The King And I - Thread II

Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 3:08 am

OMG, this has been a looong drought! But no mirage this time! Tis the real thing!

I knew Goldenlocks was Elysana come to exact her revenge on Helseth. Don't ask me how I figured it, just put it to my years of reading espionage novels and being accustomed to seeing double agents everywhere. Still, it was all well done!

I loved the comparison of Elysana's coif with Nenya's rat's nest! It really brings up the contrast between the two blondes. As a matter of fact, the hair color is the only thing they have in common.

Quintultimate chapter? Do you mean that we now have less than five chapters left? Oh no!

And before I take off, let me congratulate you on your birthday, wedding and honeymoon. Good excuses for being away so long, all of them. May things go much better in your life than they have for poor Eadwyrd and Gwynabeth!
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Dona BlackHeart
 
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Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 10:08 pm

Well, my dear.... you are now back, and if I'm not mistaken, you have rather a lot of correspondence to reply to (hint, hint)

DANG I sound like Crassius! Let's hope you don't do a Nenya on me, and flatten me! :P

There is MUCH I wish to comment upon, and your prose deserves it.

First, though, before I start my anolysis, a word or three thousand of congratulations. Congratulations on your own love's fruition in marraige. Congratulations on moving into, and setting up, a household, which I'm sure you have done with a combination of terrifying Miss Teaza efficiency and the odd touch of Sweetly Charming Rumple rumpledness. Congratulations on celebrating a new birthday with a love new in time and ageless in destiny. (Is that three thousand yet?)

And now...and now, let us anolyse the prose.

1. Is it my imagination, or is your prose becoming more and more disciplined and effective as your story progresses? To do more with less is a goal all writers strive for, and indeed should strive for, especially writers like yourself, BSparrow, mALX, and Old Andy (whom I have the great honour to edit) who shove out words in packets of seven thousand or so at a time and chapters at the rate of two a day. You all have the complete reverse of writer's block syndrome. I really think you should distill some of that prolific creativity, bottle it, and sell it to aspiring writers at $ 1000 a pop - they would gladly pay that and more!

2. I also think that .... you should do what mALX and SubRosa are doing, and rewrite the whole fantasticofreakonormous thing. (Please be gentle when you bunt (hehe, inside joke) that Nenya-Hammer at my decrepit head for that.) True, the task is immense, but the rewards will be great - especially if you are seriously considering a career in editing and writing.


To the PLOT and CHARACTERS now!!! And I, for one, see...

3. The plot is moving with much more definition now, and that is ANOTHER reason for rewriting your prose. Frequently it is only at the end of a story that the writer herself sees the story as a whole, and notices that explantions, foreshadowings, and deletions and insertions at critical points (and don't NOBODY on dese here Forrums giggle at that, HEY? THERE CAN BE ONLY ONE INNUENDO-IST HERE!!! :stare: ) are necessary...

4. Ditto the characters. They were slightly unfocused in the beginning of the story - but now as the plot tightens so does your characterization. I like the later Nenya and Helseth much more than the earlier versions. Ditto Crassius! HOWEVER.... his all too sudden realization that he's been drugged-charmed-bamboozled is jarring, way, waaaaaaaay too much of a deux ex machinissimo for me. I know that will entail a rewrite...but could you...could you....??? I;m sure you can...


And now I shall bring my critique to a conclusion with a simple:

Welcome back, my dear, from all of us. You have been deeply missed, our new Mrs.

:lol:
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Pawel Platek
 
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 7:34 am

Thanks for the welcome, guys! I've missed you all!

Foxy, your advice is taken to heart. I sort of agree with it 50-50 - I'll explain why. Firstly, you are 100% right about having to rewrite - in seven years I've learnt a lot about the craft, and I hope I've managed to improve. While I have gone back and reqritten little bits and pieces - I did a large rewrite to the whole thing before I posted this second thread - the structure and tone of the warlier chapters is really rather juvenile. I'm not sure I have the determination to go back and start this monster again from the beginning, but I will definitely continue to polish bits I am dissatisfied with. After all, we never become perfect; all we can do is keep learning.

Secondly, the strengthening of characterisation. This is where I'm 50-50. There are definitely some characters who became more concrete in my head as the story developed - Solon and Bomba, for two - but funnily enough, the majority have not changed in my mind much at all. I think I mentioned once before that I began this story by writing many of the ending scenes, not the beginning. They've been developed since, of course, but perhaps that means that my vision was clear at the very beginning, and then wavered as time went on? I also wanted to mention that at the beginning I wanted to keep the characters deliberately ambiguous: as the story progresses, the reader learns more about them and as a result of the experiences we see them go through, their personalities become clearer. I wanted to keep a bit of mystery in the beginning, keep the reader guessing. I'm not saying "haha, I planned it all!!", however. I think your idea of an extensive rewrite is probably the best thing. My writing was juvenile back then and it certainly shows!

I'm really glad to be back :) Rumple, out! xxx
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 3:49 am

Yay! Wonderful new chapter! :drool: I agree that this story has only improved with time, but don't go changing the beginning chapters too much if you plan an overhaul, they're what got us all hooked in the first place afterall :D I must say, I was beginning to worry that you wouldn't finish, lol. I see now that you had much more important things to do lately (grats on all that btw), but I'm glad to see this story continue, hopefully to its exciting conclusion :)
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 12:56 am

Damn! Torture that evil queen! Cut off her fingers first! Then her hair! Continue the cutting until nothing is left! Why did you let her go? WHY???? Helseth was such a cool guy! He could have got a new golem! And soon that is ruined because of the plotting his sister has implemented!!!

:sadvaultboy:

Its all too much... ah well... Continue on, but punish that queen harshely! H*A*R*S*H*E*L*Y!

Give her one of those robes which will take her flesh off!

[/Bloodthirst]

Good chapter, I like the story. Its wonderful. Nenya for Queen of Morrowind and Wayrest! Go her!
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 4:40 am

Yahoo!!! :wavey:

After months of crappy, stressed out beyond belief, real life exile, I've finally come back - and first order of business was to come here and get caught up! :celebration:

I see you haven't lost your touch as well. You still manage to combine moments of dastardly plotting with moments of humour that make me laugh. Loudly and inappropriately usually. I learned many years ago never to sip a cup of tea when reading your updates, painful experience having taught me that the tea would most likely end up decorating the keyboard and monitor in unusual patterns.

Examples in question?

Suddenly he cut off, mid-sentence. His normally mischievous expression melted like a snowflake in summer; he looked as if he had swallowed a lemon. His eyes bulged.

"Um," said Nenya nervously, half-rising from her chair. "Do you… do you need a pat on the back or something? You've gone a bit… bulgy."

