Tales from Lore: The Birth of Shadows

Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 7:29 am

Tales from Lore: The Birth of Shadows

The Umbra Sword was enchanted by the ancient witch Naenra Waerr, and its sole purpose was the entrapment of souls. Used in conjunction with a soul gem, the Sword allows the wielder the opportunity to imprison an enemy's soul in the gem. Naenra was executed for her evil creation, but not before she was able to hide the Sword. The Umbra Sword is very choosy when it comes to owners and therefore remains hidden until a worthy one is found.
-Tamrielic Lore



Chapter 1
13th Frost Fall, 2E553

Even in the high Wrothgarian Mountains, the wails and roars of the Witches Festival could be heard from the woodlands below. Hundreds of wizards, warlocks, mages, and sorcerers had gathered, as they did every year, to revel in the darkest aspects of their various talents. Daedric and Undead minions were summoned by the score. Creatures and people were warped beyond recognition. The abominations created in that forest would stalk Tamriel for generations to come.

But what was happening in the forests was nowhere near the blackness occurring in the mountains.

As cold, biting winds whipped across the rough, forested peaks, eight dark-robed figures made a steady but rushed progression into the heart of the mountains. They had departed days before, each member starting from a different city of High Rock, then meeting up at the foot of the mountains. This was the final leg of their journey, and it was imperative that they made it before the night was done.

As they continued their ascent, the trees surrounding the trail grew thicker and darker. The stars and twin full moons above them were soon obscured. Eventually even the noise of the Festival died away, leaving only the sound of an occasional scuffle in the bushes, or the wind blowing through the leaves. While quiet at first, these sounds began to grow louder and stronger, almost to the point of the eight travelers being deafened by the overpowering cries of the forest.

While in this maelstrom of sound, the first spiders began to appear. At first they were too small to spot, even if they had been in the daylight that never reached these deep woods. But as the eight neared their destination, the spiders became larger. First, the size of a fist. Then, the size of a man's chest. Eventually the spiders grew large enough to dwarf a Bosmer. Even those huge spiders scurried quietly in the dark, rarely staying in the group's sight for very long.

They were the keepers of this trail, meant to keep out any who weren't supposed to come, and to welcome those who were expected. The eight were expected.

As they came to a clearing in the forest, the moons and stars became visible again, and all sound seemed to die. Even their footsteps seemed muted as they approached a large stone dais in the center of the clearing. They didn't pause to admire the intricate stonework of the dais. The ornate carvings of twisted plots of six and murder that wove along the sides of the platform were as familiar to them as a wall tapestry. The great mosaic work of a giant, black spider that was the floor was as routine, if somewhat more sacred, than a tiled floor.

The dais was the shape of an irregular octagon, with each of the spider's legs ending at a corner. It was at these corners that each of the robed men and mer took their places. Once in place, they walked to the center of the stage, setting down a single nightshade flower before returning to their positions at the ends of the legs. In unison again, the cast a set of weak fireballs at the small pile of nightshade.

As the flowers quickly burned, the eight began to chant. "Cess, Yoodht, Neht, Neht, Iya, Neht, Geth?" as the chant continued the flames grew taller, changing in color from orange and red to a dark blue and purple. "Web, Ekem, Bedt, Seht, Payem, Iya, Neht, Neht, Ekem, Roht?" the flames became nearly black, rising to the height of a man, the smoke taking a humanoid shape. "Meht, Ekem, Payem, Hefhed, Ayam, Lyr, Ayem."

With the completion of the chant, the flames disappeared, leaving behind a black cloud of smoke that slowly formed into a feminine, almost human shape. Her skin was a colorless grey, though most of it was hidden beneath layers of black robes that suggested a seductive form was hidden beneath them. A hood that rose to a tall point was pulled over her head, reminiscent of a witch's cap. Out of her shoulders sprang four arms, two of the clasped in front of her as if in prayer, the others raised high to her side, almost like wings. The only color about her was a bright red hourglass shape that adorned the front of her robes.

Mephala opened her dark eyes, looking pleasantly at the eight gathered around her. "My loyal Weavers?" her face turned to a scowl. "You are late. We don't have much time before sunrise."

"We apologize," said the elder Nord man who stood in the center of Mephala's gaze, "the Witches Festival is more out of hand than usual this year. Many of the roads were blocked, even before sunset."

