A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey VI

Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 7:38 pm

A New Sun Rises (Maxical's Journey) is now on its Sixth Thread! I want to thank everyone that has been reading through (I, II, III, IV and V); you all helped me to better my writing and inspired me to keep going. It means a lot to me that you read and care about Maxical, I could never thank you enough for that! You ALL ROCK!!




* My inspiration for Maxical's Journey came from three special people.

Acadian, who I almost forced onto the FF forum with his "Buffy The Bowgirl" - for downright pushing me into writing and posting it.

Bobg and his "Angel" who brought to life a story that never existed before and set it in a world I knew - he showed me what could be, not what was. Bobg taught me more than I could say or he could ever realize, he is and always will be my Master Po.

Arwen, who wrote Arwen's Journal against all odds, inspiring so many with her sheer determination and awing us all with her personality.



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As most of you know, this story was being written off a very glitched game on the 360. I could have restarted the game then and re-did the whole, but kind of liked the idea of writing it off a glitched game - I never knew what was going to happen to her this way.

I set up a PC game to take screenshots of her to add to the story. (All her screenshots can be seen on her Myspace page linked below and in my signature).

In December 2009 the game began having fatal crashing, but I was able to keep bringing it up for 2-10 minutes at a time. This had to reflect in the story, so Maxical died...or did she? Because I could still bring her up I had to try and resurrect her. In January 2010 the 360 game had its last fatal crash, it black-screened entirely.

I had too much research into bringing her back to life again, and was very excited about what I found - so the story is continuing, but is no longer being written off the game. I think it added an interesting twist to the story, even if it is a bit dark.



I really hope you enjoy reading it as much as I have writing it!


** Just thought I'd let everyone know, February broke the record with 2492 views (on a 28 day month!) on the FanFiction site I post this story on. So far the chapter that has brought in the highest viewer count is "The Purification" - yes, Eyja's rampage! Thank you all, you all are Awesome!



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Maxical's entire journey has been captured in the picture albums of her Myspace page, if you would like to visit it:

http://www.myspace.com/oblivion_khajiit




This thread is the continuation of A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Journey V. For those who have not read the earlier chapters and would like to, I have the links posted below for your convenience:




For convenience the whole story is posted on FanFiction, here is a link to the story there:

http://www.fanfiction.net/~malx



If you prefer to stay on the forum, here are the links to all previous chapters:



http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1038084-maxicals-



http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1050778-a-new-sun-




http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1056626-a-new-sun-




http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1065146-a-new-sun-




http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1071522-a-new-sun-




http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/1080421-a-new-sun-




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Coming Soon! Chapter 86 !!


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Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 10:46 pm

And if it doesn't come soon, I will have a case of blue b-

**DFOXY was gagged and choloroformed by the respectability police, who were completely expecting this**
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Ah...New Topic smell...Now all we need is a fresh chapter.
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Congratulations mALX! Thread SIX!!!!

Who'd a thunk it when we started?!? As always, I am so very proud of you; what a wonderful talent you have. :celebration:

:wub: Awww. Thank you for the wonderfully kind words in your intro post!

Onward we go! You have a kit to awaken. Lead on mALX!
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Chapter 86: The Resurrection


Dawn would have been breaking by now, but the sky remained darkened by the massive black cloud that converged on Skingrad from all corners of Cyrodiil. Each lightning strike within revealed a blood red mass enfolded in the thickness of the billowing ebony that blanketed Cyrodiil the whole day of the Old Life.

At the center of the phenomenon Skingrad Castle was battered by a powerful cyclical wind that reached up into the cosmos in a huge funnel. Although the high walls of the castle and heavy iron-bolted gate kept anyone from entering the castle grounds, a crowd of people had gathered around the castle chanting in unison "As Mournhold fell, so will Cyrodiil!" The funneling wind svcked the sound of their chants up into it, carrying the voices into the massive void above.

Lord Kagrenac held the dried sliver of Lorkhan's Heart shouting an unintelligible incantation in Dwemer, his voice booming over the roaring wind. He placed the tiny remnant under Maxical's tongue, pushing her mouth closed around it.

Raising his staff high over the body of Maxical he smashed the soul gem, his deep voice intoning commands. A powerful surge of energy rose from his staff and surrounded the body of the tiny Khajiit, and a silvery mist trailed out of the soul gem and joined with the field of glowing ectoplasm that enveloped her.

The eddying cloud accelerated its velocity till Janus feared the castle would be svcked up into it, and then suddenly a blinding light appeared at the top of the swirling vortex. A beam of it shot down through the center and lit the slab that held Maxical.

"Oh please, Clavicus Vile." Janus whispered.

The words had no more left his lips than a bolt of lightning raced down the funnel cloud and struck the body, throwing all that stood around it across the yard. When they scrambled up and hurried forward the slab that had held Maxical was empty.

Frantically Janus dug his arms down into the cauldron, thinking she had fallen into it. The steaming concoction seared his arms; Maxical was not in the vat. He screamed her name, then called for the others to search for her, thinking she had been thrown out into the courtyard as they had been.

Divayth Fyr grabbed Janus by the shoulder and pointed up, indicating that she had been taken up into the sky.

"What's happening?" Janus screamed to be heard over the roaring wind.

