A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey IV

Post » Tue May 17, 2011 12:28 pm

Ahhh. . . This is mALX at her best! What a wonderful chapter. Suspense, fascinating story, beautifully written.

:whisper: Oh, before I continue, you will be pleased to know, I found nothing by way of editorial gripes to pick on.

I absolutely love how you developed Melisande here - brilliantly done; she MAKES this chapter sing.

Now, changing gears just slightly,

Despite the deliciously dark and mysterious tone, I was delighted to find several wonderful passages that brought a smile:

With a faint smile . . .

Now. . . this is starting to get contagious (are you reading this SubRosa?). -_-


A young lad by the name of Stoker who wanted the cure for himself

:lmao:

Janus turned to the body guard. "Bring me Alix."

I'm sure it is not your intent, but suddenly I am concerned about visions of chubby little vampiric mice running free in the future. . . no longer content to merely sip coffee and eat sweetrolls. :ahhh:
(Now to make sure there is no confusion, I am joking here. Finishing with Alix is, in all seriousness, nothing short of brilliant!)

And, in conclusion, let me add,

Ok, you left us with the perfect cliffhanger. The story satisfied fully and completely, yet nevertheless I am on the edge of my seat anxiously awaiting what happens next. This chapter surely ranks as fine as any you have written.
I am so very proud of you mALX!
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 2:47 am

@ Foxy - Witches Brew Ala Mouse? Thank you so much for stopping by Foxy. I hope you enjoyed at least one day off during the holidays, lol. :whistle: :)


@ Acadian - Lol, had to put Stoker to work. He ate up every bit of food in the Skingrad house and left a mess. I refuse to hire Eyja, so had to send him out to find employment. I am going to start visiting people and making him wait at their houses, I have never seen my Skingrad house bereft of food before! However, seeing as his teeth do remind me of many various rodent species I have had occasion to study or run across - I was not as surprised as one might think. Hmmm. I wonder if he will run out of food and open the barrel in the basemant with the poison apples in it? ROFL!!! When I have to do that quest where you purge the DB I will bring him and sit back and watch with my camera in hand. I have heard that they attack him on sight. (unsure why, is this something all companion mods have happen? I never had one before.)


@ Everyone - I hope everyone has seen Master Po's latest post - it is Awesome!
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 3:52 pm

Stoker....:rofl:
Can't wait for the next post.
I noticed one typo, here:
help you will not try to shame me with any claims of accidents.


I particularly liked this sentence:
You have a wife you want me to cure, and a child you have killed that you say you love. It seems you have a problem with self control."
:goodjob:
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 7:25 am

Malx, I felt right there when you were describing Janus. When Melisande and Travern talked. Way to go!
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 8:11 am

Stoker....:rofl:
Can't wait for the next post.
I noticed one typo, here:
sham



Actually, I thought sham was a universal word. It is possible it is just an American slang word. Here is what "Sham" means here :


Sham = a trick that deludes, a hoax; cheap falseness, hypocrisy; an imitation or counterfeit purporting to be genuine. (The witch was saying that Janus tried to delude her with the words "accident," or "emergency" when the truthful words would have been "murdered" or "killed")

Thank you so much RemkoNL! I appreciate you a lot! I should be more careful when using slang expression, and that may be one - I really don't know if it is or not.







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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 7:14 am

Oh right. Forgot about sham. But since it was a Redoran saying it I thought you might have meant shame.
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 1:57 am

I liked Melisande. I have always liked strong female characters. Looks like she went to the same charm school that Sir Mazoga went to though... :D

I wonder why she is not afraid of Janus? She must be very confident in her own ability to defend herself against him. Something which the Arch-Mage was incapable of doing. Either that or she is very good at putting up a front.


This was nice, so typical to blame the woman:
It was the virginity, had she not been a virgin this never would have happened.


