I think it was wrapped up a little hastily, but over all I liked it. Made me chuckle. I'd leave off topic [censored] about Will Smith out, though. That guy ruins enough stories/novels as it is.

I really enjoyed reading this, It was genius to have the narrative, It reminded me of the 'little britain' (UK comedy sketch show) narrative between sketches by the doctor who actor (cant remember his name), which in themselves were sketches as they were completly unrelated to the show.

I thought the story started really well and I was hooked purely because of the comedy randomness of the conversations and narrative.

My only gripe, and its a very small one, the story was not as entertaining when the Death Claw entered the writting, because at that point it lost its comedy randomness and became a story with a start a middle and an end.

I personally enjoyed reading it when it seemed you were almost just ranting, because thats what was funny when we could not see a situation or comment coming.

I will be keeping an eye out for more of your rants, cant really call them stories as they are to random for that (and trust me thats a compliment)

Well done.

As the OP has started another FF this one gets closed.

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