Lord Kagrenac signaled Melisande to get ready, then glared at Janus sternly. Janus fought to get himself under control, healing his arms.

A rushing sound flew down the tunnel of wind and exploded over the cauldron, then suddenly the whole courtyard was bathed in blue light, and Maxical was laying on the slab again.

It seemed like everything after that moved in slow motion, as if time stood still. There was complete silence, the air did not move. Every motion and expression seemed etched in Janus's mind, each minute fraction logged there for eternity. Lord Kagrenac's mouth moved in contortions of speech, but no sound came out. It felt like time had warped and they stood in a void of nonexistence.

Lord Kagrenac signaled Melisande to use the Staff of Worms. Janus watched as the beam of purple surrounded the limp form of Maxical, raising her up and contrasting the blue light surrounding her from above. Janus hand slowly raised to touch the light, Divayth Fyr's somehow caught his and pulled it back in.

A tear lay heavily on his lash, and it took forever for Janus's hand to reach his eye to wipe it. The drop rolled slowly across his finger and dropped, but hung suspended in the air instead of falling.

The silence of that moment was followed by a vacuum of wind that svcked the blue light back up the funnel with such a loud sound that Janus pushed his hands tightly against his ears. He stared at Maxical for signs of life, straining to see if her chest rose and fell, but there was nothing. He tried to yell for the blue light to come back, she was not alive yet, but the words svcked from his mouth so fast he could not even hear them himself.

Janus tried to run over to Maxical but couldn't seem to move, as if his body was paralyzed. Just then a roaring sound was heard coming from the sky that pulsed down, breaking apart the funnel cloud and knocking the group around the cauldron to the ground with a tremendous force. The air was pushed from Janus's lungs as it impacted him.

Janus struggled to crawl against the intense pressure to the slab. Divayth Fyr was trying to stop him, reaching to catch his leg. Janus forced his hand up and took hold of Maxical's stiff one, squeezing it tightly.

Slowly the sound went away, the pressure dissipated. Daylight broke through the gap where the funnel cloud had been; but the rest of the sky remained under the heavy black cloud.

Maxical was not moving, and Janus's skin began bubbling from the sunlight that streamed through the gap in the clouds. His anguish was not nearly as much from that as from the pain that the resurrection had failed.

Unable to stand the burning, Janus grabbed up Maxical in his arms and ran into the castle. Laying her on the bed, he sank down on the floor and cried for the futility of all their efforts, for having taken life from her and not being able to give it back.

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Sage Vardengroet stared down into the vat. In the center of the vat floated one of the bottles used earlier. Blood was traveling rapidly from the bottle, moving across the surface of the boiling concoction to where the blood from Janus's arm floated. The blood from the bottle appeared to be attacking and devouring the other. "Dear gods," he whispered, then looked up at the doorway Janus had just run through carrying Maxical.

He ran then, following the route Janus had taken into the castle, followed by Lord Kagrenac and Divayth Fyr. They pushed Janus aside and began doing healing on Maxical, the three of them. Realizing what they were doing, Janus joined them. Melisande stood by the door, an odd look on her face.

Barbas had been laying on the carpet near the bed watching, when suddenly he jumped up onto the bed, landing on Maxical's chest with a tremendous thump. He barked into her face and leapt off, as everyone yelled at him to get down.

"Everyone out, and take the dog out too." Sage Vardengroet ordered. "Shut the door behind you!" He pulled the Sky Child from Maxical's chest and handed it to Janus.

"I'm not leaving!" Janus insisted, but Divayth Fyr pulled him out.

"Let him do his magic." Divayth reasoned with Janus, pulling him to the door.

Janus called Barbas and Lord Kagrenac pulled the door shut; Janus stared through the crack of the door till the last hint of light was sealed and the latch clicked into place. He buried his face in Barbas's fur and begged him to ask Clavicus Vile to help Maxical. Lord Kagrenac pulled Janus to his feet.

"Are you sure your wish was clear during the ritual? You didn't have any hesitation about this?" He demanded.

"None! I swear this to you!" Janus pumped his hand over his heart and held up his open palm to him.

Lord Kagrenac nodded, then looked around. "Where is the witch?"

Janus looked around for her, then noticed Barbas was gone. "Where is Barbas?" He asked.

Just then the door of Janus's suite opened and Sage Vardengroet emerged. His face looked grim.

"She is in a coma, and only breathing with the help of Clavicus Vile. He and Shivani are in with her now. I couldn't bring her back, he did. "You two, Janus and Divayth; come with me right away."

They followed him back outside to the cauldron. "Both of you hold your hand out here." He said gruffly.

They did, and he pushed them together. Drawing a dagger he slashed a minute cut across both their hands and squeezed the blood out into the vat. He leaned over and carefully watched. The blood intermingled with no problems.

"Who else's blood was in those bottles?" Sage Vardengroet demanded.

"Just mine and Master Divayth's." Janus answered. "Melisande, you took no blood from Traven or Marie, did you?"

Melisande shook her head no. Janus noticed she had Maxical's silver dagger and took it from her.

"What about those chanters outside the castle? Could they have sent a distraction to the ritual?" Janus asked. Their voices could be clearly heard now, as they were still chanting.

