It is a good job that I agreed to read this after I had something to eat. It has taken so long to get up to date that I am hungry again.

OK, I enjoyed the story, it flowed pretty well and there was plenty of action to keep the reader (me) interested. It is good to see a long fan fiction that sticks to the theme, maintains interest and keeps the reader (me) wanting to get onto the next chapter. Very well done.

There are some misspellings and the use of some words that don't exist in the early chapters, but that does not detract from the story and acceptable as English is not your first language. As a tip, don't self censor words by using asterisks - type the word you want to use and let the forum censor decide if it needs a [censored] tag.

Ahah! Good ol' mind control devices. You've got you'reself back on the 10/10 track, Lav!

And do any of you guys keep forgetting Barren turned Ghoul?

Thank you Kerosa, I've taken it out, good to see that you're writing you're own fanfic now

Good tip Rohugh! I'll keep it in mind, and I'll try to take out any non-existing words if I can find them. (Did your avatar just wink at me!?)

Another 10 from skippy. Yahooo!! I almost thought I lost the touch (And maybe I should add more to the fact that Barren's a ghoul. TY!)

I really like this story, its got good flow, exciting and keeps you on the edge of your seat.

Good job

How do you keep making it so good?! Please keep writing! 11/10!

Thx Disco, thx Mikeh, wow my first 11

I'll try and write the final chapter asap. It'll be quite long i guess.

Ff..fffi...ffinall? FINAL?!?!?!

You MUST carry this on longer! Maybe do a spin-off?

Sorry, Mikeh. But I'll rewrite the chapters after it's finished.
Then I'll post it as one large story. Good enough?

Maybe, I'll just have to see how good the ending is!

And I'm making a Quantum Pistol in the G.E.C.K. now

I was TOTALLY going to do that once I had my PC version (I hate this freaking Xbox.... >:( )

Mikeh, put the .esp on Nexus! I'll endorse it

Jay!
You should send me screenshots when it's done.
I only have Xbox version, so that's too bad. Else I'd made it a long time ago

I've made it so that when the bullet collides with an enemy, its the blast from the nuka grenade, is that how you picture it?

Hmm, not excactly, but everyone pictures it differently.

The picture I have, is that when the bullet hits, the target emits in purple flames.
in the story, the bullet itself is surrounded by purple flames so as the combustion on the gun is.

the gun itself has a mettalic purple glow, but you can still see the metal look of the gun itself, so the purple 'coating' is kind of transparant.

I hope you're doing well on writing the final chapter, if you are... Can't wait!

Hm... I'll have to retexture some flames and the bullet. Can you actually see the bullet in the game?

Yeah. Not sure about with the 10mm, actually. I've followed a .32 round fired from the Hunting Rifle a few times, so I assume it's the same with the 10mm bullet.

Depends on the speed doesn't it? If the 10mm is faster than .32, you may not see it.

Are you talking about the tracer line? I get the line with the Hunting Rifle sometimes too and I'm pretty sure, now I think about it, I've seen a bullet with a 10mm VATs shot.

No, the actually projectiles have a speed. But you are right about the VATs shots, so I will edit the bullet as well.

Eh, Mikeh, I think you should make a topic in the Mods section, lol. We're spamming up poor Lav's topic.

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My earlier GECK file is messed up It has deleted half of the stuff

I'm actually honoured that you guys try to build something I've created in my mind.
But yeah, it would be best to continue this on a different topic, else you might upset the bear.

Back on topic: I'm going to start writing on the last chapter tonight. I've allreay got a lot of it on paper though.

I'll make a topic soon then, sorry for hijacking the thread

And I am sort of not lookign forward to the next chapter, on one hand I know it will be awesome and can't wait to read it, but on the other hand, I don't want the series to end

Holy crapcake! The last chapter!
It's huge, sorry.

But anyways, ENJOY!
and don't forget: Read, Reply and Respond!