Intro



Hello there. My name is Marcas Norman. I am a simple wastelander. The date I discovered this legend was December 12, 2257. That day was the day that I first heard of a old pre-war tale. It was in The Drunken Mirelurk, a bar in what used to be Tampa, Florida. I was getting drunk. Big time. They have great whiskey there... but back to the story. Not many people were in there that day, just a few of the regulars.

I was relaxing in there, drinking some scotch, when I heard it. The two people sitting next to me were talking about a story. A story of immense wealth. I began to listen to the tale. It was of a city, made compleatly out of gold. The streets, the houses, the stores, everything! They called it El Dorado. But, what caught my ear most is that they mentioned that something like it may exsist out here, in this wasteland of earth. They started arguing about it.

"Bah! Something like that? A city made of wealth? Bah!" One man said.

"Its true! My friend said he saw it with his own eyes!" The other man fought back with.

"So why didnt he bring it with him?"

"The Cave it was in began to collapse!"

I had heard enough. This sounded intersting, and I was drunk. I stood up, pointed at them and said "Gentlemen, I bet I could find this El Dorado of the Wastes, and to prove it, I'll bring back whatevers in there!"

I didnt know what I was getting into, but later I regretted drinking that last bottle of scotch.


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Sorry the intro is so short, but I havnt had enough time to make it longer. Chapter one SHOULD be up sometime tomorrow, if not the day after because I dont have accsess to Word yet, but I will tomorrow

I honestly think this will be a great story.
Hurry up with that first chapter!

Sounds like an epic story!
I'd like to know more about this city, does it really exist?
Keep on writing

Nice writing, a few spelling errors though:

compleatly
intersting

The People have spoken, so here is Chapter One.
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Chapter One: Finding a Lead

After I said that I would find El Dorado, they looked at each other, wide eyed. Moments later, I saw one of them trying to hide a smile. Suddenly, the one that claimed it was just a legend cracked up laughing, and the other one followed.

"Kid, if you can get us a picture of it, I'll pay you 5000 caps!" The one who said it was real replied to me. "Besides, how in gods name will you find a city of wealth that only a few men have laid eyes upon? I can't imagine many people have seen it, and those that have probably won't wanna tell a complete stranger like you!"

He was right. I thought about it for a minute, scratched my shaved head, and looked at the men. "Were can I find this friend of yours that saw El Dorado?" I said to the man.

"He lives all the way in Miami!" The man replied. Miami! I had never been there, but I had been told that it had amazing metro tunnels. So, in a hurry, I put 20 caps down on the bar to pay for my drinks, and ran out, towards my house to prepare for the journey to Miami.

I burst through my door, which I never keep locked and got into my room. My eyes scanned the room quickly, and I saw my old, worn, pre-war duffle bag, that I always have when I go on long trips. I walked over to it and opened it up, only to see it empty.
What the Hell? This should have my 10mm in it! I thought. So I looked left and right, hunting for my gun.

I looked on the floor for it, and I saw its shape under my bed. I grabbed it and wiped the dust off. I hadn't used it in a while, so I shot it at my ceiling to make sure it still worked. It shot fine. I turned the safety on, shoved it and a few more clips for it in my bag, and put my combat knife in its sheath. It looked like I had everything, as I had at least 200 caps inthe side pockets of my bag so I opened the door of my house and set out.

No sooner had I walked out when I saw a radroach. I hadn't eaten in a while, so I walked over to it, pulled out my knife, and stabbed its small head. I managed to get some meat from its corpse, so I put it in my bag, and walked towards the Coast. Someone there that I knew could give me a boat ride to near Miami, and I could walk the rest of the way. But, as I was walking, I heard a noise in the sky. I looked up to see what all the commotion was, and I saw a vertibird, heading south-east. I thought nothing of it, knowing that it was The Enclave's and that people that mess with The Enclave disappear. So I continued my journey, not knowing what I was getting myself into...

This is going to be intense.

Chapter Two: The City of Rinpo


"Marcas! Haven't seen you in a LONG while!" Ricos voice rang in my ear. Rico was the guy I was talking about earlier. He owned an impressive boat, one of the best in the U.S. Me and him have a long history. Ive ridden on his boat almost every time I go out of Florida.

"Hey Rico. Hows it hangin?" I said to him.

"Pretty good! The caps keep rollin in lately man!" He replied "So, Marcas, were you off to today?"

"Miami. Searching for Something."

"And that something is?"

"Ill tell you one the way"

I wont bore you with the details of our trip, but I told him about El Dorado, and how I was searching for it. He just called me a crazy ass. The journey took about 2 hours. When we finally landed, I payed Rico his 100 caps. We said out goodbyes and went our separate ways. Once I started walking, I realized I had no idea were was going. All the man at the bar said was that he lived at Miami. So I walked over to a nearby rock.Of I got on top of it, I would have an extended view of the land. I climbed up and, to my delight, I saw a city, a Jewel of the wasteland, nearby, about a 30 minute walk. Its walls wern't made of scrap, but actual stone.