"No. Tainted blood was used." Sage Vardengroet gathered up the bottles from the ground and one by one dropped them into the vat. One of the bottles he dropped in had an immediate reaction, the blood left the bottle and sought out the other blood floating in the vat. Once again it attacked and devoured it.

"What just happened?" Janus asked, staring at the carnage.

"Somehow another's blood has been slipped into these bottles. Someone whose blood conflicts, wars with your blood and Divayth's blood."

"It would have to be Traven! He was against us doing this ceremony. The blood was stored near his cell, he could have put something in it!" Melisande spoke up. "You should have disposed of him a long time ago, Janus. He has long since served his purpose."

Janus stared at her in disbelief, then turned back to Sage Vardengroet. "What can we do to fix this? There must be some way!"

"I need time to think. Janus, send Kagrenac down. Go ask Shivani or Clavicus Vile if you may be in with Maxical. Divayth, we need to discuss this." Sage Vardengroet said, not taking his eyes off the blood in the vat.

Divayth slapped Janus gently on the shoulder. "She will be your mother-in-law, you better face her now and get it over with. She deserves the right to say her piece to you if that is what she wants."

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Janus's stomach twisted in knots as he walked up to the suite. He entered the room, staying in the doorway and tried to see Maxical from there.

"I swear boy, you are more entertaining by the day. If you aren't fainting or praying to die, you're vomiting and crying. I'm surprised Barbas hasn't begged to come home, but he says you feed him well."

Janus looked over at Shivani, and she turned away from him and went back to looking at Maxical.

"You've got him shaking in his boots, Shivani!" Clavicus Vile said, then pounded Janus on his shoulder. "Go get your just deserts vampire."

Janus worked his way over to the bed and looked down at Maxical. She lay perfectly still, seemed to be breathing oddly, and with an extreme effort. A large darkened vein rose out of the center of her forehead, causing her brow to be ridged and furrowed. Her hair and fur were stiff and appeared dry as straw. He started to reach his hand down and Shivani stopped him.

"She goes into horrible seizures if you touch her." Shivani said quietly, her voice emotionless.

"Her breathing sounds?funny." Janus whispered.

"Clavicus is breathing for her. She is not breathing on her own." She said softly in her cultured voice.

"What does she need? Is there something we didn't do right?" Janus was beginning to feel faint.

Darkness hedged in around his vision and his knees began sinking below him. The floor seemed to rise up and then everything went black.

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"Has that vampire fainted again? I can't breathe for both of them, have those others get him out of here." Clavicus Vile snorted.

Shivani retrieved Lord Kagrenac and Divayth Fyr from the courtyard. Each grabbed an arm and dragged Janus back out to the hallway.

"What happened?" Divayth Fyr asked, pulling the limp form of Janus out of the room.

"I think the mother decked him." Lord Kagrenac said, shaking his head.



Cyclical funnel over castle skingrad

http://www.gdargaud.net/Climbing/Utah/StarRotation.jpg

Cloud converging on Cyrodiil:

http://www.islandnet.com/~see/weather/graphics/photos0708/noctilucent070706-06%20small.jpg


The next day:

http://www.islandnet.com/~see/weather/graphics/photos/crepuscularray1.jpg


Skingrad castle phenomenon the night of the ceremony:

http://www.islandnet.com/~see/weather/graphics/photos0506/nasaredsprite.jpg

Maxical being taken up into the air:

http://www.islandnet.com/~see/weather/graphics/photos0506/glory-aircraft.jpg

What was happening above the great cloud:

http://www.islandnet.com/~see/weather/graphics/photos/pillar3.jpg

What the chanters could see:

http://www.islandnet.com/~see/weather/graphics/photos/noaasundog2.jpg

Castle Skingrad the night of the ceremony:

http://i249.photobucket.com/albums/gg232/henk_024/castle/dark-3.jpg



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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 5:16 am

All this scene needs is to have some THUNDEROUS Wagner playing in the background!!!

:bowdown:

All hail MalX1, the Empress of Over-the-top Opera!!!

(Seriously, it was a good chapter for all that, because the way this scene has been building up, there is no other way that OTT to play it!!!)
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 11:07 am

Huh? It didn't work?

DIDN'T THESE IDIOTS THINK TO TYPE AND CROSSMATCH BLOOD FIRST?????

Dexamethasone and diphenhydramine STAT!

Seriously, I loved it! Great write!

Oh, and it's Melisande's blood that's inimical!
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Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 10:26 pm

:read: This was well and powerfully written.

Yes, my thoughts were that the witch's blood was the problem also.

Nirn moved and Maxical lives. Well, sort of with the help of her Daedric breathing device.

WONDERFUL job mALX! :goodjob:

Divayth Fyr was trying to stop him, reaching to catch his leg. Janus forced his hand up and took hold of Maxical's stiff one, squeezing it tightly.
Now, you couldn't have been funnin' with us here. . . could you? Seems like a lot of grabbing going on. :P


"I swear boy, you are more entertaining by the day. If you aren't fainting or praying to die, you're vomiting and crying." I'm surprised Barbas hasn't begged to come home, but he says you feed him well."
Looks like an extra " got stuck in the middle of this passage.
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Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 7:53 pm

Oh no...

