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The Story of Galsh

Post » Wed Oct 14, 2009 6:32 am

ESCAPED VULT.


LOCK IT!!
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Jason King
 
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Post » Wed Oct 14, 2009 5:56 am

Well, this is pretty much filled with grammar mistakes, along with the occasional misspelling. Though Word works to fix most misspellings, if you simply have the wrong word inserted, such as there instead of their, it won't catch it. I usually go over my work several times before posting.

Though I do try to avoid commenting on storylines and such things, this one seemed rather... Generic.
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Nick Pryce
 
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Post » Wed Oct 14, 2009 4:17 am

Erm.. i thought that other people can't kick out overseers..
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Suzie Dalziel
 
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Post » Tue Oct 13, 2009 4:41 pm

My review in less that 5 words:

Lame. Needs depth.
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Tina Tupou
 
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Post » Wed Oct 14, 2009 3:58 am

happy tenth birthday son have a shotgun.........BB gun was bad enough, but a shot gun????

hint: STOP!!!!!
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Andrea P
 
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Post » Tue Oct 13, 2009 7:57 pm

More depth, spelling and grammer errors, and rushed. (Don't ever rush a story. It always leads to it failure)
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Jordan Moreno
 
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Post » Wed Oct 14, 2009 1:26 am

Closed for being, oh I don't know, spam?
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Lavender Brown
 
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