Raven Rock base was massive, extensive, huge, other synonyms for large. It had three upper levels, the uppermost was where the President was. The President himself was a personality, and only that. It was a ZAX computer that 1) had become self aware in 2230, and had begun studying with the enormous capacity of a computer all of American, and European history which is what was stored within President Eden, every document, book, pamphlet and any possible conceivable written material was stored in him.
The computer was attached to a printing press which if you so desired could produce a copy of the written source you desired and in hardback which is where Autumn had got most of his books. The upper three levels were at or above ground level.
Below ground right down to the Geo- thermal plant ten miles below the surface was level after level housing civilians, military personnel, factories, greenhouses, farms, weapons labs, hospitals, 2)any conceivable amenity that 60,000 people might need. The President himself had asked to see Autumn because he wanted to discuss with him what the Enclave, whose Radio had flooded the Capital wasteland with its messages, speeches, and music since it was established three years ago, was going to do.
The President already had a plan, a variant of the one that the ill fated President Richardson had attempted to use on the West Coast which had resulted in the 3)destruction of the Oil Rig, taking 5,000 of the 25,000 in the facility.
Yet in the midst of the most despairing hours of the United States government a man named John Henry Eden, an adviser to the President had 4)contacted the Oil rig and told them to march to Washington DC where in addition to 10,000 vacant spaces at Raven Rock there were four other smaller facilities in Maryland and Virginia altogether capable of housing two hundred thousand people, and the man who now claimed the Presidency knew of two other facilities in the North,
one near Portland Maine, and the other near Boston Massachusetts. The remaining twenty thousand, Autumn, his father (his mother had died when the upper levels were destroyed), his two sisters, as well as the other four hundred thousand members of the Enclave on the West Coast had marched across the hostile wastes, being ambushed by mutants, attacked by giant ants, always avoiding the brotherhood of steel or trading things such as books and manuals for their help, defending themselves from Feral ghouls, and other mutated creatures.
Along the way people had fallen by the wayside to be killed, or settled in the land where they were sometimes welcomed, or where there was fertile land. Much equipment had been lost on the way there, with 90% of the vertibirds not reaching DC. His father had known all along that Eden was a ZAX computer but did not tell anyone for fear people would lose hope during the march. Only three hundred thousand reached the destinations set by President Eden, military and Civilian government personnel and families reporting to Raven Rock, for the most part, or marching off to escort others to the other Shelters, and most chose the Maryland and Virginia ones as the distances were not as great, the remainder thirty thousand found the New York facility which encompassed Liberty Ellis and Governors islands where they heard that another five hundred had been lost in the march north. When his father had retired eight years ago, Autumn had resumed command of all Enclave military forces in the greater D.C. area, and by virtue of seniority all Enclave forces on the East Coast. All the there were two other Colonels in the service of the Enclave.
Colonel Hartmann at the Philadelphia base which housed 5)55,000 people, and Colonel Hanson at the Baltimore facility which housed 5)50,000. The other bases senior officers were all Lieutenant Colonels. Finally he had to the entry to the President's office. The two guards both with Plasma rifles presented arms, and he saluted back and then said into the Voice recognition panel at the door to the expansive room where the President/ ZAX was. "Colonel Augustus Autumn to see President Eden".
" Please come in Colonel" said a voice from the machine, it was happy, contented, Charismatic, the voice the President had adopted. As he ascended the stairs Colonel Autumn thought of all he had experienced in the past. He had been there when they had brought the survivors of Vault 13 on the oil rig. He was dressed in the khaki and black uniform of the Enclave, which officers wore in the field to distinguish themselves, and with the other cadets stood like ramrods at attention, as they were each paired with another child to show around, indoctrinate and befriend, those who were not tested on were given living quarters though mostly isolated from the rest of the rig.
First, I suggest that you avoid writing huge walls of text, cause it's easier to read when you push Enter once a while (as seen above)
I'll just list some noted of my:
1) Since there is no declared date for Eden gaining self-awareness, you are free to choose one yourself (as you have). However I suggest using somewhere in 22nd century since as of 2230 (and earlier) the Enclave was already active in California and I recall Eden saying that he watched closely on their progress (West Coast Enclave fell in 2242)
2) 60,000 would be far too much for Raven Rock's population. The East Coast Enclave was formed by the remnants of Californian Enclave who survived the events of 2242, which was (personal estimation) some couple thousand men and women. Enclave's main HQ was the Oil Rig, which had probably tens of thousands of people, but it blew up and pretty much everyone there died, leaving only a half-finished base of Navarro and Enclave wasteland patrols as sole survivors. That also explains why we never see civilians in the Enclave.
Or, if you meant that it has space for 60,000 people but there are less in reality, it's still a bit high for a military base like Raven Rock. I believe it could support more like up to 10,000 people - at maxinum.
3) See number 2. Since the Oil Rig was the main HQ and there were no survivors except a few lucky ones, the oil rig's destruction would have wiped out more like 22,000 out of 25,000 of Enclave's manpower.
4) Eden contacted the Navarro remnants, since at the time Oil Rig had already blown up.
5) Those numbers are a bit too high. There is no way the few thousand Navarro remnants could spawn 100,000+ Enclave children in matter of three decades.
Otherwise, it's okay although sligtly confusing on the numbers' part (first you say Raven Rock could support 60,000 people, but then say there is space for only 10,000 people)