I've been thinking over this character, Tirisi Tilvur, for a long time now, and as such I have a good idea of his personality, etc. I hope that will come through in my writing, though I'm by no means a great author (even if English Language was the only A I got in my GCSEs). I'm a little wary of tackling some more action packed scenes, but I'm willing to take on the challenge provided critique is avalible.
Regarding the alterations, Skyrim is combat based, and so makes for enjoyable enough gameplay, however, having one's protaganist running into a sword swinging rage twice per paragraph is a pain to write, and I'm sure a little predictable to read, so I will cut out some combat in dungeons and such, and hopefully replace it with adequete atmospheric description.
Enjoy!
Tilvur roused, a harsh chill breaking against his staunch features. He opened his eyes and glanced around; he was sat on a wooden carriage, with three nords, one of whom was gagged.
"Hey elf, you're awake" said one, clad in chain mail covered by blue rags "you were trying to cross the border, right? Got caught by that imperial ambush, same as us; and that thief." He turned to look at the second nord, wearing ragged cloth. They looked at each other for a second, before the 'thief' piped up with
"Damn you Stormcloak, Skyrim was fine until you came along; empire was nice and lazy. Had they not been looking for you, I could have stolen that horse and been halfway to Hammerfell by now. He then turned to Tilvur
"Hey there, you and me shouldn't be there, it's these Stormcloaks the empire wants-"
"We're all brothers and sisters in binds now, thief." The man in chain said, before being interrupted by the Legionnaire driving the carriage, calling for silence.
Tilvur groaned, and examined his surroundings, there was no way he was to escape without a blade on hand.
After a moment, the thief said
"What's the matter with him, huh?" gesturing toward the gagged man.
"You watch your tongue, you're speaking to Ulfric Stormcloak, the true high king" growled the soldier, as if he'd taken personal offence at the question. The man revealed as Ulfric simply raised his eyebrow at the exchange.
"Ulfric Stormcloak? The Jarl of Windhelm? You're the leader of the rebellion." responded the thief, though his voice soon dropped as he realised what he'd said "But... If they've captured you... Oh gods, where are they taking us?"
"I don't know where we're going, but Sovngarde awaits."
At this point, Tilvur stopped listening to their conversation, as it mainly consisted of the thief frantically praying for mercy from the entire imperial pantheon.
The carriage drove through the gate of a small nordic town. There was considerable imperial presence, and a few Thalmor agents standing around with some of the higher up legionnaires.
Eventually the carriage pulled up in a small courtyard, with a headsman and block located in the centre.
One by one, the other prisoners poured off their various carriages.
First, the Jarl was called, then the soldier. Upon hearing his name, the thief, Lokir, begged for absolution and ran, and was subsequently shot down by archers.
Then, Tilvur was called.
"You there, step forward." Tilvur obliged. "Who are you?" asked the legionnaire.
"Tirisi Tilvur, of Pell's Gate." growled the elf, "and I am no rebel"
The legionnaire turned to his captain. "What should we do? he's not on the list."
"He goes to the block." The captain responded.
"By your orders, captain." He then turned back to Tilvur. "I'm sorry, we'll ensure your remains are returned to Morrowind."
Tilvur turned to follow the captain to the block, and murmured to the legionnaire:
"Save your pity for one who desires it, child, and I was born in Cyrodiil."
There was then a brief interlude of gloating by the imperial general, announcing that they had captured the leader of the rebels, and thus ended the war.
A priestess of Arkay was then brought forth to give the prisoners their last rites. After she had done so, the captain turned to the prisoners and declared:
"First, the Elf in the rags!"
Reluctantly, Tilvur stepped forward and placed his head on the block.
As the headsman braced for the swing, his life flashed before his eyes, from his childhood in and around the Imperial City, his time spent in Morrowind searching for his father, his interactions with the daedra and the purposeless meandering of his twilight years. In a rare moment of sentimentality, he smiled, and uttered:
"I regret noth-"
"WHAT IN OBLIVION IS THAT?" roared the general from before.
Tilvur opened his eyes and saw the sight of a lifetime. With a crash that could level houses, a huge black dragon perched atop the watch tower. The confusion and panic around it was like a tornado, engulfing the whole town in a whirlwind of terror, but with a tiny area of tranquillity between the dragon and the elf.
Perhaps it was the mind-numbing absurdity of the moment, but Tilvur felt as if the dragon had made eye contact with him, as if they had some kind of ethereal connection which had brought the both to the same place at the same time.
Regardless of fate, the dragon took to the skies, and Tilvur was dragged to his feet by the soldier from earlier.
"YOU, ELF! GET UP, THE GODS WON'T GIVE US ANOTHER CHANCE!" he shouted over the cacophony of panic and orders "GET TO THAT WATCH TOWER!"
The pair of them sprinted across the courtyard and into the tower, where they took temporary respite. Ulfric, the gagged man from before had wrestled both his hands and tongue free, though before he could address Tilvur, he'd run up the stairs toward the top.
There was a gaping hole in the wall, accompanied by scorch marks. Tilvur paused for a moment, examining the scene before him. The dragon was still causing chaos, and the burning building before him seemed an adequate landing platform.
Tilvur leapt from the tower into the flaming inn, rolling as he hit the floor. Another, smaller leap put him on the ground floor, and he ran out into the street. Once out in the open, he got a better idea of what exactly was happening. The imperials were retreating to the keep, as the townspeople cowered in the towers which were dotted around town. On a whim, he decided to follow the soldiers with getting to the keep.
The troops paid him no heed as he sprinted through their lines and into the keep, which was empty.
Rather than hang around for the men who'd attempted to kill him, the elf opted to search through the barracks for some equipment, a search which yielded no more than an iron sword. Nonetheless, he pressed on.
