Scratching my nose I looked out across the barren nothingness that was the Wastes, feeling the hot air flow across my uncovered feet; watching a small dot make it's way towards the sun. The rest of the Wastes would still be sleeping right now, it was early in the morning which meant it was the perfect time to get up. Giving a quick stretch I took a step back and turned, looking straight at the place that was my home; a dark building that scared most people at first glance.

Moving forward quickly I moved in through a side door, hearing the creaking from the non-oiled bolts as they turned inwards so I could move into the house. I quickly looked to the left and moved towards a decent-sized cabinet that held a few of my weapons in it, I pulled out a tiny key and placed it in a small hole within the cabinet. Twisting it to the left and then to the right multiple times I managed to hear a click come from the storage compartment; I opened it straight after.

Looking in I quickly decided on a few ideas of what could happen over the day, I was thinking whether to raid a small shack I'd seen in the distance the other day. Or to enter a cave that seemed like it might house a few interesting goodies inside, although the growls I'd heard from a distance weren't very encouraging. Quickly making up my mind I pulled out a 5.56mm assault rifle and two fragmentation grenades, rummaging through a few drawers I pulled out four clips for the rifle.

Shaking my head I sighed lightly and looked out a grubby window, the sun's rays were starting to shine through; meaning my time was starting to run out. I lived by the smallest amount of light I could but never in the darkness, never again after what happened... I took a light breath and felt the dust of the Wastes draw into my lungs, feeling it rub against the walls of my inner body; almost making it bloody and raw. After such a life I'd had what could I do but fear it?

After closing my eyes for a split second I moved towards the door, slinging my rifle over my back and putting the grenades upon my belt. For my age it wasn't surprising that I was always so fearful of everything, being a teenager in the Wastes was worse than most people would ever think. Quickly moving over to the small medical box on the wall I pulled out a few stimpacks and one or two painkillers; I'd gotten use to patching myself up these days.

What could I do but live by my own code at the age of fourteen?

Excellent. Hope to read more of your story in future.

My one and only replier... Thanks will do. Open to any criticism, comments or yelling; as long as you say something!

Hmm, you don't give me much to criticize here, Francois... Well, to make this comment more than fluff, some of your sentences run on a bit too long. You might want to think of replacing a few of those commas of yours with periods. It'll improve the flow, cause otherwise people might trip up on the sentences.

And... That's about it. Got nothing else to say. Good job, Francois!

Oki doke then Ambrose, thanks for that I knew I would have stuffed up somewhere; it doesn't look long on the posting screen! :cold: Lol, thanks I'll make sure to keep an eye on it and I'll write more when I can... This is my secret project why I dropped just about everything else, shh.

I can't wait to read more of this. I have to say how impressed I am at the flow of this intro, especially since it is in first person. For me I find it nearly impossible to write in fiet person and find your work to be impressive, to say the least

Thank you Naz! I'm just basically writing what I'd do if I was in the Wastes I guess... And if I had courage and whatnot, I guess after living for years in the Wastes you'd turn hard... I'll write more when I can.

Blood pouring down my flank I rolled to the left and quicly pushed my left hand into a pouch; rummaging around for something to help the pain. Blood continued pouring down in copious amounts, making me extremly dizzy. My hand closed around a Med-X syringe and I quickly closed my eyes, thanking my good fortunes. Pulling it out I quickly flicked off the cap and licked my lips, preparing myself. Bringing the syringe up I closed my eyes and jammed it straight into a vein on my left arm.

My reaction was immediate, pain flared up and spread throughout the limb; but not past the shoulder. Gritting my teeth I quickly pulled the syringe out of my arm and jammed it into my pouch, looking for something to stop the bleeding. My hand managed to close around a bandage, clenching it tightly I brought it up and gave a small sigh of relief. Pulling the band out far enough to go around the wound I clenched my teeth around the end and pulled quickly.

The material tore straight through in a straight line thankfully, I quickly bound it up around my arm and clenched it into a knot. The bleeding would still go for a little while but it would be subdued for a little while now. Giving a small sigh of relief as I felt the pain fade away I quickly wondered how I'd gotten here.

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Jumping across rock to rock I noticed a small door that led into a kind of rockface, it didn't look inviting but it looked old. That was different around here, most places had been picked clean in these parts. I shook my head and crawled up the rock a little more, I noticed a small door that must've lead to a cave of some kind. Blinking a few times I stood up slowly and jumped over the rock to the ground, I slowly moved towards the cave door.

It looked unused which probably meant their were no Raiders or anything inside... That could perhaps mean good loot inside! With a leap of joy I swung the door open and straight into the cave, it was quiet and a little dark but the light from the door still splashed across the ground. I reached behind me and pulled out a small flashlight from one of my back pockets. Clicking it on I saw a small clump of fur on the ground, with a quick blink I came to the conclusion it meant a dog.

Oh god, how wrong I was.

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Moving past the destroyed fence I came across a small table with a combat knife laying on it; it looked in about pristine condition too! I picked it up and gave a few choice swipes at the air, it had a good balance and a pretty decent grip. Holding onto it I quickly moved forwards past the table and into another dark spot; I quickly clicked the button on the flashlight. There was a small cluster of rocks that seemed to be overlooking a path that led down into something.

With a small shudder I moved up on the rocks with wary eyes, darting everywhere, I kept my eyes on every corner of the cavern in front of me. As I felt my foot brush up against the first rock I heard a rustle behind me; as well as padded paws thudding against the ground. My mind immediately jumped to a dog but I knew that it couldn't be with that much weight behind the thudding. Turning around in the blink of an eye I saw a Yao Guai crouching about two metres in front of me.