The Daedra made an inhuman hiss, a long, sinister tongue licking the air before returning to her mouth before she smiled again. "No matter. Our business tonight is simple." Voice seemed to resonate from every part of her body, as if the movements of her lips were just for show. "Have you done what I asked of you last year?"

"Yes," came the voice of a small Breton girl who now faced Mephala's scrutiny, "the temple to Ebonarm has been properly desecrated, as you requested."

"And the warrior-priests?"

"The prime suspects." The Breton smiled triumphantly.

Mephala returned the smile. "Excellent work. Just what I would expect from my Weavers. Now, how your next task?" her smile turned cruel, "I want a gift. A tribute of your loyalty."

"What sort of gift would suffice?" asked a middle-aged Imperial who stood behind her.

A moment of silence followed as Mephala turned and slowly approached the man. "My dear Weavers," her voice seemed soft and pleasant, but the eight heard the syrupy seductiveness of her voice, and flinched as every word dripped with poison. "You are my most loyal, most wise, and most? indispensable of my servants." One of her hands softly stroked the Imperial's face. Had she not been the darkest of all the Daedra, he might have been softened and drawn in by the sound of her voice.

As it was, he was stiff as a board. He was in a snake's coils. As if to remind him of this, Mephala's soft stroke turned into a harsh grip, forcing him to stare into the inky blackness of her eyes. "If anybody knows what I want, it would be you." Her serpentine tongue slipped out of her mouth to lick the Imperial's face, then moved down to his throat. "Or am I overestimating you?"

"No, cunning Webspinner," he said, trying his best to keep his breath from rushing in and out, to keep his pulse from racing.

Mephala smiled at the vain attempt. "That's good. I would hate to think of you as? disposable."

She released him and moved back into the center of the dais. "It seems our time is up." Sure enough, the sky in the east was beginning to lighten. "You have your task. I will return next year, and I expect my web to be properly spun."

As the sun peeked over the horizon, the Daedra Prince Mephala evaporated away into a cloud of smoke, dissipating into nothingness as the mountain wind swept it away.
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 6:13 am

I have to say, I thoroughly enjoyed this, and I rarely enjoy stories on here (though granted, I rarely read stories on here). Seemingly original, well-written, good descriptions of the setting and even little tid-bits of lore. :icecream:

The only line I found awkward was "the first spiders began to appear. At first they", just because 'first' sounds redundant...
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 10:07 am

Thanks, one of the reasons this concept appealed to me was the lore potential. There is so little that we know about the history of the sword, as well as just that area and time period in general. I'm going to have a lot of fun with this... I can tell! :)
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 10:21 am

I shall give you my highest praise, Moroni.

This beginning is so good, I feel it is good enough to be published commercially.

(This is the first story to which I have given this praise.)
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 6:22 am

I've been meaning to comment on this for a while.

I think my favorite aspect of the story so far is your use of description. The daedric ritual is well-described, and the image of Mephala is particularly vivid. Overall, you simply provide us with a dramatic, classic picture and a dark tone. There's nothing more to say, other than... :goodjob:

That said, I am missing having a character to latch onto. I hope that your next section will provide us with a character we can empathize with, to help pull us into the story. Daedric rituals are very dramatic and all, but an impending sense of darkness means nothing if we don't have a character whose fate we care about. That's my personal preference, anyway.

Good luck with this. I hope to see more. :)
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 6:00 am

You all flatter me too much... *blushes*
Here, as a thank you, have some ice cream! :icecream:
Or, if you don't like ice cream, here's another chapter!

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Chapter 2
14th Frost Fall, 2E553

As the sun continued to rise over the mountain clearing, the eight Weavers stood motionless. Not out of any reverence or ritual, but out of shock. The only movement was the occasional movement of a head, looking at the others who stood on the dais.

The first to break the silence was a young Breton, Laniel. "What do we do?" he asked simply.

Raddin, the old Nord, was quick to respond. "We do what she asks, as we have always done."

"That's not what he means," said Aleron, an Altmer who stood next to Raddin. "He asks what to bring her, the cunning Webspinner, for a gift." He raised his hand to rub at his chin as he left his position on the dais, the others following him off the platform and back along the trail.

"Exactly," Laniel piped back in. "She's a Daedra Prince, after all. What on earth could she want?"

"I have a large collection of gems," suggested Silian, the Imperial who had been in Mephala's clutches earlier. "I know just the one?"

