Project Phoenix

Post » Thu May 03, 2012 5:53 am

Hello! I love Fallout and have decided to write a fanfic. I would have made a comic and would have preferred it but I need to buy a tablet. So, hopefull you'll like it.
Plot Summary: 2077. Montreal Biodome, Montreal, Canada-United States. The Great War.
In the rising tensions between powerful nations, a group of scientists formed a community, along with their families, at the Montreal Biodome. Their Mission: to preserve all of the Old World knowledge they held at all costs, and in the case of a nuclear holocaust, to spark the growth of humanity once more...guiding the future according to their rules which, they thought, would lead them away from the destruction they have just survived. For whatever reason, the Prodigal Son, abandoned the confines and safety of the Biodome, wandering into the radioactive wasteland littered with murderous raiders, ghouls, mutated creatures, and other dangers. Whether he's on this voyage with a great purpose or just blindly wandering around? No one knows. All that is known is that he has become a legend amongst the survivors, friends and enemies, who had the honor of being in his presence.
No one has seen him. No one has heard of him. People say he's dead. Some say the Prodigal Son has finally returned home.
Wherever he may be, he still wanders around throughout the wasteland by word of mouth...from generation to generation.


Preface

October 23, 2077

The bombs fell.

One by one, they consumed several centuries of human history and progress in the form of nuclear firestorm.

One by one, they toppled down with ease the warring nations who were greedy and eager to get their hands on resources at all cost.

One by one, they destroyed countless lives that had and were to contribute to the advancement of humankind.

One by one,


… It all ended.

There was no noise. No echo of the destruction it caused. No voice of survivors. There was a flash…
And then, it was….dead silent…

But the flame that humanity had bore on its hand, passing down from generation to generation, still burns ever so brightly. Humanity didn’t faze, even at the power of nuclear bombs; hundreds of thousands of them.

From its nuclear ashes, civilization will rise up again. Like the fabled Phoenix, we’ll take flight once more in our usual fiery fashion.

…And once more, we’d all make the same mistakes again…Because war…


…War never changes.


http://thousandmaster-nagi.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d4r3oku
http://thousandmaster-nagi.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d4rb6mn
http://thousandmaster-nagi.deviantart.com/art/Chapter-3-Hochelaga-288984559


Note: I put up links to the deviantArt version instead. If I put up the whole thing here, it might be too long, in one post :biggrin: Enjoy! :smile:
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Tammie Flint
 
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 1:44 pm

Pretty damn enjoyable so far mate, only a couple of minor writing mistakes too. There were a couple of bits where you used "was" where "were" should have been and the flow was broken once or twice when you wrote present tense instead of the majority implied past tense. Apart from those couple of flow breakers it was great, please keep it coming! :biggrin:
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ZANEY82
 
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 6:44 am

lol thanks
It was early in the morning....really early around 3-5am. Didn't even go to sleep until 5.
I'm gonna polish it bit by bit eventually.
and lol I never even finished writing the summary XD

For the present tense, are you talking about the Preface? It's intentional. The first half is all about the Great War and its effects, the second half is talking about humanity in general and it's future in the post-war wasteland.
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 1:46 pm

wow thats was very good would love to read more also this remainds me of a fanfiction made by a left 4 dead 2 fan
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 3:28 pm

WELCOME TO THE FORUMS, LEONEX!

http://globalchat.us/wp-content/uploads/2012/02/megusta.jpg In all seriousness, it was superb. Morbid, I would say. But hey, I like morbid. The length could be a little longer, but that just could be me wanting to read more. Keep it up, bru.

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Ross
 
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 2:06 pm

lol "LEONEX"
Thanks
I'm just getting started ;D
Also, it's the Wasteland, I don't think a happy dandy story would fit in such a harsh environment.

...actually, I could think of ways of lengthening this up... we'll see when I get the chance
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 2:29 am

updated
Edit: Fixed the links
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Alina loves Alexandra
 
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Post » Thu May 03, 2012 3:56 pm

Chapter 3 IS UP!!
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