Its basically a RP.
I just don't know what to have it done about, I don't know a full back story.
So, This is gonna be short, Until i expand it. k? gud.

2267, Nearly One-Hundred years ago was when the world become the god forsaken hell hole it is today. In 2077 a Normal Day, Birds in the sky, Clouds, Green trees and Mushroom Clouds from Nuclear Bombs, Ahhh..Dont you just miss the smell of Nuclear Explosion? Now, This new Radio Station is being Broad casted although the wastes. Enclave Radio or whatsy whosey. There Commander or "President" John Henry Eden has swore that the "Enclave" will launch an Invasion. Lets just call it was it is, Extortion and Thievery. City's have been taken over bye Solders from the Enclave, and sadly enough the one place in the entire Wasteland that has caught the eye of Eden and this Colonel Augustus Autumn. Cliff (Si-air-cliff is as its Pronounced.)

Seircliff, A town not known bye many right on the edge off the Wasteland, Not far from Vault 87. Underground, Like a Vault but much Secure, Cleaner and Protected until Project Invasion. Eden is corrupted. Once The Mayor of Seircliff heard he organized a Protection Squad. Seir Serpents. A riot prevention squad a S.W.A.T if you will, Enclave Troops have been picking off the Seir Serpents oneby one ready to take Seircliff. The Mayor is examining one final plan. Project S.R.M.F; Seircliff Republic Military Force.

Eden heard of this plan and would not stand for it, neither would Autumn. Autumn organized some Enclave Solider and attacked Seircliff, hard. Attacking Seircliff hard, the S.R.M.F were to Powerless to stop the attack, Left, Right and Center S.R.M.F Solders dying. After the attack, Citizens trained hard to stop this from happening again. Now, S.R.M.F has returned again. Now with its Most Elite Members.
Tell me if it should be longer.

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Name:
Age: Over 18 lower then 45
Height:
Weight:
Nationality:
Race:

Appearance:
Prevention Armour:
Weapons:
Skills:
Back story:

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Heres Mine.



Name: Jonah Logite
Age: 24
Height: 5'7"
Weight: 145 lbs
Nationality: American
Race: Caucasian

Appearance: Black Leather Jacket over a Grey shirt, With Blue Denim Jeans, Hi Top Sneakers and a Pistol Holster.
Prevention Armour:
Riot Armour (Bullet Proof Vest Over Top)
Weapons:
Bolt Action Sniper Rifle- Red Camouflage Design- No Scope- Silencer
M4 Carbine- Red Dot Scope- Blue Camouflage Design- Silencer- Red Dot Sight
Skills: Sniper Rifle and Assault Rifle Repair Expert.
Back story:
Jonah grew up in Seircliff, As a young boy his father was in the Seir Serpents, His father then joined S.R.M.F and died in the attack following the revealing of the plan. Jonah was 17 at the time of his Fathers passing. When he turned 18 he joined S.R.M.F, During the attacks he has chased down Col. Autumn but he has gotten away. Jonah has swore revenge on Autumn.

Jonah, He is Quite and Stealthy. Strong but Light. Like a Snake. Nicknamed Shadow for a Reason.

My Back story isn't long cuz I r Tired.

Eden heard of this plan and would not stand for it. HA! I know right, He cant stand cause he is a Computer.
Edit: I edited the Grammar and Puncuation.

Work on your grammar.. I can see the effort you're giving, and your creativeness, but the grammar and punctuation and spelling and capitilization will rip this rp apart.. So plz get a spell checker or something

Please, do pay attention to capitalization errors. Sometimes you need to go back and edit any problems, but just don't capitalize things that shouldn't be.



The post above is heavily unedited. Here's how it should be.



Do not add unneeded capitalization, and don't make run-on sentences. I also might make bio, this seems like a pretty fair idea.

I have one comment to make. This sounds like a good idea, but, you started out by saying you didn't have the full backstory. I reccomend you hash it out first.

Tell me if it should be longer.
Should That Be The Full Back Story Or Make It Longer.

You kind of made it sound like you really don't know what is going to happen in the RP and that you didn't have a full backstory. You need to have the backstory fully mapped out for yourself. Whetther or not you choose to share all of it wiht the players is up to you.

I'm really sorry to say it but...

When I first read your thread title I immediately thought of the word SMURF.

I thought someone would say that :clap:

You kind of made it sound like you really don't know what is going to happen in the RP and that you didn't have a full backstory. You need to have the backstory fully mapped out for yourself. Whetther or not you choose to share all of it wiht the players is up to you.

Are you saying, I need to explain more about whats going to happen in the RP.
Like why Eden wants to Take Over all towns in the Wasteland

Dude, I can tell that joining the RP might be regrettable because you're capitalizing things even in normal talking. You might think it's no big problem, but to the readers, it's really major.

And to people saying there's no backstory, you can all stop talking because there's plenty of backstory to see. I don't see one error with the backstory and there is no need for more.

I never said there was no backstory. I merely said he made it sound that way.