Life of a Wasteland Mercenary

Post » Fri May 27, 2011 5:02 am

Chapter 1

The time was about noon and the sound of the wasteland echoed all around george and alice, as they trekked through the swamp. George looked around to the west,with his hunting rifle drawn, as alice looked to the west trying to make as little noise as possible, "What is it george... Something big?", george tightened his grip around his rifle, as a loud roar echoed through some trees, "Grab the mesmetron", alice pulled her bag, pulling out the mesmetron, the swamp stank of death and disease, alice always hated when george and her were assigned to swamp duty, the noise began to get louder as alice handed george a cartridge for the gun, "Here you go, what do you think it is?", george loaded the mesmetron as mutated birds began to disperse out of the tree line, fleeing from what ever was coming.
George aimed the large stun-gun towards the tree line, alice looked at george, nervously aiming her rifle at the tree line as the noise began to grow louder, when suddenly a large creature suddenly bursted out of the tree line, roaring at the two, alice was stunned and began to fire aimlessly, while george fired two shot at the large creature as it charge towards alice, "ALICE, MOVE DAMN YOU!..", alice leaped out of the way of the oncoming creature, as george fired two more shots at the creature finally stunning the creature. George walked over to the creature, placing a large collar on its neck, as alice stood up out of the swamp covered in gunk, "I hate swamp duty, all we ever do is either find nothing or our weapons jam from getting swamp gunk in them", george walked over to alice as she wiped herself off, alice was a green eyed, brown haired woman who grew up in South Virginia, she was about twenty-three years old, when she moved down to florida, after her town was destroyed by the mysterious destruction of the Brotherhood of Steel and Rebel bases, rumors began to fly after the event, some had said that a small group had infultraited the Brotherhoods sactuary, and the rebel base hoping to stop the Brotherhood and the rebels from destroying the town. George was a brown eyed, black haired man, who had grown up in florida all his life. When george was just at the tender age of seven, a posse of about ten Regulators walked into the town of Huntington, asking if any of the towns people had seen a man with a beaten and dirty face and on his right left hand his index finger was missing, the towns people were grateful to see some kind of "Good" come out of the wasteland, as the Regulators payed for some rooms, they continued to walk around the town asking about the man, but none of the towns people had seen the man that they described. As the weeks passed and the Regulators began to become more of a burden on the town, the towns people began to demand that Jon, the sheriff of Huntington and his deputies do something about them, many of the towns people complained that the regulators were getting drunk all the time, and were causing damage to the town, and to the local saloon, the sheriff and his deputies listened to the people and began to speak with the regulators, "When you first came to town, many of the towns people, were glad to see some good come out of the wasteland, mostly we get raiders who are passing through or some kind of ruin runner wanting to trade for something, but for the past few weeks you've become some trouble, the porkies saloon has interior damage, and the rest of the town is complaining that you've quit looking for the criminal that you came here to look for...", the regulators smiled as the sheriff continued on, "All I'm asking is if you would slow down on the collateral damage on the town, and please get back to your work", the sheriff sat in his old beaten up desk chair, as the leader of the regulators shook his head, "I'm sorry if me and my men have gotten out of hand, its just that we've come to a dead end in our search for the man, and we just decided to stay here for a while to see if he would show up, or if someone would come to town knowing anything?", the sheriff looked at his deputies standing on either sided of him, then looking back at the regulator, "I'm sorry if your search has gone cold, but I'm unable to allow you to stay in Huntington any longer, so please pack your things and be on your way, the next closest settlement is Arton, its only fourty miles south east of here, I'm sure that the people of Arton would know something?", the regulator shook his head as he grinned at his men and the sheriff, "I'm sorry sheriff, but we dont plan on going any where, me and my men like it here, good food, Good women, and a nice place to sleep at night", the sheriff stood up furiously pounding his hand on the beaten desk, "Now you listen here, this is my town, and these people depend on me to protect and serve them to the best of my ability, so unless you and your men dont leave by noon tomorrow, me and my deputies will be forced to arrest you until we see fit to release you, do you understand?", the regulator stood up straightning his over-coat, the regulator began to reach for something inside his coat, the sheriff drew his revolver as the regulator quickly drew his 10mm pistol from his coat, firing into the sheriff's chest, the two deputies were dead before they could even draw their pistals, the posse stepped away from the door, as the leader of the group walked out of the room, into the town, the towns people began to run for cover, as the regulators began to fire into the crowd, "Your town is a filled with vice and corruption, under the laws of the regulators, we are to either capture or exsterminate all living creatures in the area!", the leader yelled firing at a child and her mother, "Do not resist or you will be killed, if you try to resist you will be shot on sight, do not try to be a hero!".
George was at school with his fellow classmates, when they heard the sounds of gun shots and screams, georges mother was the school teacher for the town, and went out to investigate what was going on, the sounds of screams and crying, along with the sound of gunfire continued to get closer as georges mother opened the door, a man holding his wife ran by with, both were covered with blood from their blood soaked child, georges mother looked to the children in the classroom, "Children get under your desks, I'll be right back, dont let anyone in unless its me, or your family, ok!", the children knoded their heads as they all scrambled to get under their desks, some children covered their ears as the sound of gunfire echoed in the classroom. George covered his ears, as the sound of gunfire got closer and closer, until it was right outside the door, "Where is Mrs. Marlow?", one of the children asked covering her ears and wincing at each shot, george had a worried look on his as he continued to look at the door, "George where is your mom, what if those regulators got her?", one of the boys said to him, george uncovered his ears, and looked at the boy, "Shut the hell up andy, my mom is fine, she would'nt let those regulators grab with out a fight, she's probably looking for my dad, so they can come get us!", the boy looked at george for a moment, but was unable to look him straight in the eyes, "Ok george, I'm sorry, I'm just worried about my parent too", the class looked back at the door, as a loud pounding sound began to come from outside, "Kids it me, Mrs. Marlow, I'm here to get you out, come open the...", a loud gunshot echoed as a splat sound entered the room, causing a small hole in the door, the sound of footsteps came closer to the door, "Open the damn door, we need to get moving!", the door opened as two regulators entered the room, one was holding a combat shotgun, while the other was holding a assault rifle, george looked at the door, that was covered in blood, as the regulators pulled him up, hand-cuffing him to a chain line.
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Soph
 
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 10:55 am

AAHHH! Really big paragraphs!!!

Seriously, though. Give us some space to make things easier to read. I really do want to read this.
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josie treuberg
 
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 7:56 am

AAHHH! Really big paragraphs!!!

Seriously, though. Give us some space to make things easier to read. I really do want to read this.

I hear that, nobody likes the big wall of text. Seems like a good enough read though, I'm just gonna break it up myself into paragraphs in notepad. :)
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 1:07 am

Good story but space out the writing more! Paragraphs and perhaps shorter sentances. The first bit of action was comprised into one sentence full of comma's. Or try using colons and semi-colons as well. All round though a very interesting read!!!! :goodjob:
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 10:34 am

I agree with all the comments above, and there's the odd word that doesn't fit in right.. Other than that, good read :)
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Post » Fri May 27, 2011 1:02 am

Not bad at all, I still like Life of a Wastelander better, but no complaints.
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