The following is a fan story that I have messing around with in my head for a bit. This is my first fan story ever written and as someone who would like to be a writer of sorts any criticism or suggestions would be helpful. So tell me what you think of my prologue. There might be some grammer/spelling mistakes so just bear with it and tell me about.



“Move faster men those bastards aren’t gonna kill themselves now are they!” screamed the decanus in charge. As the Legionaries struggled up the mountain, a murderous hail of lead came down from turrets cleverly placed in order to maximize the death toll of any intruder. The legionary’s fingers froze as they climbed up the almost sheer cliff they were forced to climb. Frostbite and fatigue took hold as the attackers fell to their deaths. Death a warm and welcome relief. “This is asinine, Decanus why are you wasting these men in pointless attacks! I told you to take the position not get the rocks icy with legion blood!” hollered a centurion. “These Brotherhood types are cunning and have turned the Rockies here into an excellent fortress if you cannot do the job then I will.” As the centurion in charge drove his blade into the decanus, the last thing he saw was the Centurion’s gaze, colder then the mountain air as he sheathed his blade. He turned around and addressed his men. “Listen up war isn’t about dying for your country it’s about making the other bastard die for his.” As the words echoed two Legionaries creep close enough to where they could get a clear shot with their 40mm grenade launchers. A deafening boom echoed as flaming chunks of metal came flying down. The remaining Legionaries let loose a savage war cry that was heard for miles around as they quickly threw there grappling hooks to the top of the ledge and climbed up. Another round of explosives was unleashed sending several power armor clad warriors tumbling to their doom. The troops reached the top of the ledge and quickly massacred the remaining Brotherhood fighters. When the Centurion reached the top to examine what the Brotherhood was hiding his troops let out an excited cry “Octavian, Octavian All hail Octavian!”