Dovahkiin/Nerevarine Poetry

Post » Mon Sep 05, 2011 2:44 am

My PC from Morrowind: Amaraz Indobar

Cursed of Ash and raised by dragon devils,
entrapped in a maze of countless levels.
A man rose up to strike down the god-kings,
in the process he destroyed everything.

Fire and death and ash and bones,
the fool had saved the world only to destroy his home.
Redemption was something he long sought,
but search as he might he could find naught.

Cursed with a form of Immortality.
by a disease induced malady.
He never would find rest,
as he left his homelands mess.

So he traveled the land, cursing and praying,
in many far lands twas evil he was slaying.
Though all his words went unanswered,
and his life was never allowed to be pampered.

His search for a stolen God-king,
left a bit of a sting.
His failure complete,
he shuffled back to his feet.

Searching for many years,
had yielded nothing but fears.
In vain he had looked,
but regretfully closed the book.

He found some joy at long last,
in an enemy from a far distant past.
A small snake youth he found,
who was at first severely bound.

A young hatchling he was,
but I suppose that was the rub.
As he was freed and asked for help,
resembling the ones born in kelp.

For over five score or more,
he trained him like himself years before,
But alas in the end,
he had to lose his friend.

Upon his long time awaited return,
from the land that the dragons were burned,
As the lizard folk who killed his kin,
stood to unjustly accuse him.

They thought the youth was their own,
when an ocean stood between him and his home,
When in fact he had been saved,
from an early uncovered grave.

But no matter our hero was taken,
and his hopes were long forsaken.
When he was sold to the Sons of the North,
without having a chance to fight the hordes.

But soon he could feel it in his cell,
a new threat had arrived but not from hell.
Curious he looked out from the prison,
to notice the stone that had grown an incision.

He looked upon a face that unleashed a breath,
claiming you are destined for more then death.
He told you that you must stop the shadow of the wing,
for you are the one proclaimed Dovahkiin!!

EDIT: One of my first poems...or idk even know if that is a poem...an epic? Or whatever the stories in poetic form are called. Oh and I added a bit explaining Vivec lol.
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Post » Mon Sep 05, 2011 2:47 am

whoa....all I can say is EPIC WIN.

That was just amazing man. I loved every bit of it. Only advice I can offer is separating it into stanzas of AA BB rhymes to make it easier to read.

For instance.

Cursed of Ash and raised by dragon devils,
entrapped in a maze of countless levels.

A man rose up to strike down the god-kings,
in the process he destroyed everything.

Fire and death and ash and bones,
the fool had saved the world only to destroy his home.

Redemption was something he long he sought,
but search as he might he could find naught.


Or AABB rhymes

Cursed of Ash and raised by dragon devils,
entrapped in a maze of countless levels.
A man rose up to strike down the god-kings,
in the process he destroyed everything.

Fire and death and ash and bones,
the fool had saved the world only to destroy his home.
Redemption was something he long he sought,
but search as he might he could find naught.


I like the idea of AA BB rhymes though.
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Post » Sun Sep 04, 2011 9:52 pm

whoa....all I can say is EPIC WIN.

That was just amazing man. I loved every bit of it. Only advice I can offer is separating it into stanzas of AA BB rhymes to make it easier to read.

For instance.



Or AABB rhymes



I like the idea of AA BB rhymes though.


Gotcha! Thanks! Did as you said and it fit perfectly somehow lol
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Post » Mon Sep 05, 2011 4:21 am

Gotcha! Thanks! Did as you said and it fit perfectly somehow lol


Much easier on the eyes now! :)

Just be sure to capitalize every other line and end every thought in a period. Look of at my first post to see what I mean.
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Post » Sun Sep 04, 2011 6:35 pm

That was beautiful.
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Post » Mon Sep 05, 2011 8:12 am

Much easier on the eyes now! :)

Just be sure to capitalize every other line and end every thought in a period. Look of at my first post to see what I mean.


Alright all done. Thanks for the help I don't know much about poems forms or anything. I just go by ear, so to speak.
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Post » Mon Sep 05, 2011 7:31 am

That was beautiful.


Thank you. Why don't you guys post some poetry? I'd love to read it.
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Post » Mon Sep 05, 2011 9:20 am

This was an awesome poem, It's nice to see poetry on this Forum we don't get much.
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Post » Sun Sep 04, 2011 7:06 pm

This was an awesome poem, It's nice to see poetry on this Forum we don't get much.

Really? Hmmm...maybe ill do some more or inspire more people to do the same. I am not much of a poet actually. I am a sketch artist primarily.

And Thanks. :)
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Post » Sun Sep 04, 2011 7:05 pm

Alright all done. Thanks for the help I don't know much about poems forms or anything. I just go by ear, so to speak.


I'm not big on poems and their forms either. I just remembered that stuff from English class last year :P
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