is like that.

So does this mean you won't admit to the ETN trick? Lol - just kidding! Thank you so much Treydog!

UPDATE !! - Maxical's Journey - A New Sun Rises is going to a Third Thread! I want to thank everyone who has continued to read Maxical's Journey, you all helped me to better my writing and inspired me to keep going. You ALL ROCK!!


I am placing links below for everyone's convenience to navigate to the chapters:


This thread is the continuation of Maxical's Journey, ( and A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey II ). For those who have not read the earlier chapters and would like to, follow the links below:



For convenience the whole story is posted on FanFiction, here is a link to the story there:

http://www.fanfiction.net/~malx



If you prefer to stay on the forum, here are the links to all previous chapters:


Maxical's Journey - A New Sun Rises - (Chapters 1 - 23)

http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1038084-maxicals-journey/




A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey II - (Chapters 24 - 36)

http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1050778-a-new-sun-rises-maxicals-journey-ii/




A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey III - (Chapters 37 - 50)

http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1056626-a-new-sun-rises-maxicals-journey-iii/




A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey IV - (Chapters 51 - 65)

http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1065146-a-new-sun-rises-maxicals-journey-iv/




A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey V - (Chapters 66 - 85)

http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1071522-a-new-sun-rises-maxicals-journey-v/




A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey VI - (Chapters 86 - ??)


http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1080421-a-new-sun-rises-maxicals-journey-vi/



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Maxical's entire journey has been captured in the picture albums of her Myspace page, if you would like to visit it:

http://www.myspace.com/oblivion_khajiit



* Special thanks to Rumpleteasza for the idea of putting the chapters on separate links - I know my parents will appreciate it!

@ SubRosa - thank you so much for the tips, I fixed those places you told me about! I appreciate you so much for your help on that!

Time to closed this one, but a new one is already up and linked above, I believe.