The Little Alien

Post » Fri May 27, 2011 8:24 am

The Little Alien

A Fallout 3 Story

by

XIRISHWARLORDX





CHAPTER 1









The Saucer came out of the ocean off the New Jersey shore and flew to a height of 500 feet with a flume of water below it .Hovered for about 10 mins then started moving in land over Newark NJ it moved silent across the ruined city there was no signs of human life picked up by the ships sencers. This troubled the lilttle alien greatly. Over the next hour he flew up and down the eastern coast from Toronto down to the FLA keys only picking up pockets of mutant life in small area's.

He felt a great sadness over take him as he went on with his search .All the great and wonderful things theses humans had yet to learn he went about taking reading's

and sending them back to his home base off the coast of England and three miles under the sea.



His name was Dashel and his people where called the Luumon the Luumon had been on earth for 20,00 years there citys where as big as any of the human's they had helped the greeks, roman's, aztec, and the egyptian's grow and flurish then watched them fade away . The Luumon's always had there bases under the seas and very deep so not to have any humans finding them untill the time was right.

but over the course of time the Luumon always kept a close eye on there human brothers

Dashel's his saucer around and started heading for the DC area he was getting larger pockets of human life showing up on his scaner from there .On the eve the boombs fell Dashel's uncle was send out on one last peace effort to save mankind and the earth but his uncle's ship was never heard from again and he wanted to find out what happend to his uncle that morning it was his hope to help the humans in any way he could even if that ment fighting along side them to help save what was left and to rebuild what was left. It was going to be a long hard fight

He flew over the DC wastelands scaning the area a round him he found pockets of ghouls, super mutants and human he knew not all the human's would welcome his help but he would try and make contact he had a stock pile of laser rifles and pistols also 10 cases of rad- away and some clean water for about 50 or so people it was not much but it was a start. He flew over Megaton looking for a good place to land. Just then a beep on his scaner showed the area of where his uncles ship had gone down and he rush to the site.Landing next to the site he got out of his saucer the sun shineing off his helmet as he stood and walked down to the crash of his uncles ship. His uncles body was throw out and was laying on a pile of rocks he took the recorder from his uncles life pack and looked thu the crash. engry cells had been throw all over the site and he picked up as many as he could also grabing the his uncles ray gun that lay next to his body.

Dashel searched the ship for anything that would be useful to him and to the people of the wastelands.

Just as he steped back out into the mid morning sun a shot was fired hitting the space ship and makeing Dashel take cover behind some rock

"what was that he thought" looking up he saw two super mutants coming towards him mini guns spraying bulltes towards him and his ship.

He took aim and hit the first one in the chest with his laser rifle the mutant's went in to a rage and rush him fireing wildly his 2nd shot got the mutant ion the head droping him right a way the second pulled out a rocket launcher and fired at Dashel's ship hitting the power core the force of the explosion sent Dashel flying knocking him out.

when he woke he looked a round the second mutant was dead also. Dashel's ship was was useless now he grabed what he could carry and started walking towards little big town. Dashel knew his fight was going to be a long hard one.....








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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 6:23 am

The Saucer came out of the ocean off the New Jersey shore and flew to a height of 500 feet with a flume of water below it .Hovered for about 10 minutes then started moving in land over Newark NJ it moved silent across the ruined city there was no signs of human life picked up by the ships censors. This troubled the little alien greatly. Over the next hour he flew up and down the eastern coast from Toronto down to the FLA keys only picking up pockets of mutant life in small areas.

He felt a great sadness over take him as he went on with his search .All the great and wonderful things theses humans had yet to learn he went about taking reading's

and sending them back to his home base off the coast of England and three miles under the sea.



