Shor son of Shor

Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 8:25 pm

Shor son of Shor

"And the awful fighting ended again.

"Kyne's shout brought our tribe back to the mountaintop of Hrothgar, and even our recent dead rode in on the wind of her breathing, for there had been no time to fashion a proper retreat. Their corpses fell among us as we landed and we looked on them in confusion, shaken as we were by this latest battle in the war of twilight. The chieftains of the other tribes still held their grudge against our own, Shor son of Shor; more, they had united finally to destroy us and used skin-magic to trick us into disarray.

"Shor was disgusted with the defeat, and disgusted more when reminded by Jhunal that our withdrawal had been wise, for we were outnumbered eight to one. Shor took on the form of his Totem then, which he used to better shape his displeasure, rather than to shout it aloud and risk more storm-death. His shield thanes, the brothers Stuhn and Tsun, bowed their heads, collecting the spears and swords and wine-knives Shor threw about the broken pillars of the easternmost sky-temple. The rest of us looked away and to our own, not even to acknowledge the thunderclap that signaled our Queen's arrival, who stepped in from the tunnel of her own breath last.

"Kyne had taken the head of Magnar, the jarl that betrayed the weakness of our spear-lines and fled the field. Shor shook his scaled mane. "That isn't Magnar," he said, "Magnar, I fear, fell at sunrise and became replaced by mirrors. The other chieftains are using our forms to lead us astray."

"And then Shor walked away from his War-Wife to enter the cave that led to the Underworld. He needed to take counsel with his father yet again. "Our chieftain loses heart," Dibella said, Bed-Wife of Shor, hefting another body onto the corpse pile some of us were making, "And so goes to the speak to one that has none anymore. Mirrors, indeed, and in that I see no logic."

"Tsun took her by the hair, for he was angered by her words and heavy with lust. He was a berserker despite his high station, and love followed battle to his kind. "You weren't made for that kind of thinking," Stuhn said, dragging Dibella towards a whaleskin tent, "Jhunal was. And no one should be speaking to him now." Tsun eyed the Clever Man who had heard him. "Logic is dangerous in these days, in this place. To live in Skyrim is to change your mind ten times a day lest it freeze to death. And we can have none of that now."

"Kyne could have stopped all of this but did nothing but stare at the crowd of Nords around her. Stuhn and Tsun were shifting and it was still uncouth to prevent this kind of neighboring. She looked on Jhunal and did not know if he should be spoken to or not. Rules were changing. Even her handmaiden was gone, and that lack of attendance was a transgression, but Kyne knew Mara was no doubt making treaties with one of the other chieftains, and the Pact still allowed for Tear-Wives to do that. After her husband Shor had forgotten to kiss her, a tradition among the War-Married when they returned from the field together, Kyne kept her storms to herself and knew there would be no true understanding until the twilight was lifted.

"Shor breathed the lamplights of the Underworld to life with small whispers of fire. The dark did not frighten him-- he had been born in a cave much like this-- but nevertheless it added to the mounting disgust in his spirit. Ever since the Moot at the House of We, where the chieftains of the other tribes had accused him of trespass and cattle-theft and foul-mouthery, he knew it would come to a war we could not win. Any of those words were enough for the treason-mark, and traitors were only met with banishment, disfigurement, or half-death. He had taken the first with pride, roaring a chieftain's gobletman into dust to underscore his willingness to leave, knowing we would follow. He had taken the second by drawing a circle on the House's adamantine floor with his tailmouth-tusk which broke with a keening sound, showing the other chieftains that it would all come around again. And he took the third by vomiting his own heart into the circle like a hammerclap, guarding his wraith in the manner of his father and roaring at the other tribes, "Again we fight for our petty placements in this House, in the Around Us, and all it will amount to is a helix of ghosts like mine now spit into the world below where we fight again! I can already feel the war below us starting, and yet you have not yet thrown your first spears even here!" We took our leave of the House and would never reconvene again in this age.

