Cool, but the 19 years late thing was a bit weird.

Sorry for the delay. The next chapter should be up shortly. (A day or two)

HOORAY!I can dance in celebration now!
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Seriously though lol, good fanfic, glad to see you're starting it up again.

George just briefly skimmed through the book. he was ordered to go back to his tent, tent 7a, and to wait for further orders. By this time it was near midnight. George was very tired. Not only had he seen Dr. Li die, but all of those innocent women and children during his escape. But yet, somehow, it all seemed familiar. George decided that his past, what happened at Rivet City and his unknown past, was not important at the moment. He decided that now the most important thing to do was to escape this place.

George sat and thought. He would never be able to escape on his own. Security was tight. All of this seemed out of place. Raiders no longer being free-for-all's? George didn't remember anything except for this day, but he knew all of this wasn't right. It all seemed better. It all seemed worse. George decided he'd have to get help. But who could he trust, he didn't know anyone here. And hopefully no one knew him, the so called "George Feir". Hell, he didn't even know his own name. How could he even hope to escape? Would he forever be known as George Feir? Would he forever have to raid for a living? No. No, there has to be someone in here who sees the wrong of all this.

Interrupting his thoughts, the door opened. A young boy, with hair as red as could be walked in, he seemed to be about 15 years old , short, about 5' 4", and thin. "Excuse me George, but I've been told to share this tent with y-" The boy looked. He had a queer look on his face. "You're not George." George coughed.

"Of course I am." He said, an obvious lie by the tone. They boy examined George closely. After several moments he finally spoke.

"Just who the hell are you? You may have the others fooled, but I know that you can't be George. So, I ask again. Who. Are. You?" George looked down at his feet, head sunken. He murmured a reply to the boy. The boy got angry."What?"

"I don't know!" George bursted. "I just don't know! I killed a raider and took his clothes. It must've been the real George."

"That's it," The boy said, "I'm calling a guard. You're crazy."

"NO!" George said. "Don't you see? It doesn't make sense. None of it! The structure, the order...ME!"

The boy took a seat on the old flattened bed. He closed his eyes and though. Many thoughts. It seemed like an eternity. At last, the boy came to his decision.

Yeah the nineteen years thing annoys me too much...

*sigh* As I've told the others, follow the story and you'll find out why it was 19 years. So, aside from the time span, what do you think?

Raiders as civil is a bit farfetched, but I have to say, it seems pretty good.
BTW:Maybe you could add a Vault or two, maybe find out what happened to 101? After all, all of the kids that were your age would be in their 30s, it would be interesting to see how they would interact.

Good idea. Will do, but it will have to wait a few chapters.

Keep at it please.

Will do. Next chapter will be up in a day or two. :nuke:

In a DAY OR TWO?

I could put up chapters twice as long as that, and put up like 3 a day.

<_< It takes me a while to write chapters. Simply because I'm busy and I want audience feedback. Besides, you're lucky I'm still writing this. If it wasn't for Saberwolf116, I wouldn't be. He wanted me to continue, all I ask for is patience and feedback.

No problem, i understand.

Sorry.

I might attempt one of these, and would only want the same thing.

I guess i just have a lot more free time.

Thanks man. So, what do you think of the story?

It's ok, but i'd like to see Vault 101 make a comeback. That would require some creative mind, but still:)
And the reason I asked you to continue was because this story has a lot of untapped potential.

Good, I'm thinking it'd be good to eventually visit all the main factions people etc from the game,

See what's up with Megaton, Maybe the raiders destroyed it, MAYBE, Megaton became raiders.

Maybe They bulked up on weapons and people and are surviving,

What's up with tenpenny tower?

Raiders? Ghouls? Tenpenny?

Maybe the Raiders have taken control of the entire wasteland, and literally killed off EVERYONE, Maybe they killed off the BoS, Allied with the Enclave,

Maybe every settlement has been taken over and you join up with a " Resistance " against the raiders.

Vault residents, ex BoS, Ex Slavers, Supermutants, Maybe Mister Burke and a few Tenpenny Security Gaurds, Talon Company, Reilly's Rangers, other assorted companies,
All previously enemies, now working together,
Essentially a war between Wastelanders and Raiders.

Don't worry, all of the old friends and towns will be visited.


(See reply to W00tz)

I'd like to see a decent raider network , almost army like.

That'd be interesting, of course, at this point it can go in a million different directions.

Without giving too much away, these early chapters that you've just read foreshadow something. Something important.

As in....don't tell me...
MASSIVE A SPLOSIONS!!! :nuke:

Nope.

The boy stood up. George gulped. Time seemed to go slow. Ever so slow. The simple two second act of the boy standing up seemed to last a decade. The boy spoke.

"What do you want?" George looked perplexed. He scratched his head. What do I want? George was unsure how to answer this. Finally, he answered.

"I just want to get out of here."The boy nodded. He, though young in age, seemed to understand perfectly. He thought. And thought. And thought. The boy was asking himself many questions. Should he offer "George" a deal? Just help him out? Call the guards?

"Tell you what," The boy said. "I could help you out. Yes, but you would have to let me join you, and you must get me some things."

"Of course, Anything."

"Okay. Everything I need is right in the camp. Unfortunately, they're in the headmaster's tent." The boy then listed all the things he'd need. As many darts as possible, the poison from a rad-scorpion's gland, and two hollow tubes. George thought that these were an odd set of items, but as long as it would help him get out, he didn't really care. George sneaked into the headmaster's tent. There he was, stealing from the man who could kill him before he would know, only a few meters away from him. George luckily was able to get all the supplies. He went back to the tent. The boy then briefly explained who he was (Gabrielle) and how the escape would work.

"Luckily I have some empty stimpacks we can use to get the poison into the darts. We will make our way to the gate. That simple. Except..." Gabrielle paused. "Except there are guards everywhere, and we only have 12 darts. We will have to sneak by and kill as few as possible. Be warned. We will be hunted by these barbarians once they find out we've escaped. We need to make our way to Megaton. Your knew name will be Carl Linerman, and I will be Oliver Hunnings."

They than began their great escape.

Not bad; not bad at all. In fact, pretty good.

Looking forward for more!