It's legs trembled as it launched itself at me, the creature's weight was centered right at it's maw which was going to hit my neck. I immediately reacted by dropping to the ground in a split second, the creature fell right on top of me and onto the knife I was still holding. It roared in pain but then quickly fell silent, I realised I'd brought my knife up as the beast roared; which meant the knife had moved right to it's heart. With a triumphant grin I pushed the beast off me.

I felt a sudden burst of pain go agonisingly through my shoulder, the realisition hit me as I saw that the creatures paw had torn through an area on my left arm. With bared teeth I touched it gingerly with my right hand, the pain flared straight up and I felt tears come to my eyes.

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Shaking my head I stood up slowly and quickly moved up the rock, dropping down slowly I took my 5.56mm assault rifle off my back. I could probably just hold it with my left arm and I was pretty sure I could still pull the trigger with my right, I was cautious now though. After crawling for a few seconds I came to the top of the cluster of rocks, moving slowly I pulled my head over the top and looked straight into something; something that I knew I was not going to have fun with.

About three Yao Guai's all sleeping in a small pile.

Excellent! I always love reading your stories Francois!

Thank you! Open to any more criticism, nice posts, anything; I want it! I need more posters/followers/haters before I write more. bliviongate:-This'll be you if you DON'T POST!

If you don't continue the story, I will find you and I will kill you!!!! Seriously though, I am loving this story and can't wait to read the next part. Keep up the awesome work!!!!!!

Don't worry Naz, I'll continue writing don't you worry! For the sake of my life and your entertainment... As well as any others who are reading this and NOT posting! I'm having fun writing this by the way guys, so it doesn't matter if I only have 3 or so die-hard fans.

That's the spirit Francois! Doesn't matter if anyone reads it, just as long as you enjoy writing it. That's all that matters really. Even though when we post stories, it's not just for ourselves, but the others.

Count that 4 die hard fans
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@Strangelove: I was hoping you'd post, always nice to hear random tidbits from you.

@Enclave: YES! I was hoping I'd hear from you again my friend, hope you've enjoyed it thus far. You wanna chat with me any time hit me up with a PM, I'm on this computer down here in Brissie a nice bit.

Make it 5 die hard fans now.
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This has a good flow to it and hooks it's claws into you and makes you feel like you're looking over the shoulder of the main character as he goes along.

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Thank you KP! Glad you liked it and you got hooked... 5 die-hards eh? Well... :ahhh: I feel special, I'll write more when I can, which could quite possibly be tonight or tomorrow... I can't stop writing new installments otherwise the idea will bore me. Lol.

Hey Francois! Once again, you give me nothing to criticize. There really aren't any mistakes you have for me to point out. The ones that are there are the same ones that you've been repeating, which is a general lack of knowledge on where to place commas and semi-colons, and when to cut off sentences so that they don't run on. There isn't much to be done on that except for you to continue writing and to try and catch yourself on them.

Honestly, you're solid enough as a writer to where you no longer need any comments from me. So congrats!

-David

... Really? I got to the point where I don't get any criticism apart from that? I never thought I'd see the day! Do I have to make mistakes on purpose now? Thank you a lot, I'll do my best to try and catch myself on that, I've tried implementing semi-colans; but I don't know really where to put them often. I'll do my best and I hope to see you still posting here to say if you like it or not.

Means a lot, thank you and I hope to see you around.

-Andy

"[censored]," was all I could say as I looked upon the three docile creatures. They snored away with small sounds, moving their bodys in unison with the sounds. I took a shuddered breath and wondered at what I could do, clicking my fingers lightly I patted my belt. With utter wonderment, I pulled off my wonderful fragmentation grenade. I kissed it lightly then pulled the pin, aiming very quickly I lobbed it towards the beasts.

It bounced once, twice, then...

BOOM!

The explosion was signficant, sending a shockwave towards me, not giving nigh on any force against me but it was there. As I opened my eyes, as I'd clenched them closed as the explosion happened; I looked upon a scene of gruesome death. The Yao Guai's were now just piles of blood and muscle, strewn across the cave ground. Bile rose up in my throat quickly, I silently retched to the side for a few moments.

As I stopped I clumsily fell onto my ass, staring up at the ceiling I wondered why the hell I was even here.

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Rubbing my hands against each other I breathed slowly, leaning against the wall; as close to the fire as I could be. The snow fell outside with a vengeance, making it almost frozen. Nuclear winter was apparently used quite extensively before the war, now it made a lot of bloody sense to me. I slammed my head against the wall a few times, taking a few deep breaths.

"God, I'm so freezing over here," I heard a familiar voice say.

"Well, am I gonna go over there or are you coming over here?" I responded.

"Gah, fine," the voice responded.

Hearing the quiet sound of her getting up I moved to the left to give her room. I closed my eyes for a few moments, then I felt the person's body move in next to me. I let out a breath I'd been holding in and put my arm around the other figure, slowly opening my eyes.
"Oh, by the way, you don't mind if I take care of this special person more than you right?" I said teasingly.

"Sure, go ahead and leave me here to freeze my ass off, I don't care," Katie said playfully.

Poking my tongue out at her I moved the smallest bit closer to the other person, making sure they were fine. I turned my head to the side and saw those eyes look into mine, quietly I said to her,
"Potatoes, they're everywhere these days."

She just laughed at me and quickly kissed me playfully, after a few moments she drew back and said, "I don't feel very cold any more, are my teeth still pvssyring?"

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Sorry for the short chapter, just had to kind of get back into the flow of the story again. A completely new set of people now set into it, I'm basing them off close people to me, I'll add two more people to these as well... In the story, these two are out hunting together at the moment; thanks to:

John-For giving me the idea to continue my story.

Ellie-Giving me the ideas for continuing the story.

Katie-Making me laugh and giving me good jokes to put IN the story.