Ok so this is an attempt by myself to adapt the storyline of a Skyrim mod I've been working on into comic form. Modding and making comics are two hobbies of mine so why not combine the two into a twisted, mangled monster of sorts.

Wow. Awesome.

I really enjoyed it. This is pretty subjective since everyone probably imagines how the Dragonborn acts in their own heads, but his vocabulary makes him seem a little too bad-ass to me. I feel like calling people "poor bastards" is something a character from the Fallout universe would do. That's me being nit picky though.

I really enjoyed it and i'm looking forward to reading the entire thing. Be sure to PM Gstaff when you're done. This should be on the blog!

The composition's okay, but the actions come off as a bit stiff sometimes. It's also a bit hard to follow sometimes, but that tends to be a personal problem of mine (I'm a bit thick) so take that as you will. Proportions and perspective/foreshortening are also a little off in some panels, but this is more of a nitpick than anything. Personally, I wouldn't use in-game models for reference on random things like charred corpses and characters. It's great for shorthand stuff, but they tend to be...not good (If you ever take a good look at NPC models you'll see what I mean). I think the backgrounds look beautiful in most panels, though.

Another nitpick is that you went with the generic Dovahkiin from the trailers. Kills a ton of interest in the story on my part, tbh.

B'yeah, on the whole it's pretty good.

Ok so here it is, the final version of the first chapter.

https://imgur.com/a/UAxOy#0

I'll probably revisit the art at a later stage once I've actually learned how to draw properly but for now I'll calling it done and moving on to the next chapter.

I've just read your comic, and while I certainly enjoyed it, I do have to critique it...

I agree with monkeyemoness about some actions coming off as stiff, and I also agree with him on the "I wouldn't us in-game models" bit. I would like to see the characters become a bit more stylized personally, rather than looking like they stepped straight out of the game.

I don't agree with monkeyemoness about using the generic dovahkiin, to me this is fine because then a lot more who reads the comic can relate to it and step into his shoes. Not everyone is going to know who the character even is if you go with some crazy female Khajiit for your dovahkiin or something. Not saying that I like the dovahkiin, just that I don't see an interesting alternative.

I also don't agree with Mikedzines about being "a little too-bad-ass." It's a comic. He's the dovahkiin. I personally think he should be UNREASONABLY bad ass, but certainly not invincible. I want to see this guy take a beating and come out the other end chopped up and half-dead, but still pressing on. And one-liners don't really bother me either, something like "poor bastards" actually seems too sympathetic for a dovahkiin that was ready to send a little girl out into the wilderness with a sword. Think The Punisher or something.

Those are just my preferences/suggestions though, and overall your art is quite lovely. The paneling can become a bit confusing at times, but it's not a huge concern.

Finally, I love the gratuitous amount of blood. Moar blood plz.