"Not necessary," Crassius gasped. "Beg pardon – indisposed – Forvus!" he roared, stumbling round the desk and yanking a drawer open.


"Nenya, Nenya, pearl of my Abecean Sea! Flower of my Colovia! Jewel of my Niben! O vision of Dibella herself, what miracles of karma could I possibly have navigated to deserve so bright and beautiful a presence? To what, my sweet pea, do I owe such unmitigated pleasure?"


"Ah!" Crassius cried, clutching his briast as if wounded from some invisible arrow. "How came you to such an unhappy conclusion?" He tried shepherding her into the office, but gave up with the realisation that one hundred and fifty pounds of plate armour moves where it will. "Might I inquire why you choose to injure me so?"


You have quite a turn of phrase, it's almost lyrical. One complaint from many moons back that I recall someone said was that Crassius seemed almost too over the top. Not now, you've really made him... well, just right. Crafty, malicious, charming, egotistical, and just downright fun. A perfect mixture of contadictions all trying to get out, and giving him so much more depth than the game ever managed. And the interplay between him and Nenya is just, well, brilliant. She's the perfect foil for him. Hmm, just like she's the perfect foil for Bomba. And Caius. Damn, she's just an awesome character really.

And with Goldenflower finally about to get her just rewards, the seeds of doubt spreading in Helseth, Eadwyrd Greenhart preparing himself to do something (I dare not even attempt to guess what that something might be), and the no doubt exquisitely devious plans of Solon and Morgiah being set in motion off screen...oh boy, this promises to be one hell of a finale.

I'm just so glad I'm back to be able to enjoy it! :foodndrink: :foodndrink:
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Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 7:45 pm

Thanks a hundred thousand million everyone!

YAY SIERRA, YOU'RE BACK! :twirl: I'm so pleased you found the Crassius/Nenya scene amusing - I did wonder if I was flying over the top again but honestly, Crassius is my one indulgence. It's just so fun to write him as http://www-tc.pbs.org/wgbh/gormenghast/scenes/images/costumes_prunes_04_big.jpg philanderous long-lost brother.

oh boy, this promises to be one hell of a finale.

I really hope so, because remember when I said there's a point when the action explodes? We have arrived in explodeyville.


The King And I

Chapter Thirty-Six – The Last Task Of Eadwyrd Greenhart



The door to Morgiah and Barenziah’s parlour banged open, causing the three occupants to leap up in alarm, Bomba ‘Lurrina’s hand going to her katana. She checked it, however, when the lamplight revealed the intruder to be Nenya. Caius was not far behind.

“The oil’s really on the fire now,” the Nord said grimly, throwing herself into a chair without waiting to be asked. “Helseth has a mob on his hands. I’m going to kill that jumped-up conniving snake Crassius.”

Despite the seriousness of the situation, a flicker of smug satisfaction seemed to cross Caius’ face at Nenya’s verbal evisceration of his nemesis.

Barenziah looked thunderstruck. “A mob? How? What do you mean? What in the gods’ name has happened?”

“Elysana,” Nenya announced. “Queen Elysana of Wayrest has been in Morrowind for a whole month, sitting in Crassius Curio’s plushed-out mansion sending Morag Tong assassins after your family.”

For a moment, neither Barenziah nor Morgiah spoke. Then the Princess’s hands began very slowly to clench and unclench.

“Crassius Curio, you say?” Her voice was deadly calm.

“He didn’t know,” Nenya said reluctantly, weighing honesty against personal grievance and coming out on the side of the former, as usual. “He didn’t have a clue who she was; she set herself up as some impoverished noble. The real problem was that he took her to the King instead of bringing her here. I don’t know how he knew Helseth was in Vivec – he must have only just arrived – but he and Elysana had a brawl on the Justice steps and practically the whole city turned out to watch.”

Barenziah was silent, apparently too appalled to speak. Morgiah sat down slowly, tense as a bowstring.

“Elysana has been detained?” she questioned, still with that awful composure that spoke less of peaceable acceptance and more of racks and thumbscrews.

“I told the Ordinators to find her a cell in the Ministry of Truth.” Nenya narrowed her eyes at the Princess; was there something... different about her? “With no torture. She can await trial; we need to sort Helseth out first.”

“What is he doing in Vivec?” Barenziah whispered, regaining her voice at last. “He said nothing to me about any journey.”

Bomba ‘Lurrina spoke up from the corner. “I would suppose he is heading towards Red Mountain, your Highness.”

Nenya looked the two Dunmer women in the eye, one after the other. “I know you didn’t want to believe it before, and I don’t blame you. But there is no time for denial now. If he’s going all the way up there, my guess is that things are coming to a head. Whatever the black-robes are doing for him, they’ve finished.”

Morgiah breathed in very slowly. Her mind was a mess of whirling thoughts – plans, strategies, outcomes, all formed and dismissed in a moment. To quiet the storm more than anything, she reached for the notes she and Barenziah had been reviewing before the interruption.

“We may have found another connection,” she informed them, the proclamation sounding absurdly minor in the light of what had just been announced. “We have been re-evaluating the findings from yours and Ser Curio’s investigations, Sergeant Cosades, and from Bomba ‘Lurrina’s report of Orsinium. We have found a rather strange connection. A young Imperial by the name of Tulius Cicero appears in both accounts; first as a scholar on Dwemer architecture that King Gortwog recommended to Helseth’s envoy, and second as a missing person in Ser Curio’s list of recent abnormalities and disappearances. Can either of you shed some light on this coincidence?”

Nenya threw up her hands in exasperation. “What does it matter? There’s no time for this–“

But Caius’ suddenly clapped a hand to his mouth, his eyes flying wide. “Tulius Cicero,” he hissed. “I knew it – I knew I recognised the name! How could I have been so stupid… he’s a Blade! An acolyte. He worked in High Rock, but he was relocated to Morrowind last Frostfall. I would never have known if I signed his transfer when I was on secretary relief in the Imperial City barracks.” His hand formed a fist. “A Blade…”

With a sickening lurch, Morgiah realised she recognised the name as well – and also remembered from where. No wonder it jumped out at her; it had been a newspaper headline in her study not two months ago. The Common Tongue. It had been right in front of her all that time, and she’d not had the wit to see it. “He must have known something Helseth wanted. High Rock… he must have had information about Numidium.”

“Poor bastard,” Caius whispered, face grey. “Talos knows what Helseth did to make him talk.”

Nenya stood up. “I’m going,” she announced abruptly, swinging her hammer onto her shoulder.

Morgiah surfaced from her reverie, blindsided. “Excuse me? Now? You’ve only just arrived!”

