Ghost town.

Post » Thu Nov 25, 2010 12:52 am

GHOST TOWN

Cincinnati, Ohio.The town seems to be a paradise. Food is plentiful. the irradiation levels in the water are minimal. and there is plenty of shelter. But of course all that glitters is not gold. The town is controlled by a ruthless dictator Known only as Ghost. he is a feared leader who keeps the town alive by having his men jet and having caravans deliver it to new york, chicago and washington D.C, selling slave, soliciting prostitution and invading and extorting smaller settlements. As you can guess Ghost hasn't made a lot of friends. but he provides his enforcers and minions food, shelter. and if desired drugs, alcohol and free six from his voyeurs.

Meanwhile a civil war is brewing as a small yet determined group of rebels known as Thorn fight against his totalitarian rule. they are determined To stop ghost anyway they can wether it be planting bombs. killing his soldiers or just raising hell. the group is led by a charismatic ex-raider named Solomon who after being nearly killed by yau gui saw the error of his ways and decided to fight to bring back a somewhat civilized and functioning society

struggles for the 6 districts(entertainment,slums,market,outskirts,suburbs and the heavily guarded north Newport) have grown increasingly large and violent And it wont be long before there is a fullscale war. but who will end up the victor.

Choose your side and fight for control of Ghost town.

Rules- what i say goes.
you can have 2 characters if you get my permission and update both of them.
no killing other players without my permission.
dont make your character a relative of any other player or one of mine without permission
no unrealistic weaponry. example- ninja sword, fatman,shuriken. make them more realistic like- Bat w/nail, hunting rifle
dont be a jerk and try and ruin the story. keep things realistic. nothing like- i shot a mini nuke into the building killing all 42 of his men Ect.
Ghoul characters welcome on both alliances.
If you do make 2 characters they must both be in the same alliance. I am controlling the leaders of both factions.

Character Sheet:
Alliance: Ghosts enforcers or Thorn rebel group,
Name:
Gender:
Race:
Age:

(Physical description)
Hair:
Eye color:

Skills: are you good at bomb making, cooking, reparing trucks and weapons or some other helpful thing

(Equipment Description)

Clothes- members of Ghosts enforcers get somewhat better armors

Weapons: members of ghosts enforcers get somewhat better weapons

(Other info)

History:





My Characters.


Alliance: Ghosts enforcers
Name: Isaac Montague AKA Ghost
Gender: male
Race: Caucasian, human
Age : 41

(Physical description)
Hair:black
Eye color: brown

Skills: shooting, leadership, management, repairing guns and armor, basic medical knowledge

(Equipment Description)

Clothes- Power armor painted black with the pattern of the human skeleton painted on. helmet painted as a skull

Weapons: laser rifle,silenced machine gun.

(Other info)

History: As a former member of the brotherhood of steel ghost believes in civilization no matter what the cost. and if his dark methods is keeping the city alive then that is the what shall be done. although Ghost exactly enjoy what he has to do to keep the city alive he will do it without a single doubt in his head. He has a succseful hold over all but the slums distrcit which is the main area of operations of his opposers the terrorist group Thorn. he is devoted to killing every single member of the group and will stop at nothing to destroy them.


Alliance: Thorn rebel group
Name: Solomon Marx
gender: male
Race:white, human
Age:25

(Physical description)
Hair: brown, short
Eye color: blue

Skills: shooting, fighting, hunting, guerilla warfare tactics

(Equipment Description)

Clothes- long sleeve combat armor, motor cycle gloves

Weapons: Ak 47, Chinese pistol

(Other info)

History: Solomon was nearly killed by a yau gui 3 years back and his fellow raiders who he thought cared about him simply left him to die. after being rescued by a caravan and dropped of at a small settelment he was saved, but he became apathetic and depressed. he wondered where he went wrong and if he could have made better choices with his life. a few months later he came to discover the town of Cincinnati at first he lived as a normal civilian but he soon learned that it was impossible to truely live happily under the rule of Ghost. He eventually started a group named Thorn. Although it started simply as a group of people refusing to obey the laws set forth by there cruel leader. they eventually became the largest and most powerful resistance group in Cincinnati. Solomon convinced smaller gangs to unite with him as one and they are still growing. although chances are slim that Solomon will succeed he will not surrender in his fight to overthrow Ghost and liberate Ghost Town.

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Harinder Ghag
 
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Post » Thu Nov 25, 2010 12:49 am

I'm sorry, but this will probably not go well. First off, your grammar is atrocious. Spelling errors I can take, but not capitalizing the beginning of a sentence? You use numbers instead of words( 2 instead of two.) and you have a horrible problem with run on sentences. Putting the grammar of the story behind us, there is the setting. A civil war RP is hardly good idea for your first time(I'm assuming this is the first RP you've hosted) as people will eventually have to kill each other. And nobody likes loosing.

You never really told us much about the two factions. I know there is the Ghost Enforcers and the Thorn rebel group. But what gear do they specialize in? Tactics? Where are they located...This brings me too another point, for a RP like this, we need a map of the city. Or at least and organized description of the city.

I'm trying hard not to sound like a jack ass, but this is going to need some work. I would recommend joining an RP and looking at other RP sign ups( Warren, Lost Contact, etc...) before trying to host a RP. But don't let me discourage you,
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Post » Wed Nov 24, 2010 3:10 pm

I'm sorry, but this will probably not go well. First off, your grammar is atrocious. Spelling errors I can take, but not capitalizing the beginning of a sentence? You use numbers instead of words( 2 instead of two.) and you have a horrible problem with run on sentences. Putting the grammar of the story behind us, there is the setting. A civil war RP is hardly good idea for your first time(I'm assuming this is the first RP you've hosted) as people will eventually have to kill each other. And nobody likes loosing.

You never really told us much about the two factions. I know there is the Ghost Enforcers and the Thorn rebel group. But what gear do they specialize in? Tactics? Where are they located...This brings me too another point, for a RP like this, we need a map of the city. Or at least and organized description of the city.

I'm trying hard not to sound like a jack ass, but this is going to need some work. I would recommend joining an RP and looking at other RP sign ups( Warren, Lost Contact, etc...) before trying to host a RP. But don't let me discourage you,

Yeah its ok. My only real experience is writing a fan fiction on a different site. I had thought of making an RP once before but i decided not to publish it as i didn't really like the idea. The main inspiration i had for writing this was giving people choice between too sides instead of requiring them to join one single faction.

i don't mind criticism so don't worry about looking like an [censored]. considering the things you've said i should probably look back at the story and adjust it to work better. i understand my grammar is pretty bad, and yeah i have a problem with run on sentences.

I do still want to go through with this RP, but maybe i should put this on hold for a while and make some revisions before its to late into this to stop it from failure

Thanks
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