I am glad someone pointed this out too:
You have a wife you want me to cure, and a child you have killed that you say you love. It seems you have a problem with self control.
Yep, Janus is not only an advlterer (or at least he wants to be), but a murderer. I doubt Santa left him any presents last week... ;)


I particularly enjoyed reading this:
Melisande worked with a spry grace
It is very simple and compact, yet evokes a powerful image in one's mind.


Oh, and a sham is also a thing that goes on your pillow... :D


Some small things you might want to look at:

Janus's body guard
Maybe make that bodyguard?


This might read a little clearer is you add in a "for"
Are you the one that has been seeking a cure for vampirism for so long?"


I am not sure if you meant this to come out this way:
You put yourself there with her knowing your circumstances and knowing hers.

Did you mean something more like:
You put yourself there knowing your circumstances and hers.
or perhaps with just an extra comma:
You put yourself there with her, knowing your circumstances and knowing hers.


Perhaps you could add a little phrase in here showing Melisande holding the bottle with the vampire cure?
"Research costs Septims, as you of all people should know. But here is your cure." The witch produced a small vial of pink liquid and held it up to the bars. "I was lucky enough to find an assistant willing to gather the ingredients needed from all over Tamriel and Oblivion. A young lad by the name of Stoker who wanted the cure for himself and was willing to work for it. Or should I just hand this over to Hassildor?"

And yes, brilliant making the young lad's name Stoker! :D


This sounds a bit odd:
"I want my blood that she cannot die once reanimated."

Perhaps saying this would be more clear:
"I want her to have my blood that she cannot die once reanimated."
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 2:44 pm

I liked Melisande. I have always liked strong female characters. - Me too. I grew up loving Joan of Arc

I wonder why she is not afraid of Janus? She must be very confident in her own ability to defend herself against him. Something which the Arch-Mage was incapable of doing. Either that or she is very good at putting up a front.

On this I felt it important to make the destinction. Traven has to keep a good relationship going with Janus because of their political offices - that is Lore. Traven is always trying to find out Janus's stand without offending him. It is imperative the Mages Guild have a good relationship with the Count Skingrad, they have a large chapter in that city, and Janus has a lot of political power that could hurt Traven if he chose to use it against him.

Melisande on the other hand lives off in the wilderness of the Carbalo river. She has to answer to no one, and cares nothing for either of their political positions - only what will line her pocket with Septims, and her own love of researching cures for diseases. She does not need either of them, only their money, which could just as easily come from any other source.



This was nice, so typical to blame the woman:
It was the virginity, had she not been a virgin this never would have happened. Yes, for some odd reason I found that apropos myself, lol.


I am glad someone pointed this out too:
You have a wife you want me to cure, and a child you have killed that you say you love. It seems you have a problem with self control. Yep, Janus is not only an advlterer (or at least he wants to be), but a murderer. I doubt Santa left him any presents last week... ;) - I love it when someone puts a blunt name to actions, lol. Melisande was the perfect candidate to do it !!


I particularly enjoyed reading this:
Melisande worked with a spry grace
It is very simple and compact, yet evokes a powerful image in one's mind. I studied Melisande for this role, and was extremely drawn to her beauty at such an age, and her energy that belied what her obvious age must be



** Fixed all - great catches and cures, thank you so much! I really appreciate that, seeing the forest when there are so many trees in the way is really hard sometimes !!! You ROCK !!! Thanks SubRosa !!

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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 9:39 am

On this I felt it important to make the destinction. Traven has to keep a good relationship going with Janus because of their political offices - that is Lore. Traven is always trying to find out Janus's stand without offending him. It is imperative the Mages Guild have a good relationship with the Count Skingrad, they have a large chapter in that city, and Janus has a lot of political power that could hurt Traven if he chose to use it against him.


Or Traven could let slip that Janus is a vampire, and he will no longer be the Count of Skingrad. Not to mention he will be hunted across Tamriel.
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 9:05 am

Or Traven could let slip that Janus is a vampire, and he will no longer be the Count of Skingrad. Not to mention he will be hunted across Tamriel.