“To Red Mountain,” Nenya said, her face uncharacteristically serious. “I might be able to get rid of enough Dreamers to delay Akulakhan’s reactivation. Worth a try, anyway.” Her eyes flickered uncertainly to Caius, but he was already on his feet by her side. It seemed there was no question of their being separated.

Morgiah let them go. What did it matter? There was a small possibility they could do some good, even if it was only damage control. “Go well,” she said, the words sounding as meaningless as they were. If Helseth had got this far, no amount of Dreamers’ heads would make much difference.

They left, Nenya narrowly avoiding a catastrophe as a tray-laden chambermaid appeared in the doorway.

“Tea, ma’am,” said the maid imperiously, transferring a cake-stand to the sideboard and arranging the cups.

“I cancelled all service today,” Barenziah said curtly. “Please see that the message is conveyed to the kitchens and kindly do not disturb us further.”

The maid nodded and turned – but Bomba ‘Lurrina had suddenly vacated her inconspicuous chair in the corner, and quick as lightning, had shot a hand out to grasp her wrist.

“By the Moons,” she whispered, her voice becoming feral. “Well I never. It has been many years since I have seen you, my lady.”

Barenziah stood, the confusion on her face turning to furious suspicion in the blink of an eye. “What is the meaning of this?” she demanded, her soft tone somehow more threatening than any voice raised in anger.

There was a pause, a moment of uncertain power-struggle as the personalities in the room clashed, before the chambermaid broke the silence.

“Forgive me,” she replied coolly, crossing the room and laying a ring down on the table, “but the deception was necessary. The Empire is not as ignorant of this matter as you would like to think.”

Morgiah’s sharp eyes took in the seal on the ring’s flat surface; the Imperial insignia. “You have one minute to explain who you are,” she said in the same quiet tone as her mother, “before you ensure that these four walls are the last you see. Your name, madam.”

“My name is Lady Brisienna Magnessen. I am a loyal servant of the Empire, and the Hlaalu Crown’s doings have not gone unnoticed by our Sovereign’s agents in the province.”

“Bomba?” Morgiah asked, her eyes not leaving the Imperial’s face.

“She’s a spy,” Bomba ‘Lurrina confirmed. “In my time as agent to the Emperor, she acted as my contact.” The Khajiit cocked her head, regarding the lady with a peculiar expression of smugness. “Unlucky for you I was here, no? The only person in all Morrowind who could have blown your cover! What are the chances?”

“Indeed, you have ever delivered undesirable results,” Brisienna rejoined, her voice like a barb of ice. “The Empire holds no love for oathbreakers and traitors.”

Bomba ‘Lurrina laughed witheringly. “My lady, the reason I have eluded ‘justice’ all these years is because the Emperor knows my decision was undisputable. Numidium’s Mantella belonged to no-one but the Underking. Given your scepticism, perhaps you would like to follow him to his current resting place and conduct your trial there?”

Brisienna’s eyes flashed with anger.

“Enough,” pronounced Barenziah, her authoritative tone cutting through the atmosphere like a knife. “I see there is much history here that would be best left undisturbed. Lady Magnessen, do sit down.” It was not a request.

The four women settled on the edge of their chairs, like vipers ready to strike.

“Now,” Barenziah said, attempting to appear civil, “Let us hear from you, Lady Magnessen. What is the Emperor’s stance on this matter, and what exactly do you hope to achieve by your actions here?”

“I am in no position to discuss the Empire’s designs,” Brisienna replied evenly. “Let it be plain that we have learned enough here to piece together what King Helseth is doing, and it is high treason. There can be no mistake in this. Your own roles in this fiasco are as of yet indeterminate. Provide us immediately with the King’s full plans and his whereabouts, and you will be pardoned with minimal interruption to your sovereignty. An Imperial co-ordinator will be dispatched to supervise the transfer of the crown, and to oversee the initial stages of the new reign.”

The words closed over Morgiah like a blanket of ice. With Imperial involvement, reality hit like never before. This wasn’t just a kin squabble to be resolved among themselves; it was Empire-wide now, and it would result in the sundering of this family forever. High treason meant execution, no exceptions.

As the sudden emotions raged in her, she heard Barenziah’s calm voice as if through deep water. “I am afraid these terms are not acceptable, my lady. We know nothing of his Majesty’s whereabouts, and have only scant information of what he may or may not be doing.” In any other mouth, this blatant lie would have lit up like a beacon, but Barenziah’s cool surety gave it precisely the weight it needed. “Furthermore, no ‘co-ordinator’ will be necessary. Morrowind has ever managed its own affairs, in accordance with our long-established Imperial agreement.”

“You must have some idea where he is,” Brisienna snapped, losing patience. “I have seen enough in my time here to know that you have been conducting your own investigations into his activities. The King is suspected of numerous crimes against the Empire. We already have proof that he is involved in the disappearance of the Blade associate Tulius Cicero, and circumstantial evidence of much more. I have so far gone to great lengths to exempt you from Helseth’s sentence; do not force me to rescind such generosity.”

“Your efforts are noted and appreciated,” replied Barenziah mildly. “But I am afraid we cannot help you. Whatever you believe his Majesty may be doing, I am sure such hysterical accusations as treason are premature.” She passed over the fuming Brisienna and held the door open politely. “We will, of course, inform you of any developments to this case. Please do not hesitate to contact us if you require further assistance.”

Brisienna rose, gathering her skirts. Her glare was a frozen lance. “Your lack of cooperation has been noted. Make no mistake: Helseth will be found, and quickly. The Empire is not finished with this debacle.” She swept from the room, the door banging behind her.

Barenziah and Morgiah looked at each other, the expression on each blood-drained face reflecting the other.

“This has escalated far beyond anything I had imagined,” Bomba ‘Lurrina said softly, startling them with her sepulchral tone. They had forgotten she was even there. “I do not think you can protect Helseth from the Empire, your Highnesses.”

“Of course we cannot, the stupid boy,” Barenziah expostulated, showing her anxiety at last. “How could he endanger himself this way? The family? Is Morrowind not enough for him? He’s coveting the whole of Tamriel, for Azura’s sake! Has he lost his mind?”

“I think he has,” Morgiah murmured.

Barenziah looked at her, suddenly haggard. “This is it, you know. That damned woman won’t wait, no matter how we try to stall her. They’ll be releasing the hounds any day now. Morgiah, I ask this as your mother – find him.”

A wrench, tugging her heart. “And do what? Magic a pardon for high treason out of thin air?”

“I don’t know,” Barenziah whispered. “Just find him before they do. Please.”