Wonderfully writen chapter. Really wanting to see the next one however..
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 7:05 am

I held my breath during this entire chapter and didn't release it until the end. Wow. The storms, the ceremony, the paralization, the light, this story had it all.
Great description and build up throughout. And still you had time to throw that usual mALX curve ball into the story regarding the tainted blood.
Epic.

I loved the description of our first glimpse of Maxical. The dry straw-like fur was an awesome visual touch.

Skingrad will NEVER be the same.

EDIT - Oh, I forgot to mention. I love the title. Quantum Fluctuation. Wow. Does this mean that Maxical might finally learn how to count??!?
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 10:43 am

-pouts-

You and your cliffhangers.... :P

As always, I'm filled with the need to find out what's next.

Nice pics, btw
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 10:24 am

mALX! This is torture -- torture!!! Have you any idea how cruel you are? Do you know what we've suffered in Maxical's absence? And there you are, tricking us into thinking that our terrible wait is over, only to cruelly shoot us down yet again.

All I can say is...NEXT INSTALLMENT, quickly, quickly! :D

(Awesome write, of course [although that really is so typical of your work that it goes without saying] -- although I still stand by my assertion that it's cruelty! )
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 1:28 am

My congratulations as well, mALX, five whole threads is an amazing accomplishment. Why do I have the feeling that Thread Six is going to be the best yet?

One small nit in the second paragraph; I think you misplaced a period after the word 'funnel'.

I don't know what it is. Despite the fact that he is a complete boob it is hard not to feel for Janus' suffering during the ritual. I believe that is a testament to the skill of the writer.

Am I mistaken or did Melisande completely throw Hannibal Traven under the bus?!

The last line is absolutely classic and makes the chapter!
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6th thread already? Wow! Congrats :icecream:
Hmm, my maelstrom comment was quite appropriate it seems....

carry on!
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@ Foxy - Thank you Foxy - Is that a little Mel OTT, lol. - I kind of needed to on it for a bunch of reasons - little things that happened in that ceremony may have big significance later. You ROCK!
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@ Hauteecole Rider - Thank you so much, and
Spoiler
you're right!

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@ Acadian - Thank you so much Acadian! You are keeping up with the plots so much that I'm afraid I should up the ante, lol. (but can't think of any way to do it!)
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@ Arcry - Thank you so much Arcry, and here it is - er...not yet!
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@ Winter Wolf - Thank you very much Wolf, your kind words mean tons to me - and NEVER !!! She will NEVER learn to count! Lol. But she may cause some ripples with her jaunt to the other side and back. - Wolf, I love your Fanfic, you need to put a link to it in your signature so everyone that may have missed it can just click on it!!! It is AWESOME !!! (Like you! And I hope you didn't mind me adding you to my Treydog lure and posting pictures of you, lol).
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@ Jacki Dice - Thank you so much Jacki - and I am waiting for you to do the same back to me, when will you be posting your fanfic? Don't be afraid to email me when you do just in case I haven't seen it on the forum (I'm blind as a bat!), and feel free to mention it on here too when you get it up on the boards. - Oh! On those pics, I dug around on the internet for weird weather patterns and came up with those - the first one is actually a funnel cloud in space making the lesser stars swirl! I loved that one!
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@ Rachel the Breton - Whew! Thank you so very much! That made my day, thank you - I know for a fact you have been busy as heck, since we have not had any updates on your story - so that you took the time to stop by here means a lot, thank you! I am going to have to spam your thread again I see, lol. Let me see, what rhymes with Edward?...Lol.
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@ Destri Melarg - Thank you very much Destri, and you are spot on - she threw him under the bus and tried to drive it over him. The last line was my favorite, I built that scene so I could use it, lol. Thank you - and for inspiring me to up the ante, I was waffling for two months on how to bring her back, and your words and PM's kind of pushed me to act - thank you!
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@ RemkoNL - Thank you so much - and you were right, lol!
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@ EVERYONE - I wouldn't be on my sixth thread if it wasn't for you all, you all ROCK!!

Winter Wolf has finally started posting his story, I hope you all got to see it! First chapters are the hardest and usually never come out right - but Wolf's is AWESOME !!! Here is a link to it:

http://www.gamesas.com/bgsforums/index.php?showtopic=1080500


Every one of you has been inspiring to me in some way, a lot of you by your own stories that have taught me, intrigued me, bowled me over (and that includes Treydog and Bobg who are always here in spirit even when they are busy and can't make it to post) You ALL ROCK !!! Thank You !!
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Chapter 87: Sage Vardengroet's Secret


Janus awoke to find himself in an unfamiliar bed. Divayth Fyr sat nearby in a chair. He stood up when Janus stirred.

"Maxical?" Janus asked, searching his face.

"There has been no change lad. Clavicus Vile is still breathing for her. I have heard bad things about him, but haven't seen them myself. He has earned my respect for what he is doing for that child."

"Mine as well. What did we do wrong Master Fyr? Have we erred somewhere in the process?"

"I find it as troubling as you do. This is a rare procedure for any of us. But this is the first time it hasn't worked...and that cloud? Gyron said contamination has gotten into the stored blood."

"Melisande suspects Arch Mage Traven of tainting it. He would not do that, he is a decent man. It's true he was against this; ranted something about the staff Melisande used to reanimate Maxical. He said it was stolen, and someone named Mannimarco came looking for it."

