So, Deranis what happened after you left the club last night? you seem distraught.

Ambarys. i did something i've never done... last night. i... killed someone. i'm not a murderer i'm just a Thief. the racism in this place is astounding in every aspect. i just came here to celebrate a job well done. i've killed in self defense against bandits and necromancer's. but i took a basically innocent life. those High Elf's and Nords had no right to come in here and start making trouble. the one i killed. was a High Elf. Niranye. she insulted me and my race. i thought i would have a bit of fun in this "Gray Quarter"

Well, you were wrong brother.

it seems that way. give me a bottle of everything. i need to forget this.

Hey, Dark Elf trash!

Get out of here Angrenor!

I go where i please Ambarys. You. new Gray skin.

The name is Deranis. if you call me Gray skin again you'll be crimson skin.

What's that supposed to mean? you trying to pick a fight? you think you can take me?

You came in here and interrupted us. you're trying to pick a fight. and if you remember i kicked your sorry ass across the streets the last time you mouthed off to me.

Alright that's it Gray skin. Hey! Stone fist! come on in.

2 on 1 is nothing. You can't hit me if you can't see me! good thing i have this [show's invisibility potion]

Where'd that milk drinker go.

Behind you. [uppercut]

Stone fist! No!

[Leg sweep]

Aggh!

What is going on in here?! You know there's no fighting under the watch of the guard! You. Angrenor stand up.

Yes?

What's the meaning of this? You and This beggar were fighting that's a big fine. that's assault. and since neither of you can pay it you're going away for a long time.

We weren't fighting eachother. We were fighting the damned Gray Skins!

I only see two of you on the ground. and Ambarys is behind the counter. Now. There was a High Elf woman murdered this morning or late last night. and i think one of you has something to do with it. Whoever killed her stole her necklace. Empty your pockets.

[Deranis slips the necklace into Angrenor's pocket]

This is absurd. How would i even get in her house? I have no lock picks and i certainly don't have a key!

Really Angrenor? Cause this is her necklace in your pocket.

That's not mine! That could be anyone's necklace.

Then why does it have her name engraved in it? Come with me. You're under arrest for the murder of Niranye and for assault . And you. The other Beggar you're under arrest for assault. You're both going to be locked up for a very long time...

So Deranis. Where were we?

I'd recommend improving on the grammar and taking a more novel style of writing--currently it feels like reading a script, but I don't know who the characters are.

Thanks for the input. did you like the story?