Morgiah closed her eyes, the alien plea in Barenziah’s voice making her blood run cold. They'd built themselves like a house of cards, this family, adding layer upon treacherous layer until the links were flimsy as silk... and now Helseth had tried to snatch an ace from the bottom row, and suddenly everything was crashing down around them. Images flashed across her vision; she and Helseth playing Halma-board in the dim light of the nursery candle, she and Helseth sharing midnight feasts, she and Helseth breaking into the Wayrest Treasury and playing marbles with the precious gems, she and Helseth when life was simple, and they had not become strangers…

It seemed aeons away, a distant past. She opened her eyes.

“Tell the groom to ready my carriage.”



*



The Dreamer Master gripped the rail of the observation platform, the unnatural strength of his fingers crushing the copper tubing. It’s a fever, he assured himself. Such as anyone could have. It means nothing. There is nothing wrong.

Another crippling pain shot through his stomach, sending him to his knees.

Struggling upright, he looked wildly around – he could not allow his subordinates to learn of his predicament. Fortunately, he was high on the walkway, near the tarnished gleam of the great Head. The cultists seldom came up here; the only people you would find at these dizzy heights were the Patients, and it mattered little what they did or did not see.

From his vantage point, he could see the unobtrusive bronze-bound door in the rockface hundreds of feet below, and to his satisfaction there was a robed figure standing quietly nearby. It was essential that this door was guarded at all times; the old woman, especially, had become difficult and troublesome of late. And Vivec was always a problem. With the project so close to completion, everything must be perfect for his Majesty’s arrival.

The air around the Master seemed to shimmer; he gasped, his breath catching in his throat. Damn this place; the exposed magma chamber made the Facility Cavern a furnace. Air. I must have air.

Turning, he began to stumble down the ramp to the mined air-duct that would lead, small and winding, to the exposed mountainside.



*



The guard by the bronze-bound door on the lower level of the Facility Cavern lifted his head slightly. The face underneath the hood was not the ash-dark of a Dunmer, but pale and drawn.

Eadwyrd pulled the cloth down lower over his face, and moved into the shadow of the wall.

It had not been difficult to get this far. The Master Dreamer’s concerns were elsewhere; the mer was clearly in the advanced stages of full-blown Corprus. Even Eadwyrd’s toil across Red Mountain to Dagoth Ur had gone by in a haze, the harshness of the landscape bearing no comparison to the nightmare in his mind.

The ceiling of the cavern stretched away above him, disappearing into darkness. The gigantic figure filling it gleamed from the ministrations of a hundred Corprus victims, scurrying across its vast surface like beetles. Even in Eadwyrd’s tortured mind, a seed of horror burst forth at the sight. He had imagined what Helseth must be doing, but this… this was beyond anything.

Suddenly afraid for the first time in the whole journey, he stumbled backwards into the shadowy alcove behind him, and fumbled for the handle of the door there. It swung open…

Into total and utter darkness.

He blinked. It was not just shadow, it was like a window had been cut out of the air. Now he looked more closely, he could see pinpricks of light, like stars. Had he inadvertently opened a door that lead onto the slope of the Mountain? But no – there was no rockface, no clouds, no moons. Just the stars, and… a golden figure?

There was someone out there.

Eadwyrd stepped through the concealed entrance to the Aetheric prison, and began to run.



*



In the crater of Red Mountain, the ancient Dwemer ruins of Dagoth Ur lay scattered like broken and discarded toys. The volcano’s many eruptions had caused the majority of the structure to sink into the basalt, creating the curious effect of a city submerged in a charcoal sea. One might think, due to the dread threat of Corprus and Blight that has dogged this region for so long, that any potential visitors might move with stealth and caution.

Nenya strode through the ruins as if it was a stroll down Balmora’s high street. Trailing a short distance behind her, looking far less comfortable in his surroundings, was Caius.

“Almost like home, really,” commented Nenya in a casual display of black humour.

“Cosy,” said Caius dryly. “How long since you were last here?”

“More than a year now.” Nenya loosened her hammer in its bindings as they neared the main complex. “Looks pretty deserted, but for all we know, these Dreamers are just as dangerous as any Blight monster. Stay close and look sharp.”

Caius was happy to oblige; his own shortsword had been at the ready ever since they passed the now-defunct Ghostgate. Together, they crept towards the spherical gateway that obscured the entrance to the interior ruins. At the end of the path, however, they were thwarted – the metalwork was distorted by the heat of the most recent lava-flow, and the seam of the doors had been fused shut.

Caius scowled. “Now what? There’s no way we can pry this thing open with just the two of us.”

Nenya was looking at the portal shrewdly. “Got any magic, Cai?” she said suddenly.

Caius furrowed his brow. “You know I don’t – nothing worth speaking of, anyway. Why?”

Nenya examined the doors carefully. “I wish Bomba was here,” she said in frustration after her search proved fruitless. “I’d bet a whole suit of Ebony we’d find the same magical residue on this door that we did in Shedungent, but neither of us have the skill to detect it.”

“Is there another way in?”

Nenya thought for a moment. “There used to be vents in the Facility Cavern –air-ducts, although they were really just small tunnels through to the mountainside. If you’re up for a bit of scrambling, we can have a look.”

Caius sheathed his shortsword with a sigh. “Scrambling? Just what I fancied.”

Nenya almost smirked before an ominous rumbling met their ears – a distant roaring, coming as if from the mountain itself. Something was happening inside.

Sharing a disquieted glance, they began to climb with a greater sense of urgency, two glinting ants on the vast surface of volcanic rock.



*



Three figures stood lined up in the Aetherius star-room in a row, like something out of a diseased dream.

The first had eyes that mirrored Eadwyrd’s in their cold flatness, though the face they stared from was unrecognisable. Yagrum Bagarn had abandoned hope a long time ago, and all that was left now was loathing of the thing he had unwillingly helped create.

The second was little more than a pathetic heap of dirty sacking and matted hair. Nulfaga was barely aware of her own surroundings any more, her decrepitude a canker that ate into the very core of her soul.

The third was golden. Golden and mad.

Nothing could shock Eadwyrd any more. The fact that he was standing before a god had no effect on him; all he wanted now was for Helseth’s abominable scheme to be stopped before the whole world was thrown into chaos. He was here. This was it. It was up to him now.

Vivec smiled pleasantly at him. He held an object in each hand; one a short length of iridescent metal wreathed with complicated symbols, the other what looked like an impossibly large soul-gem, flushed a deep, disturbing red. “Ah, my subject. Have you come to escort me to where I can watch our foe’s demise?”

“I- what?” Eadwyrd gaped, barely able to get the words out. Had Vivec really fallen so far that he thought this conquest of slaughter was acceptable? Is this how Helseth had managed to accomplish what he had?