"The Moot looked to the tribe of Ald son of Ald but he would break no oath of the Pact, saying "Shor has paid ransom now three times for the the sins we accused him of, and by that we will hold him as dead and shake not our spears against him or his kin. Of the below he speaks, he is confused by it, for under us is only a prologue, and under that still is only a scribe that hasn't written anything yet. Shor as always forgets the above, and condemns himself and any other who would believe him into this cycle." Ald's shield thane Trinimac shook his head at this, for he was akin to Tsun and did not care much for logic-talk as much as he did only for his own standing. He told his chieftain that these words had been said before and Ald only sighed and said, "Yes, and always they will be ignored. As for the war you crave, bold Trinimac, and all of you assembled, do not worry. A spear will be thrown into this soon, from Shor's own tribe, and the House of We will be allowed our vengeance."

"Shor found the alcove at the core of the world and spoke to his dead father. He said a prayer to remove any trickery of mirrors and the ghost of Shor father of Shor appeared, saying "Ald and the others have paid time and again for the the sins we accused them of, and by that you should hold them as dead and shake not the spears of your tribe against any of their kind again. Of the above he speaks, Ald is confused by it, for above us is only an ending, and above that still is only a scribe that hasn't written anything yet. Ald as always forgets the ground below him, and condemns himself and any other who would believe him into this cycle." But Shor shook his head at this, for he was akin to Ald and did not care much for logic-talk as much as he did only for his own standing. He told his father that these words had been said before and Shor only sighed and said, "Yes, and always they will be ignored. As for the counsel you crave, bold son, and in spite of all your other fathers here with me, that you create every time you spit out your doom, do not worry. You have again beat the drum of war, and perhaps this time you will win." Shor son of Shor returned then to us on the mountaintop.

"He didn't need to explain what he had learned, for we had been there with him. Trinimac left Dibella in his tent as we assembled, and he had not touched her, frozen in the manner of the Nords when we are unsure of our true place, and asked his brother to rearm him. Stuhn was confused for a moment, thinking this an odd shift, but Mara was returned and had made great headway into treaty with the other tribes, telling him that such Totems here in the twilight could now be trusted. Our Queen merely nodded to her War-Husband and shouted us back to the fields of our enemies, towards a weakened spot among their spear-lines that Magnar our scout would light for us.

"And the awful fighting began again."

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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 7:04 am

I must read this again when sober, because right now it's making too much sense.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 3:40 pm

I must read this again when sober, because right now it's making too much sense.


Haven't read it yet, but I got back from the bar not long ago. Good stuff. :)
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 10:54 pm

I wrote it drunk, so you read it drunk.

Unless, ya know, that's illegal for you. Then don't.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 1:23 pm

I remember the original posted a couple years back (an interesting echo). I liked it then and I like it now, especially how it's developed, Trinimac is an interesting addition and so is the Moot. This'll take some puzzling.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 1:52 pm

Interesting. I find posts like this more intriguing and desirable than updates for Skyrim...unless it is an update for Skyrim. Unfortunately, I now need to go to bed (work in the morning). Something to look forward to unpacking tomorrow. :thumbsup:
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 9:19 am

Stalwart, stubborn and half-drowned
In spaces intermittent.
Detritus: refuse of the gods.
What pathway yawns release?
There is no direction here
(That the maps can share).

Where will you wake up and realize Who You Really Are?

To whom do I address the question?

Precisely.

Which way is when you come face to face with [!]?

The answer takes greater courage than tomorrow remembers.
So forget your yesterdays and slay the synchronous serpent.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 9:39 am

this is really interensting.

So Shor cast the first stone?
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 4:11 pm

Of course to the extent the Anu-Padomay conflict occurs in the past-future, it is better understood as everpresent, and self-manifesting on all levels. Sibling rivalry rendered fractally.

Anyhow, when is Michael Kirkbride writing the next great piece of world literature? Go on, "set [the world] into pondering."
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 10:26 pm

Of course to the extent the Anu-Padomay conflict occurs in the past-future, it is better understood as everpresent, and self-manifesting on all levels. Sibling rivalry rendered fractally.


You never fail to understand. I must go and misinterpret this.

Anyhow, when is Michael Kirkbride writing the next great piece of world literature? Go on, "set [the world] into pondering."


No pressure. Surely.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 1:03 pm

Well, I know what I'm doing in Skyrim.

Reading books, and lots of 'em.

Good stuff. :)
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 2:50 pm

While we're on the topic, are you writing books for Skyrim, MK?
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 12:31 pm

Last paragraph, second sentence, should be Tsun, not Trinimac. Good to know that he's not Zenithar though.