"Idiot!" shouted the young Alfrun, Raddin's granddaughter. "You think Mephala is interested in such worldly riches? She would want something eternal, ever-lasting, and permanent!"

"A diamond is forever?" was Silian's muttered reply.

"I think you're all missing the point here," urged Norilar, another Altmer. "I think what the Webspinner would want as a gift isn't something that she would use herself. Rather, she would want an object to sow the seeds of discord. Something that would become a key point in her dealings within the mortal plane."

Another moment of silence brewed as they walked down the slopes of the mountains. The sounds of the festival the night before were gone, leaving only the sounds of a few songbirds and the mountain wind. The eight were all racked in thought. What could possibly fulfill such a role?

Each had their own ideas. Silian was thinking of a precious ring or amulet that would earn the greed and desire of many influential factions. Aleron had his thoughts set on an incredibly powerful magical artifact that all of Tamriel would fight over. Raddin was sure that Mephala would be most pleased with no tangible item, but some act that would further disrupt the always tumultuous state of things in High Rock.

All were still deep in thought as they approached the foot of the mountains. Nardhil, a Dunmer, was the first to speak her mind. "I think I know what we're all thinking," she began. "Something that will bring about great war and turmoil. But I was thinking?" she smiled wickedly, her face almost the likeness of Mephala herself. "Why not present a tool for death and anguish? Why not give her a sword?"

The entire group stopped, all of them looking at her, then at each other. They mulled the thought over in their heads, inspecting it, twisting it to their understanding. Think of the possibilities! Perhaps it would become the most feared and terrible blade in history. Maybe it would be the preferred tool of assassinations and battles alike. It may even turn out to be the goal of many an ambitious adventurer, bringing discord and death in their wakes.

Or maybe, just maybe, it could be all three.

- - - - - - - - - -

"Naenra Waerr, huh?"

Alfrun rode between Nardhil and Laniel, her grey speckled horse itching to move faster than the slow trot that the Dunmer had insisted they keep. The other Weavers had gone their separate ways, most of them living in Shornhelm, at the foot of the Wrothgarian Mountains. However, Laniel lived in Camlorn, while Nardhil made her home in Daggerfall. Alfrun would usually have gone with her grandfather to Farrun, but Nardhil had insisted that she accompany them.

"Yes," smiled Laniel, "she's a very powerful enchantress, probably the greatest in High Rock."

"Yeah, I've heard as much," Alfrun rolled her eyes. "I also hear she's completely mad. Why do we need her to make a sword? We're all mages, why can't we do it?"

"Because as gifted as we are, none of us can hope to match her." Nardhil sighed. "Maybe not even all of us combined. That is, of course, if Laniel's rumors are true."

"Oh, trust me, they are!" Laniel was oblivious of the veiled threat in Nardhil's gaze. Alfrun wondered what such a na?ve boy was doing in such a dark order. "I was old enough to remember when she blew up her family's estate outside of the city." He smiled. "That was when she was only ten years old. Imagine what she could do now!"

"That was, what, fifteen years ago?"

"Indeed." Laniel seemed overjoyed to be contributing so helpfully. He was as giddy as a child who has just receives his allowance.

"Alright, alright, so she destroyed a house," Alfrun growled, upsetting both her horse and Laniel, "But I could do that! It proves nothing." She paused for a moment, rubbing her steed's neck and humming softly to sooth him. "Besides, I still don't see why I have to come along."

"Because I told you to," Nardhil threw her a challenging stare with her burning red eyes. "You disagree?"

Although the Weavers had no official leader but Mephala herself. Nardhil served as a sort of unofficial head of the group. Even the two Altmer, Aleron and Norilar, answered to her. Yet Alfrun wasn't perturbed. "Yes," she said flatly, glaring back with her own icy blue eyes. "I do."

Laniel shifted uncomfortably on his horse as the two women continued their staring contest. A part of him almost laughed at how such a trivial matter had triggered this near deathmatch. The majority of him, though, was silently praying that they didn't start trying to actually kill each other. Even though he wasn't likely to end up between the two of them, it was just his luck that he would end up dead before either of them.

Nardhil smiled coyly and closed her eyes, humming to herself, breaking the tension of the staring contest. "So temperamental. I remember when I was your age." The Dunmer smiled and lifted her face toward the sky. "You remind me so much of myself back then?"

Alfrun gave a disgusted snort. "I'm glad I'll die before I get to be your age."

(edited for grammar)
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 8:44 am

A bit of grammar....

she destroy should be she destroyED.