I think Janus and Traven are both scared of eachother, but Melisande has no reason to fear either. Neither can hurt her. Traven would have to get out of the cell to tell anyone at this point.
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 10:26 am

my friends at the Pentridge Prison in Melbourne

I assume you are referring to the old commissioned site that has been turned into apartments, and not some criminal connection you have to my city. :ninja: :lol:

I loved this chapter mALX. :thumbsup: Such a perfect cliffhanger finish. Awesome !!
Melisande really carried the show, didn't she?? The way she paid out on everybody was definitely worth the price of admission.

"I take it these two are here for the blood we will require?"

Magnificent. :rofl:
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 2:47 am

I assume you are referring to the old commissioned site that has been turned into apartments, and not some criminal connection you have to my city. :ninja: :lol:

I loved this chapter mALX. :thumbsup: Such a perfect cliffhanger finish. Awesome !!
Melisande really carried the show, didn't she?? The way she paid out on everybody was definitely worth the price of admission.


Magnificent. :rofl:




ROFL - yes, I am sure. You can see places in the pics where it looks like it used to be a prison, but is well empty of prisoners now, lol. Melisande seems to have taken over my keyboard, and I find I really like her! I appreciate you so much!!
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 12:10 am

I have been saving this one for the last day of my time off; I wanted something that would sustain me as the thought of w-, wor-, I can't say it... looms.

And my restraint has been rewarded. This chapter is brilliant in every way. You introduce a new character and make her come to life immediately. We learn much about her as the narrative flows at its usual breakneck pace.... And you make it look easy.

And my sins of cliff-rac... cliff-hanging come back to haunt me once again!

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Although I am a trained computer tech, you may not want me near any stoves (the Kitchen is on Fire Incident), shrubs or trees to be planted (the Broken Cola Bottle and Right Hand Incident), or cat food cans (the Same Place on the Same Hand- on the Day of My Father's Funeral Incident). As to fireworks, we aren't going to talk about that. (Except to say this- for those who may not know, for East Tennesseans, fireworks are next to God, guns, and NASCAR as a religious totem). Or to put it as Jeff Foxworthy did: "If your last words were, " 'ey! Watch 'is!' You might have been ..."

Now enough spamming from me. Thank you for giving us this wonderful addition to your story.
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 8:20 am

Oh. My.

Well, didn't this just take a sharp turn into "wtf is going on now :ahhh: " territory.

Very interesting stuff you are doing, Mal.
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 7:59 am

@ RemkoNL - I did not know she was of House Redoran! I never found that in the Lore, but as you know have not played the earlier TES games. - Sorry about that. I meant "sham" but if you think I should use a better word that means the same thing there, I will look one up in Roget's - the meaning of what she was saying is the important thing, and "shame" would alter that. Argh! I thought "sham" was a universal word, but it is very possible it is a slang expression that has been added to our dictionary. Argh!

Thank you so much RemkoNL!!

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@ Treydog - Uh Oh! "Breakneck pace" - am I racing the story? Is my pace too fast? Oh dear. Bleah! I better PM you to death and find out if I need to slow the pace! I will begin as soon as I post this!

Yes, the wo-wor is looming - gaaah!

Treydog, you are Awesome, and so appreciated! I really needed to PM you on another subject entirely, but will add the above (Er..Er..Er - flashing lights - Warning: Huge favor about to be asked along with groveling and pleading!)

Thank you so much Treydog, and I am worried about my pace now. Oh dear.

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@ Leydenne - Yeah !!! You are back from vacation!! I hope you had an Awesome time! Yes, see what happens when you go away? Thank you so much, and it is GREAT to have you back!!



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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 4:53 am

@ EVERYONE - I got all the screenshots (so far) of Maxical's recovery posted on the Myspace (Link in my signature) - click on "Pics" underneath Maxical's profile pic - it is the very last photo album. It will give you a bit of an idea what she will be going through as she comes back to life.



