Hey guys, this is my first fan-fic, at least the prologue I'm gonna be adding more soon, if not today, certainly tomorrow. I hope you guys like it, and Constructive Criticism is very appreciated. Oh, and I'm sorry if it lacks detail, the first chapter will likely be with more detail. Enjoy!

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The Wasteland Mercs

"So, what should we do? We can't sit here all day long doing absolutely nothing." I asked my friends. "Good question." Replied Johnny. We are here in our little shack, positioned near Megaton. We're all a team, you could call us mercenaries. We usually do work for the people of the Wasteland, as far as i know. From little errands, to mutant extermination jobs. There's 5 of us. Me, James. I'm the youngest in the team, I'm 21 years old. I usually serve the team as a petty fighter, since i recently joined the team. I use the normal Leather Armor. It has some holes and cuts in it, but it was still usable. I use weapons which i find, but the team has to approve it first. Right now I'm equipped with a Hunting rifle, 10mm pistol and a Combat knife. Doc Lester (we call him Lessy) was our Medic and Scientist. He also repairs our equipment when the need arises. His choice of weaponry are usually handguns, since he has to carry a bunch of meds. Our Sniper, Adam, was of British origin. He came to America in search of his cousins, but he found their mutilated body parts on the floor of their safehouse they had on the outskirts of D.C. Ted was our Big Guns expert, and also our Mechanic. He used to be a Brotherhood Outcast, but he didn't want to be with those guys. He told us they made him pissed, so he "gave" them some bullets as a goodbye gift, and then he left. Our last team member is Johnny (aka Napalm). He's a explosives expert. He is let's say... A bit crazy. His choice of weaponry is, you guessed it. Explosives, but he also uses a 10mm Submachine gun. We also have a girl in our team, Zoey. She's usually here in our shack. She cooks for us, when we're hungry. Zoey sometimes tags along with us, just for research. She was a scientist before, but abandoned the workplace since everyone from her lab decided to join the Enclave, except her. We don't have a name, but we just call ourselves "The Mercs".

After waiting for 5 minutes, which seemed like 5 hours, Zoey finally said something. "We should make something which would help more people of the Wastes. I know we do a lot of stuff to the people, but we need to do something big, something great." We all nodded, and agreed. "How about we collect Purified Water, and make our own water caravans?" Asked Ted. "Naw, not big enough..." Said Johnny. "How about we make our own settlement?" I suggested. Everyone nodded. "That's a great idea, James!" Replied Lester. "Hehe, yeah. I agree. But, we would need to get our hands on a G.E.C.K. if we want a successful settlement. As far as i know, the Brotherhood of Steel has the only G.E.C.K." Said Adam. "Hey, wait a minute! I remember when i was with you guys, i was on some terminal, can't remember where it was tho, i read that every Vault was issued with a G.E.C.K.! That means we could try to scavenge one from an abandoned Vault!" Said Zoey. You could hear the excitement in her voice. "Who says it would still be there?" Replied Ted. "Well... I heard rumors about a secret vault which is near Vault-Tec. It was meant to be a Test Vault, but at the end they let people inside.
I don't know what state it's in, but i have heard that the inhabitants didn't take the G.E.C.K. with them." Said the Doc. We we're all amazed with this, a secret Vault which not many people know of, and we are going to gonna go explore it? I can't wait! "Well, okay then guys, we better take our supplies and leave for the Vault-Tec ruins!" Excitedly yelled Johnny.

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Interesting, I'll give you that.

Firstly, the way you just went ahead and listed off every member like that, weapons and such, was a bit boring. As a fairly decent writer, I try and go by the rule; "Show don't tell." So rather than telling us Naplam is crazy, have him do something crazy, if you catch my drift.

Other than that, (and a few, minor grammatical errors) it seems good. Keep it up

Chapter 1 is done, sorry for waiting so long Ribbotson, thanks for the advice, I'll keep that in mind next time ^^

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Chapter One - Finding the Vault

Doc went to take the meds out of our First Aid closet, while i was going to the basemant to take some ammo and my weapons. I twisted the rusty knob on the door which led to the basemant. A click sound followed, and not soon after, the door made an irritating, creaking sound whilst i was opening it. I flicked the light switch, and the whole basemant illuminated itself with the little light bulb hanging from the ceiling. I went down the metal stairs. Now i was in the middle of the basemant. I walked to my locker, then opened it up. Inside was my hunting rifle, a 10mm, and some ammo for both weapons. The hunting rifle was old, it had some broken parts, which we're "fixed" with duct-tape. Luckily, it was still usable. I put the rifle on my back, and the gun on my right hip. I put the ammo in my deep pockets, and went upstairs. "Hey kid, you ready?" Asked Ted. I just nodded, and we all went towards the door. Right before the Doc touched the door knob, Zoey said: "Hey, wait guys! Take me with you, please! The Vault's terminals may have some data which could be good for my research!" The guys starred at her with a questioning look. "Okay. But you better take a weapon, otherwise you will be no use to us whatsoever." Said Johnny. Zoey quickly took her two magnums, and went outside with us. "Okay guys, everyone ready?" Asked Adam with a smile on his face. We all reloaded and nodded. "Okay then, let's go towards Vault-Tec!"