"She stole Mannimarco's staff and he has been here looking for it?"

Janus nodded. "Who is he?"

"He is known as the King of Worms, an extraordinarily powerful sorcerer and necromancer."

"The King of Worms! But I thought he was?"

"Yes, he was?opening that portal to Oblivion, or stealing the staff?it is possible you created some kind of quantum fluctuation. When mortals enter the void, or the Gods interact with this plane; something of a warp occurs?a ripple effect. They leave, and it is as if they never existed. But the ripple continues, affecting anything in its path to varying degrees. Any number of the things we have done to bring Maxical back could have implications none of us can see now."

"Traven said that too. Was I wrong to?bring her back?" Janus questioned his motives for the first time.

"Only you can be the judge of that. It is too late to change what's done lad. You must be prepared for what comes, though. Mortals cannot tamper with Gods without repercussions." Divayth patted Janus on the shoulder. "If Mannimarco is here in Cyrodiil, you will find no greater evil on this realm."

"Could he be responsible for Maxical not reviving?"

"No lad. Two bottles of that blood we put in her were tainted somehow, and conflict with your blood. We don't know how or by who."

"But I am an Immortal, my blood shouldn't conflict with any other; maybe it was some taint or poison? I know Traven, he wouldn't do this. Even being against it, he would not sabotage it. Maybe Mannimarco poisoned the blood."

"You need to talk to Traven and find out exactly what went on while Mannimarco was here. Gyron is testing the blood now to see if there is a way to neutralize it. It may be Maxical's only hope the way things look."

Suddenly the door burst open and Lord Kagrenac rushed in. "Come quickly you two. We have found something about that blood."

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"I've enchanted this pendant to neutralize the vampire blood. Janus lad, come here." Sage Vardengroet cut Janus's hand.

The blood already in the vat began traveling rapidly toward that which dribbled off Janus's hand into the vat. Before it could reach it, the Sage dipped the amulet into the cauldron. The blood's momentum halted and it began to mill around.

"Now yours Divayth." He removed the amulet from the liquid and cut Divayth's hand. The blood did not attack Divayth's blood at all, even without the amulet.

"That other blood is only warring with the vampire blood, not Divayth's." Sage Vardengroet said. "Now what would cause that? Before I return home, I want a sample of your blood Janus. I will conduct some experiments and find out what causes this kind of phenomenon."

Lord Kagrenac gave the Sage an odd glance.

"You are more than welcome to stay; it is possible that the alchemical ingredients in the vat are a good medium for these experiments." Janus said hopefully. Somehow knowing the ancients were here gave him hope that Maxical would be saved.

"We'll see. Meanwhile I need you Kagrenac, let's place this amulet on her neck and see if that helps." The Sage was walking toward the castle door as he spoke.

"I'm coming, if it works I need to wipe her memory of that day." Janus said, falling in step with the two ancients.

"That would be a very good idea." Lord Kagrenac said in his gruff voice, doffing Janus's shoulder. Wait by the door while we get the amulet on her, we'll call you if it works."

"Shivani said Maxical has terrible seizures every time she is touched, will doing this cause?"

"Seizures?" the Sage asked.

"Yes, she said they were violent, and occurred at the slightest touch."

"Good thing you told me lad." Sage Vardengroet hurried off and returned with a small leather satchel like Arch Mage Traven carried.

"If you are going to faint or interfere with what we do, you had best wait out here. We need our full concentration to be on her." Lord Kagrenac said sternly to Janus.

"You'll need to remove this amulet off me so I can erase her memory of that day. I can't take it off, and have no powers with it on."

Lord Kagrenac cast a spell on the amulet and the warmth of it faded. Janus reached up and unclasped it, sliding it in his pocket.

Sage Vardengroet pulled a mortar and pestle from his bag and ground a concoction with some plants Janus had never seen before. He pulled a small vial out and funneled the powdered plants into it, then shook it well.

"Do you still have that Sky Child?" He motioned to Janus. "Let's clean this in case it has some of that tainted blood on it. Do you have any fortified wines up here in your suite?"

Janus fetched them. The Sage motioned to Lord Kagrenac as he doused the Sky Child with the alcohol.

"I want you to be laying that amulet on her neck at the exact same time I am putting the Sky Child in. If she starts seizing and I have not placed it yet, you will have to try and hold her down long enough for me to get this in her, but keep that amulet on her.

The Sage connected the small vial to the Sky Child and opened the valve on it. "Okay, everyone ready? Places. Kagrenac, you stand on that side of the bed and position that amulet over her neck. Be ready to hold it down onto her if she starts seizing, and you must hold her still at the same time. I am going to count, move on three. Janus, if this works be ready. I will signal you to come in and do your mind cleansing."

Everyone took the positions as ordered. Shivani stood beside Clavicus Vile, wrapping her tiny arms around his waist.

Sage Vardengroet began his count, Sky Child in hand. On three he plunged the Sky Child into the large vein in her neck. At the same time Lord Kagrenac pushed the amulet against the vein on the opposite side of her neck and held it there tightly.

The next thirty minutes were a blur. Janus was terrified by the seizing, but held onto consciousness so he could erase her memory the second he was called by the Sage.