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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 1:05 pm

Oh dear. I fear my word choice has again been less than felicitous. The pacing was perfect- I simply meant that reading it was a suspension of time- I had no sense of any OST (Outside-Story-Time) passing. And that was because the pacing and the immersion were perfect. Bad doggie! Watch your word choice! :P
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 4:58 am

I paid a visit to Maxical's myspace. And almost fell over when I saw how fat Alix now looks.

I do hope Janus has told his bodyguard to fetch a wheelbarrow, otherwise Alix might never make it. :rofl:
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I paid a visit to Maxical's myspace. And almost fell over when I saw how fat Alix now looks.

I do hope Janus has told his bodyguard to fetch a wheelbarrow, otherwise Alix might never make it. :rofl:



ROFL !!! Yes, since Maxical is ill (or dead) and Janus has taken over the care of him, Alix has been getting into eating sweetrolls again it seems, lol.



Oh I am so tickled someone checked it out! What did you think about the way I have Maxical's eyes reflecting her various stages of illness? I had the black eyes for when she first comes back to life, then red for when she is a full vampire. As her own blood supply takes over her eyes get lighter and lighter, till they are eventually gray again. If I can get back on there (since the PC game crashed the other day) I have fixed up her recovery chamber and will get more screenshots. Thank you so much for checking that out!!! I was hoping to get some feedback on what I did with her eyes, lol.



@ Treydog - WHEW !!!!!! I am so glad! I know I have a history of racing the storyline, so when you said that I had an immediate guilt reaction, lol !!! Thanks so much Treydog!!!
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 4:24 am

I was hoping to get some feedback on what I did with her eyes, lol.


Oh, I checked out your site as soon as you posted about it. I just didn't want to spam your thread. :)

Since you directly ask however. . .

Yes, it is a little bit subtle, but her eyes clearly seem to change from closed, to black, to kind of hazel or perhaps yellowish, to red. :goodjob:
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Oh I am so tickled someone checked it out! What did you think about the way I have Maxical's eyes reflecting her various stages of illness? I had the black eyes for when she first comes back to life, then red for when she is a full vampire. As her own blood supply takes over her eyes get lighter and lighter, till they are eventually gray again. If I can get back on there (since the PC game crashed the other day) I have fixed up her recovery chamber and will get more screenshots. Thank you so much for checking that out!!! I was hoping to get some feedback on what I did with her eyes, lol.


I was wondering why her eyes were going from grey to black to purple to violet to gold to green!
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Happy (belated) New Year mALX, and congratulations on a fourth thread!

@ EVERYONE - One of the glitches in my 360 game is that she keeps dying shortly after a battle, but when her health (etc.) is not down enough for her to die - then she somehow miraculously pops back up - no loading screens, and no reasons for her death. Every place she dies (or has a near death) in the story - it has happened in the game. If she has it happen at the battle scene I can say it was caused by that.

This latest time the glitch happened well after the battle, so I had a hard time tying it in to the story. Even worse, she went down and stayed down, but the game did not stop. She kept laying there while everything continued around her. It is weird, and has put a kink in my story, lol. I had to re-load a save to get her up, and as soon as I got her into Castle Skingrad she went down again, staying down while the game kept going. I keep having to re-load saves to play right now.

Because I couldn't get her to stay back up more than a few minutes, she has technically died in the story - but because I can still get her back up by loading previous saves she will be brought back to life. It has pressed me to delve into Lore trying to find a way to do it. I am playing with the game and trying to get her to stay up more than a few minutes at a time (and cleaning my cache, etc.) - meanwhile I think it added an interesting twist to the story, even if it is a bit dark.

