In the time when Capital Wasteland was a war zone and people kept dying a far away from the war zone lived a men and his family. They scavenged every supply that they could, but that didn't last long so they moved on from place to place and dangers were everywhere starting from Mole rat's until to Super Mutants, but the family survived cause the men was one of the members of Brotherhood of Steel and he left the brotherhood for his family. So now they are at the Super - Duper mart ruins and are looking for some medical supply, food and ammo from dead Raiders and Wastelanders . And this dirty work did the men's son Alex Amory Weston and meanwhile men's wife staid as guard with sniper rifle she's a very good shooter and rarely misses the target. Usually guarding did the men, but now when he has broken his arm and almost died in the fight with the Super Mutant to protect his family, but god was on his side and survived and the men's name is Dallas Weston and he's wife's name is Kerry Weston. Now when the Alex has take care of the dirty work they can move on and when Kerry opened the door she saw a huge group of ghouls coming on them, but it seems that they don't see them and they now are trying to sneak away, but suddenly Alex overturned one of the shopping carts and ghouls started to attack them. They were unstoppable it was like they were hungry for blood and human flesh??

A great deal of spelling and grammatical errors, and the text is in one big chunk which makes it difficult to read. I'd recommend adding a line of space every 3 or 4 sentences. Also, if you have Microsoft Office you should use Word to reduce the amount of errors, if not you can find plenty of sites with the same function. If you do those things this could turn out to be a decent fanfic.

In the time when Capital Wasteland was a war zone and people kept dying a far away from the war zone lived a men and his family. They scavenged every supply that they could, but that didn't last long so they moved on from place to place and dangers were everywhere starting from Mole rat's until to Super Mutants, but the family survived cause the men was one of the members of Brotherhood of Steel and he left the brotherhood for his family. So now they are at the Super - Duper mart ruins and are looking for some medical supply, food and ammo from dead Raiders and Wastelanders . And this dirty work did the men's son Alex Amory Weston and meanwhile men's wife staid as guard with sniper rifle she's a very good shooter and rarely misses the target. Usually guarding did the men, but now when he has broken his arm and almost died in the fight with the Super Mutant to protect his family, but god was on his side and survived and the men's name is Dallas Weston and he's wife's name is Kerry Weston. Now when the Alex has take care of the dirty work they can move on and when Kerry opened the door she saw a huge group of ghouls coming on them, but it seems that they don't see them and they now are trying to sneak away, but suddenly Alex overturned one of the shopping carts and ghouls started to attack them. They were unstoppable it was like they were hungry for blood and human flesh??

'lived a men and his family'
What? It should be 'Lived a man and his family'

'starting from Mole rat's until to Super Mutants, but the family survived cause'
It should be 'Starting from mole rats to Super Mutants, but the family survived because'

'looking for some medical supply'
Should be 'medical supplies'

'And this dirty work did the men's son'
I don't even understand the first part, but the second should be: 'the man's son'

'meanwhile men's wife staid'
You keep saying "men's", but that's not even proper English. It's 'meanwhile the man's wife stayed'

'with sniper rifle she's a very good shooter and rarely misses the target.'
You didn't even make that properly, that's an ongoing sentence... It should look like: 'with a sniper rifle. She's a very good shooter, and rarely ever misses the target."

I want to continue pointing out the errors, but you make them every sentence, from grammar to spelling. Also, this is the MOST cliche story I've ever read. It's totally unoriginal, a family fighting for survival, one of them is an ex-BoS paladin, his wife is the best sniper ever, I mean, it's VERY unoriginal and boring. Nobody wants to read about the best sniper in the world and that boring crap. People want to read about average joes becoming heroes, because if you start with just a hero, there's no story. Edit the story and try to use proper grammar, we don't want stories looking like a five year old made it.

Oh my god. It's a biggest failure that I've ever made.. Sorry folks.I'll try better..

Sorry, man, but it's the truth. Try a different story from a different perspective.

No offence,but this is truly horrible.Please write something that can at least be read before you bother to post next time.This makes no sense,and has a horribly generic plot beneath all the terrible spelling errors.Im not trying to be mean,but this is just plain terrible.