Prequel
"Clay get your ass over here and shot these [censored]s" Yelled Billy.

"Yes sir" Clay said.

Clay shot his gun at the group of Raiders ahead.

"Hey Raiders like the taste of lead"

He continued to shoot at the group, he emptied his clip.

"Crap out of ammo, Jacob cover me"

"OK I'll be right there" Jacob said while running over to Clay.

"Crap I don't have anymore bullets Jacob do you have any 5.56mm clips" asked Clay.

"No, do you not have any other gun's" asked Jacob.

"No all I have is this gun and a firkin trench knife" Clay replied.

"Wow maybe next time you will be more prepared dumb ass" Jacob said.

"Aw screw you" Clay chuckled.

"Nah you would like that to much Clay" laughed Jacob.

Jacob stood up from his cover and looked at the group of Raider's, he lifted his missile launcher and shot it at the group.

The raiders body blew to pieces and went flying.

"Now ain't that a sight"

"Goddamnit there bloods on my armor" yelled Billy.

"Aww poor baby" chuckled Clay.

"Yeah [censored] you at least I care about what I look like jerk off" Billy yelled.

"Yeah whatever you two lets go collect our pay" said Jacob.

The group walked back to the man who gave the contract, a few hours later they arrived at his home near the side of the river.

"Hey you we got rid of those raiders now were is our caps" said Billy.

"Right here" said the man while dropping a bag of caps on the table.

"How much is in there" asked Clay.

"Five thousand like we agreed on" said the man.

"Count em' Jacob" said Clay.

"What screw you I ain't counting that much caps just trust the guy Jesus Clay what has happened to you" Jacob said.

"Fine whatever do not blame me when we get ripped off" said Clay.

"Thank you" said Billy.

"No thank you" said the man.

The group walked out of the house and started to walk back to there home on the way there Billy and Jacob stopped.

"What the hell are you guys doing lets keep moving" said Clay.

"No Clay we have had enough of you alright now you are not getting any of these caps in fact were you are going you won't need them" said Billy.

"What the hell are you talking about" said Clay.

"I'm sorry" said Billy as he lifted his shotgun.

Clay shot his gun at Clay's chest the impact of the bullets sent him flying back.

"OK let's get the hell out of here" said Billy.

The two ran off to the east.

Well there is quite a few things to address.

1. Spelling and Punctuation: There are many spelling and punctuation errors throughout the entire chapter.

2. Emotion: There is none, it's all so robotic.

3. Description: Again there is none, I have no idea where they are and it's really confusing.

4. Prequel? Do you mean prequel or prologue? Both are very different things.

There are more problems with this but you should probably address ^ these ^ first.

Aussie has a point. This seemed alright, but the grammar and punctuation errors took away from it. Work on that, and this should be pretty promising.

Chapter 1 Escape


Two day's later...............

Clay awoke in a dark room with the smell of mold in the air. He looked around and saw no one or maybe he just could not see, never the less he got up from the mold filled bed he had been resting on and stretched his arm's.

"Were the hell am I" thought Clay.

He walked around looking for a light switch he found none but he did find a door as he opened the door the light shined in his eyes causing him to fall back, as he fell back he heard a clamp hit the floor. "What the hell was that" thought Clay, he felt his neck and there was some mechanical collar around it.

"[censored]" Yelled Clay. He walked back to the door and went outside and saw him and many other's in a slave pen.

"GOD DAMNIT" He screamed as he kicked the cage door.

"Hey you quiet down ass wipe" said a man next to him.

Clay turned around and saw the man next to him he was at least in his 70's but clay did not care he tackled him to the ground and stared to pound his fist's into the old man's face. The slaves all crowded around the fight and attracted the attention of the slaver's. Three of the slaver's ran into the pen to break up the fight, they pulled Clay off the old man and restrained him. The old man's face was full of blood.

"Take him to the infirmary and fix him up and as for you what the hell do you think you are doing damaging the merchandise for you dumb ass we make good money off of chumps like him" said the slaver.

"Let me go" said Clay.

"What you have got to be kidding me let you go, ha ha ha you think were going to let a fighter like you that's worth over a thousand caps go just because you asked that's funny" said the slaver.

Clay elbowed the slaver who was holding him in the stomach causing him to let go, Clay turned around and kneed the man in the groin and took his gun. He pointed it at the other man and placed it on his fore head.

"You tell your other buddy there to back off and let me go or I'll blow your brains out right here" said Clay in a calm but sinister tone.

"You heard the man Jerkov let him go" said the slaver.

"Sorry but I am unable to do that and you no that Euology said himself never let the slaves go" Jerkov said.

"Come on he is going to kill me Jerkov he is going to kill your old buddy John" said John pleading for Jerkov to let Clay go.

"I get Euology he decide not me" said Jerkov as he walked out of the pen leaving the door open on accident.

"Take this collar off of me now" said Clay.

"OK fine just don't kill me here is the key" said John as he handed the key to Clay.

Clay switched hands with the gun he was holding, the gun was now in his left hand and he was using the key with his left hand he unlocked the collar.

"You get in that building now alright" said Clay.

"Fine but I must ask why" said John.

"I'll kill you if you don't that's why" said Clay. They both entered the building.

"Now take off your armor and mask and put these on" Clay said as he took off his shirt and pants.

"Alright" said John while taking off the Leather Armor he was wearing and the Psycho Tic Helmet.

The two exchanged outfit's and Clay put the Collar on the slaver.

"What the hell are you doing what the hell you will never get away with this what the hell" Yelled John.

"Shut UP Slave" said Clay.

Clay left the slave quarters and started to walk out of paradise fall's.

He got out safe and alive. "I cannot believe I got out" thought Clay.

He started to walk to Arefu he knew many places from his day's as a merc. He started to wonder if he would ever find the ones that betrayed him and show them what pain is or if he would never see them again he may never know but he was not about to just stand around and do nothing.

This can be closed I am to occupied with the Manhattan War