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This sounds like one of those 'happy accidents' by which we all benefit. Sort of like Spielberg not being able to get the mechanical shark to work during the filming of Jaws. The fact that you have taken this glitch and weaved it into so thoroughly engrossing a storyline as this is simply amazing. :clap:
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 3:37 am

jeeze mALX1, you write so much. I figured i would return the courtesy by reading your story, so far im on chapter 5, i like it so far and thought the letters home while in the Arcane was quite humorous. But you write so much that chapters 5 and 6 alone would be considered a fullscale novel in its self, i will try to get more reading done, but its definately a good read, i cant wait to see how much the writing style has developed
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Post » Tue May 17, 2011 1:17 am

@ Acadian - the closed eyes was a miss-timed screenshot, but it was so perfect for what she is going to be going through that I made it the album cover for that photo album - it just looked so perfect as someone who is really ill - it is one of my faves in the album. If you click on the first pic and then keep hitting "Next" you can watch the progression of her eyes and see the first time they turn red, it is very powerful because she has them half shut and then opens them wide and they are very red.

I was surprised I got so few red-eye shots, if I can get my PC game back up I plan to add more of them. Also, I have re-furnished the loft and will try to get more pics in there. Maybe try to add some lights so the pics come out easier to see.

You are so appreciated Acadian, thank you so much for all your support and help!!

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@ SubRosa - Using Maxical's eyes to detail her illness actually came from an idea I got from a discussion you and I had about a month ago. I mentioned it in passing at the time, but the idea took hold when all this came up.

I hoped to retain the parameter of a familiar Cyrodiil and Lore, but never wanted my story to be a linear parallel to the game. I have failed in that if it is coming across as parallel, and will triple my efforts to fix that. I appreciate you more than I can say for all the help you give, you are Awesome!

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@ Destri Melarg - Yeah! You are back, and you have been missed! I hope your holiday season was Awesome (since you slipped out before I could wish you a great one) and happy belated New Year! Thank you for the congrats and kind words!

Now I am curious about the shark, I think I do remember something along those lines after Jaws came out but can't remember exactly what it was.

I took my son to Universal Studios when he was about 3 years old (he will be 18 this year) - and when Jaws popped up out of the water and attacked the boat we were in my son leapt on the man next to him and clawed him to ribbons, the man's neck was bleeding, his shirt torn, and I doubt he was ever able to reproduce after the incident. Sometimes "I am sorry" just doesn't cover...

One thing I really like about forcing myself to stick with the variences of the actual game I am playing, and it based on a glitched game - it takes the control of the story line out of my hands. I can have all the plans in the world for my character and 10 chapters written ahead (which I did) - and the game can mock me by throwing me a curve ball and making me scramble to re-write and accomodate the changes caused by the glitch.

It is an exciting challenge just because it is out of my control - unexpected. It forces me to use every bit of oomph I can muster to create a story on the spur of the moment that was not planned the day before, and then try and weave that new plot into the story and tie it together.

Thank you again, I appreciate your support so much!

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@ DanceAlexDance - Well, I can guarantee my writing does improve, thanks to all the great help from the critiques, lol. Sorry about the length of it, but I do hope you get to read through it. There are some Awesome storylines coming up, you have probably gone through the slowest reading parts already (hopefully, lol). Thank you so much for reading my story, it means a lot to me when someone likes it!



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Chapter 53: Alix And The Witch


Marie shrank against Hannibal as the bodyguard entered carrying Alix in his hands.

"What is that?" Melisande asked, eyeing the beast.

"That is Alix, her pet mouse. He means more to her than anything." Janus said, taking Alix from the bodyguard and placing him on his shoulder.

Alix began making a sad yowling and was eyeing the slab where Maxical's body lay. Janus kissed him and rubbed his belly, but Alix continued his crying sounds.

"Unless you want me to boil the mouse, you will have to bring me something else she cares deeply about." Melisande said, reaching for Alix.

Janus drew back. "No, you can't hurt Alix. We must find something else then. There was a dagger that meant a lot to her, it is at her parents home."

Hannibal came forward then. "Yes, the dagger, it has always meant a lot to her, and she held it often. I don't believe she has touched it in around two years though. Would that make a difference?"

