Me:The life of the Mojave Citizen

Post » Wed Mar 23, 2011 6:48 pm

This fan fic basically has Mr. House winning the Hoover Dam, i can't write much, as its almost 11 PM here, but ill post some more once i get the time.

Prologue:

My name is John, John Markson. My house was in Goodsprings, far away from any fighting, but we heard the Guns ringing out, the Bomber that flew over the Dam, the NCR withdrawing. Mr.House sent a robot to patrol Goodsprings, as a token of fortune. I kept my family safe from the NCR, who said Primm, Goodsprings, and Nipton were rightfully theirs, but in the end, New Vegas troops killed most, if not all, NCR forces holding on. I became a "Hunter", who basically looked for NCR troopers, Gangs, Caesar's Legion, and criminals, but i always had my family. My Wife, Anne, My son, Peter, and My daughter, Amy. Here is my life.....Here is my story.
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Symone Velez
 
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Post » Thu Mar 24, 2011 6:27 am

Interesting... butt not exactly hooking.

What I recommend is always having at least three to seven paragraphs to submit whenever starting a new story. You want those first few words to make people want to know what happens next. Make us say, "This looks a bit interesting..." and keep coming back.

Lady yelling at me, so I can't say much right now. Ill keep a eye on this one!
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Post » Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:04 am

I will remind the OP, and anyone reading this, that you are allowed only one fan fiction at a time. any others must either be finished and/or requested closed.

This rule also applies to RPs - you are allowed to host only one RP at a time.
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Matt Bee
 
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Post » Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:53 pm

Its fine Cuddly Bear, i closed my other ones.
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