If it's alright with you, I wanted to help you with some word usage and construction in your description. The beginning starts off so well, there isn't any reason the rest can't be so too.
You live the first ten years of your life being grown up by your parents and by the Enclave like any other child in Raven Rock.
being
reared by your parents
The next nine years will pass as well, until happens something what will change everything in your life.
until something happens that will change everything in your life.
OR you could go with the more cliche
until something happens that [changes\will change] your life forever
Rotors have recieved red damage, I repeat rotors of vertibird carrying Captain Kaine are at red damage level.
Rotors have
received red damage, I repeat rotors of
the vertibird carrying Captain Kaine are at red damage level.
"Crash
imminent, over!"
You will leave your post to search your father.
You will leave your post to search
for your father
There are some other issues with punctuation, specifically comma usage, but my brain was able to read it without noticing error on the first pass.
You could also do some things to be less of a reporter and more of a story teller. For instance:
You will leave your post to search your father.
This could be changed to something like, "Fearing for the well being of your father and going against your glorious duty as a citizen of the Enclave, you leave your post heading towards Paradise Falls... in search of your father."