Hi everybody this is my first post here on the fallout forums. I'm simply writing this to share my fallout 3 story with more people. At the time of this writing only part 1 has been uploaded and part 2 will be uploaded soon, it is located on fallout 3 nexus here is the link to the story.

http://www.fallout3nexus.com/imageshare/image.php?id=14038

I hope you enjoy I have put a lot of work into it ( about a month for each part ) so i would love to here what you think...

damn good job even though it was cliche as hell. Pretty much the only thing to criticize is the grammar, like run on sentences and commas and other nuances. also spice up the words with similies and interesting word selection. otherwise perfect.

I rather enjoyed the beginning part of this story, partly because it has a unique flow to it of using pictures to help express the story and give us an accurate understanding of the characters in motion and their appearances. Usually I do not read another person's story due to it possibly conflicting my ideas for my story (very odd, I know, but it happens), or I simply lose interest. However, the easy blend of an almost comic-like story helped capture my attention. I have skimmed through most of it, and from what I have gathered and seen, the story is well done.

Slight things I may suggest are the rather large paragraphs. I understand they help flush out the talking quicker and with less pictures to use, but it becomes a bit different to read after so long. I do not agree with the above poster on their choice of adding smilies and such to the story, but it is your story, and if you wish to add such things, go right ahead.

One last thing, even if a lot people do not comment on it, trust me, they do read and watch it. Most people like to lurk when it comes to new topics, like me, who only post unless they feel like they either need to because of an error in the story, or to help encourage the writer to continue a story that they personally feel should be continued.

Good luck, David Riggs.

nice job, for some reason the dialogue was cut off the ends of the right side, but i got the jist.