Thank you Aussie! I would've done more but James didn't have anything else to do did he... I didn't want him to live anymore either, oh and I wanted to start off with the Lone Wanderer's POV as well, now I think some of you may know why the Lone Wanderer is an A'hole! (I hope...)
:D

I applaud your work Francois.
Great job.

I really liked this chapter....

No you did well with the characters. I understand that there's not much to write about a character when he's lost half his limbs and yes I did notice that LW is some what of an A'hole lol but he has a little background story to explain why. Good character development.

Yet another chapter! Andy, (Thats me!), hopes you like it!

Chapter 3

And so we move on from James, who died, wishing to return to his family after their slaughter by the Lone Wanderer's hands. Moving on, we go to the amazing master of technology, who was trusted by the Lone Wanderer fully. This was, somehow, to be the Lone Wanderer's biggest mistake of his life.

The man, that the Lone Wanderer had asked to do something that he could not intrust to anyone else, his name was The Mechanist. He started as a simple man, repairing a simple robot that defended a simple town. One day, his whole life changed and he became what he liked to believe as a superhero.

He changed his life that day, his name, his identity and most importantly, his friends. He went from loving his friends in his town to just being with robots, for over a month he toiled to repel the person that tried to destroy his small town. After all that time, during one of the many furious battles held between the two crazed people, the Lone Wanderer joined in.

He came in, as soon as he saw what was going on, he brought up his gun and he killed The Mechanist's foe. Directly after that he eliminated all of her minions, as soon as he was done he aimed towards The Mechanist. Somehow, the bloodshed never happened?

The Mechanist looked at the entrance to his lair hurriedly, he took a breath and he looked at his work. The Lone Wanderer's dream, what he'd always wanted to take over the Wastes? The Mechanist had been given a choice, help him or die. He hoped he'd made the right choice.

The Mechanist looked at his creation and he laughed, he quickly ran down everything in his mind that he'd used to create this weapon of mass destruction. First up, was the cloaking technology. The Lone Wanderer had wanted The Mechanist to put together his finest pieces of technology to create something even better.

The first thing that The Mechanist had received was a Chinese Stealth Suit. He managed to break it apart and take out the cloaking device hidden inside the armor. After he was done with that, the Lone Wanderer came back just in time to give him something new, a beautiful rifle, but still deadly.

The whole insides of the weapon had been changed around by a previous man, which now made it shoot approximately 9 lasers from the single barrel. The Mechanist had fun switching the pieces inside to make the rays even deadlier, he was wondering how to make this all together when the Lone Wanderer came in with his next piece of technology.

The Wanderer walked in one day with a wonderful piece of Armor, black as the night sky and tough as a Deathclaw's hide. He managed to fit the cloaking device from the Stealth Suit into the neural interfaces of the Armor and he was satisfied. He was given more and more technology from the Enclave's remains and he manged to change the armor into something more?

He added in two mini laser turrets on the Armor's shoulder pads, keeping whoever wore the armor safe from an ambush. He managed to fit in emergency medical systems, causing stimpacks to inject themselves into the wearer if they became mortally injured. He even added in amazing force field technology, causing anyone who came too close to be forced back.

After he was finished tinkering with the armor, he was given another challenge, he was supposed to change the rifle he'd gotten a while ago. He upped the ante of the beams, adding two more barrels on top of the rifle, causing 27 beams of light to extend from this already deadly rifle. As well as that, he opened up the ammunition chamber to cause approximately 50 microfusion cells to fit into it.

He managed to fit in about 4 fission batteries into the armor to keep the systems going and after he was done updating everything and keeping it in top condition he was faced with yet another challenge. He was given a small device that caused temperatures of up to 6000 degrees celsius, he was supposed to meld it with the rifle.

After 1 month of work, he was done, he had managed to finish, now he waited, in anticipation, for the Lone Wanderer to return.

Any comments would be appreciated! (Aussie, I'm looking at you.) :stare:

Lol I'd be more than happy to Francois or Andy which ever you prefer. I enjoyed the story. I'm getting the feeling this is a sort of set up chapter a sort of background to help explain whats going to happen next. I'm anxiously waiting to see if the lone wanderer uses or abuses the Mechanist's trust. I like it how you don't cram every chapter with crazy action scenes full of war and explosions like some other stories (I don't really know what stories I'm referring to). I think it's great how you give your characters depth. Again it's a good job from me :goodjob: .

Ahh, thank you Aussie! I appreciate your Reviews of my story... (Review? WTF,) Either way, I don't always think it always needs to be action, sometimes you need to set it up... The next installment will probably be tomorrow comrades! For now, I'm off to bed.

Poor James... He died :facepalm: I really liked the way they always met but in the end they didn't actually fight. You solved the problem in a much more original way! And the last chapter with this super armor... I'm curious what will happen. If John gets this armor he'll wipe out the capital wasteland

Oh, damn, if he does get his hands on that armor, I'll... Buy you all a drink? :foodndrink:

Feedback appreciated?

Feedback needed for next chapter to be written!

Next installment will be after I can succesfully put words together after spending about 2 days without sleep...

I'll attempt to write something today or tomorrow, .

THAT'S IT! Chapter 3 Part 2 is... Being written.