Vivec’s eyes shone with compassion, with love. “My people shall rest easy. Their god will ensure their safety as he has always done. The enemy that threatens our land will be cast out by the grace of my wisdom and might. Is it not so, dear one?”

Eadwyrd could have cried, had the events of the last week not left him dry. Vivec had sunk so deep into lunacy that all Helseth had to do was tell one simple lie, and the rest followed like sun after rain. The ease with which this atrocity had been achieved was crushing.

“It’s a lie,” he said simply. “Helseth has lied to you. He’s using you to rebuild the golem that you helped destroy, hundreds of years ago – the one you fought against to prevent exactly what will happen now if you don’t do something.”

Vivec was shaking his head, still smiling. “Dear one, you are tired and confused; I can see you are wounded from a great harm in your mind. There is no golem. I have created talismans to keep my people safe.” He proffered the objects in his hands, the things Eadwyrd now recognised as a Totem and Mantella.

“Those ‘talismans’ are just what Helseth needs to control the golem! You have to stop this,” Eadwyrd pleaded, hopelessness seeping through him, overbearing, overwhelming. How had he ever thought he could succeed? If Vivec was useless, everything was lost. He couldn’t stand against a half-mile high golem on his own.

“There is nothing to stop,” Vivec said peevishly. “You tire me, young one. I am weary. Leave me now.” He turned his back.

Eadwyrd grabbed his arm, his frozen brain registering with shock how frail, how mortal the god felt. He dragged him towards the improbable square of rock that floated in the midst of the chamber – the open door to the Cavern – internal voices shrieking all the while at the danger, the looming disaster.

Vivec began to struggle and wail, the sound appallingly childlike and distressed. Eadwyrd found that his tears were not gone, against all odds. His face was streaming with them.

“Look at what is happening out there!” he screamed, thrusting the god’s face through the doorway to stare at the monstrous figure illuminated by the grisly light of volcanic flame. “People are going to die! This thing will sweep across the land, and no-one will be able to stop it! People are going to die!”

At the other end of the Aetherius-room, a terrible moan rent the air. Nulfaga was stirring. To Eadwyrd’s dismay, she began to beat herself, scratching at her frail body until her arms ran with blood.

“They have not come!” she howled, her face a grotesquerie of pain and betrayal. “They listened to my stories, they fed and clothed me, and then they left me to die like all the others! My Lysandus, where are you to ease your mother’s burdens? My Lysandus – poor, poor darling!”

She was on her feet, running with frightening speed towards them – Eadwyrd stumbled to the side, pulling Vivec with him. As her ravaged form sped past them out of the doorway, he tripped in his haste to get out of the way; the satchelbag flew from his shoulder, spilling its contents to the floor. His poetry manuscripts caught the updraft, bursting into flames, flying through the volcanic fires like burning birds.

Vivec’s face was drenched in horror, but he was not looking at the broken wreck of a woman who now stood at the brink of the magma chamber. He was looking up, at Akulakhan, his mouth moving soundlessly.

For one moment, Eadwyrd thought his eyes cleared, and the mantle of madness lifted.

“No,” whispered the god. “No… Aedra forgive me…what have I done?”

An impossible hope flared in Eadwyrd, and then three things happened at once.

Nulfaga gave a horrific scream of anguish, and hurled herself into the pit of lava beneath Akulakhan’s massive feet.

Vivec raised the Totem, and swept his fingers across the writhing symbols of its surface.

The Mantella fell from his right hand, landing on one of the pieces of parchment that had fallen from Eadwyrd’s satchel – not, as it happened, a poetry manuscript, but one of the leftover Recall To Palace scrolls given to him by Morgiah before she sent him to Tel Fyr. It touched the surface and vanished.

Then everything was chaos.

The door behind him was screeching on its hinges – the star-room was bending, crumpling, folding like parchment. With Nulfaga burning in the heart of the Mountain, the connection to Aetherius was severed – with a jolt, Eadwyrd realised that the third prisoner, the deformed Dwemer, was still inside.

“Get out!” He screamed at the dwindling figure, not daring to venture through the doorway. “You’ll be trapped; it’s collapsing! Hurry!”

With awful slowness, Yagrum Bagarn raised his head. There was at last some trace of humanity in his dead eyes; a spark of relief, of finality. He turned his head to the diminishing ceiling, and raised his arms in welcome.

The stars clashed together with a flash of piercing white, and the doorway vanished as if it had never been, leaving Eadwyrd on his knees outside, struck dumb in the face of the pandemonium before him.

Akulakhan was attacking itself.

Vivec was sprinting with astonishing energy up the spiral ramp that circled the cavern, the Totem clutched in his wasted hand. Without the Mantella, the golem was merely a huge doll, with none of the intelligence or drive that the soulgem would have instilled. As Vivec’s fingers flashed across the surface of the Totem, Akulakhan responded with clumsy limitation – it flailed at its own body, huge hands tugging at welded fittings, a kneecap hanging loose, both thumbs crushed beyond repair, the great head dented and tarnished. Screaming Corprus workers fell dislodged from its heights like gruesome rain.

Black-robed Dreamers were pouring from the myriad doorways in the walls, crying out in fear and alarm as the golem’s increasingly violent movements damaged the walls and ceiling of the cavern. The magma chamber, disturbed by the seismic activity around it, began to rumble like a disquieted beast.

Eadwyrd stood, a small form of stillness amid the chaos, his head turned up to the sky. Rocks fell everywhere; showers of basalt rained on and around him, and the glow from the steadily-rising magma fell hot and dry across his face. For a moment he thought he saw a blonde woman screaming at him from a balcony above, but then she was gone and so was he, insensible now to the collapsing world around him, locked in a place within his own mind.

“It’s done, Gwyn,” he whispered hoarsely. “Did I do well? I did it for you – I did it for you, Gwyn –”

The rain of rocks became a torrent; he fell to the ground, head bloody and gashed. Faintly, as if through distorted glass, he saw the entire right side of the golem fall into the expanding pool of lava with a roar of sparks, before the world darkened.

When the explosion of magma claimed him along with the rest of the Facility Cavern, he had long since stepped over the threshold to Oblivion.



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Post » Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:33 pm

Aye, a warrior's death.

And one well written as well.