Finally the Sage motioned him over. The bulging vein was gone from Maxical's forehead as were the furrows. She looked like a helpless child, paler than he had ever seen her. Dark circles surrounded her eyes giving them the appearance of being sunk in. Janus leaned over her, gently breathing the healing that would take the memories of that day from her. Then he did a healing, fearing the long seizure may have damaged her.

When he was finished she seemed to be sleeping peacefully. Janus looked up at the Sage. "It's done, and I did a healing as well, but she is still not breathing on her own."

Sage Vardengroet looked at Clavicus Vile and shrugged. They all held their breath when Clavicus Vile stopped breathing for Maxical. Nothing happened. Clavicus breathed once more, then waited again. Still nothing.

Janus did another healing, this time concentrating on her lungs. They tried again, but Maxical was still unable to breathe on her own.

"What is it Clavicus?" Shivani asked.

"Why don't you get Fyr to help you and do the 'three count' for injured soldiers." Clavicus said, then looked down at Shivani. She disappeared and returned quickly with Divayth Fyr, closing the door behind them as they entered.

The four of you. Three counts. On the count of one heal, two fortify her magicka, on three rally her. Keep doing that till I say to stop. One. Two. Three." Clavicus continued for a while counting off the rhythmic waves of healing and then suddenly stopped. "Everyone leave, you too Shivani. Not you Sage." He ordered.

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When everyone was out Clavicus opened the window without moving even a finger. "The shrine of the dead must be cleansed. Let's do it."

Sage Vardengroet glanced at the black cloud that still smothered the sky outside. The chanters voices echoed eerily in through the open window. "I've never seen this phenomenon with the weather before. Will you be performing the ritual, My Lord?"

"Yes." Clavicus began the cleansing on Maxical.

The stench of rotting flesh filled the room as they worked on Maxical to remove the death from her body. When they were finished Clavicus blew and the odor went out the window. Again without moving, Clavicus closed the window behind the cloud of decay as it floated out.

"It was much easier with your?" The Sage began, but was cut off mid-sentence.

"Now give me your ring." Clavicus said, looking directly into the Sage's eyes with his slanted ones.

"My Lord?"

"The ring."

"How did you know?" Sage Vardengroet twisted the ring off his finger and held it out.

Clavicus Vile had the ring in his hand instantly without moving. "The three count. I did it to see whose magicka was stunted. You had to know of the only conflict with Immortal blood, yet said nothing. Why?."

"I didn't do this, My Lord. I?"

Clavicus walked over to the bed and slipped the ring on Maxical's stiff finger.

As if drawn against his will, the Sage moved closer to the bed and watched as Maxical took her first breath on her own. Clavicus continued to hold her hand, but when her eyes fluttered open it was Sage Vardengroet she sought.

"My brother?my brother." Maxical's voice was barely audible. Her thickened lids closed over glowing eyes. When she opened them again she stared at the two men, her eyes now a dull black. "Who?"

"You will have to get yourself another ring." Clavicus said, his eyes burning into those of the Sage.

"But I'll have to leave right away!" The Sage pleaded.

"Goodbye then." That it was the end of the discussion was evident in Clavicus's voice.

Sage Vardengroet enacted his recall spell and disappeared.

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I was on the tip of my seat..... exciting!
I didn't get how Vile figured out it was the ring that caused the conflict. Did I miss something particular about it? I guess a re-read of the last few chapters is in order.

One nitpick:
effecting anything

Affecting
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 4:11 am

One step closer! WooHoo! Maxical, you sound confused - that's ok, me too. :P

Rings and blood and ancients and stunted magicka and recall spells and amulets and mysteries aswirling where Morrowind meets Oblivion. Like friend Remko, I was on the edge of my seat.

I love how you have portrayed Clavicus Vile since you first introduced him, and again, he did not disappoint here.

Your writing continues to be absolutely wonderful. How exciting! :dancing:


One nit:
The bloods {blood's} momentum halted and it began to mill around.
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 3:37 am

Very good!

I think D.Foxy says it best. :bigsmile:
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Vile is my least favorite Prince of the Oblivion realms...owever...He may get bumped up if this continues...Sorry Malacath...

I hate to rush creativity...But I want, no, NEED the next Chapter as soon as possible!

P.S. Oh how I wish my computer was more powerful....My 360 has rebelled once again and I am in need of another..Will have another in two days. For now though..My work on Arkin's Story will be halted..Sorry Malx...
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And here I was thinking that it was Melisande's blood reacting so strongly to Janus'. Stunted Magicka. . . go figure! :shrug:

The one thing that seems to have been lost in the sheer jaw-dropping force of this chapter is that MAXICAL'S EYES ARE OPEN!!! :celebration:
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Thanks for your kind words mALX. Normally I would say that you are one mad, crazy person, but everybody on this forum knows it already. Lol.
Seriously though, Thanks!!
Yes, the sig, must fix that.

"Yes, he was?opening that portal to Oblivion, or stealing the staff?it is possible you created some kind of quantum fluctuation. When mortals enter the void, or the Gods interact with this plane; something of a warp occurs?a ripple effect. They leave, and it is as if they never existed. But the ripple continues, affecting anything in its path to varying degrees. Any number of the things we have done to bring Maxical back could have implications none of us can see now."

