This is my first attempt at a Fallout 3 fan fic. Let's see how I do

Prologue: Hammer of Judgment

The Hammer of Judgment fell. Faint blue plates rippled forth in the sky, and the fiery arrows fell from the zenith of the sky. Then, unreal as it seems, they descended upon the place she called home for a year.

The first brushed pass the tower, snapping it in two, and then a fire ball that lit the dim lands erupted behind the visible horizon
The second missed entirely, morphing into a mushroom of ash and dust somewhere to the right.
The third crashed straight through the empty flat lands in the middle of entire structure. There was a moan, almost human, and light flooded, revealing the structures nearby.
The fourth brought fire spreading through the ground right in the front, illuminating everything.
The fifth exploded right in the corona of the radar, and it was consumed in the fury of an certain inferno.
The sixth and seventh came like a pair of jolly twins, tearing two great holes, and there was a flash as the two completed their missions, spreading pieces of molten metal into the air. They fell like rain.
The eighth ate through matrix of steel, complete demolishing the entire structure.
The ninth completed the job that the eighth began. There were only fire and nothing else where everything stood proudly once.
The tenth fell like a tear of the sky. It pained her as much as the damage that it done.

She lost count after the tenth. They came down so fast, so many, and the target so deserted, so lonely, so frail. She turned away, refusing to let her tears fall. Explosions rang in the air, shaking the very earth she stood upon. Then, there was a final roar...and...it was done. Destruction was complete. There was fire, there was rubble, and there was, the only thing missing were the screams. She clutched her weapon close to her. No, not now. A tear finally fell, but she couldn't brush it away. A mask of steel was between her gloved hand and her face. Somewhere, she knew, somewhere people will be cheering, as the end was brought to the very doorsteps of her home sweet home.

After a while, a long while that was filled with silence, a light chopping was brought to her ears. So...you bastard...coming and going as you please? You dare to take the skies in our Vertibird? She looked to the sky and let out a roar that echoed across the cloudless night. The stars sparkled in reply, perhaps grinning at her misfortune, hiding him in the distant sky.


This is meant to be the beginning, and anyone who played Broken Steel should know what scene I am talking about. Well, by the way, take a guess at which place got blown up? (I simply wanted to know if I imagined the scene well enough)

I like it amn go on :goodjob:

Paragraphs, please, put it into about 4 lines each paragraph... Easier to read and more appealing. Decent story, I like it to a degree, write more.

I see, I shall do that...the reason I done that was to emphasize the numbers of the nukes and what they did. I did put them in a paragraph, but it seemed quite messy. Anyways, I will watch out for it.

Yes, I see the emphasis and the 'paragraphs', but it'd be better with a space between the lines... Otherwise it looks like a block of text, which kind of looks very unnatractive...