Before I post again on the technical mastery and visual beauty of your chapter, I shall now give a moment of silence for a warrior reluctant, fearful, hesitant, but true.
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I know this is a serious, climatic character resolution scene and it tugged at my heart-strings by the end, but the mental image of Vivec running around like an insane god-child with a giant remote control gleefully destroying Helseth's toy almost made me fall over! Totally stole the show, lol! Great read, Rumples, I bet Helseth is gonna be pissed! ;)
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I know this is a serious, climatic character resolution scene and it tugged at my heart-strings by the end, but the mental image of Vivec running around like an insane god-child with a giant remote control gleefully destroying Helseth's toy almost made me fall over! Totally stole the show, lol! Great read, Rumples, I bet Helseth is gonna be pissed! ;)

LOL! Dammit, Ghost, you ruined the drama! :lol:
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Well, after a month or so I finally have my internet connection back. I just read the 35th chapter and realized how much I missed this forum. Your style is only improving, Rumple. The 35th chapter was as juicy as it gets. Now on to 36th.
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Thanks so much Peleus. It's great to see you again! No internet for a month? Torture!
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Hmmmph!!!


Imagine having to console English, American AND Dutch friends this entire month...including persuading them NOT to order the "Calamari Revenge" dish when everyone knew full well that it didn't agree with them...


... now THAT was hard work, verging on torture!!!


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Hmmmph!!!


Imagine having to console English, American AND Dutch friends this entire month...including persuading them NOT to order the "Calamari Revenge" dish when everyone knew full well that it didn't agree with them...


... now THAT was hard work, verging on torture!!!


:P

This sounds like the start of an episode of Curb Your Enthusiasm... :hehe:
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Found myself just eating up these chapters, Rumms. Think I may now be addicted, and am searching for abandonware of Daggerfall so I can get the geekier references to TES canon...

Thanks for sharing, it makes insomnia at 2am a lot more bearable!
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Found myself just eating up these chapters, Rumms. Think I may now be addicted, and am searching for abandonware of Daggerfall so I can get the geekier references to TES canon...

Thanks for sharing, it makes insomnia at 2am a lot more bearable!

Sir Jeffingtons, long time no see! How the devil are you? It's great to see you. I'm really glad you're enjoying the chapters; I'm nearly at the end and it's awesome people are having as much fun as I am!

As for Daggerfall, no need to trawl the intarwebs, what you seek is right http://www.elderscrolls.com/downloads/downloads_games.htm
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Sir Jeffingtons, long time no see! How the devil are you? It's great to see you. I'm really glad you're enjoying the chapters; I'm nearly at the end and it's awesome people are having as much fun as I am!

As for Daggerfall, no need to trawl the intarwebs, what you seek is right http://www.elderscrolls.com/downloads/downloads_games.htm


Indeed Miss R, it's been far too long since I've perused the boards (or indeed much of the internet)- good to be back and see some familiar faces :) Hope life is treating you well.

You've been busy at the writing slope! I'm enjoying seeing this work unfold. I'll PM you soon when I've read more.

D'oh! Thanks for the link. Right under my nose the whole time... :facepalm:

editediteditedit.... just finished reading the last chapter on offer - tried to PM with my thoughts but it bounced. Seems like your inbox is as full as Morgiah's desk! ;)
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editediteditedit.... just finished reading the last chapter on offer - tried to PM with my thoughts but it bounced. Seems like your inbox is as full as Morgiah's desk! ;)


Oops! All clear now. PM away!
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Just finished reading these new chapters and I have to say that your expertise with literacy continues to amaze. You always know just how to write and describe things. I'm getting a bit green over here to be honest.

Also, its a bit late but congratulations! Here's hoping you have many years continued happiness! :foodndrink:
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I honestly didn't mean for the hiatus to carry on this long. The truth is I've been a bit tied up - I've moved house, left my old job, got married and been on honeymoon.


Wow, many, many congratulations Rumple!

I devoured every available chapter of The King and I last year, and am looking forward to this new one, but I'm going to reread the whole lot first to refresh my memory. I've really enjoyed the journey so far, and it's great to see you back!

Quiet now, I'm reading. :read:
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Finally peeked over here to see what's new, and now we're in the end game?

As was said earlier, Helseth is going to be pissed! The golem destroying itself, Nenya and Caius heading for the vent shaft, probably the same one the Master Dreamer is using, the Imperial spy off to tattle on the two royal women, - - - Yikes!

Looking forward to more!
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Ryu, EvilFish, hauteecole, thank you! I know I've said it before, but it's just awesome to know you're having fun. As we come into the finale, I'm just hoping against hope the decision's I've made don't disappoint any of you or you don't find it anticlimactic. If so, please feel free to say what you didn't like and how you think it could be made better.

The Daggerfallians among you will have recognised http://www.uesp.net/wiki/Daggerfall:Lady_Brisienna_%28Person%29 from the last chapter - she's the first NPC you have to find after crawling out of the starter dungeon, after all. Although she's only a cameo in King & I, if I were ever to write another Elder Scrolls epic (woah, girl! Are you a masochist?) it would be about her exploits as the Emperor's spy in the courts of the Iliac Bay. According to the Daggerfall Chronicles, by the time Lysandus is killed at Cryngaine Field, Brisienna is working undercover for the witches at Popudax. What in the name of Sheogorath's bankerite jodphurs was she doing there? I may have to elaborate.

But that's for the future.

The things that happen in this chapter are the biggest reasons why this story is Alternate Reality, and has been ever since Oblivion came out. I originally intended to finish it before Oblivion's release, so it wouldn't have mattered if I was accurate or not, but... well, you can't be right all the time!




The King And I

Chapter Thirty-Seven - Gone



Inside the dark red artery of the Facility Cavern air-vent, Caius and Nenya ran for their lives.

They had just reached the place where the tunnel opened into the Facility Cavern, horror-struck by the vista of chaos that confronted them, when the walls had begun to shake. The rockfall had started soon after, sending them haring back towards the point of light that signposted their only exit to the mountainside. Caius was panting heavily; a shard of basalt had clipped his temple, and his leg was still not fully healed from the Dren Manor fire. Just when it seemed he could not push himself any further, they shot out into the smoky open air of the volcanic slope.

Nenya was beside herself.

"That was Eadwyrd!" she cried, her breath laboured from both the frantic sprint and the shock of what they had glimpsed in the cavern. "I swear it, Caius, he was at the foot of the golem! We have to go back for him!"

"Are you insane?" Caius said angrily. "This entire damn place is going to erupt!"

Nenya wasn't listening; she was already scrambling over the rocks. "There are other vents – if we can reach one before the magma level rises –"

"Nenya!" Caius grabbed her arm, yanking her back onto level ground. Considering her height and strength, he was surprised he succeeded. "Look at me! Even if Eadwyrd was down there, there's nothing you can do, you hear me? There's no way back in from this side, and even if there was, the lava's risen too high. He'll be dead, Nenya!"

His heart gave an awful lurch as he saw the tears in her eyes.

"Even you can't stop a volcano," he said softly.