The ramifications of this sentence seriously scares me. Maxical was somebody who lived on the limit of crazyiness at every moment, whether she knew it or not. Somehow I know that we have only seen the beginning of this awesome saga. The future of the whole of Tamriel is now in jeopardy. And probably even TES V too!! :lol:


"My brother...My brother"

Just a question. Is this an Americanism for shock, or does this have a deeper intent?

Oh, and welcome back kitty!! :twirl:
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@ Foxy - Thank you Foxy!!!!!! I put a whistling emoticon up, but they no longer work on the new forum. :(
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@ RemkoNL - Thank You, Thank You - I always get those two mixed up, I appreciate you a lot !!
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@ Acadian - Thanks Acadian - I'd write more, but you know how I am feeling right now, steam rising, etc. You know you are appreciated!
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@ Hauteecole Rider - Thank you Hauty !!!
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@ Arcry - I am feeling your pain, at least when my 360 crashed I was able to fall back on the PC - Bless your heart!!! I hope you get it up soon! Thanks Arcry!
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@ Destri Melarg - Thank you very much! ...well, I can't reveal whose, but my septims are on the Sage being a good guy. I like him, lol. You are right, I forgot to post her pic with her eyes open ,but I will on the next story. You ROCK!
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@ Winter Wolf - Thank you ... er .... was that a compliment? ROFL !!! as to what you said about ramifications - OH H yes, it is going down! The "My brother" - def deeper intent, much deeper. And thank you Wolf, you ROCK !!!!
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Chapter 88: The Repercussions

 

The black cloud that had covered Cyrodiil broke up, turning to wisps of vapor that disappeared with the light breeze that buffeted them. When dawn broke that morning it heralded in a perfect sky. Many said they had never seen such a shade of blue in Cyrodiil.

As the cloud dissipated so did the crowd chanting around the castle. They were seen heading northeast out of Skingrad in what appeared to be a unified pilgrimage. The latest Black Horse Courier that arrived at the castle mentioned that the large pilgrimage was spotted in the foothills of the Jerall Mountains just north of Cheydinhal.

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Mankar Camoran was surprised at the sudden influx of agents that arrived talking excitedly about a sign from Dagon. Several of them had copies of the Black Horse Courier Special Edition that had been handed to them on their trek. The paper detailed the phenomenon of the huge cloud blocking out the sun for a full day.

Perusing the flyer, he found himself confused as to why Lord Dagon chose to make his sign at Skingrad of all places. It was not exactly as it should be, but there was no doubting it was a sign. Was it possible he had misinterpreted the texts?

Mankar sent his daughter Ruma to the Imperial City to give the signal to Ocato that preparations should begin for their plan to go into action. That delicate matter could only be handled by himself or Ruma; and he needed to be here to gather his flock together and send them out for the battle that was about to begin.

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Maxical's heavy lids hooded her dark eyes as she stared at Clavicus Vile. She spouted a long line of completely unintelligible gibberish at a rapid pace, interspersed sporadically with a short laugh; but the last words could be clearly distinguished, "bigger'n a' Orc. Am I on kooma?"

Clavicus smiled. He closed his eyes and Shivani appeared next to him. "She's a talkative little thing. Thinks she's on Skooma. Get the lad."

Shivani disappeared again.

"Poof!" Maxical lifted both her hands and then was trying to point at the place Shivani had stood but her hand wobbled in circles. She was talking a mile a minute but no words could be discerned in the jumble that came out.

"Is she alive?" Janus said as he walked into the room.

Maxical stopped pvssyring. "Anus?" Her face crumpled, as if crying. No tears fell, but her breathing got ragged.

Clavicus filled her lungs as Janus ran to the bed.

"Don't cry Maxical. I'm here."

Maxical's unintelligible pvssyr changed to a keening interspersed with gibberish in a scared tone, but she reached out for Janus's hand and clung to it.

"What's she saying? I can't understand her." The fear that her mind had been harmed in that long seizure gripped Janus.

"You may need to do a better job with that cleansing you did earlier lad. It sounds like she is remembering something. Make sure you cover the past week as well as the other, and go back a bit further." Clavicus expression showed his concern.

"I didn't do this past week, only that day." Janus admitted.

"Do it all. Start with right now and go back to well earlier that day than the incident occurred. Don't miss a thing. She is remembering something. Do it quickly." Clavicus was breathing for Maxical again.

"Your cowl, Janus!" Shivani gasped.

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I was trying to open my eyes but the lids felt too heavy. Voices came and went around me, whispering. Voices I didn't recognize, but somehow seemed familiar. Everything felt strange, even my own body felt alien, complex. I don't know why, but suddenly it felt like I couldn't remember how to move my hands or legs.

There had been a nightmare, I think. It was gone now, and I couldn't drum up enough of the remnants to piece them together and review, figure out what it all meant. Bits and pieces of shattered thoughts and visions wafted in an endless trail that stretched out in the form of dreams playing past eyes that could no longer see their meaning.

Vile places of retched lost souls, loneliness and sadness; gleaming walls of blackened glasslike stone, dark and bitter cold. Sometimes the feeling someone was there, close.