"No, that will be fine. I must have that dagger." Melisande spoke distractedly, watching Alix's attempts to reach Maxical.

Suddenly Alix launched off Janus's shoulder and landed on the slab. With crying noises he sniffed Maxical all over, finally standing on his hind legs before her face and placing his front paws on her cheeks he sniffed her gaped mouth. His nose seemed to be searching for a scent as he waved it in the air above her.

"He knows she is not there. He is searching for her. Seeking her soul." Melisande almost whispered. "We need this mouse, and you must come as well Janus. Leave your bodyguard to watch these two and come with me. This mouse will be invaluable in finding her soul."

Melisande gathered up a few things and placed them in a travel pack, then carefully keeping her back to Traven she pulled a large black soul gem from a case and slipped it into a soft leather pouch. Gingerly and with great care she placed the pouch against her heart inside the cup of her bra. "Come, we have a long trip in front of us."

"But I am a vampire, I cannot go out, certainly not in daylight." Janus drew back.

"You are an Immortal, what are you afraid of? It may burn but will not kill you. I will need your help, and that mouse as well. Do you want the child to live or not?"

"I will get my cloak." Janus said, glancing meaningfully at the bodyguard, who ran for the cloak.

When Janus pulled the cloak around him Alix began squealing loudly and clawing at the front of the cloak where a dark rusty stain cut a jagged path across from below his right shoulder down into a pattern of smeared crusts.

"Is that her blood?" Melisande asked, her voice cutting across Alix's squeals and silencing him. Alix sat up and looked at her.

"Yes." Janus barely whispered.

"Give me that cloak. You will have to find some other way to cover yourself." Melisande took the cloak with great care, folding it so the stain was contained within its folds, and pushed it down into her pack.

"I have nothing else. I care not for my comfort though, only that we do whatever is necessary as quickly as possible." Janus said, the frustration of all these delays giving an edge to his voice.

"It is not speed you want now Janus, you want this done right, do you not?" Melisande's eyes pierced into his cowl and he was sure she could see him regardless of its cover.

"No! I want her alive first! We can work on making things correct later. These delays are driving me mad, each second she lays there in that pose is an eternity of guilt of what I have put her through. Can we not dispense with everything else for right now and just bring her back? Then cast some incantations over her later to set things right?" Janus's voice was raw with emotions, but did not move Melisande.

"Your emotional outbursts are nothing more than your own desire to sop your guilt. Whether we return this child to life or not, you have still killed an innocent. The stain on your soul for that will never be removed from you, do you realize that?" Still her eyes ravaged his as if his cowl was not even on.

Involuntarily Janus reached up and touched the cowl to be sure of its presence.

"I know. It will haunt me the rest of eternity. She must be brought back to life, for I cannot face it with this act on my conscience. I would gladly welcome death, but know I have no hope of it.

It was amazing how she could say the most cruel things yet her voice remain soft and pleasant. Janus thought of how Maxical would have found Melisande's voice pleasing. How he missed hearing her thoughts.

Janus looked up at Melisande again to see one of her mobile eyebrows raised, as if in surprise.

"Aye, you will want this done correctly Janus. You will want her back the way she was, not a vacant shell. Alix, will you come to me then?" Melisande held out her arm.

Alix leapt off Janus's shoulder and landed on Melisande's outstretched arm, scurrying up till he sat on her shoulder.

"You are a fine friend Alix. We must find Maxical's soul, will you help us then?" Melisande opened up a briast pocket and Alix crawled in, then poked his head out, sniffing at the air.

Melisande took Janus's hands in each of hers and looked into his cowl, searing his eyes with the look that penetrated the darkness of it. She began to chant words which Janus did not recognize, although in his years of isolation he had studied all known languages of Tamriel. Her final word was clear and loud, and sent a chill down Janus's spine.

"Murkwood!"

