Character Review

Post » Mon Jul 02, 2012 12:38 am

I know this may be a little unprofessional if not really unprofessional. But I was wondering if any of the RPers could review my character. I'm new to the forums but I'm a little experienced in RPing. I was at the SWTOR RP Forums before they completely redid the website. I'm so used to their being a thread for Reviewing Characters and creating Characters, I didn't how to see if mine sets the average character.

So pretty much all I want to know if its Elligible or Needs work. And if it Needs Work please tell me what I need to do.


Name: Engar Forkov

Race: Nord

Age: 54

Birthsign: The Warrior

Class: BlackSmith/Trainer

Class Description: One of the finest Smiths in all of Skyrim, but he may be more well-known for his great skill and ability to teach how to use a sword and dagger.

Skills: Before becoming a BlackSmith, Engar was a renowned navigator in Skyrim. He studied the ways of the stars and constellations when he was a young man. He is also a worthy opponent with his mighty blade.

General Appearance: Engar stands out in the crowd for his height and stockiness. He is certainly intimidating in combat, but many can also tell from his appearance that he isn’t really that fast due to his stockiness which may also be a weakness.

Height: 6’7

Build: Stocky 260 lbs

Eye Color: Blue

Skin: White and rough. (Yeah…)

Hair: Black Hair that goes down to his shoulders, but is very unneat and messy.

Face: A thick scraggly beard that follows with a diagonal scar going from his right eye to the left corner of his mouth.

Clothing/Armour: A thick red coloured wool shirt under a typical BlackSmith’s Apron. Brown Leathered’ gloves and plain blue pants. With a pair of old brown boots that look like they have been recovered from an apocalypse.

Weapons: He has two weapons that he favors above all else. A very strong double handed hammer or “Betsy” that he uses for his job occasionally. And a heavy Sword.

Weapon Description: His sword was given to him by his father who was a mercenary for hire. He was given the sword as a reward for capturing a certain fugitive. Engraved on the blade of the sword is ancient writing called Akavir. The sword was discovered in a destroyed transport that is believed date back to the First Era. The Sword is nothing special other than being a regular sword, but Engar believes it was used for decoration. So he doesn’t really use except keep it holstered on him even when in battle. The Sword really isn’t special, in fact it has proven to be useless too many times. Engar keeps it for good luck and that’s pretty much it.
His Hammer is made of the strongest rock and iron he had ever seen. His initials are engraved in the handle and Betsy is engraved on the stone.

Biography/History:
Deke Forkov, Father of Engar, was an infamous mercenary for hire. A Mercenary who went out and traveled among the various places of Tamriel on Jobs. That was until he had met, Krei, A female Cook who worked for one of Deke’s employers. The Employer offered her as reward for a certain job. There relationship was astonishing as they worked together and then when they grew old they decided to return to their homeland in Skyrim. Upon their arrival, they were ambushed by Bandits. Deke slaughtered them except for one, and that was because that one wasn’t a man anymore by the time he was finished dueling Deke. It was a werewolf, and it picked Deke apart. Krei fled after her witnessing his death.

Krei soon found she was in fact pregnant. She cared for the baby and settled down in Falkreath. That baby grew to be Engar.
Engar at 20 years old left his mom and ventured out into the vast world of Skyrim. He traveled for years, coming across Skyrim’s undesirables and Skyrim’s desirable loot. He bought and sold, killed and saved, things that came across his path. Werewolves, Chests, Giants, Gold, Trolls, and Weapons.

He met a man named Charles Tunis, a navigator for a small band of merchants. Charles invited Engar to the group, and soon they had a father-son relationship. He taught Engar about navigation using the stars and how to hunt properly.

They settled down in Solitude and they were in the armory business selling arms and armor for 10 years. It wasn’t until Charles died of old age did Engar leave. He settled down in Riften with his Smithing materials. And continued the business of being a BlackSmith.
One night, he got robbed. Engar chased the thief into the sewers where he was met by 2 other thieves. He bashed their heads in with his hammer. It wasn’t days later until he realized that the thieves were members of the Thieves Guild. He soon was visited by guards telling him to leave.

Surprised by the threat, he laughed at the thought of the Guild being a threat. But then he was soon constantly being visited by thieves. Months passed and Engar soon realized that he had pretty much nothing left except for his Forge.
This angered him beyond anything before. He wanted to strike back, he wanted to march into the Riften Underground and bash the skulls of just about every Thief that calls that god awful place ‘home’.

Personality: Engar is very quiet, but he is also short-tempered but he is a good man at heart and will aid those in need of saving. He’s only killed three men in his entire life, the only thing that scares him is that he actually loved the thrill of the fight. He is a natural born killer at heart, but he loves his hammer more than anything else in the world.




P.S. Sorry if I messed up with my paragraph making, I made this on Word and when I pasted it on here it all became one humongous paragraph.

P.S. P.S.: The Background Ending is weird because I am thinking about making an RP where pretty much "the citizens of Riften strike back".(I know, lame, but it was a thought that came to me)


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Lindsay Dunn
 
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Post » Mon Jul 02, 2012 12:11 am

Nothing wrong with that, but you could put all these:

General Appearance:
Height:
Build:
Eye Color:
Skin:
Hair:
Face:

Into one thing, Appearance.


But I'm unsure what this character is supposed to be for. :shrug:
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