Alfrun gave a disgusted snort. "I'm glad I'll die before I get to be your age."

In my book at least, that opens up the possibility of Nardhil retorting

"That could be arranged"... but that would be a cliche, wouldn't it?

And now, the chapter itself.

You have caught my attention. You make me WNAT to read.

Why is that?

First, you have struck the right balance. If you were just retelling the main quest, a part of me would be bored - we have all played the game, and we know what comes after what. But now you are making up a new story, while at the same time sticking closely to the lore - thus treading on familiar ground, and therefore keeping the reader's mind free from the distraction of having to follow an entirely new setting.

Second, you know how to start, and keep, dramatic tension. What does Mepahala really want? How will the quest for Umbra play out? How will the dynamic tension inside the group of devotees play out? We want to know!

Third, you know how to add touches that bring realism to the story. Examples -

Another moment of silence brewed as they walked down the slopes of the mountains. The sounds of the festival the night before were gone, leaving only the sounds of a few songbirds and the mountain wind

See. readers? The concept of SILENCE is reinforced in the next sentence by the absence of sound, and the few birds and the sound of the wind only heighten the concept, and reinforce the mood of silence and contemplation.

Oh, what a touch! Smooth, deft, but precise...like a master swordsman's flick of the wrist that taps aside your sword and slides his own to your chest!

There is only one more thing I will add.

MORE CHAPTERS!!! MORE! MORE!!!
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 5:43 am

Well, I don't know what to say! Thank you very much, have some more ice cream! :icecream:
I'll see what I can do about getting you some more chapters. Unless I go off on a wild tangent, we'll actually be meeting Naenra herself this next!
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Post » Wed Jul 21, 2010 8:24 pm

The ice cream I shall take (slurp)
Your next chapter I eagerly await
DARE ye not write it late...
or thee shall face readers irate!

:D :thumbsup:
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 5:17 am

Foxy, you make a wonderful rhyme!
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Pale hands I loved beside the Shalimar,
Where are you now? Who lies beneath your spell?
Whom do you lead on Rapture's roadway, far,
Before you agonize them with farewell?
-Laurence Hope, Kashmiri Song


Chapter 3
21st Frost Fall, 2E553

Knock, knock, knock.

A pair of pale green eyes slowly opened, though their sight was dimmed and blurry. The head that they belonged to raised for a moment to tilt an ear to the door. It was the ears that told the young Breton woman that she was in her small cabin, just outside of Camlorn's city walls. The whispers of the creaky beams and the cold wind from the Eltheric Ocean battering the walls told her more than the sight of the aged building ever could.

Knock, knock, knock.

So did the knocking. The city officials never left her alone for very long. Something about being an infamous witch, she imagined.

"One moment," she called in a monotone voice as she slowly slipped the bedcovers off of herself. The chill air nipped at her pale skin, but she didn't shiver. She hardly noticed it at all. It was mostly a sense of propriety that moved her to clothe herself in a black dress, as dark as the ebony hair that fell down her back in heavy waves. A pair of almost doll-like shoes kept her feet from freezing on contact with the cold stone floor as she walked to the door.

"Good morning, Miss Waerr."

The voice was unfamiliar to Naenra. Not surprising, nobody was her personal peeping tom for very long. Something about her being an infamous witch, she imagined.

"Please, come in," she said pleasantly, stepping aside to let him enter.

As he walked in, Naenra closed the door behind them. She thought it was odd that this guard didn't turn to keep her in his sight, or object to the closed door. Most did both.

"So?" the man shifted uncomfortably on his feet. "How are you today, Miss Waerr?"

"I'm doing well," she replied politely.

"That's good?" he stopped for a moment to rub his hands together. "Kind of chilly today, isn't it?"

Naenra sighed. "I suppose." She lifted a hand towards a small window on the wall, which opened smoothly. Outside of the window lay a small pile of firewood, a few logs of which lifted slowly into the air, floating in through the window, which closed behind them. The young man watched in amazement as they glided to the stone fireplace on the other side of the room, lightly dropping onto the small pile of ash.

He jumped a little as he felt something nudge his back. He turned quickly to see a rolled scroll drifting through the air towards the witch. It had come from a high set of shelves with dozens of other scrolls on it. He wondered what they might all be for, but he turned back to Naenra as he heard the scroll hit the table and unroll.