The room started spinning around Janus, a terrible damp chill swirled around him till it felt like his bones lay in an icy grave. He held on to consciousness by sheer willpower, his eyes showing terror as Melisande's bore into them.

When the spinning stopped he found himself in what seemed at first a forest of black, yet the trees moved eerily in the thick fog of the marsh or bog in which they appeared to be planted in; yet beneath his feet he could feel the movement of their roots, slithering below him like hundreds of snakes in constant motion. The smell of decay was overpowering to his sensitive nose; rotting flesh, rotting vegetation. Moans and crying sounds came faintly to his ears; at first he thought it was the wind blowing between the branches that caused the sound, but there was no wind rustling the branches. No wind, yet they moved somehow. He sharpened his hearing to the cries and found them to be echoing of voices; the lost crying to be found.

Janus opened his mouth to speak, but Melisande silenced him immediately by covering his mouth with her clammy hand. She placed a finger to her lips to indicate he remain silent, and began to lead the way through the maze of trees toward the voices.

Janus found his feet sliding on the black and green slime that covered the rocks, and each time he broke the goo with his shoes a raunchy smell would billow up from it, like breaking open a rotting body. His stomach began lurching up into his throat. He grabbed the hedgerow next to him that seemed to form a maze-like path through the area; trying to use it for support, but it came to life in his hands grabbing him back. With almost a yell Janus jerked his hand back.

Melisande pulled Alix out of her pocket. His nose was waving in circles, his whiskers beating the air with their twitching. He pointed his nose toward the darkest part of the forest. Melisande placed him back in her pocket and turned toward Janus.

"Can you protect yourself from paralysis? What about shock? You will need a fire shield as well, especially with your condition. You will need to be armed with spells and a weapon. Tell me what you lack and I will give it." Melisande conjured a weapon and armor onto herself.

"What exactly are we looking at fighting?" Janus had never actually had to use the fighting techniques he had trained in right after the attack on himself and Rona.

Although he was combat trained, this would be his first actual battle. Janus felt the tension in his stomach and sweat began to break out on his brow, partially from remembering the only time in his life he had fought and lost both himself and Rona.

"Fire Daemon and Medusa. The Medusa attack in pairs. One will paralyze you while the other kills you, usually with shock. If you cannot fight off paralysis I will give you a spell, don't wait till you hear or see them to use it, it will be too late if you do. If she has wandered down below we will face some horrible monsters trying to find her. Let us just hope she is still up here." Melisande saw the tension in Janus's stance and the slight tremor in his hand as he drew his weapon. "How long has it been since you were in an actual battle Janus?" Her voice was soft and held no derision.

"Only once, over 50 years ago. That is when Rona and I got the vampirism. I couldn't protect her, or myself then. I trained afterwards for combat, but have never used it yet." Janus felt ashamed to admit it, and it could be heard in his voice.

"You isolated yourself. Was that for your own protection or that of others you may harm?"

"Both."

Melisande gave a long sigh. Then she pulled two of her rings off and handed them to Janus. "Put these on, and this too." She pulled an amulet off her neck and slipped it over Janus's head. "This ring gives you vitality, you cannot be paralyzed or poisoned, nor catch disease, although you already have that protection naturally due to your vampirism. This other ring will give you minimal protection from the elements of fire, shock, and frost. The amulet will absorb a small percentage of the spells you are hit with, which may help."

"I can't, you will need these for your own protection. Don't forget I can't be killed." Janus tried to hand them back.

"I have my spells, and am a combat veteran. You will do me no protection if you are paralyzed. I need you to watch my back as much as I need to watch yours. We must be quiet when we go into those woods, it is best to sneak if possible. Alix will show us where she is."

With nerves so taut they felt like bands that may snap at any second, Janus followed Melisande into the dark woods, the fog so thick he was barely able to see her in front of him. His senses were honed for any sound or vibration, and when he felt something ahead he grabbed Melisande's shoulder and held her back. Without speaking he pointed to where he had heard the slightest breath ahead of him.
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