There was no resistance, apart from a small group of rebels which seemed hesitant to even attack, due to Tilvur's aged appearance.
Behind the keep was a cave, which lead to the outside world. The cave was uninhabited, and served as a brilliant location for respite.
"Hey elf, you're awake" said one, clad in chain mail covered by blue rags "you were trying to cross the border, right? Got caught by that imperial ambush, same as us; and that thief." He turned to look at the second nord, wearing ragged cloth. They looked at each other for a second, before the 'thief' piped up with
"Damn you Stormcloak, Skyrim was fine until you came along; empire was nice and lazy. Had they not been looking for you, I could have stolen that horse and been halfway to Hammerfell by now. He then turned to Tilvur
"Hey there, you and me shouldn't be there, it's these Stormcloaks the empire wants-"
"We're all brothers and sisters in binds now, thief." The man in chain said, before being interrupted by the Legionnaire driving the carriage, calling for silence.
Tilvur groaned, and examined his surroundings, there was no way he was to escape without a blade on hand.
After a moment, the thief said
"What's the matter with him, huh?" gesturing toward the gagged man.
"You watch your tongue, you're speaking to Ulfric Stormcloak, the true high king" growled the soldier, as if he'd taken personal offence at the question. The man revealed as Ulfric simply raised his eyebrow at the exchange.
"Ulfric Stormcloak? The Jarl of Windhelm? You're the leader of the rebellion." responded the thief, though his voice soon dropped as he realised what he'd said "But... If they've captured you... Oh gods, where are they taking us?"
"I don't know where we're going, but Sovngarde awaits."
At this point, Tilvur stopped listening to their conversation, as it mainly consisted of the thief frantically praying for mercy from the entire imperial pantheon.
The carriage drove through the gate of a small nordic town. There was considerable imperial presence, and a few Thalmor agents standing around with some of the higher up legionnaires.
Eventually the carriage pulled up in a small courtyard, with a headsman and block located in the centre.
One by one, the other prisoners poured off their various carriages.
First, the Jarl was called, then the soldier. Upon hearing his name, the thief, Lokir, begged for absolution and ran, and was subsequently shot down by archers.
Then, Tilvur was called.
"You there, step forward." Tilvur obliged. "Who are you?" asked the legionnaire.
"Tirisi Tilvur, of Pell's Gate." growled the elf, "and I am no rebel"
The legionnaire turned to his captain. "What should we do? he's not on the list."
"He goes to the block." The captain responded.
"By your orders, captain." He then turned back to Tilvur. "I'm sorry, we'll ensure your remains are returned to Morrowind."
Tilvur turned to follow the captain to the block, and murmured to the legionnaire:
"Save your pity for one who desires it, child, and I was born in Cyrodiil."
There was then a brief interlude of gloating by the imperial general, announcing that they had captured the leader of the rebels, and thus ended the war.
A priestess of Arkay was then brought forth to give the prisoners their last rites. After she had done so, the captain turned to the prisoners and declared:
"First, the Elf in the rags!"
Reluctantly, Tilvur stepped forward and placed his head on the block.
As the headsman braced for the swing, his life flashed before his eyes, from his childhood in and around the Imperial City, his time spent in Morrowind searching for his father, his interactions with the daedra and the purposeless meandering of his twilight years. In a rare moment of sentimentality, he smiled, and uttered:
"I regret noth-"
"WHAT IN OBLIVION IS THAT?" roared the general from before.
Tilvur opened his eyes and saw the sight of a lifetime. With a crash that could level houses, a huge black dragon perched atop the watch tower. The confusion and panic around it was like a tornado, engulfing the whole town in a whirlwind of terror, but with a tiny area of tranquillity between the dragon and the elf.
Perhaps it was the mind-numbing absurdity of the moment, but Tilvur felt as if the dragon had made eye contact with him, as if they had some kind of ethereal connection which had brought the both to the same place at the same time.
Regardless of fate, the dragon took to the skies, and Tilvur was dragged to his feet by the soldier from earlier.
"YOU, ELF! GET UP, THE GODS WON'T GIVE US ANOTHER CHANCE!" he shouted over the cacophony of panic and orders "GET TO THAT WATCH TOWER!"
The pair of them sprinted across the courtyard and into the tower, where they took temporary respite. Ulfric, the gagged man from before had wrestled both his hands and tongue free, though before he could address Tilvur, he'd run up the stairs toward the top.
There was a gaping hole in the wall, accompanied by scorch marks. Tilvur paused for a moment, examining the scene before him. The dragon was still causing chaos, and the burning building before him seemed an adequate landing platform.
Tilvur leapt from the tower into the flaming inn, rolling as he hit the floor. Another, smaller leap put him on the ground floor, and he ran out into the street. Once out in the open, he got a better idea of what exactly was happening. The imperials were retreating to the keep, as the townspeople cowered in the towers which were dotted around town. On a whim, he decided to follow the soldiers with getting to the keep.
The troops paid him no heed as he sprinted through their lines and into the keep, which was empty.
Rather than hang around for the men who'd attempted to kill him, the elf opted to search through the barracks for some equipment, a search which yielded no more than an iron sword. Nonetheless, he pressed on.
There was no resistance, apart from a small group of rebels which seemed hesitant to even attack, due to Tilvur's aged appearance.
Behind the keep was a cave, which lead to the outside world. The cave was uninhabited, and served as a brilliant location for respite.
There it is. It may not be my best work, but I haven't done any creative writing for months, and I was kind of tired when writing it. Critique is more than welcome!
PS. After Alduin attacks, I feel that the quality went down a little, however I simply found it hard to appropriatly describe the actions taking place. As such, I may edit it later, or use it as a model of how I want to avoid writing the subsequent parts.