His name was Dashel and his people where called the Luumon the Luumon had been on earth for 20,00 years there cities where as big as any of the human's they had helped the Greeks, roman's, Aztec, and the Egyptian's grow and flourish then watched them fade away . The Luumon's always had their bases under the seas and very deep so not to have any humans finding them until the time was right.

but over the course of time the Luumon always kept a close eye on there human brothers

Dashel's his saucer around and started heading for the DC area he was getting larger pockets of human life showing up on his scanner from there .On the eve the bombs fell Dashel's uncle was send out on one last peace effort to save mankind and the earth but his uncle's ship was never heard from again and he wanted to find out what happened to his uncle that morning it was his hope to help the humans in any way he could even if that meant fighting alongside them to help save what was left and to rebuild what was left. It was going to be a long hard fight

He flew over the DC wastelands scanning the area around him he found pockets of ghouls, super mutants and human he knew not all the human's would welcome his help but he would try and make contact he had a stock pile of laser rifles and pistols also 10 cases of rad- away and some clean water for about 50 or so people it was not much but it was a start. He flew over Megaton looking for a good place to land. Just then a beep on his scanner showed the area of where his uncles ship had gone down and he rush to the site. Landing next to the site he got out of his saucer the sun shining off his helmet as he stood and walked down to the crash of his uncles' ship. His uncle's body was throw out and was laying on a pile of rocks he took the recorder from his uncles life pack and looked thru the crash. Energy cells had been throw all over the site and he picked up as many as he could also grabbing the his uncles ray gun that lay next to his body.

Dashel searched the ship for anything that would be useful to him and to the people of the wastelands.

Just as he stepped back out into the mid morning sun a shot was fired hitting the space ship and making Dashel take cover behind some rock

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I suggest you use this copy i prepared for you.
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 4:30 pm

And I suggest that Irish, stay with what he has. Its got a few minor grammatical error's but I dont really mind those. The story is ok, its not my type of thing, but keep it up. :tops:
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:11 pm

The Saucer came out of the ocean off the New Jersey shore and flew to a height of 500 feet with a flume of water below it .Hovered for about 10 minutes then started moving in land over Newark NJ it moved silent across the ruined city there was no signs of human life picked up by the ships censors. This troubled the little alien greatly. Over the next hour he flew up and down the eastern coast from Toronto down to the FLA keys only picking up pockets of mutant life in small areas.

He felt a great sadness over take him as he went on with his search .All the great and wonderful things theses humans had yet to learn he went about taking reading's

and sending them back to his home base off the coast of England and three miles under the sea.



His name was Dashel and his people where called the Luumon the Luumon had been on earth for 20,00 years there cities where as big as any of the human's they had helped the Greeks, roman's, Aztec, and the Egyptian's grow and flourish then watched them fade away . The Luumon's always had their bases under the seas and very deep so not to have any humans finding them until the time was right.

but over the course of time the Luumon always kept a close eye on there human brothers

Dashel's his saucer around and started heading for the DC area he was getting larger pockets of human life showing up on his scanner from there .On the eve the bombs fell Dashel's uncle was send out on one last peace effort to save mankind and the earth but his uncle's ship was never heard from again and he wanted to find out what happened to his uncle that morning it was his hope to help the humans in any way he could even if that meant fighting alongside them to help save what was left and to rebuild what was left. It was going to be a long hard fight

He flew over the DC wastelands scanning the area around him he found pockets of ghouls, super mutants and human he knew not all the human's would welcome his help but he would try and make contact he had a stock pile of laser rifles and pistols also 10 cases of rad- away and some clean water for about 50 or so people it was not much but it was a start. He flew over Megaton looking for a good place to land. Just then a beep on his scanner showed the area of where his uncles ship had gone down and he rush to the site. Landing next to the site he got out of his saucer the sun shining off his helmet as he stood and walked down to the crash of his uncles' ship. His uncle's body was throw out and was laying on a pile of rocks he took the recorder from his uncles life pack and looked thru the crash. Energy cells had been throw all over the site and he picked up as many as he could also grabbing the his uncles ray gun that lay next to his body.

Dashel searched the ship for anything that would be useful to him and to the people of the wastelands.

Just as he stepped back out into the mid morning sun a shot was fired hitting the space ship and making Dashel take cover behind some rock

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I suggest you use this copy i prepared for you.


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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:39 am

Um... that svcks.
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:09 pm

Um... that svcks.

Helpful, informative and constructive criticism are always welcome here. Your post was none of those. Please do not post unless you have something of value to add. :stare:
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 5:34 pm

Good story so far, I really like the creativity. Just make it a little more descriptive I guess.
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