We walked for about 15 long minutes, when suddenly a camp appeared on the horizon. "Hey, look guys. A camp, up there on that hill!" I said. Everyone looked up the hill. "Adam, you know what to do." Said Johnny. Adam nodded with a half-smile on his face. He took his sniper from his back and aimed towards the camp. With his scope, he could clearly see what was up there. "Hmm.. Let's see... A couple of raiders, one in a guard tower... I can silently take a few out, without anyone noticing." Said Adam while scoping out the camp with his sniper. "Okay, guys, prepare your weapons, and silently go up the hill after Adam takes out the guards in front of the camp." Replied Ted. We all took our main weapons out, while Adam was putting on his silencer. After that we all crouched, and Adam started aiming towards the camp. A silent sound came out of the silencer, which was followed by 2 more sounds. "Okay guys, all done. You go, I'll stay here to make sure no reinforcements come. After you're done, signal me, so i can come up." Said Adam. He continued to watch over the camp with his sniper, while we went up the hill. When we got up the hill, Doc suggested: "We should just storm the place, you know, element of surprise. Johnny, i know how much you love explosives, so you throw a grenade inside, doesn't matter what kind, and then we will all run inside and shoot the hell out of anything we see." Johnny nodded and prepared his grenades. "Johnny. We said only one grenade. Not five." Said Ted. "But, but... Boom, boom..." Replied Johnny with a sad face. He put his spare grenades back, and kept only one Nuka Grenade. He took out the safety pin, and threw the grenade inside the camp.

The grenade hit the ground in front of a poor raider. 3 seconds later, the bomb exploded, and the poor raider's body parts flew all over the camp. A little blood splattered all over my face. I quickly cleaned it off with my sleeve. After i cleaned it off, suddenly out of nowhere, a raider appears in front of me, with a combat knife. He jumped on me. I was, of course, not ready for such an encounter, so he knocked me on the floor. I was completely disabled. He was sitting on my legs, and my arms. He raised his hand so he could stab me. Suddenly, his fist got severed and fell on the floor. The raider started screaming, and his hand bled. The blood was falling all over me, like it was some rain. I pushed the raider away from me, and when i pushed him away from me, Doc came to me and helped me get up. My hearth was pounding now. I saw a raider rushing towards me with a Ripper. I quickly pulled out my 10mm gun, since my hunting rifle was on the floor, and shot him in the hearth. He fell right in front of me. I saw a sniper which was in a guard tower aiming at Zoey. I took my hunting rifle and aimed towards the sniper with my iron sight. I wasn't a very good marksman, but it's worth a try. I pulled the trigger, and luckily, my bullet went straight into the sniper's head. Zoey saw it and said: "Hehe, thanks James!" I just smiled at her. And shot another guy which was at the exit of the camp. This was the last raider, i think.

"Well, i think our work here is done. Loot what you think is worth looting, and get here in 5 minutes." Said Ted. We all spread around the camp. I went to the shelves which we're overlooking the fridge. On the shelf we're bottles of Whisky, Vodka and Beer. The downer shelf had some Aqua Pura. They probably looted it off a water caravan. I took a few bottles of Aqua Pura and put it in my backpack, and i took one to drink now. I opened the bottle while i transferred to the fridge. I drank the water while i was looking what was in the fridge. As soon as i opened the fridge, i smelled the disgusting smell of rotting food. I didn't even proceed to open it, I closed it instantly. I finished off the bottle of water i had in my hands, then i went to the meeting place. "Okay guys, hope you got what you needed, time we go straight to the unknown Vault. Let's go." Said Doc. We all went for the exit and into the fearsome Wasteland.

[5 hours later]

"Hey guys! A cave entrance! It must be the door that leads to the Vault entrance. Let's go." I said. We all readied our weapons, and entered inside. After walking for a minute trough the strangely warm cave, we got to it. We got to the Vault. Johnny said: "Well guys, i think we made it..."
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Hope it ain't too long or too boring =P

Excellent m8! =] The idea of a new settlement is quite exciting. But please use 'I' instead of 'i' which you did in places. Other than that, great ")

Ugh big wall of text. Put it into paragraphs, maybe then I'll read it.

Okay, i put Chapter One into some more paragraphs.

Sorry for double post, but if you guys have any ideas, feel free to share with me. I would appreciate it, like which enemies would you like to see in the Vault... etc...

Try not to use run on sentences. I saw one.

I like the idea, sounds awesome. But just as the guy said, replace the 'i' with 'I', ok?