I walked up to the city's gates, I was greeted by a man dressed in combat armor.

"Hold it, wastelander! Whats your business in Rinpo?" The man said to me. Rinpo? What kind of name is that? I thought to myself. "I'm just Looking for someone" I told him. He let me in, although he looked afraid of me when he first laid eyes on me. So I set out into the city of Rinpo.

Damn. Good story. Is it going to packed with adventure, daring jumps, wild firefights, and hot women?

You know what would be great? A new chapter :hehe:

Good story! I like that the chapters aren't really, really long like some stories are.

Chapter 3: The Man who saw the City

As I walked towards the gates to the city, I noticed how the guard was looking at me with suspicion. Apperently, they didnt like outsiders. But, as soon as I walked into the city, I would have to say that I was disapointed. The walls looked good on the outside, but inside the city was just a few shacks. I sighed, and proceeded to find the boss of the town. But I hadnt even walked three steps before I was abruptly knocked down.

"Hey, watch it, [censored]!" I heard a female voice yell in my ear.

"Well, sorry." I said, as calmly as possible. I looked at the lady that knocked me over. She had long, dark hair, and looked like an experianced wastelander. Id seen more beautiful women, but she was in my top 10. Before I could ask her name, she ran off, out the gates, clutching something in her hands.

"Jeez, what a-" I was saying, but before I could finish, a man behind me started speaking

"Hah! Need help stranger?" He said, in a Texan accent, while putting his hand out to help me up. I got up, and thanked him. "No problom, stranger! So, what are you doin in my city?"

"Your city?" I said. Apperantly this guy was the mayor.

"Yep, my city. Been the mayor since my daddy died!" He said, a little too cheerfully.

"Thats... great. Can you help me find someone? He claims to have seen a mystical city." I said to the mayor. Suddenly, his expression changed from a smile to a frown.

"Someone else came by earlier looking for him. A woman. The guy lives in that house over there." He said, pointing to what looked like the worst shack in town.

So I walked over there, and opened to door.

"Hello?" I said. It was as dark as night in there. I could barley see the outline of a man sitting on the floor.

"You.... you come for it? I know you have. Many do. None forget." A voice that seemed to come from the man. "Listen to my words, stranger. My eyes have seen what they should not have. The city of El Dorado. The day will come when other see it. Then, the ground shall shake, the sky shall storm, and the great beast shall come from the water!" He yelled, then went back into silence. I didnt know what this meant at the time, but I knew it meant something.

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Sorry for not posting for a long time. Had some things going on.

Nice story! Really liking this, keep it up but don't rush .

Ahhhhhhhhh I forgot about this! You finally added a new chapter yay.

Chapter 4:Worst Day Ever

I sighed. I had gone all the way up here only to hear a crazy man talk about the ground shaking. I turned around to go out the door, when his voice came form behind.

"Wait" He said. I spun around to see what he wanted.

"You look like someone that can find this city." He said, and pulled something out of his back pocket. "Here is a map. A map to El Dorado. It is incomplete."

I looked at it. It had Rinpo on it, near the bottom. Then it showed a small chunk of Miami and most of the great sea. But it had a trail of lines on it. It led into the great sea, but the map was cut in half. The lines just stopped in the great sea. It was a start. So I walked out of the door, suprised to see the mayor was gone. So I went to go out the gates and find Rico. He usually stayed a day or two so he could get supplies, or find another customer. But as I was walking out of the gates, I was tackled down.

"Gah!" I yelled as I fell to the ground. It was a man dressed in a pre-war hawian shirt, some shorts, and a black mask. He pulled out a wrench. It looked like a mugger. I reached for my duffle-bag, to grab my pistol, but he kicked it far enough away so it was out of my reach. So, while still on the ground, I grabbed his leg and made him fall. His wrench was still tight in his hand, but I had tiem to get up. He swung at my knees, but missed and managed to hit a pipe instead. So I stomped on his arm, hoping to give him some pain, and it worked. He howled in pain. SO I grabbed the wrench, and hit him in the forehead. As hard as possible. He was out cold. I grabbed my duffle-bag, and pulled him to the middle of town. The mayor would see him there later.

I exited the city, and started making my way to Rico's dock, hoping he was still there. As I was walking, I noticed the guard was looking at me with suspicion still. I ignored it and kept going. It was a boring walk, as nothing went anywhere near me. As a matter of fact, the only thing that happend was me tripping on a rock and finding a bottle cap. But, when I finnaly made it..... words cannot express my anger. I saw Rico leaving. And the best part? On his boat was the same damn woman I saw earlier. They were headed towards where the map showed.

At this point, all I could say is "Oh, that son of a..."

Ok, Im not gonna be able to post as often as I would like due to this thing called 'School'. But I need some input fir the next chapter, as I have found a loose end. Would you rather read about a journy through the metro tunnels, or a battle on the water?

This is great! I would love to hear about a battle on the water!