"I wish I'd never involved them in this," Nenya said thickly, rubbing her nose with the back of her gauntlet. "It's my fault. They were happy, they were making their tonic together, and now…"

She turned her head to hide her wet cheeks. Caius pretended not to see, because he knew she didn't want him to.

"Look," he said gently. "If it really was Eadwyrd, there's only one reason he would be here. He must have done something to sabotage the golem, and if that's true, he's saved an awful lot of lives. Right? Maybe even as many as you have. That's worth dying for."

For a moment, they stood looking at each other, the only two figures in a desolate wasteland of ash. Heat was gathering threateningly at the top of the mountain.

"You're right," Nenya said softly, smudging a hand across her tearstained face. "I suppose... I suppose we could come back to find him, when the land's settled."

He nodded to please her, though they both knew there was no chance in Oblivion of finding Eadwyrd's body under half a mile of molten rock.

Nenya drew a deep breath and turned to hurry down the slope. She looked back to see if he was following, but as she did her eyes suddenly widened, fixing on a point over his shoulder – her mouth began to form his name –

– and then her fist shot out, hitting him in the solar plexus with such unexpected force that he lost his footing and crashed to the ground six foot away.

Shocked and winded, he forced his head up – his eyes were swimming with agony, but through the haze of pain he saw two shapes writhing on the slope. Nenya was grappling with a monster in black.

That was all his body needed to burst into adrenaline-soaked overdrive.

He launched himself at the shape, all pain forgotten, knocking the creature off-balance and sending them spinning over the basalt. He had no idea what the thing was, where it had come from or how strong it might be – he only knew that by pushing him away, Nenya had put herself in danger instead.

He yanked his shortsword from the scabbard and twisted it frantically, trying to shove the blade between his own body and the attacker's. Whether he found his mark or not, he couldn't tell – it was all sweat and harsh breath and grasping hands. One of those hands found his throat, and squeezed…

"No," said a coldly powerful voice above them. "Touch him and die."

In one fluid moment the pressure was gone, and Nenya was there – colossally, impossibly, hauling the monster bodily into the air with the ease of a giant lifting a baby. She held it by the throat for a fraction of a second, then threw it to the ground and smashed her hammer into its chest with the force of a falling boulder. There was a spray of blood and a terrible crunching sound. The thing gurgled and lay still.

Then it was quiet.

"What–" Caius began weakly, but was cut off as floundered to him, dropped to her knees, grabbed his ears and kissed him like a woman possessed. "Hey! I'm alright, honestly I'm alright – mphf – Nenya –"

"Sorry," she said breathlessly after a long moment, sitting back and releasing him.

"Um, no, carry on," Caius said, slightly dazed.

"I just – when I saw it behind you..." she stopped, clearly shaken. "It would be bad for me, if I lost you."

"Glad to hear it," he said, feeling a little punch-drunk. "What the Dagon was that thing?"

Still slightly pink from her enthusiastic show of affection, Nenya returned to the body and tugged the hood from its face – it was a hood, Caius saw now the heat of battle had subsided. The thing was not in fact a monster but a person, albeit misshapen, dressed in a black robe. A Dunmer.

Nenya's eyes widened as the face was exposed. "Those are Corprus symptoms," she said in disbelief. "But the black robe... I don't understand! Where did he come from?"

"May I remind you we're sitting on an active volcano?" Caius demanded. "Can we save the speculation til later?"

"You didn't seem so worried about it a moment ago," she shot back, but as if to punctuate their words a sudden violent din shook the crater above. Steam gushed from the collapsed vent, and the earth shifted sickeningly beneath them. There was a heat-haze over the top of the mountain.

Nenya flung her satchelbag on to the ground and pawed frantically through its contents. Caius, who had started to run, looked back in disbelief. "What are you doing! This is no time to sort out your handbag!"

"We can't outrun a volcano, you netch-head," Nenya snapped. "I've got an amulet somewhere… Almsivi Intervention – help me, Cauis, help me look! Quickly!"

He snatched a handful of junk and rifled through it, trying not to think of what would happen if they couldn't find it. Above them, the lip of Red Mountain suddenly glowed with a tongue of orange light, shimmering in fume.

Caius was sweating. Come on, come on… something glinted from under a battered magical scroll in the outside pocket. He snatched at it, pulling the pendant free – "Here! Put it on, quick!"

She grabbed him and pulled him close, looping the chain clumsily over both their heads. The amulet flared with a sudden piercing light…

The next moment, Red Mountain exploded.



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Morgiah ran and ran.

She couldn't explain how she knew. It was like everything else since Hermaeus Mora – it came in a flash of realisation that jolted her mind out of her body and into somewhere else, where everything was clear, and nothing was false… so as she ran full-tilt down the sunset streets of Vivec, she made for the Palace. The place that had once been a benevolent presence overlooking the city; now, with the god gone, it was a husk. An empty shell.

Across the bridge – past the statues – through the High Fane – up the steps – mustn't stop – must reach him – push open the door –

And there he was. On the cold and deserted dais, standing so quietly and solemnly, his hair falling over his eyes.

He looked so young…

"Little brother."

He looked up. "It's gone, isn't it?"

The simple statement could have referred to so many things that were now irreparably shattered, but she assumed he meant the golem. How he knew she could not guess.

"Yes," she said gently, though she had no more of the truth than him. "Yes it has, Hesleth."

It was over. Brisienna would have reached her superiors by now, and it would be a fate worse than death that awaited. High Treason against the Emperor; oh, Helseth!

She was walking slowly towards him as if magnetically pulled, step by step. When she reached the dais, he moved too. As if it was the most natural thing in the world, the space between them closed and they were in each other's arms.

It was the embrace she had waited her whole life for.

She buried her face in his neck and felt the fur on his robes, smelt the cedar-oil he used on his hair. The years dropped away; there was no treason, no Akulakhan, no kingship… standing there on the dais, they could have been any brother and sister in the world, any siblings affectionately greeting each other after a long separation. And strangely enough, that was exactly what it felt like.

They parted, and he smiled at her. Their eyes were level; they had always been exactly the same height. She was smiling back before she realised he was holding a knife.

Worse… A fate worse than death…

"I didn't have the courage," he said, his voice coming as if from across a great gulf. "But now you're here…"

She looked from the knife to him, and back again. She should have balked, but it was as though she was watching the scene from above, and couldn't feel the fear she ought to. Only detached calm, and a little sadness.

"Helseth," she began.

"One last gift to me," he cut her off softly. "Please. As a sister."

She was suddenly irresistibly reminded of that distant day they'd snuck into the Wayrest treasury and been caught; she had sulked through the following admonishment and hidden her hands behind her back, but to her surprise Helseth had opened his palm willingly for the lash of the birch-cane. Another world. How had it come to this?