Otherwise, it is VERRY NICEEE

Hehe, thanks. Believe it or not, before I thought "I" was a lower-case letter. I guess I didn't adapt to it yet, since i was saying "i" for more then 7 years xD



Thanks, I will try to fix those run sentences ^^

Sorry for double post, but Chapter 2 is done! This time they investigate a part of the Vault. I hope you like it.
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Chapter 2 - The Vault part 1

"Well, let's go inside." I said. Doc went towards the control panel. When he got there, he said: "Umm... Guys, this is no ordinary control panel. This one has a little screen, i think it's for entering a password. I ain't really good at hacking, so this is out of my league. Zoey?" Zoey nodded and went to the control panel. She just smiled like it was something normal. She pressed some buttons and a holographic keyboard appeared. She started to type on it. Various sounds came out after she pressed the "Enter" button. We waited there for half an hour, when suddenly a sound we haven't heard before came out of the computer. "Success..." Said Zoey while smiling. I could hear a mechanism from the inside. Suddenly the Vault door started opening. This was a strange Vault door. This one doesn't have a number written on it. There are some letters, but they are pretty hard to read, since the Vault is fairly old. I think it says... "Danger!" Then there's some word i cannot read. After that it says Hazard.

The door made a very painful screeching sound. My ears hurt now. Me and the guys looked around a bit after the door opened, then went inside. There was this foul smell inside. I can't put my finger on what kind of smell it is, or where it's coming from. As we we're going down the stairs, a strange sound could be heard. Like a scream. We we're all alerted, so we raised our weapons. We took small and slow steps to get down the stairs. When we got down, Ted (since he was first), peeked behind the corner. Suddenly some strange, zombie-like creature jumped on Ted's face and wanted to bite him. Luckily, Ted was strong, so he threw down the creature with no problem. Now i could see the creature's face, it was a ghoul. Ted took out his 10mm gun and shot the creature in the face. It still wasn't dead, so Ted shot him 3 more times. The creature was surely dead now.

"Ugh, stupid ghouls. Seems we gotta watch out for them now..." Said Ted. We went further into the Vault. Strangely, we didn't see a ghoul or hear anything. Suddenly, a strange voice came from the door which was on our right. "James, check it." Said Johnny. *gulp* I put my rifle on my back and took my gun out. Okay... I hope there's nothing hostile inside... I started opening the door, at first slowly, then i opened it quickly and pointed the gun inside. What the- People? They didn't attack me so i guess they are friendly. "Who are you?" I asked them. "We? We are the only survivors in this hellhole. I'm Andy, and this is my friend, Rob." Andy had short black hair, and a rough goatee. Rob had medium-length brown hair. He had a medium build, almost muscular, unlike Andy, which was pretty muscular. Both Rob and Andy we're tall. They seem like good fighters. Ted walked into the room in which Rob and Andy we're. "Well, since we are looking for something, and you lived in this Vault, can you help us?" Said Ted. "Sure, but what are you looking for?" Asked Rob. "Hehe, the G.E.C.K." Rob looked at us like we we're crazy. "The G.E.C.K? Haha, I don't know if it's still here. But, ok. Worth a try. What do you need it for?" Ted smiled and replied: "We are planning to start a settlement here in the Wastes. This one would have healthy soil, in which we could plant seeds to make our own food." Rob smiled. Andy looked like he didn't care. His mind was in the clouds. I immediately disliked the guy. Adam seems to be looking at Andy like he dislikes him too, but my other team mates don't seem to care. "Well, let's go then!" Said Rob. We all went towards the Living Quarters.

[20 minutes later...]

We have been walking for some time now, we encountered a few ghouls, but nothing special. Andy was in the lead. We are going to the Living Quarters now. "Hehe, guys, with my intelligence, you will never fall into a trap, nor will I trigger any. You know, I never triggered a trap in my whole life. I always look where I step and I'm always cautious." Bragged Andy. Ugh, he was so boring. I hate his guts. "Okay, time to get into the Living Quarters, which are past this door." Said Andy. He pressed on a button next to the door, and walked inside. Suddenly 6 vials of unknown contents fell on him. There was enough inside to cover his all body. It looked like his skin was burning. He was unleashing horrid and painful screams. Rob said: "Oh no... It looks like he got sprayed with the... T-Virus..."
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I know the T-Virus is from Resident Evil, but it ain't that one. You'll see in Chapter 3 ^^ Also, thanks to my good friend Adam for giving me ideas, cheers mate.

wow sounds pretty good looking forward to reading the rest :gun: stay back zombies

It's a new line every time someone new speaks.

E.G

"Hi Sally." I said.

"Hey Albert." She replied.

OMG I LUV THIS .

MAEK A CHAPTAR 3!

Hehe, glad you like it. i will post one in a couple of days, not tommorow, sorry =\

@ Aussie_Made: Well, I'm gonna fix that in the future, but i write like this since books and stories from my country have this way of writing.

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It just helps to understand who's talking, sometimes it can get a bit confusing. Otherwise it's a good story