Naenra held her hands over the scroll, letting them hover for a moment. The arcane symbols began to glow a fiery red. Her hands moved upwards, as if she were pulling something out of the scroll. Surely enough, the runes lifted off of the paper, changing into small tongues of flame. With a flick of her wrist, Naenra tossed the flaming stream into the fireplace, immediately creating a roaring fire.

The enchantress used her hands to roll up the now blank scroll and moved it to the side.

The young man immediately crouched in front of the flame, partially for the warmth, but more out of sheer amazement. He'd never such command of Mysticism. Even for a Breton, this woman was amazing.

He stood up and cleared his throat, brushed off his chain mail guard cuirass, and introduced himself. "My name is Damian Hearthston," he began. "It's a pleasure to meet you, Miss Waerr."

"A pleasure to meet you too, Damian." She smiled, though the expression seemed hollow. Her eyes still held the same blank look. "But please, call me Naenra."

She couldn't see Damian's face redden in a blush, though she heard him lift his arm to run through his hair, which she couldn't see was as black as hers and pulled back into a ponytail. "Do you mind if I look around?"

She made a welcoming gesture, moving her arm in a wide arc. "Feel free."

Damian's brown eyes did a quick scan of the room before he moved to the shelf of scrolls. He pulled a few out, but was extremely careful with them. He had no idea what most of these scrolls were used for, and didn't want to accidentally summon a Daedroth or something.

As he moved around the room, Naenra sat at the table in silence. She was used to the routine. Even as he approached the small desk beside her bed, she said nothing.

Damian scanned over the small, shiny stones that lay littered across the lectern. He lifted one up, holding it to the firelight and watching it shimmer eerily. "Let me guess," he turned to Naenra, "Soulgems?"

Naenra nodded.

"What's in this one?"

The witch closed her eyes for a moment, as though she was listening to something. "Wolf," she said thoughtfully. "You will also find a some rats, birds, and a bear on that desk."

He stared at the soulgem once again, then set it down. "Do you have any others?"

She shook her head.

Damian continued looking around. He didn't find anything that would seem out of place in the home of any mage, especially in High Rock. The young man failed to see what all the fuss with "the terrifying Naenra Waerr" was all about. Looking at her, she seemed like nothing other than a beautiful young Breton woman to him. Sure, she was a little on the quiet side, but so was he in most company.

Satisfied with his search, he moved to the door. "It was nice to meet you, Naenra," he blushed again. "If you ever need anything just ask for me in the city, alright?"

Naenra nodded and waved goodbye without looking at him. He slowly closed the door, reluctantly leaving her alone.

"Well, he seemed nice."

Naenra moved her hand towards the desk with all the soulgems, pulling out a secret drawer that hung on the underside. Out of it floated another soulgem, but this one was different from the others. The gems on top of the desk were all smooth, with light shades of blue and purple. The one that Naenra brought to her table was jet black with a glossy shine, and shaped like a stake with jagged edges, as though it were a shard of volcanic obsidian.

As the black soulgem hovered in front of her, the voice reverberated in her ears again. "We'll have to try hard not to scare him off."

"That shouldn't be too hard, Father," she said lazily. "As odd as it seems, I think he's quite enamored with me."

The soulgem quivered a little bit as the soul inside it laughed. "Well, we can definitely use that to our advantage." It sighed. "I wonder-"

It was cut off by another sharp knock at the door. Naenra got up from her chair, moving her father's soulgem to a space beneath the bed. She opened the door quickly, and was greeted by a trio of black-robed figures.

"Naenra Waerr?" asked a Dunmer woman who stood in the center. When Naenra nodded, she continued. "We would like to speak with you for a moment."

"What about?"

Once again, her father laughed from beneath the bed. "Something about being an infamous witch, I imagine."
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Post » Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:34 am

There's something about your writing infamously rich,
Something that makes out imaginations twitch,
Something that makes us eagerly await the next
Chapter which excites us through its code of text -

Ah, this is why I choose to be here. No, no mortals mere
reside in this haven, held by we writers to be dear,
We all hold the touch of the fire in our briasts,
The magic that separates us from all the rest ...

Take wing, my soul, on flights true fiery
Take heart, ambition, on craft so finely
Done as Moroni and Others can reach -
Each line you write is lesson to teach!

So entertain us, amaze us, and yes, embrace us
in the worlds you create with words reverberate,
I pay thee all homage by visiting your threads
And I'll dream of thy stories even asleep in my bed.
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