The fragments of visions, sounds. The Gods opened up the skies, and all of Tamriel lay beneath me. Echoing around me was the sound of chanting, and a vision of Cyrodiil covered in fire, molten lava and armies of Daedra - and I stood in the midst of it with a sword in my hand. Revelations coming as a flash, gone before I could grasp their meanings. I learned that space and time are illusions of our realm; in the void all exist simultaneously.

There were rushing winds, and the noise of a thousand banshees screaming at once and then suddenly I lay here, in a bed that still carried my scent from my incarceration. A new battle began then, a war within me, as if I fought against myself. I felt the weight of two giants standing on my chest, pushing out the air, and I could not take more in. Then suddenly the windows fell open and the sound of a wolf howling echoed in my ear, and there he stood beside my bed. His heart beat as if playing only to my ears, the sound of it called to me, "My sister, my sister."

No need of mentioning a giant with the horns of a goat, or the ghost of a Khajiit, or ancient men come to life from my textbooks at the Arcane; any may dream these things. Easier these than the rest before them. But how fractal and fragile the next; a vampire with the voice and mannerisms, the scent of Janus. He even healed me the way Janus does. Every curve of his hand fit to mine the way Janus's does. Do the Gods mock me in my illness?

All these splashes of visions played through my mind only to disappear too quickly for me to grasp their significance. Then somehow these fragments began fading slowly; fading into Oblivion maybe, for I am waking now, and can remember naught but my pain. Was it shards of memory? Omens? Or maybe just a nightmare?I don't know.

My chest hurts terribly, as if it has been crushed. I lay a long time trying to remember getting an injury to my chest, but couldn't?was my shoulder injured too? Yes?but where, in the Arena? I remember a big Nord?no, no. That was a long time ago. Why could I not remember where I injured my chest; or my shoulder, for that matter? I think I was going to Anvil?I don't remember if I ever arrived though. My head was starting to hurt from thinking. And my eyes hurt as well. They felt like gravel from a desert had been ground into them, sore and dry.

By concentrating really hard I would manage to force my eyelids to raise a slit, but every time I did it was to the same dream. I wondered if I would ever wake from it. There was a giant, and a ghost, and two men older than time itself sometimes were in it. And Janus was there too, most of the time. I thought I saw a vampire once, and it spoke in Janus's voice.

I tried to talk, but no one seemed to understand my words?not even me. Even to my own ears it sounded like gibberish, strange. At first that made it feel like a nightmare. I couldn't make my body move right, or talk to anyone. Other than that, everyone was smiling at me, it wasn't?scary. Just weird, disjointed fragments of strangers and strange things.

I just wanted to wake up. I was tired of it, no way to move or communicate with those around me. What use is a room full of people if you cannot join them in conversation? I wanted to be understood, to move at will. My mind seemed to work, so was I paralyzed? I couldn't stand the thought of that.

Just having that word slip into my mind for that split second was devastating. I wanted to prove to myself I wasn't and tried to move my legs but couldn't. I tried to talk and everyone just stared at me smiling like they always did, but no one understood what I was trying to say.

I tried to cry but couldn't do that either. Nothing was working right. Something was happening to my breathing then. It felt like someone really heavy sat on my chest and wouldn't get up. The blackness started coming then, but I fought it. A vampire was leaning over me?healing me like Janus used to.

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I must have drifted off, I woke up to the sound of a female Khajiit talking. It wasn't S'Jirra, definitely not S'Krivva. The voice was cultured, educated. She was speaking to someone and then I felt someone moving me around, touching my bottom. Rufio? No, I killed him, it couldn't be. I reached down and grabbed the hand.

"Touch me and die!" I said, then added a few curses I had learned from Janus. I spoke only in Khajiit.

"She is still babbling." A familiar voice said. Janus!

A booming voice spoke then. "No lad, she is speaking in Khajiit. Where did she learn those words?"

"Janus!" I turned my head toward the sound of his voice and tried to open my eyes. It felt like they were stuck shut, the lids weighed so heavily that I could barely lift them a crack. It was enough, I saw the cowled head leaning over me. "Janus!" I tried to raise my hand up to him and he took it in his and moved in close enough that I could smell him, that wonderful familiar scent, and coming from him and not that vampire from my dreams.

"Janus, I?I don't feel so good." It wasn't what I started to say. A million words had come rushing, wanting to be said all at once, and that is the only one that made it out.

"I know. You've been very ill." Janus spoke so closely to me that I could smell his breath, feel the familiar lightheadedness I always got when he was close.

"Will you?comfort me?" The sounds in the room began to fade as my eyelids drooped back closed. Before I slipped back into the darkness of the sleep that was overtaking me, I felt Janus's arms wrap around me, it was comforting to lay my head on his chest and hear his heart thumping, smell his scent.

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I woke from an unfamiliar touch on my hand. It must have been part of my dream. A giant stood next to me holding my hand. He had the horns of a goat on his head, and his eyes slanted oddly, but he looked nice ?wait, was a ghost Khajiit hugging him? No, surely it must be one that had some chameleon on.

The Khajiit looked at me like?she was oddly familiar, and I tried to figure out who she was supposed to be representing in my dream, it had to be someone I knew.

She barely reached his waist. Still, she had her arms wrapped about him.

I laughed, letting my eyes close again. "I'm dreaming of a ghost touching a giant's butt!" I whispered as I drifted back off to the sound of laughter.

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