Her fingers closed around the hilt.

"I loved you, Morgiah," said Helseth. "Very much."

"And I loved you," she whispered.

He bent his head. She kissed his brow, and the knife went deep.



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When a spiderweb is cut through, all the threads hang loose, separate and lost.

Where were you when it happened, people say? What were you doing when you heard the news?

In Almalexia, crowds gather to watch the vast plume of smoke beyond the horizon. Some cry in alarm, some whisper and point, others clutch each other to seek comfort. At the edge of the throng there is a face, anonymous among hundreds. He looks at the plume with silent shrewdness, then slinks away with the agility of a panther.

In a rented inn-room in Godsreach, a Khajiit looks out from the window with her claws digging nervously into the sill, fearing for the safety of a friend.

In a Tribunal Temple in Ald Rhun, an Imperial and a Nord materialize in the Intervention room, shaken and smoke-stained. An amulet drops from the Nord's left hand; her right is gripping her companion's so hard her fingers are white.

In Vivec, people climb to the top of the cantons; from there, not only is the plume visible, but the entire mountain. With all eyes turned away from the Palace, no-one will ever know that a woman kneels on the dais inside, a knife discarded on the floor beside her.

The wheels turn; day falls to night. The sky of Vvardenfell glows with macabre fire. And Akulakhan burns and is buried, like so many other hopes and fears and dreams.



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Time is always moving in circles. We started in Mournhold, and so this is where we find ourselves once more, in a shut-away room of the Royal Palace. There is a marble slab. The light is dim and flickering from the dozens of candles that surround the body lying upon it.

Morgiah stood beside the shell that had once been her brother, and was expressionless, like carven stone. Unbearably, the soft glow of the candlelight leant colour and vitality to Helseth's cold features; it was almost as if for one moment, the gods had turned the world upside down so that he was alive, and she was dead.

Her face was a void. The candles burnt on and on.

Footsteps in the hallway, the door opening. And Barenziah, Queen Mother, witness to four centuries, opened the door to what was left of her children.

For one moment they simply looked at each other, unable to speak, agony writhing like a snake between them. Then Barenziah's face crumpled like a ruin, and she threw herself into her daughter's arms.

Something came loose in Morgiah then. She was not a grown woman any longer; she was a child, and the two of them clung desperately, hopelessly together, like survivors of a shipwreck. The tears came easily, she registered dully; she had thought for many years that she'd purged herself of that particular weakness. From the wetness in her hair and the way the arms around her shook, it seemed Barenziah had finally found something to weep for, too.

Such venomous irony; the thing that would finally bring this family together was the death of one third of it.

From the abyss of the past; oh, do you see? Hermaeus Mora, his voice like the etching of an epitaph: You will pay for this thing with the blood of your own heart, with the blood of those you have forgotten you love. You will twist the knife in their veins. That is the price. You will pay it; not yet, not perhaps for many years. But you will pay.

The horror rose in her like a poison, choking, drowning.

What had put Helseth's feet on the long path to treason and execution, the only thing that could have convinced her to grant his last request? Had the Daedra Prince simply seen what would happen, or had he taken the threads of fate himself and rewoven them for his blood price? In seeking the Infinium, had she written her brother's death sentence from her own hand?

Barenziah slowly released her, the shaking in her limbs subsiding, the first wave of the storm over. Her tear-streaked face was that of another person, another life, where no barriers had ever stood between a mother and daughter's love. As if to complete the charade, she raised a hand and stroked a lock of Morgiah's hair back into place, tucking it into the teeth of the enamelled ruby comb.

"I told you to bring him back," she whispered, the accusation helpless and impotent.

"And so I did."

Barenziah's looked older than Morgiah had ever seen her, older even than when she had begged Helseth be found. Had it only been yesterday? It seemed a lifetime ago. She had known then, Morgiah realised. They had both known, deep down.

"You will be Queen, you know."

Morgiah felt the poison rise again, as if it would come bubbling from her lips at any second. "I know."

"You will be a better one." There was no reassurance in Barenziah's words. It was part warning, part command, overlaid by iron prophecy.

Morgiah closed her eyes. "Yes." Unlike her mother's proclamation, her reply spoke no certainty, but there was something else: a glimmer, however small, of hope.

Barenziah leant forward and kissed her daughter's brow, unwittingly recalling her son's last moments. Then she left.

Alone with her dead, Morgiah stood vigil.

She walked around the altar, restless. Making the slow circle of steps around Helseth's corpse occupied her body if not her mind, like the grinding of a prayer wheel, turning, turning. All the Kings gone, one by one. Old Eadwyre, mercifully in his tomb before he could see the irreconcilable sundering of his family. Reman, a pawn in a game he never knew he was playing. Helseth, the eternal seeker, reaching always for adulation and approval and respect and fear and love. The Worm King, lifting his glass to an academic acquaintance, the pourer of wine and the sparrer of words, the jack of dead diamonds and the king of dead hearts.

There are only four Kings in a pack, and when they're gone, you can't play anymore.

Something glinted in the corner of the room.

Morgiah stopped circling, her eyes drawn to the darkness beyond the candlelight.

Helseth wasn't laid out in the Temple; he'd been kept in the Palace saferoom to which Morgiah had Recalled. She'd used one of her remaining self-made scrolls to get them out of the High Fane – there was no way she could have carried him through the streets of Vivec.

She had made more than one scroll, she remembered. The rest she had given to Eadwyrd and Gwynabyth, when she'd sent them to Tel Fyr. They hadn't used them. Eadwyrd would have taken them away with him…

The glint was stronger now. She stepped towards it, knees suddenly weak. Her heart drummed like a frantic hummingbird. Kneeling, a wild roar filling her head like a malefic tempest, she closed her hand around the object that nestled like a coiled serpent in the corner of the room.

It was an impossibly large soulgem, and it was red, red, red.



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*G...A...S...P*


I am speechless.


And spellstruck.


And stupified.


And sensuously salivating over the soaring prose, that sings at the end of this story...


How you've outdone yourself, my Red Riter....


Now to start reading it all over again...


...and to ruminate on its many ramifications...
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 8:06 am

A powerful ending. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
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Post » Sat Feb 19, 2011 9:16 am

I'm afraid I miscalculated when I gave the remaining number a while back - there is one more chapter, and a short epilogue. Got to tie up the loose ends, after all!

I'm thrilled to bits that you both liked this one :) Wherever I've mentioned before that I wrote the end of this story before the beginning, Morgiah and Helseth's scene in the temple is the one I mean. It's on the dogeared backs of my undergraduate philosophy notes (let it never be said that metaphysics lectures are good for nothing).
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