Once he awakened from his deep sleep with his so called, "parents", he realized at merely the age of 3 that he didnt belong. After gathering his small dagger and other pety belongings runs away from his kahjiit parents. Merely 2 days after leaving his "home", he runs into a dark elf, a bandit. In great terror and fright he runs away and gets his left leg caught in a bear trap. As he hits the ground face first he starts to cry. He looks back. Blood, Dripping from his ankle. He rolls over on his back now in a pool of his own tears and blood. For no reason at all he says " Night MOTHER!!!! Pleeeease!!!!! Save me!!!" Then passes out from blood loss and exhaustion.

He wakes up looking at a strange man. The mans name was Lucien Lachance. He didnt know him, but he seemed,.. peacefull. He looks down at where his ankle once bled, it was cured! No sign of the wound! Not even a scratch! Lucien says to him. "You have prayed to the night mother. Now you must join the Dark Brotherhood." "What should i do sir'? I am only of 3." The young wood elf replies. "With time youngling, with time. I will Train you in the ways of killing. Now get some sleep. You have a long day ahead of you." Days turn into weeks, weeks into months, months into years. The wood elf grows into a developed 16 year old boy when He travels to Lucien's house to begin his training. But, the day felt different. The cold chill that he usually feels in his bones was, colder, his bones felt frozen.

As the young wood elf enters Lucien's house he says to Lucien, " Master, I am ready to begin my--" The wood elf looks at the normal lounge chair that Lucien uslually sits in, Lucien has a giant grin on his face. "Its time, You are ready to shed blood for the Dark Brotherhood." "Whos Life must i end?!" The wood elf asks with no regret on his tounge. "There is a man by the name of Rufio, He is young, Fast , and agile. He has slain a sibling of the night mother and therefore deserves to die by the black hand!"

As the wood elf walks up to the Inn of Ill Omen, He walks to Rufios Room, draws his arrow, and kicks the door in. THWANGGGG! He fires is first arrow. it misses by inches. By the time he is able to pull another arrow from his quiver, Rufio is in his face, Silver Mace in hand and is in mid-swing. Time freezes. He looks at Rufio in the eyes and sees a man who is aging, fast, with lots of pain in sufering in his life. As time unfreezes he sees the mace come down, striking him on the fore-head, and all of a sudden, Darkness.

The wood elf wakes up in a prison. Very scared and confused, a feeling he hasnt felt since, the bandit. He looks up and in the cell across from him is a dark elf, the bandit. He looked quite older, and in-experienced. The wood elf falls back asleep. hours turn to days, days to months, months to years. 4 years pass and the wood elf walks up to his bar door now at the age of 20, and in 4 years the bandit hasnt said anyhting to him. Then out of the darkness the bandits cell, the wood elf hears, "You're Going to die in here!"

Well now, this is different.

First thing first, I don't think he'd be running away at the age of three...maybe early teens, much more likely and it doesn't break any of your plot. Next, I don't see why he said Night Mother, unless you want him to be some kind of demon assassin child. Try to make that a bit more feasible somehow, maybe he was about 12 like I had mentioned, and his parents worshipped Mephala, and he called out to her. Much lore points to the NM being her, after all, and there is nothing wrong with you using that as well.

My own ideas aside, I must know, what is his name? Also, how did he know Lucien's name before he introduced himself?

Nice work on having him lose to Rufio, that was a first for me. I had never once seen anyone write that :goodjob:

I hope you make it less legend like and more narrative like in the coming chapters, as this becomes tiresome after the intro. I did the same thing myself on my first fan fic, and not too many people enjoyed a mix of legend and novel.

Also, a few grammar errors

Thanks for writing, good work so far, and I'll be back with more plot concerned comments as soon as you write more

well my pc is being really stupid and would'nt run spell check.

and if i might add it says he did at for no reason at all. and yeah i kind of agree with the age ordeal.. but i was trying to make it sound like he had 10 years of training.... so he would seem like he had a passion and a desire for what he did,

i forgot to mention this in the story but what i was hoping for is that the readers would draw from the story and kinda put the pieces together, lucien introduces himself before speaking to him. what i think i might do is do a re-edit to the story and change up things just a little.

and as for his name,... you will have to find out in chapter 1..