Chapter 3 Part 2

The Mechanist looked at his work and he gulped, he wondered how he could've agreed to do such a monstrous thing, to doom the Wastes to death... He looked nervously at the entrance to his lair and he sighed a breath of relief, the time of the entrance of the Lone Wanderer had gone and past. John had promised him that he'd only enter at 6 pm... Exactly. The Mechanist looked down at his creation again and he shuddered. He once again, wondered, why he'd even thought of doing such a thing.

He quickly retreated to his bed and he flicked the switch, activating all the robots inside the building, he heard them start up and he fell blissfully into his bed. He closed his eyes and he dreamt. He dreamt of a world, without John, a world that had robots helping people do what they needed to do, a world... Of peace. He slept through the night, dreaming and never stopping, the sounds of the robots shuffling did nothing to disturb him. But, some time after midnight, he did awake.

He awoke, to horror.

He heard the siren of his alarms go off as someone breached the entrance on the bottom level of the building, he jumped out of bed and rushed towards his security camearas. Courtesy of John of course. Standing in the entryway to his building, stood a man, garbed in power armor and with a wonderfully crafted laser weapon strung across his back, he stood with the air of a strong man. He quickly grabbed the weapon off his back and he ran forwards, right into a contingent of security robots.

The Mechanist grinned as he thought of this man's fate as doomed, but after 10 seconds, his grin faded into a look of shocked horror. He watched as the man tore through the robots, aiming, firing, taking them out, taking cover, not even getting hit ONCE. The Mechanist started to worry but he realised that the man wasn't even close to penetrating his lair so his confidence returned. He watched as the man battled his way through the building.

Ducking and weaving through the metal work.

Climbing and running over the catwalks...

And soon enough, pounding down the door that led to The Mechanist's lair.

The Mechanist started to worry, as he thought of what was left in the man's way, he suddenly thought of the answer. Nothing. He heard the scraping of his secret door come to life as the man pressed the hidden button, The Mechanist knew he was doomed, so he stood his ground, waiting. The man soon enough, jumped through the little hole and moved towards The Mechanist. They stared at each other and then the man, opened his mouth.

His voice was rough, raspy, as though he'd lived long enough to see the war.
"You, you are The Mechanist are you not?"
The Mechanist took a gulp before replying, "Yes, yes, I am who you think I am."
"Well then, let me tell you, I think your going to die for what you've done for the Lone Wanderer. Oh and you don't get any say in this, at all, prepare to die you stupid fool."

The Mechanist raised his hands and screamed, the man brought up his weapon and aimed at The Mechanist, he heard the sound of a laser being let loose and he heard the terrible sounds of blood spraying everywhere. The only thing was, it wasn't his. He opened his eyes and he saw the man's corpse laying on the ground, blood spurting out of the stump that was his neck. A man with a definite air of command stood behind him, The Mechanist recognized him at once.

The man spoke, quickly and quietly, "Mechanist, where is what you promised me? How did you let your defenses get taken over so easily?"
The Mechanist opened his mouth and managed to choke out, "He destroyed everything, I had no chance."
"Too bad, you've done what you needed to do anyway," the Lone Wanderer moved over to The Mechanist and punched him in the head.

The Mechanist fell to the ground in a daze, he blacked out a couple of seconds later.

As he awoke, however much later it was, he saw a giant figure of a man standing above him, he gawked at the figure and he immediately guessed who it was. The Lone Wanderer had taken the armor and weapon, he'd already put them on and he stood there above him, he heard a rasping laugh and he shuddered, "So, Mechanist, say goodbye to your life, I hope you had fun thinking I'd let you live."

As Johns' foot came down upon The Mechanist's head, he had one final thing to say...

"[censored] you, I hope you have fun with the little fault I built in."

The Mechanist then breathed no more.

These chapters have become more short stories involving the other people who make up the lone wanderers life. Excellent story Francois, best chapter yet. I'm interested in who the other man was although I'm not sure if I will ever find out. I loved the final words of the mechanist, a little cliff hanger keeps me and others wanting more chapters. It's good to see you've written a larger chapter. I'm no grammar or spelling Nazi but this part doesn't feel right when I read it.

John then let his foot come down upon The Mechanist's head and The Mechanist had one last thing to say to him, "[censored] you, I hope you have fun with the little fault I built in."

I think a full stop should be after head or you could say:

As Johns' foot came down upon The Mechanist's head, he had one final thing to say.....

Or something along those lines. It's only advice you don't have to take it Apart from that one minor error another great chapter :clap: can't wait for more.

Thank you Aussie, I think your one of the main reasons I've kept writing. You're a great inspiration! Thanks, :goodjob:.

No worries at all Francois, I've really enjoyed reading these stories. You're a great writer :goodjob: Keep it coming!

Thanks again, I know who's next in the story list, it isn't the Lone Wanderer... It's someone who's a mix of good and evil, I kind of stole a bit of it away from him and gave it to The Mechanist with the surveillance idea: (I got that idea BEFORE Desmond in PL, ), So I'm planning on writing the new chapter in the next 2 or 3 days. I hope to continue to live up to your standards Aussie!

With the way you write Francois of coarse it will!

What the hell? You used 'shuddered' like every three seconds.

It's from personal experience, the last time I got seriously injured I was shuddering non-stop. This was because I was losing blood rapidly, I had a broken bone and I was alone. I'm pretty sure James had it worse.

Next Chapter will be up when... I have time.

sweet nice chapter :goodjob:

Will be writing something soon...

I'll probably write something tomorrow.