I'm guessing we won't see Cyrus in Thras until after Skyrim releases? I'm still waiting with baited breath.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 4:02 pm

Last paragraph, second sentence, should be Tsun, not Trinimac. Good to know that he's not Zenithar though.


It definitely should not be.
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Post » Thu Apr 07, 2011 2:56 am

Maybe it's just the version I'm reading (Imperial library version), but what's the deal with the [untranslateables] being replaced, respectively, by "war of twilight," "totem," "underworld," and "twilight"? Did we unearth a new word in a cypher recently or something?
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 9:45 pm

I need to reread this after dinner.

Good stuff thou, good stuff. Cant wait.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 6:40 pm

As I've said elsewhere, this is probably my favorite piece of yours. Revelations and emotional depth wrapped in beautiful writing. I've wanted to quote it a dozen times since Skyrim's unveiling, nice to be able to do so now.

Maybe it's just the version I'm reading (Imperial library version), but what's the deal with the [untranslateables] being replaced, respectively, by "war of twilight," "totem," "underworld," and "twilight"? Did we unearth a new word in a cypher recently or something?

The old version was a fragment, with some words not being clear. This is the full version, with those words revealed.


Last paragraph, second sentence, should be Tsun, not Trinimac. Good to know that he's not Zenithar though.

The change is the whole point. Its even acknowledged in the text.
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Post » Thu Apr 07, 2011 3:33 am

Beautifully done!

For those of you unfamiliar with the Nordic Gods, take a look http://www.imperial-library.info/content/races-tamriel-nord.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 4:44 pm

No pressure. Surely.


Just write something book-length, and get it published. Lots of people do it. It's, like, almost an industry anymore.

But not many of them could write a story beginning with a conjunction, which is eyed over 180 times in less than 12 hours after its release.

That's a lot of eyes that agree the needs of story outweigh the dicta of grammar.

... Also, I selfishly want more.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 12:47 pm

Just write something book-length, and get it published. Lots of people do it. It's, like, almost an industry anymore.

But if he writes something book-length, it's going to have to be as good as Be Here Now. (If you don't know what that is, it's a book with a bunch of Buddhist mumbo-jumbo, but even if that's not your thing, I still suggest you read it, for it is awesome. Look at one page of it and you'll see what I mean.)
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 5:17 pm

Called it:
http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/875688-tsun-and-trinimac/
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 11:25 pm

But if he writes something book-length, it's going to have to be as good as Be Here Now. (If you don't know what that is, it's a book with a bunch of Buddhist mumbo-jumbo, but even if that's not your thing, I still suggest you read it, for it is awesome. Look at one page of it and you'll see what I mean.)


Nothing personal, but...

[Rant On]

Ugh, I hate when white-folk try to make Buddhism into psychadelic-hippy-[censored]. Dropping acid and proclaming the truth of impermanence is about as respectful to actual Buddhism as tieing a feather in your hair and praising the Earth Mother is to Native American Traditions.

At its best Buddhism is resoundingly pragmatic.

[Rant Off]

Sorry, carry on.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 4:08 pm

Called it:
http://www.gamesas.com/index.php?/topic/875688-tsun-and-trinimac/


Nice call.
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Post » Wed Apr 06, 2011 9:57 pm

Nice work, Rhoark, good deduction skills you got there. Now I can start calling Trinimac, the god of being a dike to Shor.
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Post » Thu Apr 07, 2011 1:48 am

Nothing personal, but...

[Rant On]

Ugh, I hate when white-folk try to make Buddhism into psychadelic-hippy-[censored]. Dropping acid and proclaming the truth of impermanence is about as respectful to actual Buddhism as tieing a feather in your hair and praising the Earth Mother is to Native American Traditions.

At its best Buddhism is resoundingly pragmatic.

[Rant Off]

Sorry, carry on.

That is very true, but not what I was getting at.

Edit: To be more elaborate, the "message" of the book in question is garbage I don't bother listening to, but it's the presentation of it that gets me. In other words, when I called it "good", I wasn't really trying to say that it's good literature (because it isn't, and hence my use of "mumbo-jumbo" as a descriptor), but it's good from a creative standpoint. It's marvelously silly, yet you could still take it seriously, or rather, you could take it seriously if the author knew what the [censored] he was talking about. Should've clarified that to begin with.
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